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  1. Dec 2023
    1. The tear gascame 30 seconds later.

      Explaining the pace with "30 seconds later" makes me feel like I was there

    2. No athlete has embodied the soul of a city and the spirit of itspeople as Richard did in the 1940s and '50s in Montreal, my homefor the past 21 years.

      This is a weird sentence structure

    1. raced down the side

      Exciting--feels like I"m there

    2. And that was just the beginning. You’ve never seen a hockey player like Maurice Richard. Not Crosby. Not Gretzky. Not Orr, Beliveau, Howe. None of them had the talent, the intensity, the will to take over a game like Richard. And none of them meant to their fans what le Rocket meant to Canadien fans.

      This is especially engaging to Hockey enthusiasts themselves but if that is they're target market then the descriptor is clear and exciting.

    3. Their teammates swarm about, clutching and shoving one another.

      This sentence does a really good job at engaging the reader.

    1. Topics will change each week. Students will find themselves examining religious metaphors, behaviours and ethics, and drawing links between them and the Habs.

      All of these things play into story telling

    2. He would probably have a lot of things to say about it," Bauer said.

      Importance of this statement as it pertains to the conversation

    3. are, in fact, a faith.

      Very interesting way to describe it

    1. CBC Radio Archive: The Richard Riot

      Good use of mixed media

    2. Unbeaten, unbowed, unrepentant — still forever proud.

      Alliteration at the beginning of the sentence brings power to the ending piece “still forever proud” also a great way to end the essay.

    3. believed

      Third party perspective — interesting take on story telling

  2. Nov 2023
    1. then could I bear the waiting better."

      He’s try to describe the way hope makes us do things differently while still letting the reader come to that conclusion on their own. Interesting writing tactic

    2. long after nightfall

      Great story telling

    3. speaker ended by adding his own laugh.

      The speaker is not just a speaker if he’s injecting his own laugh he is a part of the conversation

    4. across the water

      Interesting way to describe the excitement of exploration by underplaying it

    1. ? I will take from your hand the cup of your sufferings, and I will invoke your Name

      I like how visual this monologue is. It allows it to be very intriguing for a reader because it is so detailed.

    2. MAY.

      Interesting aspect of story telling how it’s broken up on a timeline

    3. On that same 6th of June

      Interesting translation

    4. The Ursulines sent nothing; but—as we sent a few bouquets of flowers to them, as well as to the Hospital nuns—they sent at evening a Rosary with a reliquary medal.

      Shows an interesting relationship dynamic of giving and giving and receiving nothing. Very interesting.

    1. hey were very well pleased with these statements

      It’s very interesting to me how emotion is described in this writing. However, I have to keep in mind the cultural and language difference from my understanding the origin of the story.

    2. The translation of Brébeuf's portion

      It’s important to know the details of translation because already in this course we’ve seen the importance of the origin of a story and how its langue and cultural differences will affect our own perception of the text once it has been translated to our language.