and this as drumsticks

on the same line, I always read this as the "sourdine" in the sense of the "mute", the device you use in jazz to mute a trumpet or other instruments. Can "muting" be the same or does it signal just the silencing and not the actual device?

It would be interesting to see this "map", to visualize this "geography".

see above

do you want to keep the variation between ancien/vieux in the original or not?

éclat/éclater offer some of the most fascinating examples of variation in the translations of Glissant's works as well, with its meaning somewhere in between an explosion, a fragmentation, a diffusion, a certain light. In this translation you have also used several terms to translate éclat/éclater/éclatement: erupt (les volcans éclateront), bursting/burst (éclatait la vie, n'éclatera-t-elle point?), dazzling (éclatante petitesse, louange éclatante) explode/explosion (éclatement sanguinaire, notre coeur de bassesse quotidienne éclate). I'm not suggesting this variation shouldn't be there, on the contrary: I think this variation is fascinating and needs to be investigated. Not sure if you already chose the words to be included in the Caribbean lexicon you're thinking of, but I would surely add "éclat", focal to both Césaire and Glissant.

I wonder if "étalée" could be translated with one word only. Would "outspread" and/or "outstretched" work here or not at all?

what about senseless? I always had the feeling it was a sort of "dérèglement" des sens, somewhere in between "unconscious" and "pointless"

perfect sentence for this project

I appreciate not repeating the subject, it reminds me of a lot of subject-lacking sentences in Caribbean forms of English, like "is just a movie" that gives the title to Earl Lovelace's novel

I love the rhythm here.

is the non-capitalized "n" here a choice unlike all other occurenced which have a capital "N"?

mortiférés is translated as "death-bearers" by Rosello-Pritchard, and as "mortally wounded" by Davis, who highlights its Latin derivation from "mortifer" (death-bringing, lethal).

I'm interested in the choice of "Notes" over "notebook / journal" and of "birthplace". I always wondered if birthland could be used here.