The missing element The missing element is simple: tension. The tension can be subtle, as it would be if the next line of the story was: …and behind the garden was a freshly dug grave. Or the tension might be more obvious, as it would be if the next line of the story was: …and amidst the tomato plants lay a bloody hatchet, half buried in the mud. Now, two things are clear. First, I’ll never make my living as a Hollywood screenwriter. And second, tension is needed to compel a reader’s interest. With the introduction of tension, the story really starts. Up until then, we just had a collection of facts. There was no compelling narrative. Note that I could have arranged those facts in any order, without making a significant difference to your interest.
I like this section because it captures how essential tension is to storytelling. It’s what turns plain information into something people actually care about. I agree that without some sense of conflict or uncertainty, even well-written pieces feel flat. It reminded me that design and communication work the same way, you need a spark of tension or curiosity to hold people’s attention.