can probably remove one instance of "provided"

Not always

Present tense

I dont see an average Tf value, which would be good to have. You should probably explain how exactly to rearrange eq 1 to get the slope in your methods. You have a good discussion about what the error and precision mean, but it can be expanded on a little bit. Otherwise its a solid results and discussion section

The calculations section is a little hard to follow, and there is an instance of a present tense word in your methods. (paragraph 1, is). Other than that, it needs a little bit of shortening/taking out redundant words. But it is pretty solid.

i is not 1 for weak electrolytes, because they still dissociate just not fully. We cant calculate i for weak electrolytes yet. Your introduction is pretty solid, but it needs a bit of succinctness. There are a couple types that need to be fixed too, such as "complexly"

Cant use you.

Cant use "our." its too close to "us"

Its presented as 1.4 C, but the calculated class average is 2.4 C

Good job explaining exactly what the % error and r squared value mean.

The methods are decent. The chronological order and some of the wording should be checked on a part or two, but otherwise its good.

Strong introduction, I like how you jump right into explaining exactly what the reader should know.

in paragraph 2, the first sentence says 8 grams of lauric acid and benzoic acid were used, but 8 grams of benzoic acid were not used.

Good introdduction section, except it is a little scattered and it might be better off with some shortening/ making it more concise.

All tables figures and eqns check out.

This report is pretty strong, but can use a little bit of work. Mainly just shortening up sentences to be more concise. Another thing to work on is to explain which points of data were important on the labquest. Otherwise good job.

This report does a good job of explaining the results of the experiment, and thoroughly introduces what exactly a colligative property is. Good job.

Two instances of the word "average" are unnecessary. you can remove one or the other and the sentence will have the same meaning

This is a run on sentence and I would shorten it a bit. But it does make a good point

I would re-word this so that you use the words "freezing point depression" less. Maybe say "Tf represents the change in temperature from the initial freezing point"

you found the specific heat capacity

missing the actual value

how did you get moles

convert into kj

unnecessary to say that 1g was weighed

agreed

no explanation of eq 3

there is minimal discussion, this person just said "yeah we were off." there should be discussion of accuracy and precision.

you dont negate it

how?

goes in intro

need description of hess's law

This should go in the methods section, it has too much of an instruction feel to it.

all equations go in the introduction

lack of explanation of thermodynamics.

measured/ weighed

There is little background information on the subject. No equations or summary. A thermometer measure temperature changes, not a calorimeter.

Probably shouldnt say the 10 mL pipette measured out 10mL of fluid. just say itonce.

Reader does not have access to the lab packet.

Need numerical value.

The graph should go in the R+D Section.

This is an equation disguised as a method, and thus should have gone into the introduction section.

No descriptive caption is provided to go along with "picture 1"

This should have gone in the introduction section, with the rest of the equations used in the lab.

Still not passive voice

active voice

Not in passive voice.

This should have gone into the introduction section.

This is incorrect, as the students should have used the difference between the final volume and the initial volume, to get the volume of the rod.