GARRY--expedition commander for the party that retrieved the Thing.

BARCLAY--present at the excavation, not much other info, six foot, 190--big by standards of the day.

Dr. Copper is a physician, thus expert in serums and other medical treatments.

Connant is the physicist (cosmic ray specialist) and on night watch with the creature.

Key point: the ship is of ancient origin and predates human settlement of the earth.

Address what other areas of the business might also be meaningfully addressed by research of this type. Can you also survey the employees? Can you try to poll prospective customers?

The ES usually covers the following materials.

You might include some possible quick actions to take to either: a) gather followup info from the respondent; or b) do a quick-fix on some service issues.

You might specifically address what kinds of additional questions you might ask or distribution methods you might use. You might also address how you might do related studies measuring employee performance or satisfaction and/or future and potential customers or locations.

So, the purpose is to find stuff out, yes, but--what are possible applications of the information?

Okay, this is good so far. We need: 1) an executive summary at the front 2) discussion/analysis of the individual questions or graphics or both 3) a conclusion that does two things: a) what are you going to do--short-term, long-term, or both--with the information that you gathered in this study; b) reflect on the study itself and its usefulness and limitations--how might you do a similar study again with this knowledge or how you might do related studies (employee satisfaction and performance, potential customer/marketing/expansion). 4) the survey and any related invitations to complete

You'll want to include question-by-question discussion of the results. How did the responses conform to or modify your guesses/expectations, how might the wording or structure of the question have influenced the results, and what might you do with the information?

So, imagine that this document is not written to customers but to the other people running the business. So, a brief history and mission, things that you thought about improving (aka the reason for the study) and then how you did the study, what you expected to find, what you did find, and how you're going to use it, all super condensed. This called an "executive summary."

Let's see if we can present this as a table rather than a graphic. One-answer data sets don't do much as graphs and charts.

See previous note regarding this section.

You'll want to make sure that this is block-aligned rather than centered. (It looks a bit goofy this way.)

You might group these suggestions into categories (e.g. healthy foods, alternative foods, world cuisines, etc) and then make a graph out of the areas. Also, spell "recommendations" correctly.

I very much like this concise, effective conclusion. I would like to see it expanded with reflection on the study design and execution as well as ways that you might improve this type of study as well as construct and execute related ones. In other words, this is a customer satisfaction study, so how might you do this study a bit differently with the benefit of hindsight, but also, how might you do potential customer studies related to expansion or employee performance and satisfaction studies? What does the bigger picture look like?

Minus the punctuation error, I like this because we don't need a graphic to announce 15 "yes" responses.

This is really good per-question analysis because it speculates on and potentially applies the information rather than just reciting it.

You'll want to expand this into an executive summary including preliminary expectations, brief results, and potential applications. You'll then expand all of these ideas in the ensuing sections.

What we're going to need overall: 1) An executive summary that features: a) reasons for study; b) preliminary expectations; c) methods; d) results; e) anticipated actions--all in highly condensed form. (It's the business verion of an abstract.) 2) Analysis of each of the questions 3) Two-variable graphs replaced by tables 4) A conclusion that addresses: a) how you can use the info gathered in specific short-term and long-term ways b) how you can use the information-gathering research process to teach you how to do this kind and other kinds of studies for the future (so, in addition to customer satisfaction studies, maybe employee performance studies or potential market studies).

This is a helpful inclusion, but the content needs to be more specific. What are some possible options for improvement? Also, this seems aimed at the customer base rather than the company, and the latter is usually the audience for these reports.

Let's make this a bit more specific, shall we? You can also Google "list of figures."

So what we're going to need here is a transition from the proposal audience (which is usually assumed to be someone reading it before the study is done--so, in the future) to the report audience (someone reading it after it is done. Why was the study undertaken? What information were you seeking? What opportunities to improve your business did you imagine? What were you hoping for/expecting to find? In another paragraph, you're going to give a quick summary of the report and its findings and how you might use it. These two paragraphs will make up what is called the "executive summary."

BLAIR is the staff biologist.

While forensic rhetoric is certainly still a role for rhetoric, how seriously is rhetoric diminished by the elimination of its deliberative function? (Revisit the three categories of rhetoric.)

Let's examine this passage as part of the four relationships: 1) Rhetoric and democracy 2) Rhetoric and ethics 3) Rhetoric and epistemology 4) Rhetoric and technology

Let's read this part in order to get an understanding of who is who in the text.

So, some policies that you might also consider: 1) ecology/sustainability/environment stuff; 2) community engagement/philanthropy/charitable giving; 3) participation in larger business or charitable organizations that demonstrate you're an invested player in the animal welfare industry.

How are you able to fund being a no-kill shelter? Are you dependent on charitable contributions? Adoption fees? How does you financial model demonstrate your ethical commitments?

You might want to have a major heading called something like "Our Values" and then imagine what those are in addition to respect and integrity. So, would compassion be a value? Kindness? Fairness? Think about what motivates a business like this one.

Tell us where you operate and maybe how you respond to the situation with stray animals in rural counties. Localize the feel of the document.

We want to speak positively about the experience of our company while being very cautious about criticizing others (you can be sued for that kind of thing).

Comma splice. (Look this up and why it is a crime against style.)

Summary comment: need quotations for all sections; need internal comparisons between the authors; need a conclusion that discusses how rhetoric is best used/understood. Do that, and you'll have done something pretty cool.

You like the idea of using rhetoric in tandem with another art--suggesting that rhetoric is a method of delivery rather than a means of creating knowledge on its own.

Does this reflect Plato's view? You can connect this point to he Gorgias later when you analyze it.

Isocrates tells us how rhetoric should not be taught, but does he really define it as an art?

This might be a point of expansion in the essay--how does everyone define oratory/rhetoric and how do these definitions compare with one another?

We're going to want to quote the relevant passages from Aristotle to justify your interpretations.

Google how to cite Plato's dialogues in MLA.

Cool--I like this observation. However, Polus is a character loosely based on a real person, so it's probably helpful to mention that or to attribute the discussion to Plato.

Additional section: how do you respect sustainability and the environment? How do you engage with the community outside of regular business? Do you have a charitable giving or philanthropy policy about donating volunteers, time, merchandise or your name to causes? Are you a member of any business organizations that promote ethical conduct?

Maybe emphasize avenues of communication and resolution in order to continuously respond to opportunities for better service.

What are the ways that you encourage a confidential atmosphere? Phone and recording policies? Social media policies?

Carrots, not sticks--talk about the benefits of a safe space rather than the consequences of violating it. Hpw do you provide a safe space? You don't want this document to sound like a threat.

So, I'd want a bullet list articulating your values.

Try to avoid underlining: it looks kinda cheesy. Use bolding, different sizes, different fonts, etc.

Two things: 1) I really like the visual motifs; 2) don't need your name on the doc unless you want it there--it's for the reading audience and not me.

Consistent caps. Make sure to use redundant proofreading strategies for the final doc:

1) Natural Readers: https://www.naturalreaders.com/ 2) Sight read 3) Read it out loud

Make sure that capitalization and line-spacing are consistent throughout the TOC.

Here are some other ideas for section: 1) environment policy; 2) charitable giving policy; 3) community engagement policy; 4) professional/nonprofit and trade affiliations.

Some of these points seem more directed at volunteers/employees and some seem directed at customers. You might want to separate those sections and give them different headings.

This is awesome, but what does your company do positively to promote respect and kindness/fair treatment?

Tell me how each one of these values is practiced in the day-to-day operation of the company. In other words, what does the practice of these values look like in action.

You might want to articulate somewhere how your service operates--online, in-person, hybrid, and to what extent.

So, let's imagine that your company is aimed at people living in this community (so, option one is SBU/Olean/Alleghany/Cataraugus County/NY Southern Tier); option two as all of Western NY (meaning the places that I just said plus Buffalo).

More specifics: tell me where and how you operate and why and how you were founded.

Let's clean this up for consistent spacing and page numbers. You can insert a TOC using Word or .G-docs.

Try to avoid underlining--use bolding, bigger font, different font. etc. to create visual impact.

Need a fancier name--this is a common description of this kind of service. Be creative!

Let's instead about the benefits of an inclusive and welcoming environment. Try to frame these ideas positively.

Here are some other conventional policies: 1) environmental policy--how do you promote sustainability? 2) charitable giving--do you partner with other organizations or donate time, name, or services to philanthropic activities? 3) community involvement--how are you involved in the community outside the operation of the business? 4) legal policies 5) group affiliations--are you members of any trade organizations that are commited to ethical business?

You should refer to your social media here--what platforms and how do you find them?

You can discuss the benefits of a regular schedule in maintaining an exercise program, etc.

Bringing a positive attitude does what?

What do you provide to make the space healthy and safe? Do you take temperatures? Do you have cleaning protocols that help?

What policy? This is a little vague.

You might talk about the benefits of exercise for mental health, physical health, overall wellbeing, and sleep.

Consider how you want to word this for your customers rather than for me.

Here are some other common policies: 1) charitable giving (do you partner with other organizations or lend your name or employees or other services to other organizations); 2) environmental (do you do things to minimize your environmental impact); 3) community participation (how do you imagine your participation in the larger community).

You might want to have employee policies and customer expectations as different sections.

Let's substitute another visual motif for underlining.

Make a fake link or other reference to the other document. Make this one serve as many purposes as possible.

Same thing--explain how complaints give opportunities for better treatment and better understanding of customer needs. Let's try to avoid threats wherever possible.

Don't threaten: explain the benefits of understanding policies for everyone involved. Carrots, not sticks.

I really like the wording of this introduction.

You might also want to consider environmental or charitable policies and possibly a community engagement policy.

Maybe some information on the founding and history of the company.

Use the name of your company first here--this is an ethics statement, but like most business docs, is also a promotional opportunity.

...not sure that's a thing that you can require. Free speech, and all that.

For what? What does the screening entail?

How are volunteers recruited and trained to ensure this outcome?

This is great, but how do you positively encourage diversity? Let's discuss.

Link it or include it. Make the document serve as many purposes as it can.

I'm not a huge fan of underlining as a visual trope. Bold, larger size, and different fonts all tend to look a bit better.

Employe guidelines?

Capitalize headings and subheadings consistently.

Let's make our three levels bullet points rather than bury them in a lengthy paragraph.

What area? Include this in the front rather than the back of the paragraph so that people unfamiliar with the company can understand.

This is the first paragraph of this article.

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