I recommend adding: "undergraduate and graduate"or just change it to "Education"

change to: "an organization"

change to: "an organization"

Change to: "The key is not simply to educate"

I recommending changing it to: "learning experiences."

Scarlett: I recommend changing this to: "my career goal is to have a professional position..."

You could change it to "or providing instructional design consulting for small businesses."

change to "projects related to education"

You could end this as a sentence here and start a new sentence: "However, she is eager"

perhaps it could be "working with learners"

Adding the word "professional" before journey make its more relevant to your career.

I believe that this should change to "see"

If you could include a parenthesis here and add any software tools you feel comfortable using it would be good.

Hi Monique: Here is recommend adding the "K-12" before the word education. It gives the reader context of what level education you are referring to.

Change to: "I have experience designing, developing, and teaching photography courses using Canvas, Padlet, Rise-360, and Google Docs."

Change to: "I would like to facilitate."

Change to: "offline educational programs"

Change to: "The use of"

change to: "is to help"

Change to "my"

I recommend making the language more active. For example change to: "I am collaborating with"

Perhaps a good wait to incentivize the reader would be to say something like: "Have you registered for SARA Academy Inc. recently?"

I recommend include a "the" before gap.

There is a blank space before "Continuously"

"Utilize" sounds like you are using them and getting something but I think "engaging" sounds like a more fruitful relationship. You could change it to: "Engaging in professional networks with diverse people and their societies."

you can use the lower case in "instructional" or if you like you could uppercase both words "Instructional Design"

I love this lol but I wonder if this could make it sound like you are holding back. Perhaps something like "Demonstration of diplomacy skills to assist during feedback and evaluation processes. It just ties it back to ID practice.

do you want to specify what level you have taught? I think it makes a different. K-12 teachers have experiences that organizations value. You could change it to "career experience in K-12 teaching"

You can remove the "also" and it will read better.

I recommend including a "the" here: in the corporate sector.

I recommend including the full meaning of this acronim: "with the Association for Educational Communications and Technology (AECT) under"

Instead of "And" here I would explicit state: Sweet Rush is also an Learning Awards 2002 gold winner of "Learning Provider of the Year.

I think a comman after "back" would be good add in this sentence and change "contribution": Her passion to always find a way to give back, led her to contribute on this project as a volunteer.

perhaps change to "learning experience" just because the word "instruction" or "instructional" is used several times in the same sentence.

I recommend changing it to "motivational design (ARCS model)"

I wonder if making it more broad would be better. Perhaps something like create training for the military and/or government sector (?). What do you think?

I would recommend removing "after graduation" because I feel that you entered the field when you started the program.

Hi Caroline! I wanted to recommend left justifying this goal statement rather than having it centered.

I love color!

it should be "backgrounds"

I would recommend adding an "In" at the beginning of this sentence.

Where can I find this in the portfolio? Do you want to put a direct link to this item in the goal statement?

HI Caroline, I would suggest stating it as: "I have proficient skills"

Change this to: "my abilities as a content creator"

Change to: audiences

Hi Julia: You can make this sentence shorter this way: "A skill that I wish to put in practice in my dream position is the production of advertising and instructional content for a company’s social media platforms to assist employees."

Hi Julia: I recommend changing this to: "After completing my graduate education,"

Change to: Master's of Science "in" Instructional Design and Technology Program

Change to: After graduating "from" UT

This is good info to include here!

I recommend focusing more in just undergraduate education.

Change it. It should be "with"

Nicely done, Galina!

Change to: is extremely important skill

You can remove the specific timeline.

What was the title of that on campus job? It would be good to include it in the bio.

I recommend wording this part to: To pursue her higher education, Nadia decided to study in a different country.

Personally, I recommend removing your age (at least from the beginning of the bio). This is personal information.

I would reword this to: " I have a background in secondary education."

I would recommend removing this and instead working it this way: "Some of the skills that I plan to bring to an organization include:"

It is good to leave it as "a company" for now, as your move forward with the program you can consider if you want to work in a specific setting (a university, the corporate world, or other).

You can also add the ARCS motivation model

I really like this part!

Anders: The goal statement needs to improve significantly. If I was your client and I read this, I would have hesitations. You write in capital letters and lower case letters. You list "brainstorming" are a skill needed. There has to be a better word for these skills. Your goal statement tells me some of the skills you have but it doesn't tell me why you want to do this.

Anders, Ideally the goal statement has more of a narrative format. You can remove the "skills needed" and "skills mastered" sub heading. I also recommend re-wording this sentence to: "After graduation, I will start my personal consulting firm focused on marketing and instructional design."

Unless your plan to update your portfolio regularly, I would recommend avoid content that you will have to change in a month. Since Martial Arts is an important part of who you are, you can include a tab with information about your Martial Arts career, upcoming matches, and other information.

I recommend removing this sentences and instead including it a different section of the portfolio. You will have the opportunity to add "artifacts" and this would be a good section for the instagram video.

You can include most of this in other parts of the portfolio. I do recommend perhaps keeping your skills. You could change it to state something like this: "Anders is a skilled user of social media marketing, photoshop, InDesign, MS PowerPoint, MS Word, and Adobe Illustrator."

I like this part!

I wonder if you want to narrow this down a little bit. Perhaps focusing on your main roles right now: Martial Artist and Instructional Design graduate student. This can help make your bio more focus.

See the revised version of your resume that I emailed.

In the EME620 course, we used the Morrison, Ross and Kemp Instructional Design Model. This would be a good model to include in addition to Gagne's Nine Events of Instruction.

Most people do not consider ADDIE a model but more than anything a framework. I would recommend citing a different model that you are familiar with.

I would strongly recommend changing this to "learning preferences." We do have different learning preferences but we can learn still learning even if content is shared in a different format. Here is an article that talks about this.

I think you need to put something in here about your contract position as an instructional designer. I think it is important to highlight that as much as possible.

Perhaps mention how they can look at your portfolio and see how you showcase combining both fields in your portfolio artifacts. I think that would be nice to showcase.

You can lower case "in"

Great Photo!

I think it would be good give some idea of those skills: communication and instructional design skills. Or, even mentione more specific skills: marketing, public speaking, task analysis, project management. It can help make the message more specific.

In your initial tag line you have "education" and I like that better. It is just a bit more broad.

I suggest adding: "instructional design" to this list.

Looks good

You can lowe case "undergrad" and I would say make it "undergraduate degree" or "undergraduate studies"

I recommend adding the full title: "Master of Science"

I think "Bachelors of Science" sounds better.

Remove the "s" at the end.

This is very sweet and kind. It tells so much about your personality.

I would call them "special projects"

Can you include the full name too?

Change to: In March of 2018, "she" was a photographer

I really like this. It tells me about your passion.

There are some missing words suchs as "a" and "the" in the sentence. Please change it to this: "Since she has a background in psychology and criminology, the IDT degree can serve as a major instrument in creating and developing trainings and programs for the social work field.

Change to: "She started her degree in Instructional Design and Technology program at The University of Tampa during the Summer 2020 term."

change to: "educationa background consist"

Change to past tense: "was"

I think you can make it a bit more personal: "Welcome to Galina Gorelenkova's professional portfolio!"

Here is would recommend the following edit: "Indira aims for innovation and motivational learning in every component of the instructional design process." I am not sure about the word success. I feel the word success is too vage. I would suggest "effective."

I would re-word this sentence to this: "Indira applies human technology, learning theories, and motivational frameworks to all of her learning experiences." I think it is important that you address more than just "instructional materials."

It would be good to have a sentence or two about your passion for education or what you hope to learn while studying about instructional design. Then transition to your accomplishment.

Your bio tells me about your past experiences, but it does not tell me what you want to do moving forward. That is find right now, but as you go throught the program this would be something that you want to consider.

It feel like the beginning of this sentence is missing. You like designing and developing great products that make people's lives easier?

I do not have any major recommendations for change, but I do think that it would be good for you to include either software that you know to use or instructional design skills. "Amanee's instructional design skills task analysis, creative assessment design, online development, etc." Or, "Amanee is a proficient user of Articulate Storyline, Camtasia, Google Suites, etc." Just something to showcase who you are as an instructional designer.

For accessibility purposes, I wonder if there is a better way to have the title here but make it more visible. Right now the text seems to disappear as the images changes.

Habiba: Could you provide more information about this position? Just elaborate with one or two sentences.

It is okay to remove this part. Perhaps include some software skills instead.

It would be better to include this in a bullet list format. All great content.

If you like, you can include "Master of Science"

You can remove "graduate student"

Perhaps it would be good to include the graduation date here.

All other parts of your resume look good. I do suggest including a "professional and software skills" section below your education section. In the professional and software skills section you can include any software, ID and teaching related skills that you think would enhance your resume.

Monique: I recommend removing your address is you post this on the Internet. Just include your email address.

Heather I would also recommend software skills section. You can add new software and tools that you learn in your current position or in the program.

I would recommend adding the date of your bachelors degree. Also, you can add your master degree and include an expected graduation date.

Heather I recommend rewording this bullet point. The word "client" is included three times. Perhaps: "Conduct onsite training for new as well as established clients"

Johnathan: this resume has many different areas and will likely need to be customize based on the position you apply for after graduation. I made some suggestions in the form of annotations.

Depending on the position you are applying for, I recommend removing this section.

If you are already mentioning Steve Harvey in the bullet list, you do not need to include it again. Seems repetitive.

Change to "Assisted with the production of the show and worked along entertainer Steve Harvey"

This could be a bullet point list

This could be a bulled point list

To keep the consistency, add a bullet list here.

Lowercase in "production"

There is additional unnecessary white space above. Check the formatting of the page.

Make sure to format both education entries the same.

Make sure to format both education entries the same.

You can remove the references from your resume and provide them when they potential employer ask for it. This will help keep your resume shorter.

Change "My Intentions" to "Career Goals"

We are having a different instructor teaching the Program Evaluation course in Spring 2020.

Hagen: I believe you use lower case here for these different university departments.

To make the URL shorter and avoid a really long URL taking extra space on the paper, you can consider a URL shortener. This one is my favorite: (https://tinyurl.com)

You can also add, anything that you have used Audio editing.

I would also recommend adding keywords related to instructional design: Training and Development, Project Management, ADDIE, Learning Experience Design, etc.

I would recommend moving the bullet a bit so that "current remote" fits all in the same line.

Perhaps consider: "Graduated: 2010"

Erika: would it appropriate to say: "Graduation: 1990"

change to "as a"

change to "infographic software such as"

change to "for"

I do no think you need this part of the sentence.

change to "for"

change to "designed and developed"

change to "Collaboratively"

replace with "for high school"

Change to "Instructional Design Experience"

change to "Adobe Creative Suites"

replace with ", combined with my communication background"

replace with "a"

change to present tense "prioritize"

remove "a"

remove "the"

replace with "Learning Management Systems"

Troubleshoot sounds off. How about "Improved instruction when revisions to objectives were necessary."

This bullet point sounds very similar to the previous bullet point related to this project. Do you want to combine them?

Perhaps to be more inclusive, change to: Adobe Creative Suites

I recommend removing "office of"

"troubleshooting for all" does not sounds right. What about "Improved instruction when"

This looks very similar to one of the previous bullet points. perhaps you can combine them?

You can remove "by"

Perhaps to be more inclusive, change to "Adobe Creative Cloud"

You can remove "offices of"

You can lower case "university"

I have one 4 year old so I wonder how you manage 28 4 year old kiddos.

Did you mean to have a period here?

Change to: "Foster"

I recommend changing it to: Develop and deliberate the design of"

Change to: "Build"

I recommend removing "Understanding and" because it makes it sounds like you lack knowledge on this.

It is very well written and a great representation of your work.

Perhaps it is the "Kemp Design Model" but I wonder you meant the "Morrison, Ross, and Kemp Design Model".

You could change this just "instructional design framework"

change to: "subject to change during Fall 2019"

change to: "expand"

change to: "the Master of Science in Instructional Design & Technology program"

change to: "to create"

Change to "Susana" without the apostrophe and the "s" at the end.

change to: "problem to solve"

Susana: You have to spell out: "learning management system"

school? Or "university"?

Insert an "and" before Gagne's

change to "trends and issues,"

change to: "has great communication and time management skills"

change to "instructional design platform"

change to "her"

change to "grow"

replace with "as well as"

delete: "along"

"program, Susana"

delete "Susana,"

change to "in the Communication field."