You say very important twice but not why it is important. You could say that setting a goal will establish a specific result you plan to achieve.

I think this should be two sentences.

I do not think we can use the original visual due to copyright.

I think the example should be keep separate below each step, so readers can follow along easier.

I don't feel that this needs to be in quotation marks unless it is a quote from another source.

The textbox here seems a bit random.

"This upcoming trip will likely motivate you to make consistent efforts to learn the language than if you were not traveling."

Maybe a bit more context about the "Meet Abhay" section. It will probably be unclear to readers that this is a statement that Abhay made in response to the question.

Bold this sentence or make it stand out in some way.

Remember to embed the link

You should put the disclaimer in a textbox to separate it and make it stand out.

I think with Pressbooks, there is a way to include citations directly on the footer of the page that they were used.

We should embed links to the mentioned resources if they are available.

I love the formatting of this! I think we should implement similar textboxes for the other chapters' author perspectives.

In some of my courses, they have referred to the African American variety of English as AAE (African American English), since AAE is consider more up-to-date than AAVE. I believe I heard there was discourse with referring to it as AAVE since it includes describes the variety as "vernacular."

I cannot say for sure which is most appropriate, but it would be beneficial to verify with sources of which term to use.

I think if we do a section similar to the "Meet Abhay" and "Meet Halima" sections, it would provide some cohesiveness to the book, as well as, some visual variety in the chapter.

Meet Cameron: [your experience with the class about creative writing from Indigenous women]

I am confused by what you mean by "made that way." Include what specifically they are "made to be" rather than just saying "that way."

maybe italicize

maybe italicize?

In this translation, maybe say "(the verb to be in the Spanish past perfect tense)."

For the other translations, maybe "(red in Portuguese)."

Keeping a standard format will make it cohesive and easier understood.

I like the introduction about Faith!

I am not sure if we are still wanting to include a "Meet the Author" section at the beginning of the book. If we do, this section may be better a bit more condensed.

Additionally, we should include similar information on the other mentions of the team, specifically, in chapter 1 in the "Meet Halima" and "Meet Abhay" sections.

This translation has the language mentioned while the ones above do not. We should keep it consistent whether we include the language or just the English translation. Personally, I like the mention of what language the example comes from.

I think the intro should be its own paragraph.

Overall, I like the formatting in this section. The paragraphs and sections are clearly separated and labeled. I think it is visually appealing.

In H5P: "now" instead of "know"

Maybe format the prompt as one paragraph then the explanation as another.

"write out the information"?

I feel that it may be more effective to keep all the ideas in smaller, separate paragraphs. You could include that reading/writing and kinesthetic are generally thought of as the tactile styles. Additionally, you can put examples of material presentation as a textbox with bullet points.

I really like this H5P. But I do agree with Keli that it should be a little shorter.

I think the list can be be split into two parts.

One being the continuation of the Punjabi example with specific exercises like "Travelling to Pakistan or India where Punjabi is spoken..."

The second being how the reader can apply constructivist exercises to their own language learning journey like "Exploring shopping sit in your target language with a study buddy."

Saying "target language" instead of Punjabi (if continuing the example) could be confusing since we are switching between two different languages, one the reader may not be studying.

The quotations in this section can get pretty lengthy. We may want to cut down on how much is quoted and instead paraphrase and/or just provide the information as commentary.

We should try to find an addition to this page, so it feels more filled out.

a language you do not have a connection to.

Replace "on average" or move it to before learners. i.e. "As it turns out, on average, learners experience..." or "As it turns out, learners typically experience..."

Let's put the misconceptions in bold to make them stand out.

I liked the parrot video shown in class. It shows the inverse, how language can be used without communicating.

For clarity: ", or your friend asks if they can borrow your camera for the weekend." or "or your friend asks you, "Can I borrow your camera this weekend."

Further, if you would like to make them more comparable, you can phrase the mother's command as a question like the friend's request.<br /> "your mother says, "Can you clean your room before you go out?"

They are said the same way but one is a command and the other is a request.

The section about language arbitrariness should be clarified.

I feel the sentence on the second slide "there is no one-to-one correspondence between words and meanings" is a bit confusing.

Additionally, separating the example of the words for "home" may help to compare them more clearly. Maybe they could be put in a small table.

I am unsure what you mean by "VIP."