Take a fresh approach with these 10 tips!
We already read this and I don't see the annotation.
Take a fresh approach with these 10 tips!
We already read this and I don't see the annotation.
Look for sentences that start with “It is” or “There are” and see if you can revise them to be more active and engaging.
Fine, you've got me there, I'm lazy about that sometimes, but in the case of writing from Lord Hater's perspective, I think it's valid.
Aim for precision in word choice.
Well duh!
Check your sentence variety. If more than two sentences in a row start the same way (with a subject followed by a verb, for example), then try using a different sentence pattern.
Come on, I already do that.
or a video game—do it often.
I wish I could play video games often. The only thing I do often is experience stories, so I'm really good at something that isn't going to get me a job.
If a better thesis comes along, let go of the old one.
I'm not gonna lie, that sounds like a terrible strategy for dating.
If you’re still not convinced, re-read some of your old papers. How do they sound now? What would you revise if you had a chance?
grumbles yeah okay
But I don’t want to rewrite my whole paper!
Thank you, hypothetical fellow student. Me too.
It’s amazing how something that sounded brilliant the moment you wrote it can prove to be less-than-brilliant when you give it a chance to incubate.
Well that's optimistic. Thanks.
or does the paper just die a slow, redundant, lame, or abrupt death?
Redundant, they say, using four negative adjectives and a noun to describe something.
Does your paper follow a pattern that makes sense?
It better do, since it's chronological.
Do you give lots of detail early on and then let your points get thinner by the end?
Okay, maybe.
Does your introduction state clearly what you intend to do?
It's a personal narrative! It's a story!
“THINK BIG,
Ugh. Fine.
Ask yourself what you really think about the paper.
But I would be biased. I wrote it. Although whether I'm biased for or against is up to interpretation.
be honest with yourself, and don’t be lazy.
I vary with that. I am honest with myself in that I acknowledge I am lazy.
The Roman poet Horace thought one should wait nine years, but that’s a bit much.
That's ridiculous, honey.
if it’s really worth saying,
I do not have a choice as to whether it's "worth saying". It's for school. I have to write it. That's irrelevant.
But if you haven’t thought through your ideas, then rephrasing them won’t make any difference.
Ideally, I would have liked to have thought through my ideas before writing a paper on them.
see our handout
Wow, not a very subtle plug there.
What this handout is about
I think a better question to start with would be "Why should you revise?" That'd draw my interest much better.
“It’s about a tiny wee thing that’s so small and so alive – and so subversive.
I reckon we're all really small and alive and subversive in the grand context of things. Anyways, I like the mouse as the subject.
for no other reason than that the dialect causes it to be read as though in a foreign language.
I understand that. It sounds rather pretty in its original Old English, but that makes it easier to focus on the sounds rather than what's actually being said.
Scottish poet Liz Lochhead
I had the suspicion that Burns was Scottish. Glad to see it confirmed. Interesting perspective to see from someone else who is Scottish.
She’s also really attracted to some guy she keeps bumping into.
I personally really enjoyed Twilight's interactions with the guy, named Flash Sentry, in the first movie. It was exceedingly well done and the follow-ups don't quite match it in this department to be honest.
One interesting thing is the high school setting. In the show, the characters are all adults.
I will grant you that. I've thought about it myself.
Twilight Sparkle, accompanied only by her best friend, the baby dragon Spike, follows her through the mirror.
I am a big fan of Spike's role in this movie, I'll be honest. It's very good. But then again, the whole movie is stellar.
(which is basically the exact same name)
Funny this person, (I assume a guy?), should mention this because that's an important deliberate choice on behalf of the writers that I've put some thought into. We have Twilight Sparkle, Sunset Shimmer, and Starlight Glimmer, all very similar names. This is because of their roles as foils and parallels to each other. It's actually very interesting and well-written, you know.
The premise behind the movie is just doing My Little Pony as people.
I disagree with this on a fundamental level, but I'll let it slide.
Additionally, Fridays will be reviews of Star Trek: The Next Generation.
I do like Star Trek: The Next Generation. However, this style of blog is very different from the last few. I could've used more of an introduction to this person as a person before being thrown into their opinions on things I like.
This dish is incredibly easy
This does not sound easy and I have no idea what she made, even. The pictures are lovely, though. I'm impressed.
I’m loving it so far
This just reminds me of the line from Hamilton, I'll be honest.
To be clear, this is actually a very reasonable fee for the services rendered, but the fact that these services are mandatory
How fascinating. If the service wasn't mandatory, the price would be looked upon in a favorable light, but as it is, it's preventing content creators from sharing their creations with the world.
Anyone can do it. And I don’t mean ‘anyone can do it’ in the after-school-special, I-love-you-just-the-way-you-are sense.
I have mixed feelings about this portion. It is good to note that the sentiment "anyone can do it" is genuine, but I don't particularly appreciate the dig at that sort of media. The amount of cynicism involved is conflicting.
Not closing the door after they leave.
I have this same problem, but only at my dad's house, which makes it worse somehow.
I’m a teenager from England who writes a blog in her bedroom.
As a teenager who is often mistaken as being from England, I find this amusing because I too blogged from my bedroom until recently.