The iPad for every student movement begun by the Los Angeles Unified School District is a project to distribute an Apple iPad to all 640,000 students that attend Los Angeles schools. This movement began in 2013 and it is ongoing today.
What is the connection of this sentence? Why is this sentence relevant. It was just thrown in the paper and it had no purpose no did it correlate to the effect of the growing mind of children
A little research revealed that I am unfortunately among the first generation of white-collars to suffer unpaid-for cyber-overtime work like this. Actually, as recently as two decades ago, most white-collar workers did not have to worry about having to suddenly resume work after leaving the office,
This sentence is a bit confusing. He should have gone in more detail of his race/culture then talked about the white-collar workers.
These online role playing games, players create in-game avatars to represent themselves in these expansive fantasy worlds. Despite these innovations, these online games are not flawless. The ease of access to online gaming coupled with the extent of social exchanges can result in numerous tensions.
I like the structure of this introductory paragraph. I believe that this is the transition sentence before the introduction. However it is a bit vague. If you specify why the online games is not flawless/ why it caused tension more it would be stronger.