Even if you didn't have the time to produce a stratigraphy drawing, could you illustrate this with a drawing? Even if it's only one drawing that shows the general extents of the excavation, and a section that shows the general configuration of the trench.

For example, here, you should illustrate that speculation through some photographs or earlier views, etc.

The next three sections need the inclusion of the data, photos, some drawings, maps. They include interesting discussion over method, but they should also give the reader some of the data. If it's well illustrated and documented it can stand on its own and is less dependent on the linear story.

What seems to be missing from the article is a more horizontal and historical overview of the site. I haven't seen your illustrations, but I suspect you start with a location map. Here are some thoughts. Arizona is an intensive archaeological state. You might want to say something about nearby archaeological sites, or at least, what traditional CRM looks like in the area. But beyond that, I'd like to know more about the long-term history of the site. Much of it, I'm sure you already know, or can quickly collect. For instance, I remember Richard talking about some pig farm? I know, this context seems irrelevant to the site because it's not really a local community excavation. But are you far from the Mescalero Reservation or some national parks? Is it along Rte 52 or 84? What are those roads like? Do they have Walmarts? What about the Museum of Space History? There are all these nuclear weapon, etc test sites in the vicinity. The space-age, ET, and the military overlap create an interesting overlap for that particular place in the margins. Todd Hanson's book Archaeology of the Cold War might have something; he is the anthropologist for Los Alamos.

I don't know Bill. "The Games and Media Archaeology" and "Excavation as Popular Narrative: Game Over," feel like the heart of the article. Could they come earlier than the day-by-day narrative?

Some comments on structure and format. First, were you thinking of this as a journal article or a stand-alone volume with a catalogue, illustration, etc. Rather than starting with a day-by-day report on how you handled the archaeological challenges, why don't you start with the presentation of the trenches. My guess is that the day-by-day negotiations are more interesting intellectually, which is why they are first. But at some point early one, it would be nice to have an overview of the archaeological finds before the reader gets deeper into the chronology.