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- Apr 2022
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Or an introductory phrase may provide other kinds of contextualinformation:
No shade I really do eat up the intro's into quotes š š . I really do try grabbing the reader by the ponytail and pulling them straight to what I'm about to say.
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Mindyou, Iām not suggestingthat every sentence shouldhave this old-newstructure,butitās aremarkably common pattern:Most physicistsbelieve thatmatteriscomposedofparticles called fermions.It hasbeen said thattheAmerican Constitutionisasystem designedbygeniusesto be runbyidiots.What stands outinthe accountofInca religion is thedivine mission oftheruler
Unrelated to this, but nuts and bolts is making me realize that the tips I need to start taking are honestly from my own reading self. Push out all the bs that was engraved in me as a kid and start picking up on patterns in writings that I genuinely enjoy. Start realizing why I stop reading something and steer away from that in my own writing is such a good idea for myself.
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Whenthis punch-line techniqueisused to bindaparagraph,itāscalledachain structure.Hereāsanotherexample:Ourbodiesarecomposed ofcells. The cells eachhaveinthemanucleus.Within the nucleusaretwenty-three pairsof chromosomes.Ineachpair,onechromosomecame fromthegeneticmotherand onefromthegeneticfather.Locatedonthechromosomesare thegenes,the basic unitsofheredity,composed ofakindofproteincalledDNA.Anyparticulargeneofaparentmayormay notbe passedtoachild.Agene passedonmayormaynot beāexpressedāāthatis,achildwiththegene mayormaynothavethecharacteristic.Achitd cancanyerieparentās gene for blue eyes,andyethavebrown eyes.(BarbaraKatzRothinan,Recreating Motherhood)This structure helps thereader absorbalotofinformation withoutfeelingoverwhelmed
A lot of times when reading I get extremely overwhelmed. I try to go sentence by sentence to make it less difficult on my brain but after a long while of doing that I start realizing I genuinely have no clue what I'm reading.
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Asastylistic matter, expect to use pronouns mostly within logical units,andtoreturntotheir antecedent nouns atnatural emphasis pointsāthebeginningsand ends of paragraphs,for instance
This is important to me, especially, to keep the audience's trust in what I'm saying to them. I don't want to get too involved to where it looks like my views are blurred.
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Rumble pronouns andother pointerspermitpowerful effects. Thehistorian William Manchester, for instance, concludesadense anddetailed paragraphonEuropean power politicsinthe 1930swithastrong sentence built onarelative pronoun: āThis wasthe final blow toappeasement.ā Inexperienced writers tendnottotrustthepowerofsuchsimple effects, even going outoftheir way to avoid them
I noticed previously that this author's use of pronouns is what really hooked me into feeling some sort of connection to the person's name I'm reading in writing.
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Eithercharacter,Chinaor the UnitedStates,may betheappropriateonetofocus on,dependingon the writerāsintentionsāor both, perhaps,insuccessive paragraphs or sections. The keyistoselect and move amongcharacters according toasensible design
I have an international politics class where we write a lot about conflicts in the world between states. I can definitely use these tips for my tests and papers when I'm asked to be persuasive in the future.
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whyitmatters: Revision3Macgregor arguesthat employees who feelasense ofautonomywill havehigher motivation and productivity.
I didn't really understand what other revisions could have been made to the first revision but now I completely understand this. I feel connected to the person they're citing!
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Hereāsanother exampleofhowthinkingaboutcharacterscan makeapassageeasiertoread.
Brings me to the other chapters talking about how as we get older we're put under the impression that somehow we're supposed to speak more and more "intelligently" and the harder it is to read, the more smart it is. It obviously isn't true but this inspires me to write more in my voice than I usually do because it's easier.
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Ifthewriterhas donehisjob,thetravel willproveworthwhileandmaybeevenentertaining.
It reminds me of a certain feeling I get when writing is so good I just can't stop reading because I'm tucked into some seatbelt.
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Good essays unfoldlikestoriesā--notin the senseofbeingdramaticorexciting,butinthesenseofshowing characters doing things orbeingdescribed. Hereisapassage abouttheAmerican political systcminthe19thcentury
I've never actually thought about it like this before! If I think in this light that could really help with engagement.
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- Feb 2022
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I just find it extremely aggravating that people genuinely out of touch with reality get to make these decisions for us. It just sets us back entirely and makes it 10x harder for us to succeed. Like right now where we have to change the writing style implemented into us by the education system. It's not our fault, but it's our fault if we don't fix it now.
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Machiavelli praises republics in The Discourses. Above all he praises theRoman republic, because it had a powerful army, and conquered and helda vast empire. (26 words
I'm good at writing powerful sentences like these due to all the work we do on thesis'
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The idea is a good one, but the sentence, running without a pause, is toolong for easy reading
I don't struggle with this necessarily, but I find it hard figuring out where to add breaks when I don't want to stop the thought.
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Euthyphro continues to furtherjustify his actions.
Tbh I see nothing wrong with this š I would probably type this
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Political-institutional is the kind of claptrap that makes the pompousstyle so tempting for inexperienced writers. It sounds weighty but addsnothing
This makes it abundantly clear to me that the blame for this shouldn't be on the students whatsoever. If you're consistently assigning us more difficult readings every time, we're going to assume we're supposed to follow that arch. Trying to constantly out-do ourselves to the next grade's professor.
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Thereās a hefty reduction in thetotal number of words.
I guess we have to use as least amount of words as possible to meet the word count. Putting in the extra work would automatically make the writing more powerful!
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Pompous
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. But hereās the same code, revised whenthe state, in a temporary fit of sanity, decided to make its laws intelligible to ordinary people
EXACTLY what I was mentioning earlier.
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whether what weāvesaid is essential to what we mean, and eliminate what isnāt
It's almost a constant battle trying to figure out how what I'm writing sounds as an outside reader. I try to read it out loud to help but then that ties into my issue with putting too much voice in my writing.
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used lethal methods
Almost reminds me of news stations consistently using the word "alleged" and then proceed to show a video of the literal crime being committed. smh.
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Children learn to read and write short, plainsentencesāāSee Spot runāāthen grow older and begin to write as ifāObserve Spot in the process of runningā were somehow an improvement.
This also probably has to do with the fact that this is how we learned things like Math, and the alphabet into words.
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It was a strategy of deliberate opacity that letthe company hide its fraud in plain sight, legally speaking (confusedstock analysts mainly stayed mum for fear theyād be laughed out of theirjobs).
This is actually hilarious and reminds me of when politicians use big words to cause enough confusion to hide what they're actually doing.
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Learning to distinguish between clear and unclear writing will alsohelp you understand what you read, both in college and elsewhere. Professional writingāmemos, contracts, public documents, and the likeāoften seems intended to impede rather than promote understanding.
I find myself taking hours on short assigned readings sometimes just simply because I have no idea what I'm reading and have to keep re-reading every paragraph over and over and over. This skill would propel me in so many ways.
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But this is not simpleminded at allārather, it is simple, and far morepowerful than the first version
I can see why this happens now because if I'm trying to figure out what I'm reading, I'm not actually reading the entire sentence.
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can make it seem that formality is the mostimportant thing to aim at.
I guess since my education journey is different than a lot of others, because of my identity, I have the opposite problem haha.
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But college essays are written in an environment in many ways ill suitedto risk taking
I actually feel that I had more restraints in High School. College I feel it is much easier to write about how something relates to my own life. Risk taking, however, I understand because of the rules of the language.
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cogent
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It combines themost important rules and conventions of academic writing with the rudiments of good style.
This is definitely something I have mentioned, regarding this class, before. I want to find that perfect balance between the two.
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