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  1. Apr 2017
    1. The conclusion should bring the essay to a logical end. It should explain what the importance of your issue is in a larger context. Your conclusion should also reiterate why your topic is worth caring about.

      It's always good to remember to close the essay. I'll be sure to keep in mind a good closing.

    2. Pointing out what your opposition is likely to say in response to your argument shows that you have thought critically about your topic.

      The opposite side is important in your argument, and i'll definitely keep this in mind for my essay

    3. first-hand examples and experiential knowledge on your topic (specific examples help your readers connect to your topic in a way they cannot with abstract ideas) •Opinions from recognized authorities

      I think these are two important things to remember when looking for evidence for my topic

    4. one to two well-developed paragraphs to each reason/claim or type of evidence.

      This is good to remember. When making my claims I should have at least two paragraphs (this way I can focus on each one and make sure the reader understands why I'm using them).

  2. Mar 2017
    1. • Don’t bad mouth your ex as this promotes loyalty conflicts and may make it more difficult for her to heal from the losses associated with divorce. • Find ways to help her to build self-esteem such as encouraging her to develop interests and recognizing her efforts and strengths. Spend time doing things she enjoys with her. • Don’t let cynicism, sadness, or anger get in the way of your daughter’s future. If you have negative views of relationships, don’t pass them on to her. • Encourage her to spend close to equal time with both parents. Be flexible about “Parenting Time” - especially as she reaches adolescence and may need more time for friends, school, jobs, and extracurricular activities.

      These are similar to the same points my first article made.

    2. “Until I was 16, and I got my own car, I spent almost every weekend with my dad and some weeknights. Even after he moved to a nearby state, he would arrive early to my dance shows, bring me flowers, and stay after to take me out to dinner.”

      I think this is a good story to mention since it adds evidence to the point I'm trying to make

    3. Findings from the Children of the 90s study at the University of Bristol, showed that girls whose fathers were absent during the first five years of life were more likely to develop depressive symptoms in adolescence than girls whose fathers left when they were aged five to 10 years.

      I think this is a good point to mention in my essay

    1. clinically depressed or to develop eating disorders

      my dad speaks of mental toughness and how I'm beautiful no matter what. So, this definitely makes sense to me

    2. For example, women who were born in the 1970s are three times more likely than those born at the beginning of the twentieth century to work in the same field as their fathers-a finding that researchers have attributed not just to society's changing gender roles but also to daughters receiving more mentoring from their fathers.

      This is an interesting fact I didn't know. But it makes since. My mother went into the chemical business like her father.

    3. As you might guess, daughters whose fathers have been actively engaged throughout childhood in promoting their academic or athletic achievements and encouraging their self-reliance and assertiveness are more likely to graduate from college and to enter the higher paying, more demanding jobs traditionally held by males.

      I think this is a good point to make.

    4. Conversations about the importance of fathers usually revolve around sons: how boys benefit from having a positive male role model, a consistent disciplinarian, and a high-energy roughhousing partner on their way to pursuing career and family success in adulthood.

      I can point to multiple times in my life where I've read an article about the importance of a father in a young boy's life. Very few deal with girls.

    1. Be the kind of man you want your daughter to marry.

      This is an interesting point to make. I've never thought of this before. I guess it makes since. Treat your daughter the way you want every man to treat her, hopefully she learns from this and marries a man who treats her in that way

    2. Treat all adult women the way you want your daughter to be treated someday.

      This is my father to a T. He is respectful and nice to every woman he meets. He treats them all the same.

    3. Show her that real men can negotiate differences with women

      My parents never hid a fight or argument from me. They always do it in front of me. they always reach a compromise and my father's taught me the art of negotiation since I was five.

    4. Go to her events.

      My father has gone to every play, spelling bee, concert, math competition, and more that I've ever done. He's never missed anything. He usually cries when I'm up on stage, but he doesn't miss anything. My mom's dad missed most of her events, which had a negative impact on her as she got older.

    5. Celebrate her mind.

      My dad is constantly doing this. Everyday he tells me how pretty and smart I am. And most importantly how proud he is of me. My mother's father never did this for. Which is why as a teen she was desperate for him to say how proud he was of her. he has still never said it, but instead used her obvious need to want to hear it against her. This is not something a father should do!

    6. Attach with safety.

      Another important point. My dad has made it very clear on my safety and what not. A father is there to make it clear that you are not allowed to let any man do what he wants to do. Your body, your rights. No man is allowed to do anything you don't want him to do. My father made that very clear. Father's who don't do this, miss the opportunity to teach their daughter's a good lesson

    7. Attach to your daughters

      I use to have a necklace that said "daddy's girl" on it! My father and I would wear identical clothes when I was four, because he was my entire world. My best friend. And he didn't push me away, he loved it! To me this reminds me of the scene from "A Rebel Without a Cause" where Natalie Wood's dad scolds her for kissing him. Dad's shouldn't do this to their daughters!

    8. Love her mother

      This makes a lot of sense. How you treat a young girl's mother helps to formulate her opinion of how she should be treated in a relationship. If you are sweet and caring towards her mother, then this is what the girl will expect from her partner. And if she doesn't get it, she knows he isn't a good guy. If you treat her mother horribly, then this is what the young girl will expect. Because, this is the only model for a relationship she has.

    9. What all this means for a father or father figure is that he counts. He counts a lot. Regardless of whether he wants the responsibility, a father’s relationship to the world and to women sets down a template that will be played out for another generation

      This is harsh point to make. I have friends (girls) who's dad's always make excuses for why they can't spend time with them. My dad has never done this to me. This is really the point that a dad needs to get off his backside and be there for his daughter.

    10. When that learning is positive and helpful for negotiating the world, a daughter will grow up to be at ease in her own skin and in her sexuality. When it is conflicted or creates expectations that are demeaning or less than useful for cooperating with others, her relationship with herself, with other women, and with men will be troubled.

      This is a good point to make. It's like my dad always says SISO, GIGO. SISO means success in, success out. Garbage in, garbage out. This can be said for the father daughter relationship. A supportive, loving father is SISO for the young girl. A negative, distant father is GIGO for a young girl.

    11. she is 4 or 5 years old

      Wow! I didn't know this. I think this is another stellar point to put in my essay. But, I mean they even have books out there that say "I learned everything I needed to know by the time I was five" and stuff like that

    12. father (or a male in her life who takes a father role), that man becomes her guidepost for what to expect of men and what to expect of men’s attitude toward women.

      This is a really good point. How our father treats us and our mothers will help us to decide how we should let men treat us. It will basically develop our tolerance towards the behavior we can accept from a man. This is another good point to make in my argument

    13. Children really do learn what they live. Not having the perspective of older people, they consider whatever their family is like as their “normal.”

      As a young child we emulate what we see on tv. And since we don't have very many outside influences, our parents or siblings help to formulate our perception of the world and how people should be. Their influence can be either negative or positive.

  3. Jan 2017
    1. What were your favorite hobbies and pastimes in your childhood?

      I think this is a good question to ask Bailey, that way I can understand him more.

    1. Do you perform in public? Describe those occasions? Concerts, radio, TV?

      I know he has performed in public before, but this could be a great way to learn more about where he performs and what he does.

    2. Were you influenced by old records & tapes? Which ones?

      This is always a great question to ask. It can help you to learn more about a person, and it's always interesting to see what they like.

    3. Is your family musical?

      This could be a good question to ask. I can find out about his family, and I can understand a bit more as to why he became a musician.

    1. Just a couple more questions?

      This is my favorite part of this interview. It to comes across like a conversation, but I would't say it's very relaxed. The grandmother doesn't want to answer to many questions, which makes this interview both funny and kind of uncomfortable.

    1. On a scale of 1 to 10 what do you think your life would be different without animals?

      This interview has the feel of a conversation, but since it is a kid doing it there are a ton of questions involved in this interview instead of just talking.

    1. I feel like I’m in a better place. Not everything’s perfect, but it’s a lot better than it used to be.

      I think this was a nice conclusion to this interview. Throughout the whole interview the feeling that it's a conversation really played out well.

    2. : When I got out of the military, subconsciously, I pretty much checked out. So I’d say I did give up.

      I would say the main interview technique here is that these two are talking to each other like it's a conversation. They are both very relaxed.

    1. MJ: I know it’s not an easy thing, you know, to be able to share our story together. Even with us sitting here looking at each other right now, I know it’s not an easy thing. So I admire that you can do this. OI: I love you, lady. MJ: I love you too, son.

      I'm not sure how to take this story. My parents couldn't do this, wouldn't do this. My father would rather go to jail for killing the person who hurt me, than be able to sit across from them and forgive them. My mother is the same way.

    2. ust to hear you say those things and to be in my life in the manner that which [sic] you are is my motivation. It motivates me to make sure that I stay on the right path. You still believe in me. And the fact that you can do it despite how much pain I caused you–it’s like amazing.

      Damm right it's amazing. This story is amazing. How does something like this happen!

    3. Yeah. So you can see what I’m doing–you know first hand. We actually bump into each other all the time leaving in and out of the house. And, you know, our conversations, they come from ”Boy, how come you ain’t called over here to check on me in a couple of days? You ain’t even asked me if I need my garbage to go out!”

      Are you serious!! This lady deserves a medal. I wouldn't be able to do that. To care for the man that killed my child.

    4. After you left the room, I began to say: ”I just hugged the man that murdered my son.” And I instantly knew that all that anger and the animosity, all the stuff I had in my heart for 12 years for you–I knew it was over, that I had totally forgiven you.

      That's amazing that she could forgive him. My father couldn't.

    1. And I will forever be grateful for you. Not everybody gets to save their mom’s life.

      That's the sweetest thing I've ever heard. I'm crying now. But, she's right. That baby saved her.

    2. I guess I would have told you when I felt that you were old enough to understand. But I think that I was afraid to tell you. Because, you know, it’s very hard for mommy to talk about bad choices that I made. It breaks my heart. And I get very sad when I talk about it.

      I can understand that. Afraid to admit the truth, because you don't know if it will make your child want nothing to do with you. The fear of losing your baby. That makes sense. It's very sad.

    3. Oh my god, I loved you so much. And I just wanted everything in the world to be perfect for you. But in the hospital, here I was walking into the nursery to see my beautiful baby, and there were other mommies and daddies seeing their babies, and here I was in this big orange jumpsuit and shackles. And I was really, really, embarrassed.

      That experience must have been a slap in the face. You've given birth to your daughter, your going to see her. And there stands every other family, watching you. And there you are a prisoner. I think what she felt probably went past embarrassment. It was definitely enough to get her to never do drugs again.

    1. You may be better off just considering your father dead and gone.” Which, at the time, made pretty good sense to me. You know? After years and years of living with it.

      I would have lost my mind if a counselor told me that. I'm a daddy's girl, you tell me my daddy's dad I will lose it.

    2. And we realized how close we had come. And, uh, we maintained a fierce, loving allegiance to one another through to the very end.

      I imagine you did.

    3. And I remember the third night he was actually at home he wanted to go and call the, ah, wife of one of the men who had died in prison. And, ah, we had about one of those to do a night for a couple of weeks. He felt it was his obligation to report what he knew about the nobility of men who had suffered greatly and had died of injury or infection or, in a couple of cases, just a broken heart as he described it.

      Wow. What a guy. After everything he experienced he finds the strength to then call the wives of the men who weren't coming home to tell them what had happened.

    4. The day that dad came home we had been forewarned about dad’s injuries. But standing there on the tarmac, when he came down the a…came down the steps, I remember just holding his featherweight frame in my arms. We were just sort of stumbling over our love for one another.

      What powerful imagery. "Holding his featherweight frame in my arms." Wow. It reminds me of the pictures my mom showed me of the prisoners in Auschwitz, how you could see their bones. How there was nothing to them anymore. They were just skeletons. It must of been a very emotional moment when he saw his father again.

    1. And when he said, ‘I don’t know what it would be like to have it.’ That was difficult for me. So then I had to ask a follow-up just out of, I don’t know, self preservation because I thought I was gonna cry.

      That had to be tough. My mom's grandpa had alzeihmers, and near the end of it he got really aggressive and hostile. She said it was tough on her. But, having to hear your grandpa say he doesn't know what it would be like to have it, that's just a punch to your gut.

    2. I think that says a lot about his childhood that there was really no one there to help him get out of the water or keep him warm.

      That's a good way to look at it. Her grandpa really had to fend for himself. It was a tough-love world back then. Either you get it done or it doesn't get done.

    3. Well if something happens just say, ’I’m sorry’ and get it over with. There’s no reason to carry on. I just say ‘I’m sorry. I love ya,’ and that was the whole story.

      His answers really reflect on his generation and how he was raised. Also I love his answers.

  4. Dec 2016
    1. Instead of always using keywords to relate back to old information, you can instead use pronouns, such as “it” or “their.”

      This makes sense. That way you aren't constantly bringing up a keyword, which can become repetitive.

  5. Nov 2016
    1. The idea or metaphor or paragraph that I think is most wonderful and brilliant is often the very thing that confuses my reader or ruins the tone of my piece or interrupts the flow of my argument.Writers must be willing to sacrifice their favorite bits of writing for the good of the piece as a whole.

      That's very true.

    2. Do you still agree with it? Should it be modified in light of something you discovered as you wrote the paper? Does it make a sophisticated, provocative point, or does it just say what anyone could say if given the same topic? Does your thesis generalize instead of taking a specific position? Should it be changed altogether? For more information visit our handout on thesis statements.

      This is good advise. If you don't still believe what you wrote or if you feel like it doesn't make sense then you should change it.

    3. reconsidering your arguments, reviewing your evidence, refining your purpose, reorganizing your presentation, reviving stale prose

      It can be difficult to do these things with your own work. We do something and we don't want to see the imperfections or things that we've done that don't make sense or help make our paper better. I'm excited to do all these things with my personal narrative.

  6. Oct 2016
    1. “the sadness and despair contained within the lines of this poem,”

      It's true. The poem has the Scottish dialect which can make it difficult to read, I've read this poem many times throughout the years and most of my life I saw it as a happy poem. But, when he mentions the sadness and despair I can see where that comes from. It's an ode to a mouse, from a man who isn't that wise. To me the man is almost looking at the mouse wishing he could be one. It's a tale of a man who wants to be out of his own skin. In my opinion.

  7. Aug 2016
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    1. Sweaty Palms, a comics anthology about anxiety.

      If you want a comic on anxiety, come to my condo. I'll give you a freaking show on what anxiety looks like.

    1. it’s pretty small so perfect for if you don’t have a lot of kitchen space (hello, college/uni dorms!), dishwasher safe, super easy to use and best of all, it chops onions and garlic cloves evenly + quickly.

      I think it's pretty impressive that a 17 year old is writing this blog, and is provided teens with tools and information to lead a healthy life.

    1. Journalists just want to be treated like beautiful, unique snowflakes in a world of toil and strife.

      I like how he describes journalists here. You'd think you would have to get their attention by being clever when really you don't.

    1. your reader with my blog.

      I'm not sure if this is how you should say that. "your reader" doesn't make much sense. I think for it to be correct it should probably be, "I'm on here every single day and will enlighten you, my reader, with my blog." Or something like that.