likeafallenwomanwhositsaloneinadarkroomtry-ingnottothinkaboutherpast,
alright that's enough
likeafallenwomanwhositsaloneinadarkroomtry-ingnottothinkaboutherpast,
alright that's enough
I’m trying to explain the way part of the horror of the Horror was knowing that whatever America the men in those planes hated so much was far more my own – mine, and F–’s, and poor old loathsome Duane’s – than these ladies’.
I don't like this ending
It always seems to be important to have at least one person to hate.
i like this
one couple almost seeming (unverifiable) to be hugging each other as they fell all those stories and shrank back to dots as the camera then all of a sudden pulled back to the long view
I need to find that poem of this
(long story)
I like this
Here, therefore, to have a home without a TV is to become a kind of constant and Kramer-like presence in others’ homes,
that's funny
… …
I like this use of ellipses
– plus I suppose your basic parades, fireworks and a couple corn festivals –
again the rhythm isn't working for me
To be honest, it can be a little creepy, especially in high summer when nobody’s out and all that green just sits in the heat and seethes.
This paragraph is everything I like and dislike about DFW
(People here are deeply into lawn-care; my neighbors tend to mow about as often as they shave.)
I think what I'm realizing is that the rhythm with which DFW writes is totally incompatible with the rhythm I read/write with. Also, his vocab is annoying to me and doesn't add to his writing at all, it comes across as pretentious. in my opinion
The town itself in summer is intensely green – streets bathed in tree-shade and homes’ explosive gardens and area-code-size parks and golf courses you almost need eye-protection to look at, and row upon row of broad weedless fertilized lawns all lined up flush to the sidewalk with special edging tools.
I like parts of this sentence but I dislike the polysyndeton. And I am a polysyndeton fan I just don't like it here, if you're going to use an em dash that early in a long sentence you should close it out before your ending punctuation.
which grows steroidically and stretches to the earth’s curve in all directions.
you see but then I hate this
Bloomington’s a little like a seaside community except the ocean here is corn
I like this
“The flag is a pseudo-archetype, a reflexive semion designed to pre-empt and negate the critical function” (grad student).
funny if not lacking a bit of self awareness
Stealing one out of somebody’s yard is clearly out of the question.
why, and why do you want to put one up
it sounds the way light surf sounds when you’re two dunes back from it
I don't like this metaphor
some yards have dozens all over as if they’d somehow sprouted overnight
good imagery
the kind whose brace takes four Phillips screws.
I like this line
athwart
not everyone that uses big words is annoying but the way he does it is