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  1. Nov 2017
    1. Their social and artistic values kept them circling around each other in so many historical pages that it’s difficult to believe their relationship didn’t go beyond a mere photograph.

      Revise

    2. would not have gone unnoticed by

      you use this phrase a few times; I would consider using a different phrase here

    3. Breton wrote to him so much exhorting him to move to Paris and join the fight there, that by the time Tzara arrived, he was treated like some sort of savior.

      Revise

    4. particular

      particularly

    5. All of these are people Loy would have known, or at the very least known of, and would have been in some form of contact with.

      consider using a semicolon prior to this sentence

    6. their

      I don't think you need this "their"

    7. ,

      Maybe place this after photograph.

    8. surrealist movement

      I'm guessing this is probably a personal decision, but I would capitalize these movements.

    9. avant garde movement

      Same as before, should this be capitalized?

    10. movement

      Should Movement be capitalized here since it's a proper noun?