11 Matching Annotations
  1. May 2024
    1. Work Cited

      There are no in-text citations (something you must have every time you reference specialized knowledge. See my announcement from 5/1.

    2. want and, in a sense, can dissect it into different layer

      Why is this a good thing?

    3. drivers

      ?

    4. the realm of audio

      sound quality? What are these realms you keep speaking of? Do they have geographic, cultural, political, even spiritual borders?

    5. Now,

      Not necessary

    6. So, what should you choose in your day to day? I believe it should be earbuds.

      I guess I don't have to read any more of the essay? Don't give away your argument so completely and so early.

    7. Strap in as we delve into the depths of this sonic showdown and uncover which reigns supreme: headphones or earbuds?

      This thesis statement is for a different persuasive/argumentative writing assignment than the one you have been assigned.

    8. you find yourself amidst the hustle and bustle of a crowded subway, seeking solace in the melodies of your favorite songs. Do you reach for the plush embrace of headphones, cocooning yourself in sound, or opt for the compact convenience of earbuds, slipping them discreetly into your ears? The choice seems simple, but beneath the surface lies a symphony of factors to consider.

      You describe a relatable situation well, but try and rephase without using "you"

    9. the battle rages between headphones and earbuds.

      is does?

    10. In a world of personal audio

      even for people who are hard or hearing? What about people who can't afford personal audio? What about people who don't know what you mean when you say, "personal audio?"

    11. Headphones vs Earbuds

      Is this the problem you are trying to solve? The problem posed by the assignment is that readers may not care to critically study an object like headphones. Your solution is how you convey the important of studying headphones.