Ok, good. This is an excellent and succinct survey of the art and architecture of Rome...the only problem is that this research project should have been less general and more narrow in its scope. The mapping component is weaker than it could be....perhaps a mapping element to each monument would have been warranted. Well written, structured, and researched project....put this energy and organization into a more compelling and thesis driven subject and you might be able to do very good work in art history.

OK, good. The connection of the images to text and the mapping aspects are hard to follow...Delacroix, Courbet, Thomas Cole, Juliet, Cameron, and Toulouse Lautrec, Edelfeldt... are interesting comparisons, but maybe require amplification and closer commentary. The map points might have been more specific and focused on easily identifable and important places associated with the movement.

Where is mention of these places: Gower Street: John Everett Millais's childhood home, where the initial meetings took place. Chelsea: Rossetti's home, "Tudor House," Red House, Bexleyheath: William Morris and Jane Burden (Rossetti's muse).

Ok, good. An interesting subject on many levels, not the least of which is the unusual career in terms of a professional female travelling around Italy and England pursuing commissions and work. This part of the StoryMap could have been stronger, especially in that the mapping tools are worth investigating and utilizing...the map use is static and fails to explain much...lacking interpretive information Also, there needs to be a stronger thesis right from the beginning...

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Ok, good. Interesting subject with much potential. I wonder if the attempt to cover all of these major works by Nietzsche is too broad a subject for such a short treatment. Also, it seems that there is a bit of a struggle to correlate place with philosophical ideas...the locations seem to be related to individuals and where they lived...I wonder if certain areas or art centers might have been a stronger connection, in other words can one trace the influence of Nietzsche narrowly to individuals or might this influence be better seen in loci of art movements? The introduction of Die Brucke and the expressionists..seems to suggest this. Then there are other movements that may be relevant such as the fururists, dadaists, and surrealists. The StoryMap platform should afford ways to nail down these locations very definitely, it is hard to know what the relationship to place is in your StoryMap ( just points on a map with little explanation). In any case, a narrower focus and a deeper dive into the literature related to the art elements would be warranted. BTW, you don't cite "The Birth of Tragedy"...isn't thatb where Nietzche develps the ides about the Apollonian and Dionysian forces in art?

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Excellent! A real thesis!

OK, good. Very interesting subject and a compelling artist to consider. Klimt's attention to pre-classical Greek art, Egyptian art, and medieval mosaics is quite interesting in relationship to his own mature style which is highly decorative, borrowing many of the characteristic forms of these periods. This opposition to the academic norms is interesting...and Klimt's specific response to classicism, academicism is unique...so, the StoryMap is on the right track and could be very rewarding research with further study and interpretation.

CLARIFICATION Nietzsche was considering Aeschylus, Sophocles, and Euripides in this context, no?...these are classical dramatists are they not? The archaic and pre=classical elements of Greek art may have appealed to his interest in decorative ornamentation?

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Ok good. The scope of the StoryMap is quite broad and thus the quality of the interpretation of the material tends to gravitate toward generalities and well known and well worn ideas. Short of becoming a Leonardo specialist, a dubious claim in itself, it is very hard to find material that is particularly innovative. At the least I think there might have been a better connection between actual works: paintings, drawings, etc. (images) and the locations, instead there was a fair amount of repetition and generality. The last three sections could be edited down significantly. I am not sure that Leonardo ever actually visited Paris....

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Ok, very good subject. I think the format could have been better employed....the images of the paintings as links with text along the points of the maps made a lot of sense in terms of concept, but in practice one might look to other StoryMap tool options to make the images and texts fell less like footnotes. The writing could use revision in many places...not a difficult fix

Bierstadt put the "expanse" in the Westward Expansion

Is this an exaggeration, or are there cliffs of this scale in mid-Nebraska?

CLARIFICATION Did Bierstadt himself name this mountain after the Colonel?

Foreground is strong contrast of value....middle and background is subtle color harmony, so Bierstadt is expertly conveying space, near space, and deep space with both value and color....

DICTION "impending"? Impending suggests an action ...mountains usual stay put

HYPERBOLE "This is a painting no other artist would make, except for Bierstadt"

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What/where is this image, Hudson river Valley...West?

THESIS An well conceived thesis statement should be inserted here, right at the beginning.

OK, good.. This is a very interesting topic. The StoryMap does a good job detailing , through letters and other primary sources, the preoccupations of Van Gogh's experience in Holland and Belgium, especially underscoring his lifelong struggle with loneliness and social awkwardness ( Precise cites including publication info , page numbers, edition etc. is neccessary). The Antwerp portraits are particularly interesting I think since they appear to be almost a transitional style which appears to be a bridge between the Hague school like early work and the well known "post-impressionist" work of his mature style...which commences with a move to France. More in depth treatment of the paintings and drawings ( excellent selection BTW) themselves and a strong connection with a better formed thesis would be an improvement and quite a bit of revision in the writing would further improve the StoryMap.

THESIS: " This StoryMap will outline these places and attempt to demonstrate X, Y, and/or Z...."?

Ok, interesting subject. This may be too broad a subject to adequately contend with in such a short treatment.One wonders if the cause and effect of the events described are quite as clear cut as it might appear in your StoryMap. An example of an issue in this StoryMap is the big jump between images like "The Triumph of Death, c.1350 (fresco) Fig 7." and Botticelli's "Birth of Venus"...perhaps a better approach would have been to focus on images directly affected by the events of the Black Death....

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The biggest and insurmountable problem with this StoryMap is that it is too broad in scope and lacks a thesis and reads as a mere listing of facts and basic info. It lacks a workable thesis and if the thesis is something like " this StoryMap will outline the evolution of Neoclassicism in the history of art" then it will be less a research paper than an "outline" which is not the intention of the research project. Maybe you could have covered Winckelmann's travels, what influenced him and how he influenced the development of a neoclassical style?

Ok, there is a lot to unpack here...overall this reads as more of a listing of Dürer's movements and journeys, which in itself is a valuable list. But, perhaps given the reputation and range of works by Durer and their relevance in the art history, it might have been a better strategy to focus on a few of his movements rather than attempting a comprehensive account. A narrower approach could have been an opportunity to A.) come up with a workable thesis and B.) focussed your research and resources.

Ok, this is a good subject, but also a very widely covered subject. Perhaps a narrower focus on one aspect of VG's travels might have been warranted. The bibliography is verty basic and limiting....perhaps deeper reading into the subject might have uncovered clues to a more insightful StoryMap.

Is this where his style changes in magor ways?

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ID Does "uncle Mauve" have a full name?

THESIS This is a general introductory account of VG's debt to travel, but lacks an incisive thesis.

OK, Good: Very interesting subject, these works are sui generis in the history of art. Perhaps there could be more development of the ideas surrounding somatic depression and how this was ascribed as a condition afflicting the artist. Format: I wonder if the timeline component could have been better used inline...throughout the StoryMap, the map is fixed on "Calle del Desengano" for the entire timeline. The individual Black Paintings were well integrated with the map elements, but it is a little unclear what the locations the maps id, i.e. are these"points" supposed to id where the paintings are now located, or something else? Is no. 4 the locus of the "Meadow of San Isidro" the place, or the painitng...and how does this relate to no.3 the black version of the subject? Some of the writing could use revision and further editing should this be presented in a more formal vehicle/medium.

OK, good introduction to this imortant painter. What is missing is a more penetrating interpretation of the painter and place...the part the deals with architectural imagery is very interesting, I wonder if this might have been the oportunity for comparisons of actual Timurid and Safavid architecture....or something along these lines. As it is , the StoryMap appears to be too much of a mere listing of important facts with not enough of a "driving thesis"

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Ok, an interesting subject and you touch upon some important issues in regard to the sale of art on the marketplace. Much revision of the text would be very helpful as would would a better structure of the format...for instance: a clear thesis statement would be the best way to improve the sructure..." This story map will utilize The Nativity with the Prophets Isaiah and Ezekiel to cast a vignette " is rather vague... The conclusion raises additional questions without really nailing down the defense of a well formed thesis. But, this could make for a truly excellent StoryMap with a thorough re-working!

Ok, A very big lift to take on...too big! Most of the interpretation relies on basic introductory information....wikipedia level material...and the text rerads too much like a mere listing of basic ideas. There is also a fair amount of redundancy....The Michelangelo scholarship is of course very extensive, the bibliography thus cited is hard to evaluate...maybe more specific publications on Michelangelo's travels might have been warranted.

This might be the best thesis...it should be right at the beginning of the text

Very good! Well researched , ocumented, and written.

Excellent thesis

There is a lot of good research in this project...there is a sense that Van Eyck benefitted significantly from observations experienced along the scenes of his travels. But it also seems that accurate depictions of actual places was not a feature in his work...comparisons of van Eyck's pictures with period depictions of Jerusalem, for example, might be instructive...perhaps even comparisons of interior scenes by other hands, Netherlandish and otherwise, would be interesting...but there is no doubt that the symbolic nature of his paintings was perhaps more to the point.

Some of the writing and format could do with a thorough revisioning, but the idea is strong.

Ok, ery good. Well researched and documented and well witten.

Ok, Well written. Good as far as it goes....maybe a bit too generalist and introductory for a research project...

I wonder if this is really necessary

natural beauty

attracted "many" types

innovative

Ok, this reads more like a decent guidebook than a research paper or project. This is in part because the subject is impossibly large, too much for the limited scope of the project. A narrower and more closely reasoned thesis might have been a good idea...the project has a good bit of continuity, but in the end it mostly bssic info that a brief glance at wikipedia might cover...

Check the image...it is in fact a poor recreation of the fresco

Misleading statement....Brunelleschi is mostly responsible for the dome....

There should be a thesis in here...

Ok, The scope of this project is very broad..Vasari's "lives" and Vasari's career as artist, designer, architect. The treatment of the subject is basic and introductory, for the most part, lacking a clear and manageable thesis....i.e. there is the Florence-Rome comparison...might be a good thesis, but we don't see that in the body of the text..Rome is scarcely treated after an early but important mention. So, the big problem is basic organization and structure...and a basic guiding thesis....

Painting or drawing?

OK, very basic work here and not much beyond introductory research. Your reading and research need to be more probing, you need to develop the thesis to a much greater extent.

EXPLAIN isn't the main idea that the angel "announces" her incarnation?

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TOO INTRODUCTORY This should be a thesis statement, not basic introductory stuff...

Ok, very good. An important subject treated with a good amount of research. Some of the writing could be revised for claritv and better grammatical formation, but all in all a good use of the platform and the sources. The images should be captioned completely in-line: artist, title, medium, dimensions, date, repository etc.

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Ok, Very good. The images are excellent and the StoryMap is well presented and written. The bibliography is not as deep as one might hope...more reading ( books and periodicals) and thesis development would be an improvement.

I would start right away with "Robert Adam" section rather than the intro to neoclassical arch. The mapping part of the platform might have been more focussed on the Grand tour elements...maybe what specific influences and examples inspired Adam... but really very nice to see a project on important architecture!

Ok, good...well written. I wonder if there is perhaps more continuity in the two phases of residence cited? But, certainly the scale, at least, of the commissioned work in Milan was a major factor.... BTW, the "Sforza Horse" is a modern reconstruction and should be id'd as such

AMBITIOUS thesis....too ambitious! Quite a lot of effort went into this project...but perhaps a narrower approach might have been a better approach...every aspect of Michelangelo's artistic output is really beyond the scope of a 4 page StoryMap...you touch on a number of important areas of Michelangelos' life and career....next tome pick one and do a deeper dive into the specific scholarship on the subject.

OK, good. I think some more time spent on how precisely Manet's work differed from the typical Salon work might have been merited. The typical landscape scenes of the impressionists also don't really play a huge role in Manet's universe....so, where does that leave us? A painter preoccupied with the grand figure narratives of the past...Titian, Velasquez, Goya etc...socially connected to the avante-gard impressionists, nevertheless eschewing their most obvious stylistic concerns....a sui generis figure that is all but impossible to pigeonhole...for me Manet is the most compelling painter among the impressionists and their followers...the first modern artist in me estimation.

Ok, big subjects touched on in the project. Good effort to draw from secondary sources. ..but the reading, the bibliography is quite basic. Cassatt seems to be an independent figure asserting feminist ideas...the depiction of the traditional roles of women, child-rearing , needlepoint, celebration of motherhood, etc. can be seen as empowering, but it might also be argued that these self-same subjects could be viewed as safe, "domestic" subjects, only modestly nudging the liberation of women forward.<br /> I was very interested in her travels which may be another clue about her indepedence...but might also raise interesting questions about her social status...was she a feminist pioneer or rather a wealthy scioness free to move about without the hindrance of and obeisance to a husband. Perhaps she was both which would merit tconsideration

This is a lot to unpack...for example, wasn't much of her time spent in France and thus her paintings were on french "subjects" ?

The bibliography is quite thin...the thesis, while informative barely gets at much that is not pretty introductory and the commentary on the works is perfunctory as well

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ID: Orazio Gentileschi was an important painter in this period in Rome

Ok, theproject reads too much like a survey of life and career, which is good as far as it goes, but the problem with this is that it doesn't really get us much further down the road in our understanding of J.L.David,,,and the geographic connections line up with basic information as well.

Show casting" do you mean showcasing?

There is not a clear thesis in all of this introductory material, which is informative, but too general.

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"Flemish painting"?

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GOOD IDEA Johann and Jan van Eyck are one and the same?

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Bibliography is mostly good, but specific cites, [aka "footnotes"] are required. All images must be labelled fully: artist, title, medium, dimensions, date, repository etc.

DEVELOP: It is unclear what these numbers refer to. Also, the mapping part of the project is less integrated in the project than might have been desired...looks like it is an afterthought rather a central idea

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CLARIFY: The Salon de la Paix was a room within the Hôtel de Ville, the city hall of Paris. The Louvre is a world-renowned museum in Paris, housing a vast collection of art and artifacts. The Salon de la Paix no longer exists (it was destroyed in 1871),

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Surely not all Parisians, just "Les révolutionnaires:"

DICTION Did it allow him or did English art and lit influence him...

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OK..I see the connection now

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EXPLAIN: the chronology of this examples is confusing....what does the England visit haver to do with this?

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Maybe procurer might be better here

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ASSERTION BIAS: Is this an oversupply...also, what is meant by the term "artists"

OK, 2%...also where is the exact source info?

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These are good map points...the captions are very general...I wonder if some other ref. to Caravaggio could have been introduced?

CLARIFY: Is this the Knights of Matla or The Order of Saint John or someting else?

knighted by the Grand Master of the Knights of Malta in 1608...so, he was a Knight of Malta?

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DICTION: There were no movie stars at this time...

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DICTION: watch out for terms like famous....and renowned...etc

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CLARIFY: is chiaroscuro different than tenebrism?

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