Picking up the changes in colors in different scene adds an extra layer of understanding to just how deep the message of love goes. Well noticed.

I find it interesting that you never mention the end of the video or the result of their final interaction with this cube that is chasing them---as that is technically not part of the point. The message is clear: the reader is meant to focus on the love and support that carries them through the frightening journey regardless of the result.

In all the images they (IU and V) are seen wearing wedding clothing (wedding dress and suit, respectively). Is it safe to assume that they are supposed to be (either about to get or already are) married? This might be something worth mentioning.

I find it interesting that you showed both IU trying to protect V and the other way around. This drives home your idea that love goes both ways and people can support one another.

Including pictures from the music video is a great idea that helps the reader to do less work in regards to envisioning the scenes that contribute to IU's message AS they are reading.

I love that the claim of what's video elements get the message across are stated quite clearly.

You indicate here that this was the primary form of interaction that IU's fanbase had with the song---out of curiosity, I wonder if the song was released on streaming platforms as well or if this is purposely held off. If this is information you can find out it might be worth including.

V is mentioned here as if the readers already knows them...if they happen to contain larger significance to K-pop then they should get a little more detail but of they are just a character for the sake of the video, then maybe a sentence about their role in the video.

The song is characterized here as a "comeback song", which indicates it came after a dip in her career or some sort of hiatus. Could this possibly be connected back to the negative time in her life that she was facing?

I find it very interesting that many of the songs are the playlist are Korean or are by Korean artists except this one. Was this intentional? Was there something about this song that made you break that mold? Or is that just coincidence?

Including the music video/audio of the songs so they can be listened to as they go through the playlist is really good so the full essence of the playlist is captured,

I feel like you should give a little more insight as to why this song ends the playlist rather than starting it off or being towards the middle given it contains the main message.

Is there a reason why you chose to group the songs in three? Why did you separate them (theme wise) the way you did? If there is a specific reason it might help the reader's understanding of your playlist by including that.

It's good that you made it extremely clear what your playlist is centered around.

This is the first time we get a sense of how long IU has been in the music industry. I feel like it could be introduced in a more gradual manner, because we only know the release of IU's song which is pretty recent. Maybe including it in one of the earlier essays will give readers a better scope of how long she may have been dealing with issues within the K-pop industry.

Is this the opening lyric of the verse? I am a little confused as to why you chose to link it...does this specific line hold some sort of special significance?

This intro does a fantastic job of mimicking the intro paragraph of that one article we read in class. The descriptive qualities are great.

This is a great way to connect the content of the song to real world people and outer context.

This is a very interesting nuance that you bring up---the argument that love and support will not cast away negativity but will help one get through it. This is an important distinction to make.

Sorry if this seems really picky---your work is already really good so I'm just pointing out small things at this point---but would you say "hate must have received" if we know she was receiving that kind of negativity? It might be just "hate she received" .

This sentence is a little confusing for me to understand. Is there any way to reword it? How is the recording lengthened at the beginning of the song?

This paragraph is very well put together, but I feel as if it could link a little better with he previous one which brings up the music video. Are there elements within the video that portray the experiences your describing in this paragraph? If so, maybe include those.

I love the consistency with the linking of sources. This helps connect your documents (even the bibliography) to one another.

Why is it difficult to attain such an understanding? It is the abstractness of the subject matter? I feel like this could be mentioned in this section.

I feel like it's relevancy could come earlier in the paragraph rather than later but that is just a preference.

I love the idea of linking all the sources/making them accessible when as that is an important part of your argument here.

This is a super strong example to use for the point of the author contradicting themselves and really helps to clarify how the author seemingly goes back on her whole point.

The paragraph with the idea that she directly contradicts herself with the flow of her two various arguments is well written and clear. It covers the negative aspect of the author's writing well.

BTS is a good example to use because of their popularity. This was strategic and well-chosen.

Great way to tie those major terms to the author's ,main argument!

I feel like this line could better explain how those selected terms/phrases contribute to the larger context of Korean music. Do you know why the author used those words?

While this is a super strong opener, I feel like you could better tie this specific part to other works by mentioning how the K-pop industry seemingly has toxic attributes that effects the mental health of it's stars. This could also be a lot to include in just the beginning, so if you have a reference like that in the book and can include it later that works to.

The link from social criticism of females and social media hate is a very good one. This was an excellent way to apply a broader social context to your song's meaning.

As sad as this is, it was a very good idea to include it where you did so as to give perspective as to what was affecting her negatively and how important it was for her to get through it.

This hints that IU's struggles were related to societal pressures/criticisms.. It would be nice if the reader could better understand this directly; if part of her problems came from societal critique in real life, I feel like that should be mentioned.

I feel like because links have been put in consistently through out the opening of this page, "music video" would be a good place to insert the link to the video if you can find it.

I think the choice to make all the lyrics links to ither pages is a very interesting and smart one that allows for an easier connection with this page and all the others.

Great job referencing other works within your Scalar project.

Do people have any idea what specifically was going on in her life at this time? Maybe that would be something worth including as this is a strong point made.

It's great that you included the elements that make the song successful. I am curious though, you mention the release date and how fast it gained popularity. Is there anything that may have been occurring during that time that may have made it's themes more relevant? If so, this would be a great place to include it. If not, then great intro!

I love the picture that you put to support the page. It is already aesthetically pleasing and I can tell it relates to your topic.

Your arguments seem to line up really well and so I can imagine this last page shouldn't be to much of a problem for you. Each argument is coherent within itself and I see how it adds to the larger idea.

I think this topic acts a great closing paragraph idea. It continues to engage the audience by asking them to look deeper into their own experiences which I feel is a great way to connect the writing to the audience and the current world that is around them (via question).

This sentence is a well constructed claim and think it is placed well in the context of the project.

I love the idea this is getting into and think this is a great way to get into it (the unheard voices/emotions of Hollywood).

Instead of referring to them as close, I would use the term "similar" in terms of the aspects you go on to describe. Saying they are close almost diminishes the impact of Stand Up; I like the comparison you are trying to make ut just make sure the distinction between them is super clear.

This addition feels a little unnecessary---if you want to make Disney the main example, that could be done or just leave the sentence as is.

While I understand the direction in which you were taking it, the claim itself is pretty bold and I don't feel it is as convincing here as it could be than if you put it closer to the beginning than used your earlier reasoning as hard evidence.

I think this was a great thing to include, as it helps for the reader to really understand the importance that sound has to play in invoking emotion by letting them interact with it.

I think this is a very interesting aspect you bring up that provides depth to your project about how the tunes that may seem basic or musically non-complex are made that way by the composers for a reason---they are supposed to be easy to remember and digestible by the audience. Great point you brought up

You mention this a lot, and I wonder if you can draw a distinction between this song and the first one that you said also had a message of hope. What's the difference between the two songs and how they deliver this message? Or is their order replaceable on the track list?

I think this was a beautiful transition, and acts as an example of your amazing story telling flow throughout this particular piece.

Specify earlier where the uncomfortably is stemming from.

The message of hope is well infused throughout this explanation, but I wonder whether it's worth mentioning anxiety because it seems kind of disconnected from everything else, especially if it's not present in the actual song.

I feel like all these phrases should be melded into one sentence. They feel incomplete by themselves.

I feel you could have linked this better to your earlier message. This paragraph ends on a rather bleak note; even though it is relevant to what you have been saying, try to make the connection more obvious between the runaway slave and the themes of hope and courage that you had outlined earlier.

You did a great job listing the specific things to look for in your song that aid your argument.

The imagery here is very well placed and helps make the atmosphere more vivid.

Is all this referring to the chorus? Try to make it more clear so that the audience knows what about the chorus makes it motivating. I think you have those parts already written down, but you just need to make sure it's clear that is what you are referring to.

I also think the inclusion of music jargon is helpful to your argument as well. Just make sure you don't go to deep to a point where a common reader with little to no music knowledge gets lost.

I love this start off because of how well you connected the ide of having just vocals to the way slaves spirituals were often times song with just vocals and you provided a great example.

Put this before "but one thing's for sure"

Word choice here could be better; you could say something like "it rose to prominence a year after it was published" or something along those lines but I don't the word upbringing fits here.

Nice ending sentence for this paragraph.

I don't think the wording for this is correct: I think you'd be better off with "Through her acting and singing...".

I'm confused as to why you put her name there. Was it referring back to her again? If that's the case I don't think you need to do that. Were you trying to cite something?

I love the switch from how earlier music was the live history book, to now saying music transcended the history books in this context. Very nice build up to this point.

I don't think this needs to be in parenthesis---the idea of slave spirituals being in code is at the core of understanding them and so I don't think you need to make it a side note; you could even make it a focus.

I like the way you made this point. But I am curious, if you are looking deeper at the meaning behind the slave spirituals, wouldn't you have to analyze it from their afflicted perspective? Third person writing may still accomplish this goal, I'm just wondering if it does so in the same manner as mainly looking at the slave perspective.

Definitely try to include an image of this diagram in the page as this will make it easier for the reader to understand and then you don't have to try as hard explaining it with words.

I think it is great that you emphasized which appeal the author was making each time you were explaining it. Makes clear what the author is trying to get across with their writing.

This is a very interesting point that you bring up in regards to perspective, and about the making sweeping generalizations---and the example you provide for it is great. I am interested to know if there is a way you can word this complexity in a way that sounds a little less contradictory, because you day slave owners are not innocent, but then speculate that some of them could have harbored feelings of genuine care towards there slaves. This could be the best way to word it, but it just seemed like you were contradicting yourself a little bit.

The ending for the paragraph is great, I was just wondering if there were any other words you could use to phrase it because you used some of the same phrases earlier in the paragraph.

I don't think the double quotes are supposed to go on the Moses.

Very well written transition within the paragraph in terms of bringing up the work of another author.

Great connection, but do you think you could give a little more as to what the BLM marches were?

Looking at the songs impact in a future sense (from the time it was made) is a really good idea and I think you transitioned it well.

Similar to the Beatles thing about the first example being super specific but the second one being a bit general, take a look at that. Also, just optically, I don't think it's a great idea to use classical and then slave songs as back to back examples, just because of how different the context behind them are. If you are going to mention them, do not be as descriptive with either (i.e the word "beautiful" feels out of place).

Again, loves the Beatles shoutout! But I also feel the sentence is a little unbalanced because you gave a very specific Beatles song then followed it up with a general "film score"; I suggest just saying "Beatles song" instead (penny lane is a great one by the way).

Amazing way to conclude the paragraph---sets you up well because then you go on to explain how it weaves us in.

Could you give a song example of this? I feel like that would help the reader better understand the distinction.

The wording here could be a little clearer---stick with either "focus" or "calm down", not both.

Love the Beatles reference! I think it would be a bit more helpful if you gave last names though (Lennon, McCartney) just to make it a little clearer as to who you are referring to.