I think she did a really good job with this paper and proving her argument. When I first read the introduction I was still a little confused as to what she was arguing but then she goes on to clearly clarify her argument and the structure of her paper in the partition. I think she integrated her sources really well but there were a few instances where I thought she could have introduced them more effectively. There were no big issues with her paper and I felt that she was able to write an interesting and persuasive piece about her topic.

The author's conclusion is very well written and she summarizes her issue and the argument she has been making. She offers a solution and gives reasons as to why we need to be inclusive of all languages.

Transition: She concludes an argument in the previous paragraph and goes on to speak about how people who are second and third generation immigrants also feel this way. Discrimination is not limited only to non-english speaking immigrants.

She uses this source to show how rather than create unity, having one official language will lead to conflict. Rather than celebrating diversity it is promoting the idea that in order to be American you must assimilate.

She uses a scientific study to prove how language discrimination is an issue. She uses this study to effectively prove her thesis and the issue surrounding America having an official language.

This paragraph is her partition where she explains the structure of her paper. The partition helps prepare the reader for what they are about to read. They get to see how she organized her thoughts and how she is going to prove her argument.

thesis

The author uses personal experience to portray how she has been through this herself making her more relatable and reliable when talking about this topic. Additionally she brings up the issue of how she felt as if she had fully assimilated to American culture and forgotten about her Chinese roots.

I really like the whole message of this article. I think it is a topic that isn't spoken about enough and needs to be because many people think they are failures because they haven't changed the world even if it is an unachievable goal.

I think this statement is so important because young adults are put under a lot of pressure to impress and be better than those around them. You don't have to affect the whole entire world in order to have a meaningful life.

I agree with this statement 100 precent because doing what makes you happy is more important than any social media following. Most of the time influencers use photo shop and tell fake stories in order to make their lives seem perfect even if they are miserable.

This is one of the reasons I believe social media is so harmful to ones mental health and self esteem. It really is a topic that is not spoken about enough.