Add a paragraph about the town's actual incorporation before this. I had added something about this in the Google Doc Kiona shared with me.

Something like: "In 1926, the town of Snow Hill was officially incorporated as the Borough of Lawnside. This followed..."

As mentioned, I would actually move the Union Township census map to the "Community of Snow Hill" page. It is more fitting as a description of what else we know about the community. Leave this page dedicated to the Free haven Map.

Heading: "Process and Data"

Add heading for "Credits and Permissions" section. List out all of your names, mention that all data is property of Shamele Jordan and the Lawnside Historical Society, and include rights/permissions (Creative Commons license).

Make a "sources" section. For this include a line that explains that all photos and geographic coordinates were taken by Shamele Jordan, and that the data on soldiers was based on her archival research drawing on different types of records (pensions, death certificates, census data, etc.).

You also need to provide a short bibliography of other sources you referenced and link to them (e.g. cemetery websites, medal of honor site, etc.).

I would explain that you produced a dataset that then served as the basis for both your Omeka collection and the map data layers.

didn't geo-reference, but did produce a series of interactive maps visualizing the soldiers at the cemetery level, but also a wider geographic level.

Explain that this project built on an earlier site developed by Shamele Jordan, and even link to her old site.

Page has great info, but could use more dynamic formatting. Take a look at the About page on the other Lawnside group's site, this is a great example of how to format this page.

"This project maps the location of civil war graves within cemeteries of Lawnside, New Jersey. It was completed by students in..."

completed in

Perhaps before going into the graves cemetery by cemetery, you could have a short intro providing an overview of the graves --> mention how many they are, reiterate the cemeteries they are in, and explain how to navigate the gallery.

Most importantly, you could embed Ian's map of the gravestone beside this at the top. This is currently on the "mapping graves" page, but I'd actually remove that page and integrate it with the others.

Or just "The Headstones"?

Give me some more historical detail on the church/cemetery (dates, etc.). And again find and cite their website. Then include Omeka map alongside this text.

In terms of your maps, probably only need one. I also wonder if it's better just to have an interactive map showing the location of the cemetery outlines in the town.

Also, you might provide a sort of menu below that points users to the components of your project. You could see how the Redbank or Lawnside 1926 group designed their home pages for how you might lead into your other pages.

Makes it sound like they were all from Lawnside. Rephrase: "The town's cemeteries were popular burial sites for former civil war soldiers in the South Jersey region who had served in..."

I moved the instructions to the side using the grid (span 2 -and 10). Move it around to your preference!

I would expand on the origins question and what we learn. While several are from New Jersey, many come from southern states, which tells us that many were likely formerly enslaved. Also mention some of the outliers (Saint Louis, Canada, Germany, etc.).

Most died much later. Have a paragraph break, then explain that the other layer shows deathplace. Note patterns in where they ended up settling down, with many coming from outside Lawnside, especially Philly and Camden. Just more commentary on what we see in this map.

Also, I'll work on getting a swipe version on the page!

Maybe mention the varying degree to which we know the location (some cases town, others the county, others only the state).

Move up after the "Who were the soldiers" but before the "Where did they serve" sections.

Also could rename "Where were they from and where did they go?"

Same comment on the heading

I'd have these as subheadings below a larger: "Who were the Soldiers"? section. See comment above.

Citation? Or is this just from the records?

Great! Just cite this info

Cite where this quote comes from in parentheses and link

I'd call him a sailor

Very nice commentary! For the map, you might consider using a swipe style instant app (called a basic media app). This would allow you to show both layers at the same time and easily swipe between them.

There are a couple in New Jersey, but I wonder if this policy changed at the end of the war. You may also want a source you can cite that confirms that this was indeed the policy.

maybe say African American, even though that is the official term for their units.

Move mustering locations section to the bottom?

Perhaps rename: Where did they Serve?

Before getting into your maps, include a short overview of this section. Mention that we know about a few individual soldiers, but can also say something about their lives as a group. This section will tell the story of a few soldiers, then use maps to look at where they came from and where they served.

You might also include a photo of a group of soldiers (I think there are some in the "photos" section of the original resources folder).

You could then start with a "Who were the Soldiers?" section --> include your examples of specific soldiers (with subheadings for Lawson and Robinson. Then you could actually include another version of Ian's map of the graves, which had layers for different aspects of these soldiers (unit, rank, occupation, etc.). Allows us to get a profile on the larger group.

Or just "The Soldiers"?

Mt.

Very good, now cite the website of the cemetery. Also include an Omeka map (Map by attachments) alongside.

Very nice, now maybe add a couple other details about the history of each cemetery, focusing here on Mt. Zion church (find their website and cite with a link).

Can cut this paragraph since it is repetitive, but perhaps you could include photos of the three cemeteries in a row (see the photos that are on Snow Hill Geneology, which are also in the original burials resources folder under "photos").

"visualzing these soldiers and their burials in geographic space"

Can just say that this project was building on earlier research conducted by the Lawnside Historical Society and Shamele Jordan.

"shed light on the history of the African American community in New Jersey..."

Might save this fact for the "Stories of Soldiers" section, just mention that they served in units across the American South during the war.

capitalized

Too colloquial! Rephrase: "This project visualizes the burial sites of Civil War veterans buried in Lawnside, NJ..."

Need to add sources for your data: - William Watson. "Survey Map of Free Haven. 1844 (courtesy of Haddonfield Historical Society) - Cite relevant enumeration pages from 1850 Census record, and link to the relevant Family Search page

Also add any other sources that I asked you to cite on the text

Italics

can just link on title, don't need to list link

Did you end up using this source? Only site if used (you may have, just don't remember!)

Repeated site name, also can just put link on main title

Also give courtesy to the Haddonfield Historical Society for your map! And also mention that Shamele Jordan conducted research on property deeds and provided initial data.

Not necessary since you discuss this in other sections! Just make sure the same info shows up elsewehre

Mention the Census data, pulled from enumeration sheets and mapped to states

users can interact with...

combined the data with a geo-referenced version of the land survey, displayed as a series of ArcGIS Online layers

This part was secondary to documenting the survey info in the first place (drawing on Shamele Jordan's research on the map and property deeds in Camden County archives).

project is not really a timeline, but a snapshot of this community in the 1840s at the time of early Snow Hill and the Free haven development.

Worth also talking about this project as an attempt to make sense of the Free Haven survey map, found in the Haddonfield Historical Society collections. Goal is to place the individuals on geography of present-day town, while filling in the larger context of Snow Hill in the antebellum period.

Save the details on the 1850 Census, you'll see that I recommended moving that map

With the rest of this section, you should include two more versions of your map (one visualizing the land grantors, the other showing the gender of grantee). Add headings to that get at what each map shows us (e.g. "Who developed Free Haven?," "Who were the Landowners?". You also need a detailed description of what these maps show and the types of historical conclusions we can draw from them. Also recognize issue of lack of info on these individuals, especially since we have lack of them on Census data.

Before you even get to your ArcGIS map, provide image of the Free Haven Survey and introduce the map/what we know about it. If you look at the high resolution version,, you can actually read the caption explaining what this map is. Created by a surveyor named William Watson at the bequest of Ralph Smith, now housed in Haddonfield Historical Society.

And what are those patterns? Describe findings, need much more detailed narrative on spatial patterns in map.

mention how the user should interact with this map (click on people or place to browse)

Worth mentioning that Union Township is a much larger area

Describe what the map shows (e.g. names of individuals granted land along original land plots). Also describe how this data was filled in with info from land deeds (which describe grantor, original owner, etc.). Lastly, describe how the user should interact with this map (FYI you should add a layers list to toggle between).

Rename "The Free Haven Map"

Now add a section below displaying the census map currently on the other page.

Similar comment on citation/heading

Source? Perhaps add more details and cite/link Mt. Pisgah website

Also, any way to add image captions?

Same comments on sub-heading and citing/linking source (church website?)

Sub-heading, and cite/link Lawnside History society website

When? Give dates, mention what an "AME church" is

Bolded sub-heading?

revise this paragraph to reflect the page's focus on both existing places and the town's demographics

I'd refer to it as Snow Hill (community within the wider Union Township) in this section, since that was the common name at the time

I'd actually recommend displaying your Union Township census map on the same page that you discuss the community of Lawnside. I'd frame the start as an overview of what else we know about Snow Hill by the time of the Free Haven survey.

Create two sub sections with headings, perhaps: "The Sites of Early Snow Hill" "The People of Snow Hill and their Neighbors"

I think this is from 1844, by William Watson, and is courtesy of the Haddonfield Historical Society.

Is there a way to center the caption?

Perhaps link to the pages here. You may also want to see how the Redbank or Lawnside 1926 group designed their home pages for how you might lead into your other pages.

and the town's church congregations,

"The goal of this project is to highlight how early Lawnside..."

Mention this is in the 1840s

Add a short sentence situating us in time and context: "This project focuses on land ownership and development in the community of Snow Hill in the antebellum period."

"a fuller picture"

"Sr., a prominent Black abolitionist from Philadelphia, purchased."

A sentence like: "However, this is only part of the story."

"a settlement dubbed 'Free Haven,'

Link to source for this map. You might also want to provide a zoomed in thumbnail on Snow Hill on this map, since it is visible in this high resolution version from Princeton.

Describe some of the bars/clubs/other institutions in the town discussed in Gary Hunter's book, and cite specific pages. Would also be great if you included a picture of one of these (Philly Encyclopedia source has one)

move sources to end of section, link to the specific pages that this data came from on those sites

referred to as the "Great Migration"

Move this observation after you talk about discrimination in the South. Transition with something like: "But Lawnside was not only home to those migrating within the United States. Interestingly, ..."

page numbers?

and much further than that! Really the whole South

paragraph break

Add a short sentence: "Lawnside became a home for African Americans from far and wide. This map shows..."

data from the 1930 Census (not multiple years!)

Remove this heading, transition right into a short paragraph describing the map and how the roads have or haven't changed over time. Acknowledge that roads are based on 1943, since this was earliest available USGS topo map. Also add brief sentence explain how to toggle between layers and use swiper. Mention sources of map here, link to them.

Also, I do like the map, but the symbology is hard to read right now: Make the left-side show the simplified version of the historic town (one with my layers), then have the right side be the present-day map with your color road overlay.

Broaden this beyond the the roads to be about the landscape of Lawnside at the moment of incorporation:

Lawnside Incorporated: Birds-Eye View of the Town

rephrase as something like: "Lawnside was officially incorporated in 1926. This map shows the town's historic roads and houses that date back to this period."

Also, while I like your map, maybe display the version with the layers I made showing historic basemap stripped of modern roads, different symbology for houses/roads

Add a caption to image? Link to source?

Remove, no need to repeat title

Instead, add a sub-heading on early history:

"Before Lawnside: Snow Hill"

Maybe cite the Peter Mott House website here

"Throughout the 19th century, the community of Snow Hill became..."

Is it one of the oldest in the state? Rephrase: "The town, originally known as Snow Hill, dates back to the 18th century and holds a unique place as...

I like the license image, but also list out the use terms above this.

Can replace with "House photos by Shamele Jordan or Google Maps Street Viewer"

Again, remove if you didn't use

I don't think you actually used these sources. You don't need to list sources from that resources document that you didn't end up using!

Be more specific, list out the number for the specific set of enumeration sheets/census you looked at, and link to the first page.

Did you actually use this source? For the Topo maps you used, you'd actually list the name of the map, then link to USGS TopoView (you might even be able to find how TopoView wants maps cited).

For web-based citations, you can actually hyper link on the title instead of listing out the entire URL. Need to do this for every source.

Also needed the author for this page. Here's a formatting example: Jason Romisher. “Lawnside, New Jersey,” The Encyclopedia of Greater Philadelphia. 2019.

Just: "Sources and Data"

Group members:

providing research and context

specifically Camden County records

Place the heading to the left and rename: "Methods" or "Building the Project"

Gallery looks great! Just try your best to find images for houses that we are missing right now. Also double check those addresses for which there is no longer a house but another building shown.

Need to greatly expand this paragraph specifically about the 100 year old houses. Explain that many homes in the town today date before the town's incorporation, how users can explore these homes (map or gallery), and how you built this data (tax records with link to the site, google maps screenshots and photos taken by Shamele Jordan).

Also add a heading for the gallery below.@

Following formatting on other pages: Maybe add heading ("Mapping Historic Homes of Lawnside") and large italics that says something about houses/purpose of page: "Explore homes in Lawnside that date back before the town's incorporation."

Save this for your historical background in the "town and its people" section." Instead, include a brief paragraph describing the moment of incorporation in 1926 (I left notes about this earlier on a Google Doc Kiona shared with me). Then add a sentence stating what your project is about and how users can explore it.

"back to the 18th century and growing into a center of African American life throughout the 19th century."

Don't really show change over time, instead provide a snapshot of the town at the time of its incorporation in 1926.

I think your site title may need to change. Instead of "An Ever changing town," maybe make it "Lawnside, 1926: The Borough at 100."

Don't list out links, hyperlink in text

I know you have more sources than this! Include the 2017 report, any other sites you link to, and list out your maps (already listed on maps page).

Move this info into its own "Credits" or "Who Contributed to this Project?" section, place above sources. Include note on use permissions (i.e. Creative Commons license, see metadata guide).

Also, mention that this project was made for this class!

"artifacts found through archaeological investigation"

reconstruction?

Provide heading - "What is this Project" or something similar, model it on your homepage and find another image online of the modern park to include

This page is in great shape. Just look at my comments on the "Maps of Red Bank" page and try to mirror the same formatting here in terms of font/page layout.

Rename page "Historical Maps of Red Bank"? make sure it is clear that this page is about the historical maps themselves.

I'd add a heading here for "Gallery of historical maps," include your brief explanation that these same maps are those used in the map, this is a place for the user to browse them in more detail.

Move this source list to your sources list on the about page. The gallery below is sufficient to list out the maps you include, just make sure each of those items includes the full citations listed here.

This is all really good, but play with the formatting. Perhaps divide paragraph here and un-bold below part. Try to maintain consistent formatting across pages.

"The below interactive map..."

You'll need to do a few things with this gallery:

1) sort through and include only those objects that date to the colonial/bottle period, and rename this section to reflect that.

2) Add another browse preview block displaying objects from other periods (up to you whether to include before/after battle period in same list, and sort these using Item Sets).

3) Go through each item and, on the "mapping" tab, try your best to place a point at the location of the relevant unit or part of the park it came from (note you won't be able to see the units on the editor, so you'll have to toggle back and forth). After each item is updated, the results will reflect on this map.

4) Play around with the span on the "grid" formatting to get the list to display across the whole screen. You may have to move the map up too.

Move full citation to sources page

Cite sources in parentheses here (e.g. Catts et al. 2017; Catts 2026).

Add a caption below your map?

Maybe "Redbank Battlefield Park has undergone archaeological excavations that have uncovered a wide range of artifacts relating to all periods of the site's history."

Move this sentence to end of this section. Also rephrase as "This page includes artifacts recovered from ...

I think that your info on Pre-Contact period and Whitall House should be moved to the top and combined into a "Redbank before the Fort" section. This doesn't need to be long!

Same comment to link when citing, don't list out whole link

When you cite this, link directly to the page (don't list the link, hyperlink it!)

I'd replace this park map with an image of the house today, plenty available online, just link to source in parantheses

Same comment about section headings format

As mentioned, move this image up to use instead of one above

See comment above on combining this section with one above

I like this context, but move up your info on Fort Mifflin to here instead of a separate section. Combine/condense these paragraphs

I'd replace this with the image below that is clearer. Also since I recommend combining sections

Also, use "Heading 2" or "3" formatting for sections, like on Homepage

Good! Find an image of the site today to place beside? Maybe park map or image of the park sign?

Don't need to cite after every sentence, can just include citation at end of paragraphs. Can also leave out the comma (e.g. Janofsky 2025; Catts 2026).

Add a "Before the Fort" section? This is where you could briefly mention pre-contact site and the Whitall house.

Your reconstruction is based mostly on the historical maps (not artifacts", perhaps reframe this intro to be about those maps and your reconstruction of the fort outline based on those maps. The provide two links: One to the "Mapping Fort Mercer" page The other to "Historical Maps of Fort Mercer"

I would change up your above navigation menu order and titles. Perhaps: "Home" --> "History of Fort Mercer" --> "Mapping Fort Mercer" --> "Maps of Redbank" --> "Archaeology of Redbank" --> "About"

Add another similar block below introducing and linking to the Archaeology of Redbank. Perhaps find a photo of people digging in the fieldschool?

Also, you can add images using the "Assets" block, doesn't have to be an Item!

"Learn about maps of the fort and its reconstruction"

was

Save this for the History part?

Do you want to keep this title? "Mapping Redbank" would also be fine, whatever you prefer