The girl is from Colerain Township, but she hasn’t been home since she found her mother slumped over the toilet last year, high on heroin and barely conscious. Her father died of an overdose earlier this year.
So sad...
The girl is from Colerain Township, but she hasn’t been home since she found her mother slumped over the toilet last year, high on heroin and barely conscious. Her father died of an overdose earlier this year.
So sad...
, “I’m a Dream Believer.”
This description adds an emotional contrast to the story... a little girl with hope who's parents are doing heroin...
One man walks toward the glass doors at the clinic’s entrance with a sleeping baby on his shoulder and a girl in pajamas at his side. Two women with little boys follow a few minutes later. Then a man in a business suit. And a woman in a waitress uniform. And a young man walking his dog.
I like the choppiness of this part of the article. It adds a feeling/touch to the story you might not get in other structures/styles of writing.
It sounds like she’s saying her son overdosed. But that can’t be right. Tommy has been doing great. He’s been free of heroin for a year now. He goes to meetings. He’s a mentor to others struggling with addiction.
Writer takes on the narrator voice here. Describes the feelings and emotions of the "characters" as if they are his/her own.
Some of the women here have been using drugs most of their adult lives. Some are pregnant. Some have children.
Again, the repetition reminds me of the elements authors use in books to grab the reader's attention. Adds more dramatic tone.
“You’re not going to change me,” he says.
Wow. Really puts the crisis of the heroin problem in perspective.
There have to be drugs in that car, he thinks.
Story book feel!
Heroin is big business, but not for the Mexican immigrant Reagan is tailing today. He’s just a suspected courier who might make $500 or so. The real money flows to the gangs that control distribution, and to the drug cartels back in Mexico.
Again, would likely not see statements like this is inverted pyramid type stories.
Now she’s standing before the judge, eyes sunken and hair tangled, leaning hard against the table.
I appreciate the description of the scene... not too focused on the appearance, but rather the nature of the environment.
There’s a 70-year-old Army veteran who stashed a bag of syringes in a basement crawl space. A Taylor Mill woman who tried to hide needles in her vagina after shooting up. A St. Bernard woman who overdosed when a friend injected her with heroin.
wow...
Their eyes are sunken, their hair a tangled mess
Nice descriptive - and beneficial - details for the reader. More images to imagine.
Doherty nods. He turns back to the page and writes a single word. Heroin.
Story-telling DRAMA!
Doherty crushes his cigarette and sits down to fill out a form for new residents, but he’s stumped by a question about his history with drugs. It’s a long history.
Story-form statement. Well written for a narrative.
blue slippers
These details give the reader an image to put in their head while reading.
7:25 a.m.
Reminds me of the "turn" we learned about with another story writing style, or the eyewitness report.
There is only the struggle to endure and survive.
Likely wouldn't see this in an inverted pyramid structure. It's more of a side comment.
region’s greatest health crisis
The infographic following this statement really emphasizes the dramatic element of this story and the seriousness of it.
And Middletown. And Norwood. And Hamilton. And West Chester Township. And countless other cities and towns across Ohio and Kentucky.
The repetition reminds me of something you'd see in an actual book. It adds an element of drama and seriousness to the tone of the article.
“If I wanted to take online classes, I would pay a lot less,” said Selby. “We’re paying full tuition to get an incomplete education.”
Overall story structure was okay in reference to the wall street journal format, just a bit of a dry story.
There’s also the problem of reliable internet access. Millions of Americans returning to their families in rural areas have no broadband access there, making online courses impossible for them. And as the wider shutdown caused by the virus cripples the economy, even households with broadband service might find it harder to afford if parents lose jobs.
Not only do people not want to go back for their own personal reasons, but there are logical and technical issues that can occur - prohibiting them from learning to the best of their ability.
Regardless of the pandemic’s effects, online education has been on the rise. Nearly 3.3 million college students, or 1 out of every 6, took only online classes in 2018, the last year for which the figure is available, according to Jeff Seaman, director of Bay View Analytics, which tracks online education. That was the highest percentage ever.
though this was a bit wordy, it was nice information to read... interesting.
But adaptation has its limits. Washington and other schools are canceling classes that require hands-on training, such as some art and engineering courses.
The background seems to be how students simply don't want to go online for schooling.
The differences between a well-planned online course and a classroom-based course that’s forced to adapt can be sizable. With the former, professors use technology that allows group discussions, posting of materials and other interactive features
Really the first paragraph that's very descriptive and informative to the reader. Takes way too long to get to this good, hearty information.
If university and college officials were worried that some of their students might not come back once they were moved from real-world classrooms to online education, the experience so far seems to suggest the opposite.
We assumed this must be the nut graf of the story, but we found it to be a bit unclear and blurry as to whether this was it. The writer wasn't super obvious with this.
“I would not say I’m enjoying it,”
The quotes certainly add feelings and emotional creativity to the story as a whole. Gives the reader a better understanding.
Madison Selby was already disappointed that her courses at the University of Washington were going online as part of the effort to contain the spread of the coronavirus. <img width="200" height="67" src="https://i2.wp.com/hechingerreport.org/wp-content/uploads/2015/01/icn-partner-pbs_newshour.png?fit=200%2C67&ssl=1" class="attachment-200x999 size-200x999" alt="" loading="lazy" srcset="https://i2.wp.com/hechingerreport.org/wp-content/uploads/2015/01/icn-partner-pbs_newshour.png?w=300&ssl=1 300w, https://i2.wp.com/hechingerreport.org/wp-content/uploads/2015/01/icn-partner-pbs_newshour.png?resize=205%2C68&ssl=1 205w" sizes="(max-width: 200px) 100vw, 200px"> This story also appeared in PBS Newshour Then she got an email from a professor who said he’d rather cancel his last couple of classes than deal with the “dumpster-fire potential” of teaching remotely. This was not how Selby had imagined her last year of college.
Gage and I agreed that the lede was lackluster and not successful in catching the reader's attention. Very likely to "put the reader to sleep."