This will be the most important paragraph because you need to be the most persuasive and address your points. I feel like this will be the hardest paragraph for me.

This is so important because you want the readers to be persuaded and on your side of the argument at the end. If you end vague, you didn't do your job well enough.

I like this outline because it tells you more information and what everything means. For example this outline explains what you need to do to create a strong topic sentence.

Never heard of a background paragraph before. So it's like a second intro?

This is kind of how my past outlines were set up. Even though this outline is familiar, I might choose a different set up.

Similar to what my interviewee said about her experiences of an abusive training environment. Her coaches would kick their athletes for no reason. She told me they never abused her because she was the top girl in their gym, but she would see her other teammates being physically abused, which broke her heart.

This is very true and sad. Lavonda should of not approached anyone of saying they should be on the weight watcher show. This could lead to eating disorders, which are so serious!

I can't believe they didn't do anything about the complaints until four players decided to leave. Maybe the officials didn't know much about what Lavonda was doing.

That is crazy how she threw a chair, like really? I wonder what made her throw it.

I agree, but I would think that physical abuse would be most common in sports.

It makes no sense why a coach would abuse someone emotionally and physically. You shouldn't be a coach if you don't want your athletes to succeed.

This sentence makes me feel sad because it's really sad how many athletes love their sport, but than they don't from burnout and an abusive relationship with their coach.

Yes being tough helps an athlete excel, but having fear and threats is too far and won't make an athlete succeed.

This is sadly true because no matter what type of abuse happens to athletes, there is only a little bit of help to prevent this. Yet abuse still happens today, so everyone needs to change that.

I disagree because you learn a lot of life skills from sports. There might be some who don't learn or have no life skills, but most people do have them.

Probably don't have specific evidence because we don't know who ,when or where abuse is happening in the world.

This is true in many cases because many people do not speak of the abuse happening to them. It's sad that many people keep it a secret for a long time. In fact, I just read an article about an Olympic gymnast who just spoke out about abuse after 5 years when it happened!

This is crazy, but not surprising.

This is just like artistic gymnastics score wise. It makes sense that they score the same type of way, but I never knew that!

I didn't know there was five different equipment to use! I wonder how each event is different skill wise.

If I were to judge rhythmic gymnast, it would be hard because everyone is so flexible and is very good!!

I never knew that there were five events. I wonder how they all differ from each other.

This is great that men are starting to do rhythmic gymnastics. It's hard for me to picture them being flexible, but I guess it's because they have different bodies.

In every sport you need to be focused as well to succeed.

I feel like this sport can lead to many eating disorders like ballet. It's sad, but true.

I hear a lot about this kind of stuff. People say this sport's look is to look thin, but every athlete needs to eat and know their proper nutrient to be the best they can be.

This is important because you want to find something to eat that has carbs that contains long lasting energy, rather than eating short lasting carbs.

I wonder how many hours a regular rhythmic gymnast trains a day? My coach trained about 15 hours a day, so I wonder how some training facilities don't have enough time to train endurance?

C.J talks about how he cried when he didn't make the Olympic team, but with his family's support he never gave up on his dream. Having an inspiring message like "Never give up" in a interview is great for listeners to learn and be inspired. This is an effective strategy for the listeners.

In this interview everyone is sharing great memories from CJ's gymnastics career so far and are all having a good time talking about them. This is an effective strategy because interviews should be fun and enjoyable, which is exactly what this interview is doing.

In this interview the son asks his father short questions instead of long ones to make it easier for his father to answer. Even with a short question his father, Leon, still talked a lot. If it were a longer sentence it would probably make his father take too much of the time answering just one question. This is an effective strategy.

In this interview, the son's dream wasn't supported by his mother, but he talks about how he went after his dream anyway. This is an effective strategy because it can inspire others to go after their dreams even if no one supports them.

Since Priya's father has memory loss, it's hard for him to remember his past. In the interview Priya helps her father by saying, "that's right" when he isn't sure of his answers. This strategy is effective because by helping her father, it keeps the interview going.

This is a great interview to show how Priya, who is interviewing her dad, has great listening skills and is respectful. She is patient when her father speaks slowly and doesn't mind repeating sentences her father can't hear. Also since her dad is older and doesn't speak that loud, she can still hear him by listening well. This is for sure a listening strategy.

I can see this being true, especially in the science world because many scientist have different theories about things causing them to make up stories that could not be true.

This is true because conspiracy stories create lots of drama, which influence people's attitudes. Conspiracy stories can be so believing that many people believe it because not everyone can figure out that the story is fake.

I think people should take away Jones' radio show because he is making things up for viewers. Talk about disinformation.

Wait so does Donald Trump know about Jones' fake news? Or did Jones make it up about Trump saying that Jones has an amazing reputation?

How could Jones say that Sandy Hook Elementary shooting was a hoax and that Obama was going to put people in concentration camps, like obviously we all know that his facts were false. I wonder if anyone actually believed in what he said about this.

Interesting interview, title of this interview made me instantly want to check out this story. I don't know how this woman could forgive this man who took the life of her child away. If I was in this situation I don't think I could ever forgive the person. This just shows how strong this woman is.

In the beginning of the interview, the son explained how his mother would make everyone eat a little bit of rice from the bowl that represents their father. This seemed weird to the family kids, but it is an actual normal example of what people do to keep the spirit of loved ones closer when they are not around. It is crazy that the wife talked to Adm. Stockdale for the first time in seven years, makes me feel their sympathy of not seeing each other in a long time.

A great interview, really shows how much the granddaughter loves her grandpa and how the grandpa knows how much the granddaughter wants to know about his life. I hope I can do this with my grandparents because I want to learn more about their past and be able to tell stories about them in the future.

It's sad what drugs can do to people. It is Good that Kellie turned her life around and is now educating others with her experience. This story reminds me of an article I recently read about a child who was born three months before the due date caused by her mother who drank alcohol. The child has a condition because of this effect. Sad.

I think this is a great method to use because it makes the reader pay more attention to the new information given without getting confused right away.

This sounds so much easier than letter "a". It flows way better and is easier to understand.

All of those words are unnecesarry when you can simply just use the word "when". It makes my head hurt reading those pointless words, but by only using one word, it is way easier to understand.

This is so important because sometimes you don't need all the words you added, which ends up making your sentence to long and too wordy to understand.

Conclusions should refer to the meaning of the story or lesson. For my narrative, it took a while to come up with a closure because I wanted to make sure the readers would understand the moral of the story.

Sometimes I have to write my entire story over again too, but it's worth a better writing piece. Usually for coming up with vivid examples for my story, I add figurative language so the reader can understand my story better.

This is very important. I had to go back in my narrative to make sure the readers would understand the meaning and lesson of my story by adding more details throughout the entire story.

I think it's important to take time revising your writing because it can be stressful to change sentences and details in your story when your out of ideas. I think it's good to revise one pragraph at a time.

This is true and is important because usually when I write stories, I sometimes add ideas in my stories that didn't make sense or relate to the topic, so it's always good to look back at your work.

That's what I thought a long time ago, but really you should try to add or delete writing in your narrative to make it better. I always try adding more details to my stories when I revise it.

The poem by Burns is good and I enjoy it, but it is kind of confusing with the wording because the language has many different words that I don't understand and I can only picture the poem in the last couple of stanzas. Without the english translation of the poem, it would be very difficult to understand the meaning of the poem.