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  1. Oct 2016
  2. Sep 2016
    1. Look for sentences that start with “It is” or “There are” and see if you can revise them to be more active and engaging.

      Fine, you've got me there, I'm lazy about that sometimes, but in the case of writing from Lord Hater's perspective, I think it's valid.

    2. Check your sentence variety. If more than two sentences in a row start the same way (with a subject followed by a verb, for example), then try using a different sentence pattern.

      Come on, I already do that.

    3. or a video game—do it often.

      I wish I could play video games often. The only thing I do often is experience stories, so I'm really good at something that isn't going to get me a job.

    4. It’s amazing how something that sounded brilliant the moment you wrote it can prove to be less-than-brilliant when you give it a chance to incubate.

      Well that's optimistic. Thanks.

    5. But if you haven’t thought through your ideas, then rephrasing them won’t make any difference.

      Ideally, I would have liked to have thought through my ideas before writing a paper on them.

    1. “It’s about a tiny wee thing that’s so small and so alive – and so subversive.

      I reckon we're all really small and alive and subversive in the grand context of things. Anyways, I like the mouse as the subject.

    2. for no other reason than that the dialect causes it to be read as though in a foreign language.

      I understand that. It sounds rather pretty in its original Old English, but that makes it easier to focus on the sounds rather than what's actually being said.

    3. Scottish poet Liz Lochhead

      I had the suspicion that Burns was Scottish. Glad to see it confirmed. Interesting perspective to see from someone else who is Scottish.

  3. Aug 2016
    1. She’s also really attracted to some guy she keeps bumping into.

      I personally really enjoyed Twilight's interactions with the guy, named Flash Sentry, in the first movie. It was exceedingly well done and the follow-ups don't quite match it in this department to be honest.

    2. Twilight Sparkle, accompanied only by her best friend, the baby dragon Spike, follows her through the mirror.

      I am a big fan of Spike's role in this movie, I'll be honest. It's very good. But then again, the whole movie is stellar.

    3. (which is basically the exact same name)

      Funny this person, (I assume a guy?), should mention this because that's an important deliberate choice on behalf of the writers that I've put some thought into. We have Twilight Sparkle, Sunset Shimmer, and Starlight Glimmer, all very similar names. This is because of their roles as foils and parallels to each other. It's actually very interesting and well-written, you know.

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    1. Additionally, Fridays will be reviews of Star Trek: The Next Generation.

      I do like Star Trek: The Next Generation. However, this style of blog is very different from the last few. I could've used more of an introduction to this person as a person before being thrown into their opinions on things I like.

    1. To be clear, this is actually a very reasonable fee for the services rendered, but the fact that these services are mandatory

      How fascinating. If the service wasn't mandatory, the price would be looked upon in a favorable light, but as it is, it's preventing content creators from sharing their creations with the world.

    2. Anyone can do it. And I don’t mean ‘anyone can do it’ in the after-school-special, I-love-you-just-the-way-you-are sense.

      I have mixed feelings about this portion. It is good to note that the sentiment "anyone can do it" is genuine, but I don't particularly appreciate the dig at that sort of media. The amount of cynicism involved is conflicting.

    1. I’m a teenager from England who writes a blog in her bedroom.

      As a teenager who is often mistaken as being from England, I find this amusing because I too blogged from my bedroom until recently.