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  1. Mar 2023
    1. “It’s tough to, you know, stay above a 3.0 (GPA),” Faulds said. “There’s very significant challenges. You’re basically working two full-time jobs. Professors on campus do a really good job of working with our student athletes to keep them successful, especially in the springtime.”

      good

    2. “Witnessing our players’ annual academic success is one of the most gratifying aspects of collegiate coaching,” women’s soccer coach Nick Cowell said. “I congratulate them on their dedication, time management and focus, and balancing their college lives where there are many potential distractions.”

      good quote

    3. “I try not to let it consume me because I know that there’s more to life than just getting good grades and things like that,” senior softball player and communication major Maddy Larson said. “I don’t even know how we do it to be honest. As long as I know that I gave it my best effort and really applied myself, I’m going to be happy with the outcome no matter what it is.”

      good

    4. Next fall semester he is going to be part of the returning NCAA St. Edward’s soccer team.

      consider the extra context of the cancelled program, years absent, history of success, etc.

    5. Lone Star Conference recognizes NCAA student-athletes with high GPAs

      good quotes throughout, and context of priority of education for teams; chart, use one that shows the number for each sport, not percentage of total

    6. The Chiefs won the championship with a field goal in the remaining seconds of the game for a 38 to 35 score.

      The Chiefs won the championship 38-35 with a field goal in the remaining seconds of the game.

    7. St. Edward’s men’s basketball team fell to fourth in the standings for the Lone Star Conference with a 14-7 record.  The team has one more regular-season game before playing the LSC Tournament.

      excellent, context for readers

    8. The St. Edward’s women’s basketball team is now placed eighth in the Lone Star Conference. They need to win the next and final regular-season game against St. Mary’s in order to clinch a position in the LSC Tournament.

      excellent, context for readers

    9. “We just had a great offensive stride going on in the first quarter, and I think that just really boosted our confidence for the rest of the game,” junior Ronnie Cantu said.

      great quote

    10. With a 13-point lead, the Hilltoppers came out with a valuable 74-61 victory from the Battle of the Saints against the St. Mary’s Rattlers on Tuesday, Feb. 21.

      slight revision here, would say lead if during game, otherwise it's a 13-point victory

    11. “We competed, but at this time of the year, it’s not about competing. We need to win,” Head Coach Andre Cook said.

      yes, good to get quote, also let Jesse know when y'all will be thee and you will get access to athletes after the games, for quotes

    12. Graduate student Uche Dibiamaka goes face to face against the Rattlers' highest scorer of the night, Caleb Jordan.

      fantastic to have the photo gallery here

    13. Despite its amazing in-car experience, the lack of transparency in pricing and the wait time for a ride makes the experience less than ideal.

      good

    14. Hall of Fame: An insider to the 95th Academy Awards Nominations, predictions regarding potential winners

      fantastic, great to have this and the best picture article leading up to the Academy Awards; what about a challenge, predict more correct winners than Shane and win a HV t-shirt

    15. In  2020 alone, a total of $30 billion was lost from revenue and live event cancellations

      ? rework this sentence, $30 billion in lost revenue from live event cancellations

    16. Sundays are for drag: An inside look at one of the many weekend drag shows showcased in Austin

      good narrative first-person approach to the review

    17. Ranking best picture nominees from the 95th Oscars

      wonderful idea and well-written snapshots of the films; could probably do without the out of 5 ranking and just rank from watch it to pretend you watched it :)

    18. Students can find more information about Blue Rhythmic Dance on Instagram @bluerhythmicdance and CollegiateLink.

      video is embedded twice on the website; also looks like only two students, perhaps note this in the article and that they are looking for other students interested in joining the group

    19. Polachek opens up her album with “Welcome To My Island,” a mix of classic pop sounds paired with operatic vocals. This is the ultimate track one and a great way to start the album, as it perfectly braces your mind and your ears for what is to come. The bratty lyrics paint a picture of a woman who knows what she wants and how to get it with the chorus repeating “Welcome to my island / Hope you like me / You ain’t leaving.”

      good detail here on the song

    20. Caroline Polachek shar

      use album cover for reviews, falls under criticism fair use, just make sure to attribute to record label, courtesy of X records

    21. “Yeah, I’ve been to this area before, but I never knew it existed,” Rogelio said to me as I drove through the bumpy and rugged road. I smiled in excitement, the people I bring here always say the same thing. You know that feeling when you have a favorite place or food item you absolutely love, and whenever you show another person, you get antsy to see their reaction to it? Well, that is quite possibly my favorite feeling when I bring people to Seoulju.

      great, L&A stories often opportunity to try something new with the lead; and the reader does need to know who Rogelio is at some point

    22. I would like to mention the one con about Seoulju is their wait times. We planned to arrive as soon as they opened so we could be one of the first names on the Yelp iPad you sign in with. Unfortunately, our 7:38 p.m. arrival had us waiting for 1 hour and 10 minutes.

      good tip

    23. dragging exposition, a confusing plot line — which I was only able to follow because I went in knowing what would happen — was slowly introduced. Seemingly unnecessary shots kept us on edge, sure, but it also left room for disappointment, as it never truly followed through with anything it introduced.

      good

    24. The film is set in the mid-90s, so the sound of vintage cartoons often flows throughout the movie as the children continue to find refuge in front of an old-fashioned TV in a space they’ve deemed “safe.” On top of that, a sort of witty take on the sound design comes from the production’s use of Foley, a post-production feature that involves added sound effects. In “Skinamarink,” Foley is clearly used to emphasize the small footsteps made in the carpeted house from the children and each flick on and off of the light switches. It’s one small element that enhances the viewing experience, though not enough to make it revolutionary.

      good details here of what works

    25. it didn’t make up for the fact that “Skinamarink” fell short of everything it has been praised for.

      rating system; perhaps doesn't need to be out of 5, could be watch it, skip it, or watch it while you scroll through your social media feed, OR y'all come up with a rating system that makes sense

    26. it is the fault of “Godspell” having little plot as a musical

      y'all this is such a fund and well-written review, y'all get into the details of what works and what doesn't; would like just a little here on when Godspell was written, and by who, and how it was initially received, perhaps even updating with a local feel doesn't make up for a musical that just doesn't resonate with people anymore

    27. “People keep asking me why — because we’ve had ice storms before — this one seems to be so much worse than really anything Austin’s ever seen,” Johnson said. “I can’t say for certain, but I feel pretty confident in saying we’ve had so many back-to-back-to-back disturbances between freezes and droughts that you get stress fractures we maybe don’t necessarily see or detect. Those failures show in a situation like this.”

      fantastic insight from our resident expert

    28. The recent ice storm that affected Austin in late January and early February was one of the worst storms in the area in the last 15 years.

      2021, opportunity here to connect to the 2021 storm, what changed in preparation, what didn't and where have we failed to be ready for these winter storms?

    29. “They’re expanding [I-35] towards St. Ed’s,” student volunteer Spencer Lynden said. “We would be able to hear 20 lanes of traffic from our campus.”

      good, impact on campus community

    30. Students introduces American Marketing Association, host first meeting

      good job, good example here of making a story out of a difficult assignment; and, I know the AMA invited y'all to come to their meeting, so this build community and engagement, it lets student groups know HV cares about what they're doing and what's to cover their student group

    31. some of us aren’t going to get it.”

      perhaps a way for students and family to voice their thoughts, encourage/moderate comments on this story? there is only one now

    32. “It’s an accomplishment for the graduate, and their families should be able to celebrate with them,”

      this story is calling out for pull quotes

    33. disorders.

      for the chart, again great to see these used when you have the opportunity, make sure reader can click to see larger; make sure you can read the labels; if it's 100% don't use pie chart, simply text, All respondents said YES without any accommodations...

    34. According to Shah, because St. Edward’s is a Catholic campus, the PHE could not pass out condoms directly to the students because of Catholic restrictions on contraceptives, but RecWell was still able to educate students on their use.

      this is a great paragraph, anticipates the readers questions

    35. PHE Paula Sweeny said. “It’s the National College Health Assessment,

      whoa, can HV get access to this data? Perhaps offer to analyze and collaborate with PHEs?

    36. Van Dyne spoke about how sitting in the sun for approximately three hours would exacerbate her seizure disorder and put her health at risk, and that guests, like Van Dyne’s grandmother, would be unable to attend because of the lack of accessibility to the soccer field

      excellent info about student concerns

    37. A tradition of the university is to avoid walking on the seal. According to superstitious students, stepping on the seal means not being able to graduate. One senior, Bri Boughter, danced to the beat of the drums on the seal to challenge the university’s tradition at the protest.

      could potentially move this down later into the story as it's finer detail

    38. The wind and cold temperatures made it difficult for the demonstrators to keep standing and drumming at the seal, leading the protest to lose steam approximately an hour after its commencement.

      how many approximately were there? Use this earlier in the story since the story is focused on the protest event

    39. A week ago, St. Edward’s University students protested this semester’s graduation ceremony by gathering at the university’s seal for approximately an hour. Discontent first spread among the senior class when university administration sent notice that their graduation

      this lead works, AND you can push it a little here; I do like that you are using a week ago instead of the lead with the specific date again.

      Discontent spilled onto the University seal last week. < headline stealing lead in some respects here; y'all can do better than my quick thoughts.

    40. Upperclassmen protest graduation plans over the seal, spark more conversations

      I see the headline changed slightly from print to online, this works better, added "discourse" gets redundant.

      Side note it's okay to change headline from print to online, with online you're thinking about SEO, what are people likely to use in terms of search queries

  2. Apr 2021
    1. From Greene’s perspective, that’s the big win—not just to fix kids’ behavior problems, but to set them up for success on their own. Too many educators, he believes, fixate on a child’s problems outside of school walls—a turbulent home, a violent neighborhood—rather than focus on the difference the school can make.

      insight

    2. His mom, Rachel Wakefield, told me later that CPS had trained Will to be able to talk about frustrating situations and advocate for himself.

      insight

    3. Maine’s second juvenile detention facility, Mountain View, also adopted Greene’s method, with similar results. Incidents that resulted in injury, confinement, or restraint dropped nearly two-thirds between April 2004 and April 2008.

      evidence

    4. But remarkably, the relationships changed. Kids began to see the staff as their allies, and the staff no longer felt like their adversaries. The violent outbursts waned. There were fewer disciplinary write-ups and fewer injuries to kids or staff. And once they got out, the kids were far better at not getting locked up again: Long Creek’s one-year recidivism rate plummeted from 75 percent in 1999 to 33 percent in 2012. “The senior staff that resisted us the most,” Bouffard told me, “would come back to me and say, ‘I wish we had done this sooner. I don’t have the bruises, my muscles aren’t strained from wrestling, and I really feel I accomplished something.'”

      evidence

    5. It wasn’t hard to see why: Instead of restraining and isolating a kid who, say, flipped over a desk, staffers were now expected to talk with him about his frustrations. The staff began to ignore curses dropped in a classroom and would speak to the kid later, in private, so as not to challenge him in front of his peers.

      response

    6. A subsequent five-year clinical trial at Virginia Tech involving 134 children aged 7 to 14 validated the method as an effective way to treat kids with oppositional defiant disorder.

      evidence

    7. Children can actually reshape their brains when they learn and practice skills. What’s more, Dweck and other researchers demonstrated that when students are told this is so, both their motivation and achievement levels leap forward. “It was all sitting there waiting to be woven together,” Greene says. He began coaching parents to focus on building up their children’s problem-solving skills. It seemed to work.

      insight

    8. Will’s breakthrough session happened in first grade, after several failed attempts, when D’Aran, then a guidance counselor, and his teacher sat down with him. He’d been refusing to participate in writing lessons with his classmates. Over 45 minutes, they coaxed Will through the initial moans and “I don’t knows” and finally landed on a solution: Will said if he could use lined paper that also had a space to draw a picture, it would be easier to get started writing. Before long, he was tackling writing assignments without a problem.

      evidence

    9. This all requires a dramatic change in mindset and workflow. Central School diverted building improvement funds to divide one classroom into two spaces. One side was called the “Learning Center”—a quiet spot for kids to take a break, maybe have a snack, and problem solve before going back into the classroom. The other area became a resource room. The school also committed to 20 weeks of teacher training, with an hour of coaching each week from Greene’s trainer via Skype.

      this can be consider limitations and insight

    10. CPS method hinges on training school (or prison or psych clinic) staff to nurture strong relationships

      possible limitation as you will need the proper training and staff

    11. During the 2009-10 school year, kids were referred to the principal’s office for discipline 146 times, and two were suspended. Two years later, the number of referrals was down to 45, with zero suspensions, all thanks to focusing more on “meeting the child’s needs and solving problems instead of controlling behavior,” principal Nina D’Aran told me. “That’s a big shift.”

      evidence the response (solution) is working

    12. Out on the playground, she approached the boy reassuringly, like a trained hostage negotiator. “Do whatever you need with the belt,” she told him gently. “Just keep it away from people.” Slowly, Will began to calm down. They walked over to some woods near the school, and she let him throw rocks into a stream, scream, and yell until, at last, he burst into tears in her arms. Then they talked and came up with a plan. The next time he felt frustrated or overwhelmed, Will would tell another staffer that he needed his helper. If Robinson were off campus, they would get her on the phone for him.

      details here on how the solution works

    13. is one of a few hundred schools around the country giving Greene’s approach a test run—in this case with help from a $10,000 state anti-delinquency grant.

      this could be views as a limitation as school that do not have the $10K may find implementing the solutions difficult

    14. Under Greene’s philosophy, you’d no more punish a child for yelling out in class or jumping out of his seat repeatedly than you would if he bombed a spelling test. You’d talk with the kid to figure out the reasons for the outburst (was he worried he would forget what he wanted to say?), then brainstorm alternative strategies for the next time he felt that way. The goal is to get to the root of the problem, not to discipline a kid for the way his brain is wired.

      response > more details here on the solution, which is the program and approach developed by Greene

    15. His model was honed in children’s psychiatric clinics and battle-tested in state juvenile facilities, and in 2006 it formally made its way into a smattering of public and private schools.

      response

    16. The results thus far have been dramatic, with schools reporting drops as great as 80 percent in disciplinary referrals, suspensions, and incidents of peer aggression.

      evidence

    1. When PBIS works, it doesn't just improve the school environment; with positive behavior reinforcement, students typically feel better about themselves.

      evidence and insight

    2. the school's PBIS system helps build trust among students and adults at school, too.

      insight! > gives the audience insight into how the response works beyond what is immediately apparent

    3. But despite PBIS' success at schools, scary events still sometimes occur. Sgt. Damon J. McDaniel of the Gulfport Police Department told the Jackson Free Press he couldn't remember the last time a student was violent at PBIS School North Gulfport 7th & 8th Grade School in the Harrison County School District—but that didn't stop a student from bringing a 22-caliber weapon, a mask, 100 rounds of ammunition and two magazines to school with him last month.

      limitation another of the 4 qualities of SoJo journalism; in this case, the program can't stop individual students from bringing handguns to school

    4. Dr. Margrit Wallace, executive director of student academics and behavioral support at Jackson Public Schools, says PBIS not only improves the social-emotional mindset of students, but also makes schools safer and more structured for everyone.

      evidence of the response

    5. Instead, the district-wide PBIS, or positive behavior and instructional support model, has curbed behavioral issues at many JPS schools, and has even turned many of its elementary schools into model sites of positive behavior reinforcement. It can also keep young people from getting into worse trouble—like juvenile detention.

      here it is! the solution, SoJo news stories must feature a response to the problem; here the article provides some background on the solution

      this section also includes evidence (which can be qualitative or quantitative), another one of the 4 features of SoJo journalism

  3. Oct 2020
    1. According to the program’s Spring 2020 report, in the approximately one-month trial run, SafeWalk SEU volunteers gave 74 rides and transported 98 riders. Their average response time was 2.89 minutes and the riders gave an average safety rating of 4.7 out of 5.

      nice context through numbers

    2. the student-led program SafeWalk SEU has resumed escorted walks and golf cart rides to students, faculty and staff members around campus

      Could revised to be more straight forward lead:

      SafeWalk SEU resumed escorted walks and golf cart rides on Date.

      Then you fill in the details (it's student-led and serves these groups, etc.)

    3. This is about the support of someone who threatens the lives of those around me, the ones he claims to care about

      good, you bring it back to your thesis

    4. So while I think it’s important to love thy neighbor, I can’t be your friend. And no, I won’t come to your barbeque. Sure, I’ll wave when we both grab our newspapers, but I’ll make sure to make a donation under your name to the Biden/Harris campaign when I order my sign to counter yours in our adjoining yards. I know this election has been divisive (again), and I won’t antagonize you, but I don’t agree with you and I never will. 

      lovely end to your article

    5. But there is too much at stake with this election (again) for us to remain friends with people who are voting to actively remove protections for women, the LGBTQ+ community, and minorities.

      Yes! One way to improve this opinion piece is to support your thesis by describing how these protections are being actively removed. Not sure if there is space, you could do it in a sentence for each. It's good to link here to sources and remember you are working to support your argument and thesis in an opinion piece.

    6. However, I can no longer entertain the opinions of those who continue to threaten the livelihood of those I love. 

      This is well done, you clearly state your thesis (which you need to do for an opinion piece)

    7. During the 2016 election, I tried to remain close to my friends and family that planned to vote for Trump, hoping that in the end, our differing opinions would not affect our relationships.

      a common experience

    8. “I believe that if we can make relationships, listen and be willing to change, we can really do something special for the next generation.”

      nice quote to end on; overall well done on tying this interview together the transitions are smooth

    9. Former Longhorn, NFL star Will Matthews on Black Lives Matter, sports’ role in invoking change

      Another local focus story, well done; also timely issue

    10. Cornelius Carter is hopeful for the “work in progress” when it comes to the American Dream and the experience of the African-American.

      I see what you did there; good lead that ties into the focus of the story (and the exhibit)

    11. “I wanted to make a painting that was poetic and controversial at the same time,” Carter says in a video featured in the exhibit. “[Lady Liberty] wants to feed us equally from the beginning. She also gives us freedom, including the responsibility to learn, educate ourselves and make our way in the world.”

      Missed opportunity not to get an interview with Carter for this story

    12. Local Austin exhibit explores balance between American dream, African-American experience

      Fantastic that you all are finding local art to write about!

    13. Travis County breaks voter registration record, sees surge of early voters

      This story could be combined with the SEU students advice on early voting article.

      This article contains secondary sources and voting data and the other contains interviews, so would be nice to combine the two approaches.

    14. vote totals

      Good examples of hyperlinking in text; overall you all are doing a good job of this.

      *Tip: link to your HV article when appropriate

    15. When it comes to St. Edward’s, professors have different outlooks when it comes to hate speech in their classes.

      Here the editorial goes in a different direction. The points about speech in the classroom are good ones. Could potentially be two different editorials. One about FB and speech and one about the classroom and speech.

    16. While free speech is one of our most important and basic human rights, it should not extend to promoting false information regarding significant historical events.

      Good thesis here for the editorial.

    1. What’s the backstory on the band? Like many millennial match ups, we found each other on a Facebook musicians forum for the Austin area. It was a long process and took a lot of patience to find our guys, but once the five of us were in the room together, there was no denying that there was something special there. Not only did we click musically, but our personalities really gelled and we all shared a common vision for where we wanted to take the band.

      The format is a little confusing, who is answering the questions? One band member? Different band members?

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    1. Funded by a generous donation from Bill and Pat Munday, the library was renovated and reopened as the Munday Library.

      2020 all the physical books removed :(

    2. Father Edward Sorin, CSC, founded St. Edward’s Academy in Austin on land donated by Mrs. Mary Doyle. St. Edward's Academy in honor of his patron saint, Edward the Confessor and King.

      just a thought here: UT Austin has recently begun to acknowledge the land the university sits on was Native American land (https://www.washingtonpost.com/outlook/2019/11/08/dark-history-land-grant-universities/).

      How did Mary Doyle obtain this land? This is probably a potential news story (investigative piece) and the university should acknowledge the historical role in the removal of indigenous peoples.

      More here on StEds land in the first paragraph: http://archives.nd.edu/aidan/aidan061.htm

      Wikipedia entry on the San Diego del Valle grant: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Santiago_Del_Valle