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  1. Apr 2021
    1. “Gay porn gives an opportunity to look at the male form and male beauty and the male face when orgasming,” Neville said. “What women liked most about male-male porn is versatility, and with heterosexual porn you are going to get penetrated eventually, and that’s dull,” she added. “A lot of ways it can play out with men is more exciting, more experimentation, more open to negotiation.”

      this quote is a great example that contributes a lot to your essay, specifically as a conclusion, because it very plainly says what is interesting or unique about gay porn. it does a good job of answering the central question (what is the appeal of gay porn?) and I think looking at it from a female lens is very interesting and I learned a lot reading this!

    2. The combination of masculine and feminine characteristics in bishōnen is used to explore notions of sexuality and gender. (Modern day KPOP and Timothee Chalamet/Harry Styles, a detachment from strong masculine).

      this is another very interesting sentence because of the examples you use (kpop, timothee chalamet, harry styles) which somehow, [I think because of my generation (good job with target audience!) is very familiar with these examples] which makes me understand exactly the point you are making about men with feminine charachteristics to explore sexuality. good job!

    3. The two Japanese homosexual archetypes -- samurai and kagema have allowed for themes and stories in yaoi or boys’ love to parallel the images first produced in shunga.

      this sentence intrigues me (in a good way!) because you did a good job of introducing a new theme while tying it back to an idea mentioned earlier (good new known).

    4. Timothee Chalamet has been on my celebrity crush list since I first saw him in Call Me By Your Name my sophomore year of high school. The movie was also the first time I watched gay sex, and for my young heterosexual self, it was eye-opening, to say the least. I found myself intrigued with gay culture, in all forms -- porn, movies, television, literature, history. And then I stumbled upon hentai, and more specifically yaoi manga.

      this is a really interesting, effective way of grabbing your audience. timothee chalamet is very well known among our generation, in my opinion especially for his role in Call Me By your Name (I also became obsessed with him in sophomore year specifically because of this movie) so using this reference in your introduction is really great to introduce readers into your topic of Japanese erotic art!

    1. California Modernism symbolizes warmth, nature, openness, and a various of cultures.

      this sentence also interests me, because it summarizes Neutra's stylistic development into California modernism very clearly by the use of the words: warmth, nature, openness, and cultures. it does a good job of tying the whole story together

    2. When the glass doors are opened, the entire living area becomes one with the outside, shattering the last boundary between indoors and outdoors. Because of these brilliant designs, the Nesbitt house feels earthy and open while looking streamlined and international.

      these two sentences are written very well stylistically to describe Neutra's knack for indoor and outdoor synergy. the use of nouns such as boundary and design interest me because you are bringing up an interesting point about neutra's style breaking physical boundaries.

    3. Neutra made sure to use the same material for interior and exterior walls (wood and stones) and the same material for indoor and outdoor floors. In that way, Neutra made the boundary between the outside, the pool and yard, and the indoors invisible, thus visually extending the house beyond the glass walls. To achieve the same effect, Neutra also replaced part of the exterior wall with steel frames. In this way, residents of the Kaufman House can easily look through the boundary of the house and into the wilderness. These detailed elements of design allow the flow of the desert nature to extend into the house uninterrupted.

      this point is well demonstrated by the two pictures above and to the side of the writing. it is true that by looking at the picture, the "boundaries" between the house and nature are almost uninterrupted in a way.

    4. Mid-century modernism is sometimes also referred to as desert modernism, a title that certainly fits one of Neutra’s most famous designs - the Kaufmann Desert House. In 1946, Neutra built the house for Edgar J. Kaufmann in Palm Springs, California, a well-known desert resort.

      this is a very good example for your essay, as it keeps the writing and Neutra's story flowing -- it shows his transition from international style architecture to mid-century modernism.

    5. The same problem existed in furniture design. Le Corbusier and Charlotte Perriand designed their world-famous Chaise Lounge for functionality and maximized comfort, but only rich clients could afford the lounge as a piece of collected art.

      this is an example that I am not sure is the most beneficial to the structure of the essay. it is a good point, but given that it is about furniture rather than architecture, I feel like it is introduced very quickly and then not talked about again. it seems a little distracting to the overall piece about Neutra

    1. In short, not only can individuals actively interact with nature outdoors if they choose, but the grand invitation of natural light allows occupants to soak the warmth of sun-rays and enjoy the gifts of nature from the comfort of their couch.

      the image with the big windows and natural light flooding into the room correlates well with this paragraph, specifically this sentence which does a great job of analyzing the image to fit the needs of the essay. it shows how people can interact with nature from even inside their home, accomodating natural living

    2. Cubism and de Stijl

      this could be an event/example that might distract from the main point/ contribute the least out of your examples because it's bringing up a new idea that doesn't seem to fit in with the previous paragraphs ideas.

    3. the draping greenery covering the exterior projects nature and living as a synergetic relationship

      another very descriptive sentence that does a good job of using nouns like relationship, nature, greenery, etc.

    4. First World War

      including this event is great because it provides good historical context that is important to understanding the shift in architectural and decorative style

    5. While to the average consumer a slab of concrete and beams are merely the necessary supplies for home building, architects are artists who use their mediums to transform objects into lifeforms that radiate depth and beauty

      love this sentence. it is a good they say/ I say, as well as a metaphor when saying "architects are artists who use their medium to transform objects…" the word choice of "lifeforms that radiate depth and beauty" is very good stylistically and the word "radiate" is particularly powerful in describing how architecture makes people feel.

    1. famously labeled the Nisei as politically passive, the most assimilationist of any generation. This was the generation that was sent, often as young adults, into the US concentration camps in World War II. They were taught to be 200% American in order to escape being seen as the enemy

      this is a very interesting piece of information that I did not know, but makes it even more important that i chose Nisei and Sansei as my target audience. I will definitely need to highlight this information as context in my WP 4.

    2. These were all people who, like my parents, were Nisei, the second-generation children of immigrants. (If they were not all literally the children of Japanese immigrants, they were of the same birth cohort as the Nisei).

      background informtation / context

    1. For all she experienced and accomplished, Herzig-Yoshinaga was, above all else, a model of strength and generosity, showing those around her, especially us “young people” (in her words), not only that one person can truly make a difference, but also that fighting racism and intolerance remains as important as ever.

      important quote : accomplishes what I seek to do and inspire in my wp4 project

    2. Herzig-Yoshinaga’s family was sent to the Jerome and Rohwer concentration camps in Arkansas. When she learned that her father was ill, Herzig-Yoshinaga traveled with her baby to Jerome; her husband was not allowed to join them. Her father died 10 days after they arrived, on Christmas Day 1943.

      this example is effective assuming that the reader values family and relationships

    3. Herzig-Yoshinaga recalled to me that her principal called her and her classmates into his office and said, “You’re not going to get your diploma because your people bombed Pearl Harbor.”

      direct, personal example of racism

    4. She was a singular hero in documenting the ugly truth that racism was at the heart of the incarceration, an activist and an inspiration to all who knew her. But even aside from all of that, her life reminds us of what happens when fear and prejudice combine to harm vulnerable communities.

      tone embodies empowerment of the Japanese American community through this woman

    5. She remembered the lack of adequate nutrition and the lack of privacy. But, most of all, she remembered strongly her loss of liberty.

      powerful word choice and phrasing, very direct and straight to the point

    6. n 1943, Aiko Herzig-Yoshinaga was an 18-year-old mother of a newborn living behind barbed wire and armed guards in the Manzanar concentration camp in California’s Mojave Desert.

      hook

    7. Aiko Herzig-Yoshinaga: The Activist Who Discovered the Truth About WWII Internment 1924-2018

      context -- title tells a about the article before I've even read it

    1. Jean-Raymond represents a new mold of designer altogether, and a new moment in fashion in which clothes are arguably no longer the sole purpose of a brand; a brand also needs to have a message. Jean-Raymond’s is that he never saw himself, or anything resembling himself, in a majority of contemporary fashion, and this is why his clothes are so personal to him, why he was so upset about a choir at a fashion party. His designs are a means of announcing himself, and this is his main goal — not money or ownership or praise, but in making clothes that make him feel seen, and in turn make other people feel seen as well.

      they say/i saw, and important to understanding Jean-Raymond's clothes

    2. At so many popular brands, he’ll tell me, the creative director could leave and be swapped out with someone else and nothing would really change. But to do work that is authentic, that gets at the core of who you are, that is where true strength lies.

      interesting point that shows how Jean-Raymond works, which is unique to him and his work

    3. He thinks of his clothing as individual works that people collect, like pieces of art (they range from $175 for a T-shirt to about $5,850 for a pleated wedding gown), and of each collection as an installation that presents a thesis. But the best word to describe him might be “literary”: He values story and context as much as cut or fit. Even the label’s name has a deeper narrative.

      they say/I say

    4. Jean-Raymond is the child of Haitian immigrants, and his designs — especially the way he presents them publicly — collectively offer a strikingly personal and singular narrative about his own life as a black designer in America.

      history given to emphasize the main point of the article