You are the author, so use first person.

Is that a formal term? If so, what does it means?

Add periodisation: when did all of these happen? Between mid-1920s and late 1960s?

Non-jazz specialists don't know who these are, so at least add first name and artist name.

Add date.

Is that so (that it was so innovative for that year)? And where does that leave Berliner? Same year, similar approach. Are these really the firsts to use analysis to talk about jazz practices?

Where you at the presentation Friday in the Ensemblezaal by Jeremy Rose on minimalist jazz? He may have a publication that is relevant to cite?

Seminal is a term that receives some criticism these days (right or wrong) for its masculine and/or sexual context (coming from semen). Important, essential, fundamental, influential etc. may provide alternatives.

I don't see "Next" or "Previous" page below or elsewhere (e.g., on the Rationale page)?

Okay, just make that clear in the thesis (i.e., the other jury members) too.

So, already to minor things: - be aware that your front page needs to contain mandatory elements such as "Proefschrift ingediend etc.," the name of the supervisor, faculty, logos and so forth - while online format is allowed, be aware that (at least in the past) a jury member was entitled to ask for a printed version. I'd have to check if that still applies and we can always hope that that's not the case but it's just a heads up...

Test, 1, 2, 3... Piergiorgio, do you see this?