I added this sentence to circle back to my introduction about being alone. The project of the essay was to show how I wrestled with the idea of being alone and how I learned to accept feeling alone. I wanted the conclusion to show my acceptance of being alone. I wanted to emphasize this acceptance by showing that I still get uncomfortable when I am alone, however, it doesn't prevent me from spending time alone. I wanted to show the reader that even thought my mind isn't changed completely, I have new outlook on being alone with my thoughts.

this might be my favorite passage in the entire essay. After following the change in my thought process about being alone, I wanted to explain to the reader in terms of something tangible. I did this by adding the passage about the armrests on the benches being worn down over time. I compared the wearing down of the armrests to my anxiety of feeling alone being worn down. By comparing something tangible to something that is more abstract, I was able to make my idea more digestible for the reader to understand.

In my first draft, I didn't contrast my acceptance of feeling alone. Earlier in the draft, I talked about how I never liked being alone. I explained the story of getting lost at a football game to express why I don't like the feeling of being alone. I added this sentence to contrast that feeling with a new found acceptance of being alone. I wanted to show the reader the change in my thought process after spending time alone with in the garden.

I originally had a sentence "the leaves provide more shade for the lacking sunlight..." I realized that it didn't add anything to the main idea of the paragraph about me feeling alone. I revised the sentence to personify the sun wanting to be alone. I did this to further push the point of me feeling alone. I had the sun feel the same emotions to better explain to the reader how I was feeling.

Originally, this sentence came at the very end of my second paragraph. After looking over it I found that it added nothing to the paragraph. There was no specific reason for me adding that sentence. I decided to move the sentence to the beginning of the paragraph to add more detail about how I felt alone in the garden. I wanted to emphasize to the reader that my only companion was a passing bus every 15 minutes. By adding this sentence I can better portray how alone I felt in the garden.

When I first read over my draft, I realized that my paragraphing was horrendous. None of my paragraphs aligned with one central project. I added this sentence to my introduction to define my project for the entire essay. by explaining my project I was able to then create paragraphs with the main idea that easily follow the project of the essay. By stating my project, I am able to refer back to the introduction.

I added this final sentence to close the essay by leaving the reader with something to think about. I wanted to leave the reader thinking about their place in the world and how their place fits in the grand scheme of life around them. I felt that this sentence would be able to bring the reader to that conclusion at the end of the essay. I felt that I needed some kind of "so what" idea at the end of the essay. I wanted the reader to understand why I wrote this essay in the first place.

This sentence came directly from another one-pager that I wrote earlier in the semester. Both essays were on the same topic about the "stacks" exploration assignment. I really like this sentence as it imitates Dr. Seuss. I added this sentence because it is fun and playful. It also adds specific details about what the books looked like on the shelves of the stacks. These sentences helped me create a clear picture in the of what the stacks looked like in the mind of the reader.

Originally, I had a sentence that explained how I was going to find an interesting research question. I added in this sentence show my previous approach to research. I wanted to emphasize how I used to do research and how that changed from this assignment. I added this sentence to create a better transition later in the essay to show the connection between research and my place in the world.