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  1. Aug 2023
    1. The Capitalocene challenges the Popular Anthropocene’s Two Century model of modernity – a model that has been the lodestar of Green Thought since the 1970s (Moore 2017a).

      It thus sees modernity as a longer phenomenon, that goes well beyond the IR

  2. May 2023
    1. Louise Bennett had a programme called “Miss Lou’s Views” on Jamaican JBC Radio in the 1970s. One correspondent wrote in a daily newspaper that such a programme should be scrapped because it tended to perpetuate ignorance in Jamaicans. Though Louise Bennett has sought to foster love and respect for the Jamaican dialect, she has never advocated that Standard English be abandoned. She argued that for far too long it was considered not respectable to use the dialect, because there was a social stigma attached to the kind of person who used it. She added that many people still did not accept that for many Caribbean people, there were many things best said in the language of the folk. (“Bennett on Bennett” 101).

      Louise Bennett, a radio talkshow host for the JBC, sought to show her respect for her roots, even advocating that standard English ought to be the spoken language because of the social stigma related to speaking in the island country's dialect. She added that many people still did not accept that for many Caribbean people, there were many things best said in the language of the folk. (Davidson par.4). 

    2. Louise Bennett, Caribbean cultural icon, linguist and poet, has been writing and performing using the Jamaican Creole since the 1950s. For a long time, despite the fact that her work gained limited favour among the working class and some intellectuals, her writings did not appear in the important Jamaican anthology Focus in the 1940s to the 1960s, and the Jamaica Poetry League ignored her. In 1962, she was included in the Independence Anthology of Jamaican Literature, but not in the section for poetry. It took the social and political upheaval of the 1970s for academics and others to accept Louise Bennett as a guru of the Jamaican Creole. She received the Order of Jamaica in 1974.

      Despite being overlooked for decades Miss Lou had a following. She was featured in the Independence Anthology of Jamaican Literature in 1962, but not in the poetry section. In the 1970s Miss Lous following finally broke the stalemate that placed Louise Bennett as a guru of the Jamaican Creole receiving the Order of Jamaica. (September 7 th has been officially declared Miss Lou Day. Known as Miss Lou, that is to say the honorable Louise Bennett-Coverley who was born in Kingston Jamaica in 1919 to a widowed dressmaker. Miss Lou is highly esteemed as the queen of comedy her persona is known for highlighting, commemorating, and exploring Jamaican heritage (Davidson par 3).

    3. Miss Lou, the Honourable Louise Bennett-Coverley O.M., O.J., finally has her day! September 7 has officially been declared, by Governor-General Sir Howard Cooke, to be ‘Miss Lou Day’. The day marks the works of the esteemed first lady of comedy in promoting, celebrating, and exploring Jamaican culture. It also marks the day of her birth.

      September 7 th has been officially declared Miss Lou Day. Known as Miss Lou, that is to say the honorable Louise Bennett-Coverley who was born in Kingston Jamaica in 1919 to a widowed dressmaker. Miss Lou is highly esteemed as the queen of comedy her persona is known for highlighting, commemorating, and exploring Jamaican heritage (Davidson par 1-2).

  3. Dec 2022
  4. Oct 2022
    1.  Actualmente, el nacionalismo es más una reivindicación de autonomía fiscal y autogobierno que deseo real de un estado independiente

      DESPUES DE LA GUERRA

    2. surgen numerosos grupos denominados Movimiento de Liberación Naciona

      DURANTE LA GUERRA

  5. Feb 2022
  6. Dec 2021
    1. Beethoven’s Letters with explanatory notes by Dr. A.C. Kalischer, J.M. Dent & Sons, Ltd., London & Toronto, 1926, pp.393-394

      "fuente original (secundaria)"; now, come back to esfinge

    1. Alejandro tenía el hábito de inclinar ligeramente la cabeza sobre el hombro derecho, de baja estatura con cutis blanco, cabello ondulado de color castaño claro y ojos heterócromos, el izquierdo marrón y el derecho gris, que no se sabe si eran de nacimiento o por un traumatismo craneal.

      citation needed

  7. Nov 2021
    1. Apparently, there was a poem written not too long ago by an Australian author and poet named John O’Grady[iii] entitled Tumba Bloody Rumba. I won’t include the poem here in its entirety, partly because its frequent use of the word bloody may offend some. Suffice it to say, the poem makes ample use of colourful tmesis with words such as “Tumba-bloody-rumba” and “kanga-bloody-roos.” The result, thanks in no small part to the almost hypnotic power of the word, is that tumbarumba has now become a synonym for tmesis in the English language.

      tumbarumba = tmesis in Australia

  8. Aug 2021
  9. Apr 2021
    1. ideological dichotomy

      This is defined as a sharp division of things or ideas into two contradictory parts.

    2. “It’s a lot easier to pull yourself up by your bootstraps, Mr. Man, if you already know how to fly!”

      One can draw parallels to DuBois telling Washington that he would be considered privileged due to the fcat that he can be considered part of the "Top Tenth" because of his education and connections.

    3. When you can fly, there’s no burden you can’t bear. When you can fly, gravity can’t touch you. When you can fly, you can do anything”.

      This reminds me of the ongoing metaphor in "Jubilee" of the slaves being cage birds. So with Augustus him having education, him being a free man, it gives him the ability to fly like a bird. Much like the age old saying the "the skies the limit".

    4. It limits the complexity and the roundedness of the characters

      Like he said there is not room to build a character, to have a struggle to have redemption arcs, because they are just meant to be a symbol because of the limited representation

    5. the reverberations of the 1992 Los Angeles riots

      The 1992 LA riots were caused because the LAPD had used excessive force in the arrest and beating of Rodney King, because of media it spread like wildfire.

    6. Dr. Martin Luther King Jr. and Malcolm X, and Ta-Nehisi Coates and Cornel West, to Nas and Jay-Z and Cam Newton and Colin Kaepernick

      These are all prominent black men, from social activists, to philosophers, to rappers and athletes.

    7. ignorant and inexperienced

      Perhaps this could be because of the fact he was born into slavery which is why he tends to lean more on realism and not idealism much like DuBois

    8. the contamination and death of the worst.

      What did DuBois mean by this, what could be the contamination be? Maybe the struggle the rest of black Americans had to face in society

    9. “Talented Tenth.”

      Its name is talented tenth because it is referencing the able ten percent of black Americans that developed leadership capacity from higher education

    10. Du Bois was a proponent of liberal arts education and argued for full civil rights for Black people

      This is why DuBois had become one of Washington's biggest opponents because he did not believe in a "sitting duck" method, wanting to create change not waiting to be accepted.

    11. the South that the Negro is given a man’s chance in the commercial world

      This is reminding me after the emancipation proclamation and after the civil war when the south was in a time of reconstruction, they had given freed slaves the ability to have land in the Midwest and begin their agricultural journey. Could this be in reference?

    12. Washington contended that the rights and privileges of true citizenship for Black people could only be gained through gradual struggle and the development of marketable skills.

      I see Washington's philosophy as a form of assimilation and conformity to American society and to gradually comfort those with a negative view of black people.

    13. Educator Booker T. Washington was born into the institution of American chattel slavery.

      This plays a role in why Washington's philosophy is what it is

    14. The ideological dichotomy

      This just meaning the system of division of black and white Americans that many believed (and still do) believe in

    15. “The Negro Problem,”

      This being to fix the societal gap between black people and white people

    16. “The Talented Tenth,”

      The Talented Tenth is a term that designated a leadership class of African descendant Americans in the early 20th century

    17. Washington emphasizes the importance of achieving Black prosperity

      He urged blacks to accept discrimination for the time being and concentrate on elevating themselves through hard work and material prosperity

    18. changing his identity to be the son, grandson, and great-grandson of Augustus Freeman I.

      Represents how racial injustice continued throughout several generations just taking on various forms and altercations as time passed.

    19. a Black man who seeks to destroy the organization he once supported after he realizes their supposed Black outreach is actually a form of Black subjugation,

      Somewhat represents the idea of double-consciousness and even Washington, when he funded Jim Crow opposing organizations and Black newspapers.

    20. Martin Luther King Jr. and Malcolm X

      2 other figures with differing views but within the civil rights movement period. MLK advocated for confrontational and peaceful protests such as marches, boycotts, and sit-ins, while Malcom X promoted more violent approaches such as riots.

    21. While “The Atlanta Compromise” doesn’t directly critique Du Bois, Du Bois’s response deliberately excoriates Booker T. Washington’s stance.

      Just as the poem we had to annotate as well, Washington speaks his views first, and Du Bois follows with his rebuttal.

    22. He deemed agitation and civil unrest for the sake of social equality to be “the extremest [sic] folly,”

      Since Washington was born a slave, it's easier to understand why he has such views. He was born into an oppressive system and may not see a light at the end of the tunnel that Du Bois saw in which protesting for reform would bring him closer to.

    23. higher education

      One of the common grounds shared between Washington and Du Bois, both were highly-educated individuals.

    24. a co-founder of the National Association for the Advancement of Colored People.

      My Harlem Renaissance figure, Ida B. Wells, was also a founder of the NAACP.

    25. “The Atlanta Compromise,”

      Washington was tasked with the objective to publicly speak to a majority-white crowd upon race relations and justice.

    26. Educator Booker T. Washington was born into the institution of American chattel slavery.

      Washington was born into slavery, which Du Bois was not. This differing factor could contribute to their differing views concerning the strive for racial equality.

    27. The debate over the best sociopolitical direction for African Americans not only crosses over to different generations but also crosses over to different forms of media.

      Refers to the various approaches to obtain racial equality presented from 2 different advocates. This problem has spread over generations and media outlets upon national coverage.

    28. in doing so often found many of their solutions standing in stark contrast to the ideas of their fellow Black intellectuals and activists.

      Introduction to the differing ideologies between activists Washington and Du Bois

    29. Freeman initially turns down Raquel’s request, and suggests that she and the other Black people of Dakota should pull themselves up by their own bootstraps, to which Raquel replies, “It’s a lot easier to pull yourself up by your bootstraps, Mr. Man, if you already know how to fly!”

      I personally think this is commentary on white privilege. Freeman doesn't see how difficult it is for Raquel, because he is born with a privilege that Raquel doesn't have.

    30. Augustus ages far slower than humans, allowing him to have lived through many major moments in American history

      This gives the writer an opportunity to talk about different events that have effected the black community.

    31. “Golden Age” of hip-hop combined with the reverberations of the 1992 Los Angeles riots to create an atmosphere of interracial conflict, cultural celebration, and sociopolitical tension

      Black culture became more and more a part of American culture. The social movements highly influenced American culture.

    32. His belief in access to liberal arts higher education stemmed from a belief in the potential for the Black intellectual elite to lead the race to prosperity and equality.

      More education would mean more opportunities for black people to get involved in politics and law discussions.

    33. “W.E.B.” Du Bois once supported Washington’s sociopolitical approach before becoming one of its, and his, strongest and loudest opponents

      This shows how as people do more research and look from different perspectives, their way of thinking can change.

    34. rather than seek access and opportunity through protest and civil unrest:

      It has been shown in history time and time again that the only way to get equal opportunities and rights is through protest, unrest, and fighting back.

    35. Washington contended that the rights and privileges of true citizenship for Black people could only be gained through gradual struggle and the development of marketable skills.

      He believed that in order for white people to get on the bandwagon of giving black people rights, they had to prove their effect on the economy.

    36. sociopolitical ideology and set of educational aspirations are best for the collective African American population.

      He gave a new way of looking and thinking about this discourse.

    37. most notable rendering of the debate between Booker T. Washington and W.E.B. Du Bois is in Milestone Media’s Icon written by Dwayne McDuffie and illustrated by MD Bright.

      Uses a different type of medium to confront the discourse between these two leaders.

    38. Booker T. Washington and Du Bois respectively.

      They had very different ideas of how to solve the racial issues in America.

    39. solutions standing in stark contrast to the ideas of their fellow Black intellectuals and activists.

      There were many ways Black Activists went about trying to fix this problem. Such as accommodating, fighting for equal rights, or just straight up leaving.

    40. Generations of Black writers and thinkers have taken to the task of solving what was coined “The Negro Problem,”

      The Negro Problem refers to the separation of Black People from American Culture.

    41. The Negro Race, like all races, is going to be saved by its exceptional men. The problem of education then, among Negroes, must first of all deal with the “Talented Tenth.”

      Educating the best minds of the race disseminates into the rest, allowing the general uplift of all.

    42. The Negro Problem

      It covers law, education, disenfranchisement, and Black Americans' place in American society.

    43. Raquel’s youthful perspective most often wins over Augustus whose once-immutable opinions are made malleable after learning more about the current condition of Black people in Dakota.

      Just like in irl, Raquel just like Dubois wins over people when faced with the truth concerning the problems of always abiding and assimilating in society.

    44. Icon provides a take on the generations-old debate that incorporates a popular medium the blends prose with sequential art.

      It incorporates the debates between Booker and Dubois but to a more modern audience to interpret

    45. Raquel’s final words are enough to change Augustus’s mind, and he agrees to their becoming Icon and Rocket.

      This shows the shift in ideas as Dubois Ideas became the center part for a lot of other black activist that came after him, such as MLK and Malcolm X

    46. underground railroad during slavery, fights for the Union in the Civil War, graduates from Fisk University during Reconstruction, lives in Harlem during the Renaissance, becomes an expatriate in France in the 1930s, and fights with the Allies is WWII.

      This in context helps young black kids understand the history with African involvement in America

    47. . Unlike Superman, whose similar origin puts him in the present-day Kansas farm of two loving white parents, the Milestone alien crash lands on a southern plantation in 1839.

      Contrast both characters as Superman landed in a happy time without any conflict in Kansas, while In Milestone, Icon lands in a southern planation where the brutal reality of slavery is taking place and mistreatment of blacks is the norm.

    48. music, politics, and energy of its time and indefatigably dedicated to authentic depictions of Blackness.

      Show that young black people can relate to characters with their culture and be able to see themselves with what they might not always get with other super heroes.

    49. increasing authentic representation of people of color

      At the time many of the times most famous pronounced super heroes were all white. With Captain America, Superman, and Batman to name a few.

    50. It limits the complexity and the roundedness of the characters.

      That solely writing a character to depict blacks also does no justice to the character as it makes the character bland, so therefore why he creates characters with complexity and with the character being black, it helps the black community in the long run as it does not show stereotypes nor have a white washing effect.

    51. Hughes’s essay delivers a lesson

      To teach that the black community can do anything no matter there skin religion and or gender

    52. monolithic depiction of Black people and Black culture

      Monolithic meaning not open to new ideas and remaining with the same old stereotypes and depictions of blacks in the past.

    53. With a focus on increasing authentic representation of people of color, Milestone Media created a world of splash pages and panels that is both inextricably bound to the music, politics, and energy of its time—much like the Black Arts Movement

      This site is here to help the Black community get more involved in poetry and music and other jobs that we may think only white people run

    54. “My problem—and I’ll speak as a writer now—with writing a black character in either the Marvel or DC universe is that he is not a man. He is a symbol. Like Wonder Woman—if you write Wonder Woman, she is all women

      I agree with this not a lot of people go out and say my favorite hero is Wonder woman or my favorite hero is Black panther. I think we need more male black hero's

    55. felt the paucity of characters of color, queer characters, and women characters within American comics needed to be addressed

      We need more hero's that are of different origin's I know of a few hero's that are black (Black Panther, Storm, and cyborg just to name a few.

    56. characters of color, queer characters, and women characters within American comics needed to be addressed.

      All of these things being prevalent as there was still issues with women rights, gays being shamed , and blacks still being discriminated and stereotyped.

    57. Black artist downtown became more and more isolated from that so-called ‘mainstream’ by the growing need to fully express [their] soul and mind connection with Black struggle in [their] art and in the street”.

      Shows me that black artists are dying down which isn't a good thing

    58. Cam Newton and Colin Kaepernick

      Here I see Cam Newton abiding by the NFL therefore assimilating to the white audience, while I see Colin Kaepernick using his freedom of speech to voice his opinions on black lives

    59. Martin Luther King Jr. and Malcolm X

      MLK taking the civil approach with civil protest, and Malcom X taking the violent riot approach of demanding rights now

    60. If white people are pleased we are glad.

      To me you shouldn't do something just to please someone do it because you like to do it

    61. confines of society.

      What I don't get is that if he came from a child hood where he was a slave and saw the impossible happen being the freedom of slaves, why not continue the ambitions of the slaves but instead continue to fight for their right stop be actually equal instead of being free, but confined by white society.

    62. Be stereotyped, don’t go too far, don’t shatter our illusions about you, don’t amuse us too seriously. We will pay you,’ say the whites.”

      Shows me that the whites don't understand where this young poet is coming from and now yawl want to be nice to him just doesn't make sense

    63. lack race should be to obtain marketable skills within the current confines of society.

      I can see why Booker T says this because after all he was a slave, when coming from an upbringing like that, all anybody would want is to just live life like how society already is instead of giving in for hope for change that might never come.

    64. The Negro artist works against an undertow of sharp criticism and misunderstanding from his own group and unintentional bribes from the whites.

      People are gonna hate you for what you do and that's the truth I make music and not everyone likes it but I'm still standing tall

    65. higher education

      Ironic how Booker T was the first one to set up a school for high education, which eventually led to Dubois getting his education and being Booker T biggest opponents.

    66. no great poet has ever been afraid of being himself

      This is true through everything like being a song writer don't be someone your not just because a certain crowd doesn't follow you be yourself and your time will come

    67. the young poet tells Hughes that he wants to be “a poet—not a Negro poet,” which Hughes takes to mean that, at best, the young poet seeks to downplay his race

      This shows me that this young poet doesn't believe in his race it shows me he is less confident about his race.

    68. founded for the higher education of African Americans.

      He wants blacks to accommodate yet founded a school for high education for African Americans, that clearly goes against what many whites think of about black people. In my opinion contradicts his own statement.

    69. After emancipation

      The order that gave freedom to slaves in 10 states during the civil war.

    70. provided them rather than seek access and opportunity through protest and civil unrest:

      This is where I would disagree with him, as not seeking for opportunity in itself is already bad advice as given an opportunity one should take it.

    71. A proponent of vocational education for Blacks, Washington contended that the rights and privileges of true citizenship for Black people could only be gained through gradual struggle and the development of marketable skills.

      This proves how Booker T Washington was living a double consciences, by living his life out but also pertaining to his white counterparts.

    72. over-century-old discourse

      pre civil war and post civil war

    73. The debate over the best sociopolitical direction for African Americans not only crosses over to different generations but also crosses over to different forms of media.

      This pertains with the many different activist with all differing views from one another

    74. civil disobedience

      With Civil disobedience I think of Martin Luther King

    75. reactive aggression

      Malcolm X

    76. isolation

      This being Dubois

    77. assimilation

      This being Booker T. Washington idea

    78. in doing so often found many of their solutions standing in stark contrast to the ideas of their fellow Black intellectuals and activists.

      The disputes between ideologies, such as Dubois and Booker T, with Dubois arguing for having his rights and equality now VS Booker wanting to accommodate.

  10. Feb 2021
    1. For Latour, the ideology of neoliberalism has caused the operation of global capital to be elevated to the same order as that of inert matter: both are taken as fixed and obligatory realities that are entirely independent of the contingent behaviour of human beings in the world down-below.
  11. Jan 2021
    1. Tag: marginalia
      • for : TrailHub4Hypothesis
    2. Tag: marginalia An Outline for Using Hypothesis for Owning your Annotations and Highlights

  12. Nov 2020
    1. Anthony Tattersal

      I suggest to add a link to his biography or any other link that tells the reader who he is

  13. Aug 2019
    1. bough    .

      Sonnenizio does have a capping couplet

    2. 1913

      An italian sonnet has one octave with the rhyme scheme abba abba with a sestet with the rhyme scheme of the poets choice

    3. ; Petals

      The poem is so short that there isn't really a true Volta (Turn of phrase), but if there was one, it would be between the two lines

    4. crowd

      This poem has a rhyme scheme, crowd and bough

    5. The

      100% not a sonnenizio

    6. crowd

      An English Sonnet/Elizabethan Sonnet is a type of sonnet with 3 quatrains and 1 couplet (usually a capping couplet). The rhyme scheme is abab cdcd efef gg

    7. Brief Poems by Ezra Pound

      Here is small collection. Thanks DP!

  14. Aug 2018
    1. tāds kā “grēkāzis” (“ļaunie un maznesaprotošie abortu aizliedzēji”)

      Šis cilvēks nesaprot, kā darbojas aktīvisms (un pasaule :D), right? Ak nē, Papardes zieds uzskata, ka aborti nav jāaizliedz un ka abortu aizliegt gribētāji nav jauki cilvēki. Nokrāsojiet mani šokētu! :D

    2. neviens valstī par abortu aizliegšanu ar likumu nemaz nerunā kā reālu iespēju

      Pag, kurā dienā un konkrētā minūtē valstī bija šis maģiskais brīdis? Zinu! Tas notika tad, kad visas planētas sastājās rindā. :D ("Nerunā" neuztvēru 100% burtiski, sorry.)

      Un arī nav mūsu valsts vienīgā un pa visu planētu, kā tajā senajā TV reklāmā. :D Polija, Krievija, konservatīvie politiskie spēki, kas atrodami it visur utt? Mm? Tāda sajūta, ka autors dzīvus cilvēkus sen nav saticis un īsti nesaprot, kā tie uztver pasauli.

    3. Tas arī izsaka šo informatīvo materiālu galveno domu un mērķi. Un, ja pēc tā, kāds uzdrošinātos teikt, ka ir par abortu aizliegšanu, viņš izpelnītos pārmetošus skatienus (kā, tu atbalsti tādas šausmas!).

      No way! :D Cepums autoram, ka ir spējis pamanīt šo "slepeno" domu - ka nejaukās sekas no abortu aizliegšanas eksperte uzskata par sliktām (kur pilnībā viņai piekrītu) un negrib pieredzēt tādu nejaucību atkārtošanos.

    4. Pirmkārt, atlasīti tie eksperti, kas pauž idejai atbalstošu viedokli; svarīgi tas, ka pieredzējuši.

      No šit... A ko citu tad Papardes ziedam bija jādara, ņemot vērā šīs organizācijas mērķus? Tajos brīžos, kad tai rodas vēlme apspriest abortus, meklēt nepieredzējušus "ekspertus", kas uzskata, ka aborti ir grēks? :D

  15. Nov 2017
    1. Published in The Egoist, a literary periodical published monthly, the article was written by T.S. Eliot under a pseudonym.

      You probably don't have to go this deep, especially if you're looking tocut words

    2. However, Eliot’s connection to Loy is important.

      Not much info in this sentence

    3. As far as his work

      Clutter, can be removed

    4. What is perhaps

      Clutter

    5. Here, he focuses much more on global isolation and issues

      Examples/quotes would be handy here!

    6. The third and final era of Eliot’s poetry, highlighted by the publication of the Four Quartets in 1942

      I actually rather liked the structure you had where you started each paragraph with an era of Pound's poetry, and might recommend maintaining it. I would try to move this to the top of the paragraph; you can decide if you want to remove the information before or find a way to incorporate it into previous paragraphs

    7. This served as a way for Eliot to formalize his separation with his wife.

      You can tie this into the previous sentence to cut words

      " . . . to Harvard, which formalized his separation with his wife."

    8. The poem was also influenced by financial stresses, as well as Eliot’s studies in Sanskrit and Indian philosophy.

      This is an interesting side path, but you don't really go into what effects these influences had on his poetry. I would go deeper with this or cut it entirely.

    9. Pound called The Wasteland a work of genius and had a heavy hand in the many notable revisions to this poem.

      I would say the same thing: perhaps go deeper (give a quote from Pound, maybe) and explain this relationship more, or cut it to keep your length down.

    10. continuously attempted to reach his wife

      The verb "reach" is a little vague.

    11. Vivien’s insanity

      We don't know that she's insane at this point, so a little exposition might be helpful

    12. During this time, Eliot met Ezra Pound who became an advocate for Eliot’s poetry and subsequent publication.

      This detail is a little tangential and not expanded upon very much. If you're going to include it, I would delve into it further and detail their interactions, but otherwise I would cut it for brevity's sake.

    13. The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock in 1911, The Wasteland in 1922, and Four Quartets in 1942.

      Titles in quotation marks; I'd say this for the other ones too, but will only mark it here to avoid cluttering up your page

    14. presents the theme of isolation;

      You can cut this, as the rest of the sentence restates this

    15. One of the most influential intellects of the 20th century

      This a bold claim that you could supplement with some details/evidence in order to persuade the reader that it's actually true:

      • How do we know he was influential? Perhaps a quote from a contemporary or critic would work well here
      • What did he influence (which movements, groups, etc.)?

      While you do establish some of these things later on in your paper, it'd be a stronger opening if you could immediately hook the reader and persuade them that Eliot matters. Admittedly, he is well-known enough that his name might speak for itself, but you don't want to rely on that; you want your writing to reflect it.

    1. Picabia died in 1953, in the same home he was born in Paris (“Francis Picabia: Biography”).

      If you have room, I would just suggest adding how/why he returned to Paris because the bio goes straight from his refuge in Spain to him dying in his Paris home. Something as simple as "Picabia eventually returned to his home country..." would help chronologically.

    2. causing

      "beginning" instead of "causing" perhaps

    3. so abstract and conceptually new

      "a very new and abstract concept" may work here as well?

    4. not truly being a household name artist

      "not being a household name" would suffice

    5. obsessed

      obsessed is a strong word, it works but if you use this word I as a reader would want you to elaborate further on how he was obsessed with it (versus perhaps fascinated, for example)

    6. , among

      "and" would probably work better here

    7. American

      America / the United States

    8. starting during

      I would suggest using "beginning with" or "starting with" rather than "starting during" ; it just makes the sentence flow better.

    1. who found diagramming sentences, feedback from Harold Ross, and Parisian newspapers influential.

      slightly awkward wording here

    2. Natalia Danesi Murray

      possibly identify who this woman is - she sort of just appears out of left field.

    3. “Letters from Paris”

      clarify - is this a column?

    4. Flanner’s lifelong career began

      possibly rephrase along the lines of "Flanner began what would be her lifelong career as the Paris correspondent for The New Yorker", etc.

    5. just created

      "which had just been created"

    6. her novel The Cubical City (1926) had received poor reviews.

      perhaps include some context as to why the poor reviews of Flanner's book led her to be cold toward Mina Loy. Without any details it leaves the reader sort of confused.

    7. talking art and culture

      "where they talked [about]"

    8. in 1922, settled in Paris

      "and settled in Paris in 1922,"

    9. discovered lesbian desire together

      This wording is very, very awkward; perhaps the two "lived as lesbians together" (were they out in Paris or not? This may be a pertinent detail to include).

    10. who Janet left Rehm for

      "for whom Janet left Rehm" - also, while we're on this annotation, I wanted to point out it may be wise to stick to either "Janet" or "Flanner" when writing the biography, just to be consistent. I would go with "Flanner" but ultimately it's up to you.

    11. introducing

      I would possibly change this wording to something along the lines of "a decision which introduced"

    12. two-year

      I don't believe you need a hyphen here.

    13. of

      "in"

    1. Julien Levy

      Might it be worth mentioning here that Levy became Loy's son-in-law?

    2. are credited

      Who credits Bunuel with this praise?

    3. are described

      Who described them this way?

    4. took Buñuel

      delete?

    5. Despite Buñuel’s comradery among Parisian Surrealists, extreme rightists often scrutinized his work. At the premiere of L’Âge d’Or on December 3, 1930, a group of rightist youths attacked the Parisian theatre and police mandated that the film be banned in Paris (Buñuel).

      With what specifically did they take issue in Bunuel's film?

    6. sought

      seek

    7. other fellow

      I think you could just choose one of these adjectives.

    8. the rigid social structure

      Could you be a little more specific here? With what did Bunuel take issue in regards to this social structure?

    9. died out

      This wording is a little awkward.

    1. The bio has a lot of great information, especially on Mina Loy. However, you could use some reorganization. There is information at the end that belongs earlier in the biography, and it's hard to see the focus and structure of the biography. You have a really great start here, and I can see that you've done a fair amount of research!

    2. Mina Loy compared the painting to Oelze saying she was waiting for it to light up at any moment.

      Good!

    3. She said that his canvas, “Expectation” haunted her as there was speculation of an affair between the two.

      You already talked about Expectation. Why is this so late in the bio?

    4. Mina Loy, according to, The Art World Online, became romantically involved with Oelze from 1932-193.

      You need this information way earlier

    5. As Oelze dealt with starvation he was uncomfortable in his own body and therefore it is reflected in his art such as in “In one of the Fallowing Years” which, “depicts a female colossus staring at the viewer, small homunculus apparitions covering her body.”

      This seems out of place. Revise this sentence

    6. Their relationship is discussed when talking about his mental illnesses including semi-starvation, poverty, and isolation.

      Their relationship or his mental state? Confusing

    7. Loy wrote her daughter a description of Richard’s famous painting as a “gigantic back of a commonplace woman looking at the sky,” which shows that Loy had a different perception of this art than Oelze, who focused on all the people in the painting rather than solely the woman.

      Connect this back to the painting in the novel

    8. ntimate details of Loy and Oelze are represented in her novel

      what do you mean by intimate?

    9. which shows that Loy had a different perception of this art than Oelze, who focused on all the people in the painting rather than solely the woman.

      I would separate the sentence here.

    10. Richard’s

      I would say Oelze since you refer to him by his last name elsewhere

    11. In the novel, Jones reacts anxiously to one of Insel’s painting, one similar to Oelze’s “Expectation,” and then ships it to the United States, just as Loy shipped Oelze’s painting to the U.S

      I would revise this sentence

    12. ainting

      paintings

    13. character’s enactment of an embodied, unstable, and automatically conditioned subjectivity.”

      explain this quote after you use it. I'm not quite sure what you're trying to say here

    14. rance

      add a comma

    15. even

      cut

    16. the characters are said to be a reflection of their relationship with each other.

      Which characters? You also already said this.

    17. 1930s in Paris

      or you could say soon after meeting Oelze

    18. talent counting

      I'm not sure what you mean by this

    19. with her two characters Mrs. Jones, a gallery director, and Insel, an artist.

      but you have three characters listed here. I would revise this sentence

    20. d 1970s

      add a comma after 1970's

    21. The pessimistic tenor of Oelze’s art represented his deep psychological issues that caused him to live a very isolated life after the war in Posteholz.

      I think that they show and express rather than represent.

    22. who started in 1929 when he first encountered surrealist paintings from Max Ernst and René Magritte in Switzerland.

      What was he before?

    23. Richard Oelze is a highly regarded German surrealist painter,

      I would definitely include his DOB and DOD in the biography

    24. The effect of the war on Oelze is shown in his post-1950 art

      I suggest you talk about the different of before and after.

    25. released from being a held as

      you can simply this to just "released from being"

    26. Now,

      This is awkward

    27. who started

      started what?

    1. The landscapes of his early work indicate remnants of Impressionism, notably in “My Mother’s Garden” (1905) and “Corsican Village at Sunset” (1905) (Leger & Schmalenbach, 10). Nearing World War I, however, he found the melodiousness of Impressionism irreconcilable with the tumultuous times, so he experimented with Picasso and Braque’s Cubism. His tendency to break figures into tubular shapes earned his work the nickname “tubism”. In 1909, his work was shown in Paris galleries alongside Duchamp, Brancusi, and Picabia. Léger advocated for embracing the modern era. In a 1914 lecture entitled “Contemporary Achievements in Painting”, he likened the sharp contrast in his paintings to that between billboards and landscapes. Léger’s paintings explore unity of Impressionist-style sceneries with modern technology. Léger served in World War I until he was injured in 1917. This exposed Leger to a variety of modern technologies that began appearing in his work; in a 1922 letter, Leger wrote that he enjoys painting “forms necessitated by modern industry”, such as a furnace or machine gun (De Francia 41). Famously referring to modernity as “a life of fragments” (De Francia 46), Léger replicated disintegration with the fragmented posters, stairs, and dummies in his painting, “La Ville” (1919). In 1926, Leger produced the film Ballet mecanique, a non-narrative film that explores the simultaneous disunity and unity of the modern industrial era, through portrayal of machines at work. He stated in 1913 that modernity must “accept as its means of expression an art of dynamic divisionism” (Turvey 39) and look for classical ideals of nature and beauty within the fabrication of technology.

      I would be careful to not just list his major works, but to talk about trends in his work, or in his life. Right now, parts of this read like a list of his major works. I suggest being careful with this, and using the works as examples, rather than the focus. That way it will be the works in context of his life, rather than the other way around.

    2. Léger’s paintings explore unity of Impressionist-style sceneries with modern technology.

      good

    3. advocated for embracing the modern era.

      how specifically? Use some more details in this semester

    4. The landscapes of his early work indicate remnants of Impressionism, notably in “My Mother’s Garden” (1905) and “Corsican Village at Sunset” (1905) (Leger & Schmalenbach, 10). Nearing World War I, however, he found the melodiousness of Impressionism irreconcilable with the tumultuous times, so he experimented with Picasso and Braque’s Cubism. His tendency to break figures into tubular shapes earned his work the nickname “tubism”. In 1909, his work was shown in Paris galleries alongside Duchamp, Brancusi, and Picabia.

      Good details!

    5. From an early age, Leger was attracted to media in various forms. After apprenticing in an architect’s office, he moved to Paris in 1900, where he studied privately under two professors at Ecole des Beaux-Arts

      Where was he born? Did he grow up in a family?

    6. Léger’s legacy has not been confined to Paris; the Manhattan Museum of Modern Art has exhibited his work five times, most recently in 1998. Leger’s work maintains relevance for ushering in the modern era, uniting traditional styles with industrialization and experimentation.

      I would expand more on his legacy. What is he remembered for? If his style is a focus, consider moving some of the earlier details here to add more to this.

    7. During the 1930s, Léger visited several countries to give lectures, including Berlin, the United States, and London. In 1945, he joined the French Communist Party. In 1955, he was awarded the Grand Prize at the Sao Paulo Bienal. He died in 1955.

      I would consider revising these sentences. Up to this point you've included both simple and complex sentences, and this paragraph has simple sentences.

    8. The works of Loy and Léger were often considered in the same circles. They moved to Paris three years apart and shared acquaintances like Picasso and Picabia. They reportedly met on at least one occasion at a Paris dinner party for notable figures in the art community (Burke). Julien Levy, a friend of both, filmed Loy and Leger for an experimental film series on artists at work.

      I think you can definitely expand this paragraph. This is one of the most important pieces of the biography, so you should consider adding more details an information into this.

    9. a friend of both, filmed Loy and Leger for an experimental film series on artists at work.

      more details

    10. They reportedly met on at least one occasion at a Paris dinner party for notable figures in the art community

      give more details.

    11. three years apart

      dates?

    12. La Ville” (1919).

      keep in chronological order

    13. He stated in 1913

      why is this out of order?

    14. ”,

      comma inside quotation mark

    15. enjoys

      enjoyed. Keep the past tense

    16. injured

      what kind of injury?

    17. unity

      the unity

    18. ”,

      comma inside the quotation mark

    19. Fernand Léger was a notable French artist and filmmaker during the first half of the twentieth century. A Cubist painter, Leger is known for bold colors and geometric shapes, particularly those portraying modern machinery. Later in life, Leger created experimental films, including the well-known Ballet Mecanique (1926).

      Great start to the biography! Looks fantastic

    20. ”.

      Place the period inside the quotation mark

    1. Looks great!! No grammar issues, no big problems. You use a lot of semi colons to connect together sentences, maybe think about removing some of them just because you have a lot of very long sentences. But it's up to you!

    2. it

      add a space before it