I made sure to put these in quotes because they were Isabella's examples.

I changed the word choice from "trudge" to "flock" because trudge gave a negative connotation that the volunteers did not want to go.

I changed word choice from "affirms" to "articulates" because affirm was used in the prior sentence, which added repetitiveness.

I re-organized and changed the wording of this sentence from "the diverse backgrounds of each child play a significant role in creating 4Boston's focus on the three pillars: social justice, community, and spirituality" to eliminate confusion.

I changed the word choice from "kids" to "community members" because not all placements are in school settings.

I further elaborated that the game, Werewolf, had a purpose of building community.

I switched the organization of the paper. The following three paragraphs about the reflection were originally after the introduction. However, putting the part about the reflection after describing the interview with Isabella produces a more logical and smoother flow that parallels the experience of a typical 4Boston member (reflection comes after service). This organization also fixed the problem of having a second introductory paragraph after talking about the reflection in the beginning ("Many people join volunteer and service clubs...") because now, that paragraph can be kept the way it is as the introductory paragraph.