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  1. Oct 2024
    1. a strong point that artifacts such ascartoons can represent complex insights into human condition. These insights can include,love, belonging, aspiration, defeat etc. T

      I'm curious about how this relates to Eco's perspective on childhood. Are his examples just adults in children's clothes? And therefore, is the choice to portray children arbitrary or irrelevant? So I'm curious about how the themes of maturity and the themes of interpretation work together? Is interpretation itself a kind of maturity?

    2. Works CitedBalzary, Flea. Acid for the Children: The Autobiography of Flea, The Red Hot Chili PeppersLegend. Headline, 2020.

      Can you use Noodletools and export your bibliography? It will do the MLA format for you and it looks sharp.

    3. Culture is an active production which holds unlimited artifacts that shape its ways. Frombooks and films to art and music,

      Okay, so what I'm getting is that cultural artifacts are sources for deep meaning and interpretation. I agree and I think Eco agrees. What I'm not getting past the second paragraph is how we're talking about maturity, adulthood, and the interaction between the worlds of adults and children.

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    1. In conclusion, music serves as a powerful tool for enhancing mental health andwell-being. It provides personal expression, helping individuals process emotions andexperiences that might be difficult to speak on. Research has shown that listening to music canreduce symptoms of anxiety and depression, promote relaxation, and foster a sense of

      So, what does your artifact add to the discussion and what should we do as a result of that? In other words, how does thinking about Ocean's music give us insight into the relationship between childhood and adulthood in ways that are similar to and different from Eco's discussion of Krazy Kat and Peanuts? What do we get from the updates provided by your artifact?

    2. Just like Eco, Frank Ocean uses his platform to spreadmental-awareness but instead of creating a show, he makes music. Ocean puts his emotionaltrauma into lyric form to create a connection with his listeners, “the fact that he could make asong about his hardships and help other people through theirs shows how much of an impact hehas on his fans. I would consider him a role model.

      So, once we've discussed Eco more thoroughly, we can draw clearer connections to the music that you want to discuss.

    3. Coming to Terms with Culture

      So first, make up an original title, and second: start with Eco and tell me what he's telling us about fiction and children and mental health. Basically, you will want to summarize Eco's argument (not the whole piece, but the main claims).

    4. Jermery

      Spell your instructor's name correctly.

    5. n the article titled, “On Krazy Kat’ and ‘Peanuts”, by Umberto Eco, Eco relatesemotional struggles to his characters to spread awareness on mental health. The outline of hisarticle focuses on his character's struggles, hoping to give his viewers a sense of understandingand comfort if they relate in any way. In today's society mental health is rising, but people

      It probably makes sense to start with Eco and summarize his argument before introducing your cultural artifact and seeing what it adds to the discussion begun by Eco.

      In other words, we gotta figure out what Eco is saying and then figure out what that would mean if we applied it to Frank Ocean.

    6. For me, music ismy cultural artifact; it is a mirror to society’s values, struggles, and successes. Everybody listensto music at some point, if it's in the car, while you're studying, or just want to have a good time.Music allows everyone to express their emotions and experiences in a way that words alonecannot. Frank Ocean is one of my favorite artists to listen to; he is amazing at showing howpersonal and thoughtful lyrics can resonate with listeners.

      Music is a bit too broad to be thought of as one "artifact," but the artist Frank Ocean could certainly count.

    7. In an article called “The transformative Powerof Music in Mental Well-Being", it states, “Music therapy is an evidence-based therapeuticintervention using music to accomplish health and education goals, such as improving mentalwellness, reducing stress and alleviating pain.”. (2 Psychiatry.Org - The Transformative Power ofMusic in Mental Well-Being, 1 Aug. 2023).

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    1. When educated individuals such as Stevie K. Seibert Desjarlais takes a deep dive intoculture, society is awarded an intellectual perspective on these works and their varyingconceptualizations of culturally relevant topics. Cultural artifacts like “How I Met Your Mother”may be overlooked because of its use of a laugh track and poor comedic timing, but thistelevision show has shaped society's views on significant concepts such as maturity, adulthood,and masculinity. What most people see as a low brow sitcom is in fact a highly influentialcultural artifact.Works CitedMitchell, Thomas. "Did woke culture really kill the sitcom?" Brisbane Times [Brisbane andQueensland, Australia], 2 May 2024, p. NA. Gale OneFile: News,

      It will help your conclusion to come back to Eco. What does HIMYM tell us about Eco's idea of maturity and what can the audience learn from it? How might the audience apply the lessons in daily life?

    2. “How I Met Your Mother”

      Check MLA citations and be consistent (it's different earlier in the paper).

    3. Ted’s hopeless romantictendencies are a lot like Charlie Brown’s persistence. The characters of Charlie Brown and TedMosby are both based loosely on their creators Charles Schulz and Carter Bays.

      Great point, but you'll need to cite this fact.

    4. Thismisconception comes from the idea that failure is a sign of immaturity, when in reality it is thestepping stone to growth.

      This sentence utterly rocks. I love it.

    5. “Peanuts”.
    6. Adulthood often feels like onedisappointment after the other, Ted Mosby’s character depicts this perfectly.

      Comma splice (need full stop or coordinating conjunction).

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  2. Sep 2024
    1. Barrett, Lisa Feldman. “Are You in Despair? That’s Good.” The New York Times, The New YorkTimes, 3 June 2016,www.nytimes.com/2016/06/05/opinion/sunday/are-you-in-despair-thats-good.html.Lynch, David. Catching the Big Fish: Meditation, Consciousness, and Creativity. Penguin Audio,2006.Schalk, Sami. “When I Twerked Onstage with Lizzo, It Was an Act of Political Defiance.” Vox, Vox,18 Oct. 2019, www.vox.com/first-person/2019/10/18/20920615/twerking-with-lizzo.
    2. In conclusion, there are many ways to show your creativity, whether it's withstanding upfor yourself, meditating, or taking the time to find yourself with your emotions. Everyone isdifferent, so each one of us will have a new and different way to show our creative aspects.Being able to express and show our creativity will help us thrive and be able to live life to ourfull potential.

      Are there actions we should take to apply these lessons? Should we define creativity differently than we did before?

    3. In addition, a different article written by Lisa Barrett talks about how and why youremotions are your foundational tools for living.

      We'll need to compare this by contrasting the projects of the three authors, by noting how one author addresses a limit of another author, or by noting how they can be differently used as resources.

    4. I also agree with this quote because I've been in aposition where I have been closed-minded, but you can't be closed-minded, or you will miss newopportunities coming to you

      Personal experience is great, but can we be a little more specific and provide individual instances?

    5. Another author, David Lynch, who has written about creativity, has a different viewpointthan Schalk. Everyone can be creative, but if you don't have a clear mind, you can lose yourselfand lack creativity in your life

      Let's go beyond noticing the different subjects and compare projects. What kinds of change in the world might each author want to see and how might those compare?

    6. Harris also described in “Coming to Terms” thatyou must understand first what the writer is trying to say, then note the limits on the topic shown,and finally, you can see your position on where you stand with the topic

      It's not really necessary to quote the textbook. Do you think it helps make the point?

    7. One of her main goalsshe's trying to have her readers understand is that you should be doing what you enjoy foryourself because, at the end of the day, you're the one living your life; nobody else is

      This great, but let's explicitly connect each piece to the theme of creativity.

    8. After reading different articles by Schalk, Lynch, and Barrett, Irealized everyone has their own take on creativity

      This is true, but what common themes emerge from reading them together?

    9. Ashlei R. SpinaProfessor Jeremy SmyczekEnglish 10111 September 2024

      Let's have a creative title for the essay.

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    1. Lynch’s idea of digging deep within for creativityand understanding desires ties back to Lisa Barrett’s idea that knowing and expressing oneself isthe key to creativity. Both authors afford the perspective that creativity is found deep within

      This is good, and the kind of connecting work that I'm talking about.

    2. David Lynch gives a similar perspective on creativity using transcendental meditation asthe foundation.

      You can transition by comparing projects or uses and limits or both. Let's discuss.

    3. allshare the same grasp on the concept of creativity

      Do they? I think there are both commonalities and substantial differences.

    4. Creativity is a more broad term than most people assume. It is about more than justcreating; it includes observation, re-creation, interpretation, and so much more

      Great observation!

    5. Creativity

      Maybe try for a more engaging title?

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    1. Creative practices could be anything you enjoy to do, someexamples are music, dance, technology, and meditation. Creative practice is highlighted inthe three works: When I danced on stage with Lizzo, it was an act of political defiance bySami Schalk, Laws that choke creativity by Lawerence Lessig, and the problem ofmindfulness by Sahanika Ratnakake

      Make sure that you review how to cite the titles of various works in-text: https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_formatting_and_style_guide.html

      You can also use the MLA sample essay on Moodle.

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    1. Ratnayake’s project is an attempt to “help us understand our ‘true’ selves”

      Here's another point of comparison: is creativity about changing yourself or making creative products or both? Is it growth or productivity or both?

    2. Reaching deeper in the mind allows people to pushpast the surface level thoughts and find compelling thoughts or arguments. Lynch’s use ofanalogies pushes a clear understanding of his reasoning and logic, and while they may seembasic or undermining, they provide a much more developed and thoughtful message that we asreaders must dig deep to understand

      It will be helpful for the overall cadence and style of the essay to have it read back to you: https://www.naturalreaders.com/

    3. TheProblem of Mindfulness
    4. WHERE GOOD IDEAS COME FROM

      Are there common vocabularies (e.g. "create" or "idea) that will allow you to connect Lynch and Johnson more extensively to compare their respective projects?

    5. Creativity,

      Why should we be thinking about creativity? Why is it important in our lives? Are there things going on in the world, in the news, in your social scene that can testify to the importance of creativity?

    6. There is no need tochoose only one method. I have found myself using different methods at separate occasions, sobe the growth that not only grows you, but those around you

      So let's talk conclusions: it might help to think of how to use this synthesis about creativity that you've given the audience. What is the most important thing or what are the most important things that they can do with this information? How can they put this idea to work int heir lives? How can you put it to work in your life?

    7. In comparison to Lynch’s ideology that creativity is expanded and derived from within,Steven Johnson

      I like this attempt to compare these authors, but read it aloud...the wording might not be as clear as we want right now.

    8. editation

      Need an introduction and conclusion.

    9. Meditation, in the eyes of Lynch, is a worthwhile hobby. Thebenefits of meditation are evident, and “the more you meditate and transcend, [your power, edgeand creativity] will grow” (93). While some people may claim that meditation serves no actualpurpose, Lynch contradicts those statements explaining that meditation will not do anything butbenefit you. Lynch pushes that any form of meditation can serve as an enhancer to one’s life

      While this is a great discussion of Lynch, it only implicitly connects the piece to the idea of creativity. Let's move forward with that idea.

    10. Coming to Terms with Creativity

      Let's have an original title, please.

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    1. Works Cited

      What should individual do to apply the lessons of your essay? What are ways that we can remove obstacles ourselves? Should we practice it in ways that our appropriate to our interests and abilities? Should be develop our own definitions of creativity, no matter how idiosyncratic or weird?

    2. Creativity is an important part of society.

      Can you give me creative practices or artifacts that seem important to make this claim catchier? Let's use an anecdote--this is called "showing" rather than "telling."

    3. Schalk,

      You use the word "activism" in conversation about Schalk. Is this a form of creativity? Tell me more about this.

    4. Lynch, and Lessig shared many different places creativity can befound. It can be made, found and adapted. Creativity fuels innovation, drives progress andexpresses unique perspectives in society. By embracing our creative potential, we can enhancepersonal growth along with the collective potential of society. Each author expressed their owntake on how they see creativity.

      One of the things that you're mentioning is the LEVEL at which change needs to occur. For Lynch, the change is PERSONAL, for Schalk, the change is SOCIAL, and for Lessig, the change is LEGAL. What you're contrasting here is OBSTACLES to creativity and how we can address them. This is a cool way to compare projects.

    5. Change is not always easy and in this case, may not be entirelyrealistic for such a dramatic shift so quickly. You must understand other people's perspective onthe topic to fully be able to address all sides. Many people, especially those that oppressindividuals like Schalk, might not listen to Lizzo, or do not see the empowerment in heroutreach. In addition, individuals may see what she is doing and continue to oppress her or seewhat she is doing as a point to oppress further. Many people may also not see what Shalk isdoing as empowering, and may see it for what it is: a woman twerking on stage at a concert.While many people were influenced by Schalk, the scale of change she was hoping for was notachieved ultimately due to limited outreach. Schalk was creative with her self expression and itopened up new ways to see creativity around us. Although there were some limits to herperspective, she helped empower many people through taking a stand.

      This is interesting--let's discuss.

    6. When I twerked onstage with Lizzo, it was an act of politicaldefiance,
    7. Coming to Terms With Creativity

      Let's have an original title.

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    1. Works Cited

      In MS Word or Google Docs, search for "insert page break" and then paste the works cited beneath the break. It will keep it on a separate page.

    2. In the previous two texts both authors focused on how we can control our own emotionsand minds to become more creative, but what about all the external factors that can restrict ourcreativity?

      I like the summary here and the idea that now we're going to engage a somewhat different idea.

    3. Despite all these articles providing their own narrow perspective on what it takes to reachyour creative potential, by studying them simultaneously and analyzing the lessons each of themteaches us we can gain a complete understanding of creativity.

      Excellent summary and synthesis sentence: let's look at the pieces in conjunction with out own experience.

    4. WhenI twerked onstage with Lizzo, it was an act of political defiance.
    5. Before we can control the external factors around us it is important that we look withinand learn how to accurately control our emotions because they affect how well our brain canfunction. In Lisa Barett's article “Are You in Despair? That’s Good,

      One of the ways that we can avoid repetition is simply listening to the paper aloud: https://www.naturalreaders.com/

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    1. Here is what I'm recommending: R. seems to suggest that mindfulness has two problems: 1) it's overrated as a creative force; 2) it detaches us from our emotions and thus makes us indifferent to problems. The other two authors seem to be "solving" those problems in their own way. Can you put them all together?

      Second thing: what to do we do with all this? An applied conclusion gives your audience something to do instead of just information. You can even relate it back to yourself and what you do.

    2. I concluded thatit is different for everyone. It is obvious that everyone works differently no matter what we do,and Lynch had not thought about these ideas.

      This is true, but we'll need to be a little more specific/ Let's discuss.

    3. Our own experiences are different from everyone else’s, and just like Ratnayakeconcluded above, our mindfulness methods are unique too. Emotional granularity, as discussedby Lisa Barrett, is an obtainable practice of “experiencing the world, and yourself, moreprecisely.” (Barrett)

      The beginning of this paragraph gives us an opportunity to tie the two authors' observations together. How do emotional granularity and mindfulness compete or collaborate with one another?

    4. To tie thisprocess into creativity, it can be inferred that without a calm mind, you cannot be creative.

      Good observation.

    5. She explains thatthese “exercises” are bringing us away from what is happening now, therefore they will lead usto dwelling on our past experiences.

      You'll want to support this interpretation with text. I didn't read it the same way.

    6. new ideas in different, unique ways

      Let's give a concrete example of this.

    7. The problem of mindfulness

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    1. people

      Proofreading errors of this kind are often addressed by having a machine read the paper aloud (or reading it aloud to someone else, or both): https://www.naturalreaders.com/

    2. Although Schalk talks about self-expression as a form of creativity Lynch’s article,“Catching the Big Fish: Meditation, Consciousness, and Creativity

      There's an opportunity here to contrast the pieces by project rather than by content. Let's discuss.

    3. mediation

      SP

    4. Well her limits hide the fact that not everyone is always going to agree with how youchoose to express yourself and your beliefs.

      Is this necessarily a limit? Some one can always disagree with you. Let's see if we can be a little more precise in defining what the perspective overlooks.

    5. professional. In her article she talks about how people on social media were leaving negativecomments because she was being ‘unprofessional’ outside of work. She goes on to talk aboutwhat she teaches her students and how it would not be right if she does not follow what sheteaches outside of her work. It’s allowing her to have a deeper relationship with her students andbond with them over common feelings. Through the article, Schalk uses a lot of words likeself-love, body positivity, pleasure to support her thoughts on self-expression. All of these termsare positive words that represent yourself. In the article Schalk writes, “Our society tells us thatpleasure is bad and sinful, when in fact pleasure is healing and sustaining

      Good summary here, but perhaps focus more on Schalk's project (what kinds of impact she wants) and how this relates to creativity.

    6. In the article, “When I twerked onstage with Lizzo, it was an act of politicaldefiance” by Schalk

      No need to give us the title and author again. Just give me some thing like, "Schalk writes that...."

    7. When I Twerked onstage with Lizzo, it was an act of politicaldefiance”

      MLA

    8. Through this paper I will use articles fromSami Schalk, David Lynch and Sahanika Ratnayake to demonstate how self-expression is a wayof using creativity.

      Imagine yourself as writing for a public audience (maybe on the internet) that isn't familiar with the class or the assignment, so that there's no need to talk about "the paper."

    9. n the world we use creativity in everyday life. Whoever you are at some point in yourlife while growing up you have felt like an outsider, not comfortable with showing who youreally are afraid that others are going to judge you

      See if we can spice this up with a brief example or two.

    10. Creativity in the form of self-expression

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    1. It’s another perspective of creating, or rather engaging, with yourmedium for the love of the art.

      You might also comment on the product-process distinction that Chachra seems interested in.

    2. Paper 1

      Give me a title, please.

    3. This idea of creativity of making for love and not for money does have its merit, but thereis also an idea overlooked by this in which society only appreciates the creator rather than theones who help to continue the tradition

      I like the idea that we've structured this essay in part around the economic aspects of creativity.

    4. There are ideas and philosophies like doing a craft for love rather than for money. Onesuch idea is “pleasure activism”.

      I'm glad that you noticed this concept--it's very important to Schalk's argument.

    5. Lessig’s solution to striking a balance is to “legalize what it means to beyoung again”

      Great use of the text here.

    6. n”.

      In general, the period goes inside the quotation marks (MLA parentheticals are an exception).

    7. While Lessig’s, Schalk’s, and Chachra’s projects and perspectives may have beendifferent, it is clear that creativity with a lens focusing on passion and creating with a purposerather than creating for a living is present throughout all 3 texts. Creating for the love of artallows us to experience happiness, joy, and a sense of pleasure in what we can accomplish andcreate. Every day is a new day, so go create something and experience joy today.

      Nice applied conclusion! It's excellent as-is, but I wonder if we can perhaps extend the lesson very slightly?

    8. Creativity comes in many shapes and forms that can easily be identified. However, themethod one uses to be creative is harder to recognize. In our modern world, creativity seems tocome from being completely original and finding a one-in-a-billion idea that somehow no oneelse has thought of yet. Surprisingly, a lot of creativity comes from recreations and differentperspectives of already existing ideas or models. A significant aspect that makes this kind ofcreativity possible involves the motive of creating. It is often suggested that a lot of creativitycomes from a love for a specific medium and then expressing their creativity through theirmedium not for money, but for the love of the art

      I really love this intro--let's discuss perhaps using specific examples to liven the point?

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    1. are unbiased and have

      For your conclusion, what can you or the audience do to apply these lessons in daily life?

    2. Meyers, Barret, and Ratanyake expressed their viewpoints in clearconcise forms, each aiming to educate their audiences on their respective topics, But in myopinion Ratanyakes article was superior simply because she stated arguments in a way that madesense for both sides of the argument, Not giving to much overbearing information while stillmaintaining credibility and boasting creative writing styles that are easy and fun to read.

      How does your own experience of creativity relate to the perspectives that you've read? How does your own experience with self-invention relate to the author's take on creativity?

    3. A later quote from Barret reads

      A second way that we can compare the sources is by noting that they describe obstacles to creativity. What gets in the way of achieving peak creativity and what can we learn about coping with creative adversity?

    4. Reading the first article called “The Problem Of Mindfulness”

      What if you asked, what can I learn about doing creativity from this essay and then compared based on that. What if you ask, how can I grow from each of these pieces.

    5. My highschool writing experiences were unpleasant, writing essays on bland books forced uponmy peers and I by English teachers who teach the same thing year after ye

      Let's use paragraphs.

    6. Coming To Terms With CreativityBarret, Ratnayake, Meyer

      Let's try for an original title.

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  3. Apr 2024
    1. Garry

      GARRY--expedition commander for the party that retrieved the Thing.

    2. Barclay

      BARCLAY--present at the excavation, not much other info, six foot, 190--big by standards of the day.

    3. Copper.

      Dr. Copper is a physician, thus expert in serums and other medical treatments.

    4. Connant.

      Connant is the physicist (cosmic ray specialist) and on night watch with the creature.

    5. It's been frozen there since Antarctica froze twentymillion years ago. There never has been a thaw there

      Key point: the ship is of ancient origin and predates human settlement of the earth.

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  4. Mar 2024
    1. Finding the reasons participants responded negatively to some prompts is also importantbecause it provides GITFIT with an avenue and direction for improvement. Offeringsimilar bonus services for responding to a follow-up survey would yield immenselybeneficial feedback for the company. Another survey that includes and requires the reasonsfor all responses would yield better results. Only requiring explanations for negativeresponses might influence respondents to reply positively to avoid spending more time onthe survey.

      Address what other areas of the business might also be meaningfully addressed by research of this type. Can you also survey the employees? Can you try to poll prospective customers?

    2. Executive Summary

      The ES usually covers the following materials.

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    1. This majority response to thisquestion (5/5) is notsurprising, but even havingany clients mark a 4 or loweris disappointing.Respondents cited a lack ofknowledge as a part of theirnegative review.Again, the overwhelminglypositive review is notsurprising, but anythingbelow a 5 is unacceptable.Respondents cited apositive experience, butalso noted their clotheswere not special or uniqueenough.

      You might include some possible quick actions to take to either: a) gather followup info from the respondent; or b) do a quick-fix on some service issues.

    2. A clearer goal and audience isnecessary for a more successfulversion of this survey.

      You might specifically address what kinds of additional questions you might ask or distribution methods you might use. You might also address how you might do related studies measuring employee performance or satisfaction and/or future and potential customers or locations.

    3. purpose

      So, the purpose is to find stuff out, yes, but--what are possible applications of the information?

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    1. Extremely Friendly46.7%

      Okay, this is good so far. We need: 1) an executive summary at the front 2) discussion/analysis of the individual questions or graphics or both 3) a conclusion that does two things: a) what are you going to do--short-term, long-term, or both--with the information that you gathered in this study; b) reflect on the study itself and its usefulness and limitations--how might you do a similar study again with this knowledge or how you might do related studies (employee satisfaction and performance, potential customer/marketing/expansion). 4) the survey and any related invitations to complete

    2. Customers experien

      You'll want to include question-by-question discussion of the results. How did the responses conform to or modify your guesses/expectations, how might the wording or structure of the question have influenced the results, and what might you do with the information?

    3. Furry Friends is a local shelter here inAllegany, NY.

      So, imagine that this document is not written to customers but to the other people running the business. So, a brief history and mission, things that you thought about improving (aka the reason for the study) and then how you did the study, what you expected to find, what you did find, and how you're going to use it, all super condensed. This called an "executive summary."

    4. Would you recommend us to others

      Let's see if we can present this as a table rather than a graphic. One-answer data sets don't do much as graphs and charts.

    5. Introduction

      See previous note regarding this section.

    6. Introduction................Page 3Graphs and charts.......Page 4Graphs and Charts cont...... page 5

      You'll want to make sure that this is block-aligned rather than centered. (It looks a bit goofy this way.)

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    1. Future Meal Recommandations

      You might group these suggestions into categories (e.g. healthy foods, alternative foods, world cuisines, etc) and then make a graph out of the areas. Also, spell "recommendations" correctly.

    2. Movingforward, these findings will inform our strategies to enhance product quality,expand menu offerings, and engage with a broader customer demographic,ultimately reinforcing our commitment to delivering convenient, nutritious, andsatisfying meals to the St. Bonaventure University community and beyond.

      I very much like this concise, effective conclusion. I would like to see it expanded with reflection on the study design and execution as well as ways that you might improve this type of study as well as construct and execute related ones. In other words, this is a customer satisfaction study, so how might you do this study a bit differently with the benefit of hindsight, but also, how might you do potential customer studies related to expansion or employee performance and satisfaction studies? What does the bigger picture look like?

    3. Do you feel the price of our product accurately reflects its quality?”all participants responded

      Minus the punctuation error, I like this because we don't need a graphic to announce 15 "yes" responses.

    4. Based on the data provided by consumers, it is evident that the majority ofour consumers are college-aged. However, there is one outlier, with oneparticipant reporting an age of 78 years old. This data suggests that ourtarget audience primarily consists of students. To enhance our marketingefforts, we should consider strategies to engage with older generations, whomay become long-term patrons. This shift in marketing approach could helpus broaden our consumer base beyond the student demographic and ensuresustained patronage.

      This is really good per-question analysis because it speculates on and potentially applies the information rather than just reciting it.

    5. Factors influencing their decision to purchase fromBonaventure Bites was also asked. They were given the opportunity to provideoverall comments and, if desired, to share their contact information for furtherfollow-up.

      You'll want to expand this into an executive summary including preliminary expectations, brief results, and potential applications. You'll then expand all of these ideas in the ensuing sections.

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    1. !

      What we're going to need overall: 1) An executive summary that features: a) reasons for study; b) preliminary expectations; c) methods; d) results; e) anticipated actions--all in highly condensed form. (It's the business verion of an abstract.) 2) Analysis of each of the questions 3) Two-variable graphs replaced by tables 4) A conclusion that addresses: a) how you can use the info gathered in specific short-term and long-term ways b) how you can use the information-gathering research process to teach you how to do this kind and other kinds of studies for the future (so, in addition to customer satisfaction studies, maybe employee performance studies or potential market studies).

    2. We did this study to find out exactly what youwant to accomplish through using this company. Weprovided members with surveys to seek outfeedback directly from you! We are working hardto apply the changes that you want to see done toprovide the best and most effective company foreveryone!

      This is a helpful inclusion, but the content needs to be more specific. What are some possible options for improvement? Also, this seems aimed at the customer base rather than the company, and the latter is usually the audience for these reports.

    3. Page 3... IntroductionPage 4... GraphPage 5... GraphPage 6... Graph

      Let's make this a bit more specific, shall we? You can also Google "list of figures."

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    1. Proposal

      So what we're going to need here is a transition from the proposal audience (which is usually assumed to be someone reading it before the study is done--so, in the future) to the report audience (someone reading it after it is done. Why was the study undertaken? What information were you seeking? What opportunities to improve your business did you imagine? What were you hoping for/expecting to find? In another paragraph, you're going to give a quick summary of the report and its findings and how you might use it. These two paragraphs will make up what is called the "executive summary."

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    1. Blair

      BLAIR is the staff biologist.

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    1. Somehistoriansofrhetoric,iftheydonotshare Tacitus’?savowedcynicismabout Quintilian’s shelteringintheclass-room,doseemtotakeQuintiliansomewhatlessseriouslythantheothermajorclassicalrhetoriciansinproportionto hislackofinvolvementintheadmittedlytrickyandtreacherous politicallifeof hisday.

      While forensic rhetoric is certainly still a role for rhetoric, how seriously is rhetoric diminished by the elimination of its deliberative function? (Revisit the three categories of rhetoric.)

    2. Eloquencecouldstillcontroltheoutcomeofprivate lawcases, butpublicissues,whether amenabletoceremonialordeliberative treatment,wereunderthestrictcontrolof theemperors.

      Let's examine this passage as part of the four relationships: 1) Rhetoric and democracy 2) Rhetoric and ethics 3) Rhetoric and epistemology 4) Rhetoric and technology

  5. Feb 2024
    1. For More Information

      So, some policies that you might also consider: 1) ecology/sustainability/environment stuff; 2) community engagement/philanthropy/charitable giving; 3) participation in larger business or charitable organizations that demonstrate you're an invested player in the animal welfare industry.

    2. What We Can Offe

      How are you able to fund being a no-kill shelter? Are you dependent on charitable contributions? Adoption fees? How does you financial model demonstrate your ethical commitments?

    3. Respect and Integrity

      You might want to have a major heading called something like "Our Values" and then imagine what those are in addition to respect and integrity. So, would compassion be a value? Kindness? Fairness? Think about what motivates a business like this one.

    4. About the Compan

      Tell us where you operate and maybe how you respond to the situation with stray animals in rural counties. Localize the feel of the document.

    5. all of the animals seem to be mistreated

      We want to speak positively about the experience of our company while being very cautious about criticizing others (you can be sued for that kind of thing).

    6. cats, howeve

      Comma splice. (Look this up and why it is a crime against style.)

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    1. ists.

      Summary comment: need quotations for all sections; need internal comparisons between the authors; need a conclusion that discusses how rhetoric is best used/understood. Do that, and you'll have done something pretty cool.

    2. luate how they view rhetoric.I understand this is not complete, my last piece will be on Isocrates: Against the Sophists.

      You like the idea of using rhetoric in tandem with another art--suggesting that rhetoric is a method of delivery rather than a means of creating knowledge on its own.

    3. Rhetoric is an interesting area of concern. It has people criticizing it so much that youcould arguably say that they “hate” it.

      Does this reflect Plato's view? You can connect this point to he Gorgias later when you analyze it.

    4. I understand this is not complete, my last piece will be on Isocrates: Against the Sophists.

      Isocrates tells us how rhetoric should not be taught, but does he really define it as an art?

      This might be a point of expansion in the essay--how does everyone define oratory/rhetoric and how do these definitions compare with one another?

    5. It is also known from book one that Aristotle holds a view on rhetoric rather similar tothat of Socrates' definition and reasoning for being against rhetoric.

      We're going to want to quote the relevant passages from Aristotle to justify your interpretations.

    6. “Gorgias ofPlato”

      Google how to cite Plato's dialogues in MLA.

    7. Plato, Gorgias, Socrates and Polus are a few philosophers and sophiststhat have displayed adequate knowledge in rhetoric (regardless if they are for or against it), andhave provided extensive information through dialogue or books.

      Cool--I like this observation. However, Polus is a character loosely based on a real person, so it's probably helpful to mention that or to attribute the discussion to Plato.

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    1. eady

      Additional section: how do you respect sustainability and the environment? How do you engage with the community outside of regular business? Do you have a charitable giving or philanthropy policy about donating volunteers, time, merchandise or your name to causes? Are you a member of any business organizations that promote ethical conduct?

    2. Accountability

      Maybe emphasize avenues of communication and resolution in order to continuously respond to opportunities for better service.

    3. Confidentiality

      What are the ways that you encourage a confidential atmosphere? Phone and recording policies? Social media policies?

    4. Continued acts of disrespect would automatically get you kicked out of theenclosed safe space with absolutely no refund on the fee.

      Carrots, not sticks--talk about the benefits of a safe space rather than the consequences of violating it. Hpw do you provide a safe space? You don't want this document to sound like a threat.

    5. Core ValuesMake sure everyone feels involvedCreativityIntegrity.

      So, I'd want a bullet list articulating your values.

    6. Our origin

      Try to avoid underlining: it looks kinda cheesy. Use bolding, different sizes, different fonts, etc.

    7. By:BrandonTorres

      Two things: 1) I really like the visual motifs; 2) don't need your name on the doc unless you want it there--it's for the reading audience and not me.

    8. Artsy world

      Consistent caps. Make sure to use redundant proofreading strategies for the final doc:

      1) Natural Readers: https://www.naturalreaders.com/ 2) Sight read 3) Read it out loud

    9. age 2

      Make sure that capitalization and line-spacing are consistent throughout the TOC.

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    1. Quote That Represents the Company!You will not fail if you do not want to fail; all things are possible for onewho believes

      Here are some other ideas for section: 1) environment policy; 2) charitable giving policy; 3) community engagement policy; 4) professional/nonprofit and trade affiliations.

    2. Live up to our 9 LIFE COACH Qualities

      Some of these points seem more directed at volunteers/employees and some seem directed at customers. You might want to separate those sections and give them different headings.

    3. The safety of our members is one of our top priorities here at Life Coach.Any harm towards another will come to our attention right away. We do nottolerate disrespect or any type of abuse at our company.

      This is awesome, but what does your company do positively to promote respect and kindness/fair treatment?

    4. LIVE

      Tell me how each one of these values is practiced in the day-to-day operation of the company. In other words, what does the practice of these values look like in action.

    5. Here at this company,

      You might want to articulate somewhere how your service operates--online, in-person, hybrid, and to what extent.

    6. Purpose

      So, let's imagine that your company is aimed at people living in this community (so, option one is SBU/Olean/Alleghany/Cataraugus County/NY Southern Tier); option two as all of Western NY (meaning the places that I just said plus Buffalo).

    7. How Our Company Came To Be

      More specifics: tell me where and how you operate and why and how you were founded.

    8. How Our Company Came To BePurposeMembers at the CompanyCustomerLive up to our 9 LIFE COACH QualitiesSafety of Our Members & CustomersHow Should Reports if Conflict Arises be Reported?Partnerships (Mention other successful companies in which I havecollaborate/ed with)How Has This Company Become Successful? (Results)Quote That Represents my Company!

      Let's clean this up for consistent spacing and page numbers. You can insert a TOC using Word or .G-docs.

    9. able of Conte

      Try to avoid underlining--use bolding, bigger font, different font. etc. to create visual impact.

    10. Life Coach

      Need a fancier name--this is a common description of this kind of service. Be creative!

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    1. e have a zero tolerance for unwanted comments towards any particular person

      Let's instead about the benefits of an inclusive and welcoming environment. Try to frame these ideas positively.

    2. Crush merch for a very low price.

      Here are some other conventional policies: 1) environmental policy--how do you promote sustainability? 2) charitable giving--do you partner with other organizations or donate time, name, or services to philanthropic activities? 3) community involvement--how are you involved in the community outside the operation of the business? 4) legal policies 5) group affiliations--are you members of any trade organizations that are commited to ethical business?

    3. lass you will be asked to sign a sheet giving us permission to post photos or videos of you andthe workout class on our social media page. If you are uncomfortable with this, simply check thebox “no”

      You should refer to your social media here--what platforms and how do you find them?

    4. see.

      You can discuss the benefits of a regular schedule in maintaining an exercise program, etc.

    5. positive attitude.

      Bringing a positive attitude does what?

    6. With Covid still making an appearance, along with other illnesses please do not come toany scheduled workout classes if you have any symptoms. We all remember when Covid was inits prime how awful working out would be. We do not want to experience that again. We are allin a small space and don't want to make anyone else sick. After you are feeling better please waitat least 24 hours to come to a class.

      What do you provide to make the space healthy and safe? Do you take temperatures? Do you have cleaning protocols that help?

    7. Policy

      What policy? This is a little vague.

    8. Physical activity helpsall of us and the stress and pressure college students take on could be helped by taking ourworkout classes. We are a fairly new business so any feedback is welcome!

      You might talk about the benefits of exercise for mental health, physical health, overall wellbeing, and sleep.

    9. My local company ‘Crush’

      Consider how you want to word this for your customers rather than for me.

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    1. Sincerely ,BKM Dance StudioSignature : —---------------------------------------Date : —----------------

      Here are some other common policies: 1) charitable giving (do you partner with other organizations or lend your name or employees or other services to other organizations); 2) environmental (do you do things to minimize your environmental impact); 3) community participation (how do you imagine your participation in the larger community).

    2. Payment policy

      You might want to have employee policies and customer expectations as different sections.

    3. Code of Conduc

      Let's substitute another visual motif for underlining.

    4. there is a separate policy that will alsobe put in place

      Make a fake link or other reference to the other document. Make this one serve as many purposes as possible.

    5. hat person will beheld accountable.

      Same thing--explain how complaints give opportunities for better treatment and better understanding of customer needs. Let's try to avoid threats wherever possible.

    6. lines were to ever be crossed

      Don't threaten: explain the benefits of understanding policies for everyone involved. Carrots, not sticks.

    7. KM Dance Studio is founded by three best friends, Bella , Kara and Mya. Frommeeting and growing up dancing together, it has been their dream ever since to beable to create an atmosphere where others can do the same as they did. Here is wherepassion meets precision to create something wonderful through the art of dance. Weoer a welcoming community to dancers of all levels to come and experience andshare the love of dance with life long friends.

      I really like the wording of this introduction.

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    1. TheftAny volunteer or employee under the suspicion of stealing or possessing any material from theworkplace will be contacted. If suspicion is found to be factual, volunteers and employees are atrisk of being suspended or terminated from the company. If terminated, employees andvolunteers are required to delete contact with Movin’ Out, along with removing social mediacontact.

      You might also want to consider environmental or charitable policies and possibly a community engagement policy.

    2. is dedicated

      Maybe some information on the founding and history of the company.

    3. Our company

      Use the name of your company first here--this is an ethics statement, but like most business docs, is also a promotional opportunity.

    4. along with removing social mediacontact.

      ...not sure that's a thing that you can require. Free speech, and all that.

    5. background screening

      For what? What does the screening entail?

    6. When entrustingvolunteers with the responsibility to help those struggling with hoarding, each volunteer will berequired to place 100% effort into cleansing each house.

      How are volunteers recruited and trained to ensure this outcome?

    7. Any form of discrimination will not be accepted, and will lead to terminationof the individual or group

      This is great, but how do you positively encourage diversity? Let's discuss.

    8. As a company, Movin’ Out has a 24/7 hour hotline

      Link it or include it. Make the document serve as many purposes as it can.

    9. Respect and Nobility

      I'm not a huge fan of underlining as a visual trope. Bold, larger size, and different fonts all tend to look a bit better.

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    1. Guidelines

      Employe guidelines?

    2. About our pool

      Capitalize headings and subheadings consistently.

    3. Sauer Swims offers swim lessons to individuals of any age and a space for peopleto swim freely. Lessons are held every Monday, Wednesday, and Friday from5PM-6PM. Our instructors are in the water during the lessons to provide extraassistance. Our lessons are separated into three different levels.

      Let's make our three levels bullet points rather than bury them in a lengthy paragraph.

    4. the area.

      What area? Include this in the front rather than the back of the paragraph so that people unfamiliar with the company can understand.

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  6. Feb 2021
    1. n 1900, in his “Address to the Nations of the World” at the first Pan-African Conference, in London, W. E. B. Du Bois proclaimed that the “problem of the twentieth century” was “the problem of the color-line, the question as to how far differences of race—which show themselves chiefly in the color of the skin and the texture of the hair—will hereafter be made the basis of denying to over half the world the right of sharing to their utmost ability the opportunities and privileges of modern civilization.”

      This is the first paragraph of this article.

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