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  1. Apr 2021
    1. Being a part of the Christian community, and from the experience and time I have spent in the church, I believe that it is the Christian community’s job to uplift and support gospel artists as they start and continue their journey in the gospel genre of music.

      I chose to add the fact that I am also a part of the Christian community to connect to my audience in a deeper way through the diction that i used at the beginning. The Christian community might listen and reflect more on this topic if confronted by a fellow Christian, rather than someone from a different community whom they do not have a lot in common with.

    2. “ministration of the good news in songs,” as quoted in the “Then Sings My Soul” article from the USC Gospel Music History archive

      by adding this definition from a credible source from the USC archive, perhaps it would allow my audience to understand that I really did look into this idea and made my own connections through other writer's texts and fundamental gospel music ideas.

    3. (John 15:12)? And God does not discriminate. Are we not called to pray for our “enemies” or those who perhaps we deem as too dissimilar to us (Luke 6:27-28)?

      Again, using scripture in my essay allows for fellow Christians to look up these verses and read the exact text for themselves. And will hopefully challenge the reader to rethink their hesitations toward this artist.

    4. I must admit, even I was taken aback when I discovered West’s intention of releasing a gospel album.

      This serves as a way for me to connect with my audience by acknowledging that even I had an initial hesitation; however, I had to reflect and allow myself to see the bigger picture and intention to then change my point of view. I chose to add this so that maybe they could see that it is okay to change your point of view and advocacy when presented with a new idea.

    5. might include: Lecrae, Andy Mineo, Tedashii, Trip lee, and Kanye West.

      This list of Christian hip-hop gospel artists should be familiar to the younger group of Christians; but serves as an example for the older Christian audience and can be used as a starting point for them to study up on great hip-hop gospel artists of today.

    6. Ephesians 5:19, Psalm 95:2, and Psalm 100:2 simply state to “worship the Lord with song,” and to “make music in our hearts for the Lord.”

      By adding this scripture as a point of reference for my audience, they can then go and look it up and really take in the words written. This is a direct way I can connect to my audience because it is understood that we all read and study the same bible. Therefore, it acts as a call to action, or a "see for yourself."

    1. In games, like Night in the Woods,

      your referencing of games insinuate that your audience should be/ is familiar with them, which opens the door and allows for you to talk about this topic more in depth without having to give extensive background

    2. Still, for games that have the ambition to combine game mechanics and storytelling, the environment is a super duper importante tool.

      really nice conclusion, it ends lighthearted and fun. the overall tone of the essay feels very conversational and informal for the most part, yet touches on so many complex and interesting points and ideas. Audience was clear and flow was beautiful. this was so fun to read, sarah!

    3. In contrast with the bustle of the park trails, this area encourages a quiet moment of reflection, and players might feel a sense of engaged curiosity and immersion. So a game designer might ask themself what past they want to imply with their game’s environment, and what feelings they want to evoke with that past.

      Great transition: "in contrast". Also great job bringing it full circle, coming back to what the game designer might ask themselves based off of the stylistic aesthetics the campus gives off

    4. Both perspectives are emotional reactions to the ideas the Village’s architectural style represents.

      i like this sentence because it recognizes two different perspectives and effectively uses them as examples of emotional reactions to the architectural style of the village

    5. As a student in USC’s Games program, I’ve observed many game designers eagerly jump into character design, fleshing out their personalities and their backstories, but often they overlook the design of the environment - possibly because it is easier to become attached to human characters than to a building.

      Audience is so clear! Also really love how you have already acknowledged that you are a part of this community, it honestly makes the article/ essay so much more interesting to read because it feels more personal. also nice they say/ i say

    6. The washed out brick of newer buildings, intentionally treated to appear older, also communicate USC’s desire to appear as an old and wisened institution.

      interesting take on SC's aesthetics. i really appreciate your own interpretations mixed in with effective evidence and examples, works really well.

    7. ollege campuses built as both educationally and community-driven environments, like the University of Southern California, provide some interesting examples that we can use to demonstrate the types of things that a game designer might want to look out for.

      wow such a great concluding sentence. really sets up essay nicely, good transition.

    1. The journals acted as a precursor to Valdimir Lenin, future leader of the Soviet Union, who utilized their techniques and gained power by appealing to the masses, specifically the women, instead of the bourgeoisie. 

      maybe play around with a more effective conclusion. Right now it seems as though you are just stating information rather than arguing a specific point. maybe try to incorporate they say/ i say at the end as well? or some sort of call to action or something!

    2. the journals also provided elaborate illustrations by new artists on the scene that would not only supplement the articles but also provide a visual aid for the changing aesthetics of culture

      ooo interesting!! i would love to see some of these illustrations after this paragraph! maybe you could incorporate some visuals either before or after this paragraph and then possibly break down a couple of them and describe their aesthetic purpose

    3. His actions would lead to an influx of revolutionary papers and newspapers being published throughout the Russian empire. 

      really nice transition. setting up the next point nicely!

    4. The journals were a bi-product of the humiliation Russia faced when they lost in the Russo-Japanese War. The Russian people expressed their anger and their wounded pride by revolting and demanding for more representation in the government.

      this paragraph is really interesting! I like how you incorporate many personal opinions on this topic while referencing this history

    5. Now let’s go back to the beginning and see where it all started. 

      it is a little unclear who your audience is, however, this makes it seem as though it is a more casual one? Maybe play around with tone! Starts off very formal but this sentence hints to a more informal tone

    6. The Russian satirical journals were a set of revolutionary newspapers published in the period of 1905 to 1907. They were a representation of the political, social, and cultural upheaval that would take place at this time during a period of great turmoil.

      good background of russian satirical journal, sets up article nicely

    1. PS : I want to create a better flow of the essay,  I would appreciate it if you could leave suggestions 

      It is very interesting! Right now it seems like you are breaking down different images and explaining how they were used as propaganda. But it might help the flow to have more of a central idea that you can then bring each image/idea back to to then compare and contrast the different uses.

    2. The depiction of women as fighters signals to the country that this fight is of such significance that every able bodied person must take up arms. It acts as a call for unity, that the peoples of Mozambique and Vietnam can no longer remain divided, that they must come together as a nation and fight.

      can you elaborate on why these women were used as propaganda? Is it because they were considered weak at the time? Or were they used as symbols of beauty to gain male attention?

    3. I’ve included American propaganda from the second world war for some interesting parallels and hopefully relatable subject matter.

      I really like this choice to use American propaganda as a parallel for this topic, given your audience (from what I have gathered) is your usc classmates?

    4. These images might seem like relics of a bygone era but it’s important to know what propaganda meant to them and what it said.

      Is your audience fellow students? That is what it seems like based on the tone of the article. If it is something different, you might want to make that more clear.

    5. The Merriam Webster dictionary defines propaganda as: ideas, facts, or allegations spread deliberately to further one's cause or to damage an opposing cause.

      Including this direct definition from the dictionary was such a good choice. While people already have their own perceptions of what propaganda is, it's vital for you to bring the reader back to the literal definition to setup the rest of your paper/ article for your argument.

    1. Because we are now part of the new covenant and not the old, there are natural questions that arise regarding how exactly the Christian should relate to specific old covenant instruction. Nevertheless,

      writer recognizes that there will be some questions regarding certain issues

    2. Failing to declare ‘the whole counsel of God’ can put us in danger before the Lord.

      author uses a potential reader's ideology against them and then gives reasons for why they are right

    3. It’s important to note here that, while the age of the old covenant has come to an end (Rom. 6:14–15; 1 Cor. 9:20–21; Gal. 5:18; cf. Luke 16:16), the OT itself maintains lasting relevance for us in the way it displays the character of God (e.g., Rom. 7:12),

      the author gives background and understanding with the use of extra evidence from scipture

    4. Within the old covenant, love was what the Lord called Israel to do (Deut. 6:5; 10:19); all the other commandments simply clarified how to do it. This was part of Jesus’s point when he stressed that all the OT hangs on the call to love God and neighbor:

      known vs new knowledge. Setting up reader for new knowledge on a known topic

    5. Reading the OT, therefore, is one of God’s given ways for us to better grasp and delight in the gospel (see also Heb. 4:2).

      conclusion with evidence. after already backing up every claim with mulitple scriptures for reference

    6. But the LORD was gracious to them and had compassion on them, and he turned toward them, because of his covenant with Abraham, Isaac, and Jacob, and would not destroy them, nor has he cast them from his presence until now. (2 Kings 13:23) For if you return to the LORD, your brothers and your children will find compassion with their captors and return to this land. For the LORD your God is gracious and merciful and will not turn away his face from you, if you return to him. (2 Chron. 30:9) Many years you bore with them and warned them by your Spirit through your prophets. Yet they would not give ear. Therefore you gave them into the hand of the peoples of the lands. Nevertheless, in your great mercies you did not make an end of them or forsake them, for you are a gracious and merciful God. (Neh. 9:30–31)

      evidence, claim backed up by multiple verses

    7. Now, you may ask, “But isn’t the OT’s God one of wrath and burden, whereas the God of the NT is about grace and freedom?” Let’s consider some texts, first from the OT and then from the New.

      they say/i say

    8. In the NT we find literally hundreds of OT quotations, allusions, and echoes, none of which we’ll fully grasp apart from saturating ourselves in Jesus’s Bible.

      good conclusion, brings it full circle to why its important to understand and take in the old testament

    9. Where else can we go other than the OT to rightly understand sacred space and the temple?

      asks questions for the reader to reflect on and further educate themselves on when going back through the old testament and new testament

    10. Accordingly, the OT narrative builds anticipation for a better king, a blessed people, and a broader land. The OT creates the problem and includes promises that the NT answers and fulfills.

      the writers main point, or thesis statement for this particular section of the article

    11. The OT was the only Bible of Jesus and the earliest church (e.g., Matt. 5:17; Luke 24:44; Acts 24:14; 2 Tim. 3:15), and it’s a major part of our Scriptures.

      Writer is clearly aiming this article to a certain audience, providing scripture for reference. By referencing scripture, Christians can then go look up these verses to further investigate his point.

    12. If Christians are part of the new covenant, why should we seek to understand and apply the Old Testament (OT)?

      hook, provides a common question that many Christian readers might have.