This is helpful because sometimes you want to take out the parts you don't need. Your rough draft should be your base to work from. It's easier to take things our than to add them.

Vivid images are important because keeping your essay/presentation colorful can help show what you're trying to say an d your point of view. It helps the reader see what you see.

This is important because having your topic between narrow and big can help you focus on what you're trying to write. If you're not focused then the reader is not going to be interested in your essay.

This is saying that proofreading is nothing, it's not going to help if you put no effort into your thesis and organization. The image is very terrible, proofreading is not going to heal your essay. It's still fatal.

He tells his dad, "'Don't worry, Dad, tomorrow will be a better day.' This, I believe." When Josh realizes everyone's pain, he decides that tomorrow he will be a new person and respect people.

"I considered some of the awful things my grandparents and great-grandparents had seen in their lifetimes: two world wars, killer flu, segregation, a nuclear bomb." He imagines how much pain his grandparents and great-grandparents went through, and respects them more because of it.

"Early in my Rubik's career, I became so frustrated that I took the cute apart and rebuilt it. I believe that sometimes you have to look deeper and in unexpected places to find answers." Sometimes he was so clueless and he had nothing to do, and with that he found out that sometimes you have to discover new things to do and new ways of doing them. He would have never Rubik's cube or learned to read without being creative in his approach.

"I spent the four years learning how to learn...." He must have been frustrated because four years a long time. That is the entire time of a high school career.

"Solving the Rubik's Cube made me believe that sometimes you have to take a few steps back to move forward." This relates to what we have learned because it evoked sadness. It shows how hard he worked to get over his dyslexia.

I can relate to this phrase because I have been in this position. My own mother has been sick and I remember wanting her so badly to get better. This is definitely would be loaded language to me.

This phrase to me makes me feel like the birds would be all over the place and their squawking getting louder and louder, which presents an almost creepy tone. At this point, I'm not sure I would want to be there.

This is a great use of vivid imagery because I can immediately picture these birds lifting into the sky. I have seen this exact thing happen and it is truly beautiful.

He mentioned that he fell in love with the earth. It must be sad for him to see it so ruined and like a dump. I can infer that he feels loss.

Flexing his hands makes him seem strong and masculine. The author seems to be a little different from his dad, he seems calm where his dad is hammering his knee back in place.

I can infer that his father left him a legacy of appreciating the buckeye. The author inherited a trait from his father; a love of nature.

When he stares at the box, he goes to another world.

Here I can infer that he really trusted the buckeyes to heal him, even on his last day.

This guy is messed up. He must feel no pain!

Sanders is very detailed. I visualized a farmer with his overalls and they way his outfit was described.

I wonder why it was only in his fifties that he began to see his father. Why couldn't it have been when he was younger?

Honestly, I wish it didn't include this much detail, but I understand how this could affect the story's mood.

I can infer that other people were comfortable with the dad. This is probably why he missed him, because he was thinking about how everyone was comfortable with him. This legacy was passed down to his son.

I can imply that he misses his dad. He wants to have him back.

Kooser views his father's hands as an important symbol. They symbolize his strength, courage, and hard work.

I hope this day never comes. That actually sounds really scary. Technology in the future, I think, is going to be crazy.

This is definitely not my belief. I could see how he believes this though. I would love to sit down with him and ask more about this. For example, if we created God, who created us? He seems open-minded, so that is a positive thing.

This helps me connect my thought to world traveling because the more i travel the more I learn.

I think that the main point of this article is that every one should have their right in what to believe and what not to believe.

It also means that the more conflict between religion and government the more they cover their ignorance. They don't want to explore they just want to criticize.

I believe in freedom of religion, even if it is a strict religion. However, when you are in public, what you believe can't negatively affect others. Those men should have thought about this ahead of time and made plans with the airline. The way they went about this issue was not okay.

I disagree that this should be allowed. We have already passed laws against segregation in our past. We need to be moving forward and this does not unite people in this world. I do understand religions having different beliefs, but this crosses the line.

I agree that the woman has a right to be upset. However, I do not think the airline owes her an apology. The airline tried to do what it could to remedy the situation. I believe she should try and direct her anger into a good cause, something that could actually make a difference.

This relates to the american life because of the challenges Muslims faith go through in the religious routine. This relates to separation of churches because the churches sometimes are prosecuted such as they stated on The American Life podcast.

: “This article discusses religious discrimination on flights. It could relate to a debate about praying in a government building because although they are different places, the same idea of limiting prayer is present.”

She examined her catholic upbringing and explored the bible and ended up rejecting the catholic faith and becoming a atheist.

She through a lot of investigating the bible, her journey lead her in believing there is no god.

I agree that the constitution does not further any religion over another. I think that this is a good thing because their are so many religions all around the country.

I believe that this is a lot of people that be affected in an unfair act.

It is unfair for many reasons to ban people from their prayers. One of those reasons is that you have your life, people cant forcefully take away your religious rights.

I had no idea what the word "solipsistic" meant. I had to look it up and found out it meant the view or theory that the self is all that can be known to exist. Turns out, I don't believe in this theory.

I like this bold phrase, I think it's eye catching and makes it interesting. I want to know why he doesn't believe in God.

I think that he believes in god but he tells other people that he doesn't so more knowledge comes to him.

I wish he didn't just think this. I wish he actually did say this to his dad.

I can relate to this because my dad has an old photograph in his room of my grandfather in his uniform, while holding a gun, sitting under a rock. He was fighting Syrian Civil War.

I feel here that his voice should have changed here. I was looking for a little more emotion about what his dad was saying. Since this was such scary and serious talk, he should talk with more emphasis.