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  2. pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com
    1. “Bad thing about tennis is week, after week, after week your mind and bosy needs to prepare for the next tournament again,” wika ni Alcaraz.

      no direct quptes sa column

  3. pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com
    1. Hindi naman nagpahuli si Djokovic nang ipamalas nito ang solidong depensa matapos ibalik ang palo ni Alcaraz sa pagitan ng kaniyang mga paa.

      Mention the phase of the game in this point. We already lost the sauce.

    2. “I have to say that for me it is always a pleasure to play against him. He is indeed one of those players that make you play harder and he really deserves the win,” wika ni Djokovic.

      again, tactical highlight, you are not yet here yet.

    3. si Djokovic ay nahaharap sa matinding pressure, pinilit ni Alcaraz ang dalawang puntos sa kampeonato sa pamamagitan ng perpektong pagbabasa ng signature wide serve ni Djokovic.

      magsulat sa di-karaniwang anyo

      naharap si Djokovic sa matinding pressure habang pinilit ni Alcaraz...

    4. “One shot can change the game, one point can change the flow of the game,” pahayag ni Alcaraz. “Every time that I’m able to feel that aura from him on the other side of the net, for me it’s a privilege,” dagdag pa nito.

      we need a tactical POV of the game

    5. Pinabagsak ng rising star player na si Carlos Alcaraz ang beteranong si Novak Djokovic na  10-times champion (2–6, 6–2, 6–3, 7–5), sa kasagsagan ng 2026 Australian Open Final na idinaos sa Melbourne, Austraklia nitong ika-1 ng Pebrero.

      angle???? highlight? key play? hello?

  4. pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com
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    1. “By journalism we were able to provide opportunity even in the underpriviledged areas,” ani ni Prodigo.

      mga quotation na umuulit lamang sa sinasabi ng naunang talata

    2. “We do not only focus on winning but we always think about why we’re writing that paper,” wika p ni Prodigo.

      mga quotation na umuulit lamang sa sinasabi ng naunang talata

  6. pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com
    1. Sa huli, hindi sapat na ituring lamang na extracurricular ang campus journalism. Kung tunay na layunin ang paghubog ng mga mag-aaral na mapanuri, mulat, at may malasakit sa katotohanan, nararapat itong isama sa araw-araw na pagkatuto sa loob ng silid-aralan—sapagkat ang campus journalism ay hindi lamang gawain, kundi isang kulturang dapat yakapin.

      strengthen the tone

    2. “Grades ang basehan ng kaalaman ng bata. Kapag mataas ang grades mo, ibig sabihin matalino ka,” saad pa ng kaibigan ko. Ito umano ang sumusukat sa kaalaman at kakayahan ng kabataan.

      no quotation

    3. “Extra lang naman ‘yan, hindi naman importante,” giit pa nila. Doon ko napagtanto na kaya pala nakasara ang kanilang isipan ay dahil ito ay gawaing labas sa klase.

      no quotation

    4. “Ano ba ang campus journalism?” Iyan ang palaging tanong ng mga kaklase ko sa akin. Sa tuwing pinapaliwanag ko sa kanila nang maayos ang tunay na halaga nito, “ah, hindi naman pala gano’n ka importante,”

      no direct quotations sa column

  7. pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com
    1. Ang campus journalism ay hindi palamuti ng paaralan. Ito ay salamin nito—buo, malinaw, at kung minsan ay nakakasakit. Ngunit mas mabuti ang masakit na katotohanan kaysa sa maganda ngunit kulang na larawan.

      nawawala sa bwelo ang article dahil sa mga talatang ito

    2. Sa huli, sa bawat panulat na nagtataglay ng katotohanan, ang boses ng campus journalism ay hindi dapat pigilan kundi dapat palakasin at pakinggan.

      STRONGER LANGUAGE

    3. Nakadidismayang isiping ang pagsulat ay kailangan munang dumaan sa pagdadalawang-isip at takot na baka may magalit sa artikulong ginawa bago ito mailathala. Sa bawat pagsulat ng isang campus journalist, kasabay nitong hinuhubog ang boses ng buong paaralan. Ngunit ano pa ang silbi nito kung nililimitahan ang pagpapahayag ng saloobin dahil sa pag-iisip na baka mapagalitan ang mga batang mamamahayag?

      again, ilagay ang balita rito KAAGAD.

  8. pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com
    1. Sa gitna ng mga isyu tungkol sa press freedom limits, binigyang-diin ni Prodigo ang konsepto ng Responsible Journalism, bagaman may kalayaang magsulat, hindi dapat lumalampas sa limitasyon ang mga mamamahayag sa pamamagitan ng pag-iwas sa pagiging masyadong agresibo o bastos sa pagpapahayag ng saloobin. “Dito papasok ‘yung responsible journalism. We can write, but we should not go beyond the limit. Dapat hindi masyadong vulgar o harsh,” dagdag niya.  Dagdag pa niya, ang balanseng ito sa pagitan ng kalayaan at responsibilidad ang nakikitang paraan upang mapanatili ang tiwala ng mga stakeholders at maitaas ang engagement rate sa mga susunod na taon.

      This part is already mentioned on the primary angle....

  9. pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com
    1. MAHAHALAGANG DETALYE: Naging hamon ni Dave C. Prodigo, sa mga kabataang mamamahayag  tungkol sa ugnayan ng paaralan at lokalidad, sa isinagawang press briefing bilang parte ng NSPC 2026. Ayon kay Prodigo, ang tunay na tagumpay ng isang campus journalist ay wala sa mga tropeyo ng NSPC, kundi sa kakayahan nitong maging boses ng katotohanan, at koneksiyonn sa pagitan ng paaralan at ng komunidad Nanawagan din siya sa mga guro at tagapayo na embody-in ang kultura ng CJ upang palaging handa ang mga bata na i-dokumento hindi lamang ang mga kaganapan sa silid-aralan, kundi pati na rin ang kultura at isyu ng kanilang kinabibilangan na komunidad.

      again, i do not love that you repeat these "Important Details" tab

  10. pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com pinikana161309022010.wordpress.com
    1. Ang ganitong sitwasyon ay nagreresulta sa “babaw” na pamamahayag na nakatutok lamang sa mga positibong balita at isinasantabi ang mga tunay na hinaing at problema ng mga stakeholders.

      either connect it to the recent paragraph OR cite the person here.

    2. Matatandaang naglabas ng pag-aaral ang United Nation Research Group noong nakaraang taon, ang isyu ng pagpapatahimik sa mga mamamahayag na nananatiling isang kritikal na isyu ng bansa, kung saan lumalabas na 85% ng mga kaso sa buong mundo ay hindi napaparusahan at 162 mamamahayag ang napatay habang ginagampanan ang kanilang tungkulin noong 2023-2024, lalo na sa mga lugar ng tunggalian. Kapansin-pansing mapanganib ang Pilipinas, na may mahigit 175 mamamahayag ang napatay simula noong 1986, kabilang ang ilan sa ilalim ng kasalukuyang administrasyon ni Pangulong Marcos Jr.

      Again, this is a backgrounder data. Should be on the last paragraph.

  11. pinecrest95.wordpress.com pinecrest95.wordpress.com
    1. “I love tennis, but the bad part of tennis is that it has tournaments a week, I think it’s week after week after week and we don’t have the chance just to prepare. Sometimes you just have to stop yourself and think what you are doing.”

      There's no quotation paragraphs on columns

  12. pinecrest95.wordpress.com pinecrest95.wordpress.com
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    1. In the end, Alcaraz made history by winning his first Australian Open title and completing a Career Grand Slam.

      the backgrounder feels lacking. kinsa pay lahi nga nakabuhat ani?

      Also before this, any emotional statement from the winner? Any indirect quotation gikan sa atoang losing player

  14. pinecrest95.wordpress.com pinecrest95.wordpress.com
    1. To address these challenges, accountability must be shared among publications. Student journalists must take responsibility for reporting ethically and professionally. Advisers and publication teams should review for sensitive posts, provide guidance on online ethics, and monitor the accuracy of all published content..

      this solutions section seems so one dimensional and should be adding more. maybe adding more guardrails in the competition.

  15. pinecrest95.wordpress.com pinecrest95.wordpress.com
    1. CJs must know their responsibility. Campus journalists are not seasonal performers, they are the conscience of the community. CJs should justify their roles as an ethical storyteller. Be a real journalist that our community needs. Be a truth seeker, not a clout chaser. HONEST OPINION We must protect the press Campus journalists are trained to seek truth and speak for the school community, yet being a student writer that wants only to stand firm needs to hold back our words just because it was seen as harsh or aggressive. READ MORE Post with responsibility, not provocation Eastern Samar | Opinion Writer As I was scrolling through my Facebook feed, I noticed a post that had gone viral overnight. Comments poured in and suddenly, what started as a simple student report became a whirlwind of opinions and even misunderstandings. The digital world is where one click can amplify your voice to hundreds but can also put you under a microscope. READ MORE

      consolidate your thoughts on two paras pls

    2. Reducing the role of student journalists to trophies teaches them that recognition outweighs integrity, awards are more important than ethics, and comfort is preferred over courage.

      could be another paragraph

  16. pinecrest95.wordpress.com pinecrest95.wordpress.com
    1. Campus journalists are not just students who write stories, they are shaping how the community should respond towards societal issues. Therefore, school publications must not limit the press freedom of its campus journalists, every story must be published with courage and integrity. Our community still needs truth seekers and eye-openers.

      Tone kinda okay, but not good enough. Add stakes and intensity to the CTA.

    2. Campus journalists are trained to seek truth and speak for the school community, yet being a student writer that wants only to stand firm needs to hold back our words just because it was seen as harsh or aggressive.

      add context/news. it cannot be starting alone on an opening statement. Give an event or a happening.

  17. pinecrest95.wordpress.com pinecrest95.wordpress.com
    1. News Highlights Turning Point: A Decade of Necessary Reforms (2026-2035), addressing the increasing learning gaps in education. Education is underfunded for a long time and that the deficit is very broad and they cannot afford to cover all the shortcomings in just one or two years. The report includes the NatPlan, which offers us a ten-year plan to address the learning crisis that can be solved if we act in unity, and with determination and with consistency.

      do not repeat this one ALL THE TIME

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    1. The issue of limited press freedom in schools arises when campus publications attempt to cover government-related topics but encounter restrictions from school authorities maintaining institutional boundaries.

      add any citation/connecting devices para dili siya magmukhang lone statement.

    2. Through adherence to responsible journalism principles, campus publications can continue to inform while aligning with institutional expectations.

      end on a solid backgrounder.

    3. Maintaining objectivity allows campus journalists to present issues clearly without favoring one side over another.

      add any citation/connecting devices para dili siya magmukhang lone statement.

    4. Responsible journalism is identified as an approach that promotes balanced and fair reporting while observing set limitations.

      add any citation/connecting devices para dili siya magmukhang lone statement.

    5. The contrast between these perspectives reflects the ongoing challenge of defining the role of campus media within academic institution

      add any citation/connecting devices para dili siya magmukhang lone statement.

    6. This situation highlights differing views on the scope of campus journalism, as student writers are also encouraged to stay informed on broader societal matters.

      add any citation/connecting devices para dili siya magmukhang lone statement.

    7. According to the Senate of the Philippines freedom of the press is tantamount to the right to self- expression of every Filipino. This gave birth to Republic Act 7079, otherwise known as the “Campus Journalism Act of 1991”. But long before the law has been passed, the Department of Education has already been conducting the National Schools Press Conference (NSPC), one of the highest academic competitions in the country which aims to test the communication skills of Filipino campus journalists. Based on records, the first NSPC was held in 1920.

      a very miscategorized paragraph, could be on another section/subhead

  20. Mar 2026
    1. The win improved Lothong’s professional record to 60-17 making it quite an achievement for a 17-year-old prodigy.

      The second paragraph should have been written here.

    2. Lothong Kruaynaimuanggym the rising prodigy of Thailand sets off his wings as he dominated the Vietnamese-Thai foe, Wanpadej NF Looksuan in the recently concluded ONE Friday Nights Fights 144 on February 27, held at Lumpinee Stadium, Bangkok Thailand.

      no powerful angle on the lead

    3. Having with him the unanimous decision after the three-round match, Lothong now holds 59 professional Muay Thai victories which made him stand out from his age group.

      Should be an overview of the match rather than concluding it instantly.

    1. But it also unearthed a truth the country must confront: No one should have to risk their life just to sort through the country’s waste. The mountains of trash will keep growing. The ground will keep shifting. And unless something changes—unless safety becomes more important than profit, unless workers like Juan, Ben, and Julio are given the protection they deserve—there will be more collapses, more mourning, more names forgotten beneath the rubble. Let this be the last tragedy of its kind.Let their stories be more than statistics.Let the country refuse to look away. Because no one should die for doing the work the rest of us depend on. Feedback ← BackThank you for your response. Name(required) Email(required) How could we improve? Please fill out the form correctly. Send FeedbackSubmitting form Δ document.getElementById( "ak_js_1" ).setAttribute( "value", ( new Date() ).getTime() );

      Should be an integration as a proper ending

    2. How many collapses does it take before warnings become action? What happened to Juan, Ben, and Julio is not an isolated accident. It is a symptom. A symptom of a system that lets people work on unstable mountains of trash without proper protection, contracts, rights, or recognition.

      avoid putting personal opinions and inputs here.

    3. It is here where three men—Juan, Ben, and Julio—began every day with the simple hope of ending it alive. And then came February 20, 2026—the day the mountain woke angry. When 420,000 cubic meters of trash broke loose at the Rizal Provincial Sanitary Landfill (RPSL), it was not just a collapse. It was an avalanche of everything the country had thrown away—plastic memories, chemical remains, forgotten things and forgotten people—rushing down in a roaring tide. Three waste workers were swallowed whole. Juan. Ben. Julio. Only one body has been recovered, lifeless. Two remain missing beneath the weight of a country’s neglect.

      My main issue here is this should be consolidated on paragraphs rather on lines. I might be saying these because of visual value but also, this is an implication that you are just trying to make it dramatic rather than factual.

    1. There is still hope. EDSA lives in the heart. Its resurrection is in our hands. The fire was wasted, yes. But fires, in the right hands, can always be rekindled. Feedback ← BackThank you for your response. Name(required) Email(required) How could we improve? Please fill out the form correctly. Send FeedbackSubmitting form Δ document.getElementById( "ak_js_1" ).setAttribute( "value", ( new Date() ).getTime() );

      what a weak ending. it doesn't encapsulate the article well.

  21. thenorthminstarpublication.wordpress.com thenorthminstarpublication.wordpress.com
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    1. Freedom once reclaimed can slowly weaken when vigilance fades.

      Remove these thesis sentences. WE JUST NEED A NEWS + INITIAL STAND + REACTION.

      That's it. We don't ned to complicate our lead like this.

  23. thenorthminstarpublication.wordpress.com thenorthminstarpublication.wordpress.com
    1. Lothong Kruaynaimuanggym the rising prodigy of Thailand sets off his wings as he dominated the Vietnamese-Thai foe, Wanpadej NF Looksuan…

      Again, these leads are terrible. These should be re-written as primers rather than a copy paste of the lead inside.

    2. On February 27, 2026, ONE Friday Fights 144 took place at the legendary Lumpinee Stadium in Bangkok, Thailand. The co-main event featured a flyweight Muay Thai clash between Wanpadej NF Looksuan and teenage sensation Lothong Kruaynaimuanggym. What many expected to be a competitive showcase of Thai striking artistry turned into a tactical lesson delivered by a 17-year-old prodigy, as Lothong claimed a convincing unanimous decision victory. This article breaks down the key tactical, technical, and psychological reasons why Wanpadej came up short on the night. Wanpadej NF Looksuan, born in Vietnam but raised in Thailand, entered the contest as the…

      Again, these leads are terrible. These should be re-written as primers rather than a copy paste of the lead inside.

    3. ‎ ‎Catholic Bishops’ Conference of the Philippines (CBCP) called on young Filipinos at the EDSA Shrine on February 25, 2026, to reclaim the spirit of People Power — warning that the generation who fought for democracy is dying, and the role has yet to be…

      this should be complete at least, no?

  24. Nov 2025
    1. Government initiatives, through agencies like the Department of Agriculture (DA) and institutions like Land Bank, are bypassing the traditional financial system and directly empowering these agricultural centers.

      is there any link that refers to the program?

    1. With many users holding more than one account, there are estimated 258 million active digital wallet accounts in 2024, ranking the country fifth globally in digital wallet penetration, and reflecting the nation’s efforts to address financial inclusion.

      cite where did you get the data

    1. She pointed out the characteristics of students who are financially illiterate. “First of all, they lack a sense of understanding the value of money. They also have a scarce knowledge to decide where to put their excess money,” she noted.

      repeating

    2. Financial illiteracy hits record high;

      I recommend adding a number here for MORE IMPACT since this news is centered around numbers of illiteracy

      “3 out of 4 students…” 75% of PH students"

    1. Greenwashing is the practice of making brands appear more sustainable than they really are. It may involve cynical marketing ploys, misguided PR stunts, or simply changing the packaging of an existing product while continuing to use unsustainable ingredients or practices. In simple words: fake news.

      move this part of the paragraph to the next one so it explains how greenwashing works as a credible expert tells her POV on the problem.

    2. The proliferation of false and misleading content calls for an immediate action. Awareness and education is what we need to detach disinformation from the minds of the Filipinos.

      Unite the thought into a straightforward actionable opinion.

    1. The Philippines undermined with financial illiteracy is a reflection on how broken the learning system in the country. According to Pia Roman-Tayag, director of the Office of the United Nations Secretary-General’s Special Advocate for Inclusive Finance for Development (UNSGSA), financial literacy in the country remains low. The fact that statistics shows only about 25 percent of Filipinos understand basic financial concepts should alarm the education sector, the government and the country. Thrusting finance and economics in our learning system and making it robust is a must to excise the rotting financial literacy our nation has.

      the context paragraph is too long. IT should be directly saying the source of the news + the news + immediate opinion.

      Then drop the statistics on the second paragrapn.

    1. First of all, it creates public distrust, and leads to protest,” she said. Moreover, she emphasized that without clear fund reporting, the public remains in the dark — a condition that destabilizes accountability, weakens civic engagement, and threatens the overall integrity of public service.

      REMOVE the current quotation para Then convert the fourth paragraph into a direct quotation.

    1. “Greenwashing or misleading the masses through supposed environmental campaigns heavily affects how people view climate action,” she said.

      if she cited any reasons for Greenwashing, it would be much better.

    2. She also linked environmental issues to real-world disruptions, citing the extreme heat that happened in recent weeks that forced widespread class suspensions and further paralyzed the country’s education system. “Past weeks of extreme heat have led to multiple no-class days, affecting students’ learning,” Tayag noted.

      kinda okay, pero at least sa quote, let's include why she is linking it.

    1. Poverty continues to endanger the Pantawid Pamilyang Pilipino Program, as stated by Pia Roman, the Assistant Governor of Bangko Sentral ng Pilipinas.

      state the why after the first sentence.

  25. Mar 2025
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    1. Soon after Undersecretary Atty. Castro walked into the Press Briefing – cameras, laptops were already laid out, ready to hear the wisdom the Undersecretary has to affirm. The moment that Undersecretary opened her mouth, all were anticipating various thoughts on what she might announce. “Simulan natin sa mga magandang balita,” said Atty. Castro.

      You could have ONLY said

      "Simulan natin sa magandang balita"

      And you have a FIRE lead

  28. theinsight17.wordpress.com theinsight17.wordpress.com
    1. Securing land for large-scale housing projects is a hard process. Many urban areas are already saturated, while relocating people to far-flung areas could lead to job displacement and urban sprawl.

      Issue on separating ideas through punctuation marks.

    2. But while this initiative provides immediate aid, the question remains: Is this a sustainable solution to inflation and the long-standing problems in the agricultural sector?

      Stop asking questions. You are supposed to give answers and opinions, not passing the burden.

    3. In a state of  an issue, communication between the government and the public is essential. Regular briefings held by the Presidential Communications Office (PCO) with the Malacañang Press Corps (MPC) play a crucial role in shaping public discourse. The main persona from the briefing was Undersecretary Claire Castro, the briefing was to address pressing issues, and respond to public concerns all under the media.

      Remove this one. It doesn't even discuss the main issue. Use all of your brain power to isolate ONE AND ONLY ONE ISSUE in all of the discussions on the press conference.

  29. theinsight17.wordpress.com theinsight17.wordpress.com
    1. Overall for this page, you have three major issues.

      1. The arrangement of the angles (It should be 3rd news, 2nd news and 1st news)
      2. Your headlines really lack the power to stand in itself
      3. You are using your leads wrong, and it doesn't have any variety.
    2. MALACANAÑG, Philippines – Asserting that it doesn’t recognize the International Criminal Court’s jurisdiction over the country, the Philippine firmly rejected the cooperation for the interim release of the former president Rodrigo Roa Duterte in a press conference on Thursday, March 27, 2025.

      Again, remove dateline, and use another lead.

    3. PCO undersecretary defends Duterte, rejects ICC’s jurisdiction

      Very wrong headline. It doesn't even reflect on your facts, nor in your lead.

      You could have said,

      Palace firmly rejects ICC's assertion of jurisdiction

    4. “If their goals no longer match, it’s best for her to part ways with the group, because if she doesn’t want to follow the  programs, there won’t be a good relationship in the alliance”

      The quotes are too big. Make it the same font size as your whole article, then make it bold.

    5. Executive privilege is a constitutional doctrine that allows the president and high ranking individuals to withhold sensitive information especially if it has an encroachment from a branch over to another branch

      forgot your quotation lines

    6. Emphasizing the constitutional measure to protect sensitive information to national security, Undersecretary of Presidential Communications Office reacted to Imee Marcos’ criticism regarding the government’s invocation of executive privilege in a press briefing on Thursday, March 27, 2025.

      use another type of lead.

      also since PCO Undersec is the representation of Malacanang itself, you could have said that

      Malacanang reacts to Senator Imee Marcos' criticism regarding the governments's invocation of the "Executive Privilege" in a press briefing.

    7. Empowering Filipinos Government expands subsidies for marginalized filipinos

      I HAVE ISSUES WITH THIS HEADLINE Because giving aids doesn't really "empower Filipinos"

  30. theinsight17.wordpress.com theinsight17.wordpress.com
    1. WEATHER FORECAST

      The weather section should have been at least on the middle of the homepage. or at least, the "WEATHER FORECAST" has a smaller font. BECAUSE WE NEED TO EMPHASIZE THAT THE FOUR MAIN SECTIONS are FAR MORE IMPORTANT.