the nudge to “quit smoking”
The different nudges to "quit smoking" can be compared differently to sticks and carrots and so I don't agree with this argument, or more so, the way it is written. Perhaps it implies a bias, or not a strong enough argument proven previously. Something to attempt to consider when I am writing.
why are we not doing the same for chocolate manufacturers and alcohol producers?
Again, raises a good ethical question.
mandatory packaging set by policymakers should not be considered a nudge, as it openly regulates against certain activities, in this case smoking, and thus signals a stick rather than a nudge
I do not see how this limits or eliminates (signals a stick) our freedom of choice to continue smoking? It manipulates, yes. It seems more like a carrot. This is confusing in the essay. This is more an ethical question, right? Is it crossing a line. Guess I have to read the White paper to understand the argument for disrespecting our choices.
Hansen & Jespersen, 2013
Here it might be useful to add other references as well, to support and make the counter argument stronger, since the original one was made by the same authors.
Food for thought
Cheeky title, given the coming content.
The potential environmental benefit of such a small design change is arguably significant
I like that she ends each paragraph in this section with a justification for the positive use of 'nudges'.
As
A simple link would be better here (e.g. similarly, in the same manner, etc)
While sticks are regulations that eliminate or limit choices, such as outlawing smoking in public places,
If an example related to climate change were here it would've more relevant to the comparison of the carrots. Seems strange.
Critics, however, argue
offers both sides of the argument, and highlights it's an open problem.
One of the challenges that I want to scrutinise in this essay is that nudges sometimes tend to be misused, even abused, without explicit regulations
I appreciate the wording used in presenting the problem (such as, "challenges that I want to scrutinise")
Nudging has created new opportunities – but also challenges – for how choices are presented to us in our everyday lives.
Presents why this topic is relevant.
it conceals a paradox
Goes on to explain this
formally known as libertarian paternalism,
Another label
In the last decade
Time orientor.
learning through policy games in research or as an aid for decision-making remains both under-conceptualised and under-evaluated
Points out the gap, and importance/advancement of study basically
Policy game
This paragraph nicely explains how scenario based games are used specifically in policy making situations.
Scenario-based methods fit well into this logic since
Good justification after the first paragraph which set the gravity of the problem at hand: climate policy that addresses complexities involving scientific and social issues, uncertainty as well.
consummating
This paragraph is cheeky! It supports the personification seen throughout and makes the essay a fun one to read, and you're enticed to share with others.
Green buildings can act like trees, running on sunlight and recycling wastes,so that cities function like forests
Personification, quirky and easy to understand.
Yet on close inspection these perspectives are far from mutuallyexclusive. In fact, they’re complementary.
Argumentative sentence/justification nice written in opposition to the opening paragraph sentence.
Big Data versus Mother Nature
This is what the story is about, summarized in one sentence. Everything else is substantial detail.
most of the press surrounding the reinvention of citiescan be grouped into two camps
Presents opposing urban planning strategies
Inshort, if we don’t get cities right, it’s hard to imagine a healthy future forhumanity, let alone the biosphere.
Great way to explicitly connect the message of the previous sentences and points out the grandeur of the GHG emissions issue.
Since 2008
(O)CAR. Sets the scene for an opening paragraph with a time reference followed by percentages which is easy to follow and envision.
bustling hubs of humanity
words that evoke visual images
testament
This paragraph justifies it's suggested resolution and champions meta-science as something to be excited about over all.
As we adopt a more meta-scientific perspective, researchers willincreasingly appreciate that just as a single study cannot irrefutablydemonstrate the existence of a phenomenon, neither can a single failure toreplicate disprove it.
Impactful first sentence for conclusive paragraph.
As the emerging field of meta-science moves forward, it will beimportant to refine techniques for understanding how disparities betweenoriginal studies and replications may contribute to difficulties inreproducing results.
This paragraph transitions into the 'resolution' of the OCAR model, and details suggestions for future research.
An ambitious meta-scientific study
Plot of the story/ example of 'action'.
attempting to understand its own limitations,
The next couple of paragraphs presents the 'action' of the OCAR Model and provides an example of a study published in Science.
isdistinguished
This sentences points out the similarities prior then highlights the difference which makes it new and interesting
ach seeking to
aim
science is its ability to evolve
Character of the story: science.
Historically,
This sentences presents the 'opening' of the OCAR Model.
Science is fickle and ever-evolving, therefore it requires constant revision in order to hold unquestionable validity.