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fluidity with gender
I would replace this with: gender fluidity
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Claude Cahun, an
replace with: Claude Cahun was an early
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intonarumori
I would add a note here with the translation: "noisetuners" or "noise machines"
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Piattie
replace with: Piatti
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Intonarumori
italics, as it is a foreign word. I don't think it is necessary to capitalize it
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Intonarumi
replace with: intonarumori
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Luigi’s
replace with: Russolo's
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Russolo
add full stop after Russolo
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Poetic Dramas of Mina Loy
italics?
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.
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procreation
Would it be ok to refer to my book here, where I have argued this? See: Laura Scuriatti, Mina Loy's Critical Modernism (Gainesville: University Press of Florida, 2019), pp. 46-60.
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quotes FUTURIST tirade against women
italics except for FUTURISM
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LOVE shrugs her shoulders—and kisses him.
italics, except for LOVE
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LOVE hands him a pair of boxing-gloves—red flannel hearts—and puts on a pair herself with which every point made is emphasised by a psychological blow
italics except for LOVE
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with an off-hand gesture he draws LOVE out of his pocket, scattering the newspapers, shakes LOVE out and stands her on the floor in front of him, taking her measure with a masterful eye as she pulls herself together
italics, except for LOVE (twice)
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NATURE comes on, looking enquiring.
italics, except NATURE
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confidentially laying his arm across FUTURISM’s shoulder
italics, except FUTURISM
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FUTURISM picks up LOVE and a handful of newspapers and stuffs them altogether into his pocket—which he slaps with a bang.[7] INMATES and MEN gradually filter back.
everything in italics except: FUTURISM, LOVE, INMATES, MEN
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FUTURISM sits fixing her with theatrically amative eyes—LOVE smiles and wails like a cat on the tiles—her criticism
everything in italics except FUTURISM and LOVE
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gives her a thumping whack on the thigh—LOVE jumps
everything in italics except LOVE
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Drags off LOVE’s roseate hood, dislodging a shower of golden curl
everything in italics except FUTURISM; replace Drags with: drags
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DOLORES draws LOVE forward.
draws and forward in italics
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comes on with
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approaches
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nature
replace with: Nature
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unconsummated
replace with: inconsummate
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of
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must
replace with: have to
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They
replace with: they
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—
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FUTURISM here declaims Futurist attack on love—most drastic
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now
replace with: now?
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proto poem
replace with: proto-poem
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lifeblood
replace with: life-blood
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future
replace with: Future
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MAN
Replace with: A MAN
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MAN
replace with: A MAN
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… passion?—It’s merely neurosis.[1]
This isn't in Crangle's edition. if we follow it, this should be deleted
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Try putting glue on the seats.
We could add the following footnote here: This refers to various pranks and strategies that the Futurists used in order to provoke audiences at their "serate" (evening events) and create brawls. (LS)
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conjuring commercial traveler.
it should be traveller (British spelling, as in Crangle)
add footnote here: In the poem "Lion's Jaws", a satire of the Futurist movement, and especially of Filippo Tommaso Marinetti's masculinist and misogynist postures, Loy refers to the figure of "Raminetti" (clearly referring to Marinetti) as a "conjuring commercial traveller". (Loy, Mina. “Lion's Jaws”, The Lost Lunar Baedeker: Poems of Mina Loy, edited by Roger Conover. New York, Farrar, Straus, & Giroux, 1996, pp. 46-50, p. 48). (LS)
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to directors
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(
delete this bracket - no line break. in Crangle it reads: (a composite person called WORLD-FLESH-AND-DEVIL they are accompanied by two inspectors)
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a composite person called
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rubbing his eyes
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Awfully.
line break after Awfully
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you
Capitalized: You
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imploringly
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Now
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Silence
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don’t love
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all
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feel
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know
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bunkum
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can’t tell
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Instinct
Italics
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those
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A yawn from the sofa.
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addressing the sofa
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with an intimate caress
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hitting her
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promise
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not
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must
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presenting herself with a bow
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smiling
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bang
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a
delete
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her
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don’t want
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us
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we
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coaxing
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calls
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interested
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The audience sit circle-wise on the outskirts of the hall to watch the performance
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absent-mindedly
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rapturously
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I
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darling
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strokes her face with infinite tenderness, gazing
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Pause
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relieved
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distractedly
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intense
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must
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Yes, dear.
for some reasons, Crangle has this in italics, so we should follow suit
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fearfully
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flinging her away from him
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passively
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takes her in his arms and kisses her frantically, crying in between each half-dozen kisses
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I
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laughing
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must
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very rapidly
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loudly
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mitrailleuses
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must
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very
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parole in libertà
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prophet
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when
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P
small p in Crangle and for consistency
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now
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anybody
Crangle has any-body
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furiously
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my
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town
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Some
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Continuing
replace with: continuing
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To
replace with: to
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DO
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Diana
replace with: DIANA
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by
replace with: By
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Holding
replace with: holding
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tomorrow . . .
no line break before: tomorrow...
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. . . (turning to a step) . . .
add line break before (turning the first three dots should be next to eyes, not in a new line
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left-and
replace with: left-hand
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pass
replace with: Pass
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Here
add line break after full stop
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No use
add line break before: No use
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up
delete: up
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Those
add line break before Those
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. . .
no line break between first and dots
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shoulder
replace with: shoulders
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up-Sir-and
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. . .
no line break after mud
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not me . . . !
line break after you....?
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A
replace with: anxiously
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Loony
replace with: LOONY
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Diana
replace with: DIANA
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. . .
the three dots should be next to know
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Diana
replace with: DIANA
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he
delete: he
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This little pig.
line break after the bracket and three dots after pig
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Snoozily
replace with: snoozily
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Diana
replace with: DIANA
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Loony
replace with: LOONY
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Picked People
replace with: PICKED PEOPLE
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Loony
replace with: LOONY
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ends .
indented in Crangle
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Diana
replace with: DIANA
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he
I would replace "he" with "Loony" to make the sentence clearer and more elegant
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Diana
replace with: DIANA
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bric-a-brac
replace with: bric-à-brac line should be indented (as in Crangle)
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of ideo-fags
indented in Crangle
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round numbers
no line break between round and numbers
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and
replace with: And
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talk something
replace with: talk about something!
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warm footed
replace with: warm-footed
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Diana
replace with: DIANA delete full stop
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T
replace with: to
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back-)
replace with: back) - the latter is an em-dash
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Diana’s
replace with: DIANA's
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. . .
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.
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. . .
the dots should be next to submerged
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[12]
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Loy met the Florentine branch of the Futurists in the Caffé Giubbe Rosse: they used to meet in the back room and were famously very loud and quarrelsome
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Loony’s
replace with: LOONY's
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replace with dash
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Diana
replace with: DIANA
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. . .
the dots should be next to caress, not in a new line
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his rediscovery
Could we add a refence to my book here, where I write about this issue? Also, if we want to keep our initials for the notes, this would end with: (LS). The reference to my book is: See L. Scuriatti, Mina Loy's Critical Modernism (Gainesville: University of Florida Press, 2019), pp. 113-116.
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museumsand
add space. It should read: museums and
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souls to
replace "souls to" with: soul's
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China
replace with: china
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his
replace "his" with: the
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anticipates
replace with: anticipate
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autumn
replace "for autumn" with: for the autumn
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Must
replace with: "Has to have"
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Diana’s
replace with: DIANA
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futurism
replace with: Futurism
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Houseless Loony
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Lady Diana
replace with LADY DIANA
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about Marinetti;
no line break
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Ho capito
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cocktails Remember
There does not seem to be a line break in Crangle's edition, but it is not clear. Is there a break in The Dial?
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delete full stop
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friends
replace with FRIENDS
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. . .
dots should be next to "you", and not in a new line
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. . .
the three dots should not be on a new line, but next to frost
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into Arabic
it should read "into the Arabic" - although it sounds wrong. Either we correct it and add [sic], or insert an excision sign to show that we have intervened onto the text
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ball.
delete full stop
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Still Life With Chair Caning
Italics. "With" should be "with"
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In Advance of a Broken Arm
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Bicycle Wheel
italics
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his
delete "his"
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Ossy, you know,
delete commas. It should read: Ossy you know
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Oh,
delete comma
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knows
insert space between note and knows
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steam heating
hyphenate: steam-heating
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is
delete is
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CittàBapini
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Collision
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people
Capitalized: People
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The Sacred Prostitute
Consistency issue: in the previous parts of the book, the two plays (The Pamperers and The Sacred Prostitute) are in inverted commas, not in italics, whereas they are in italics here and elsewhere.
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