Sharply aware of India’s worsening crisis of youth unemployment, most of them are determined to channel their skills in the wrestling pit into sources of income, whether by collecting prize money at competitions, coaching at an academy or using wrestling as a stepping stone to other work
This line highlights the determination of India's youth, who are facing a growing unemployment crisis, to turn their wrestling skills into viable income streams. It shows their resilience and adaptability
“Friendship is everything for us,”
This line is really powerful as it has been supported by the previous 2 paragraphs. Once again, audiences can sense the loneliness and "isolation" that these girls are feeling.
Growing up, she remembers her father watching wrestling on TV. “Because he didn’t have a son, he used to make us, his five daughters, bout with each other at home. I am the oldest of them and the best at the game.”
Including a personal anecdote here is an excellent choice, as it evokes the reader's emotions. By learning more about her background and circumstances, it becomes clear why she is passionate about pursuing this career.
Girls sports, and particularly wrestling, have been on the rise in India for the last decade, thanks in large part to two pivotal events.
This transparency is very smooth, effectively tying the evidence back to the main argument. By starting with the main prompt and then reinforcing it with evidence, the author’s stance on the issue is solidified.
A restaurant isn’t just a place where people go to be physically fed. It’s an emotional and spiritual hub, bringing people into a space where they can connect and find community.
This is the motive and goals of the restaurant, it reveals to the readers more about the personality of the restaurant owners. In some sense, this might contribute to the overall feelings of readers, as they can sense the sympathy/encouragement in these "young" owners. In some sense, it transfers a positive vibe to readers, especially those that needed emotional support.
“We could have met at a roller skating rink; we could have been at the mall — we could have met anywhere,” said Xochitl. But Sarapes is “where all of these relationships flourish from.”
Listing out others alternative, then ended up with sticking at Sarapes to shows its important and crucial role.
The space is a physical reminder of their kinship. When they come home to Sarapes, they can return to where they started.
This deeply emotional personal anecdote evokes empathy by reminding readers that everyone has a foundation or beginning. It stirs the sentiment that, no matter where you are now or what you’ve achieved, you should never forget where you came from or the person you once were
Located in Enfield, a quiet Connecticut suburb near the border of Massachusetts, Sarapes is owned and operated by the Chavez Mellado family, who immigrated from Mexico in the 1980s.
Background info about the setting and founder of this restaurant, more info for readers.
When Ivy Berubes, 22, orders a Shirley Temple at the Sarapes Mexican Restaurant bar, they make it for her even though it’s not on the menu. The menu also doesn’t list “The Tommy Bowl” — a deconstructed burrito — but Tommy Agramonte, 20, gets to order it; after all, it is named after him. Sade Guess, 21, swears by the birria tacos, another off-menu item.
The purpose of this entire paragraph is to introduce the uniqueness of the restaurant to readers. It is also serves at the hook in order to grab audience's attention. Also, when bringing up a specific name, it gives readers a sense of related, it makes them feel like they are also part of the story that is about to be told.
A Pew Research Center study in 2020 found that only 7 percent of people in Nigeria believe that homosexuality should be accepted, and the Same-Sex Marriage (Prohibition) Act, passed in 2014, bans not just legal recognition of these relationships but also any outward displays of affection between partners of the same gender or meetings of official L.G.B.T.Q. organizations.
Context about the constraints/difficulties that queer community in Nigeria is facing. Not only being prohibited, but also treated strangely.
“But in the market, you don’t have any of that. Anybody can just come and shop and find what fits them.”
Differentiate between the mall and market so that readers can have some imaginary
“And sometimes, what we buy doesn’t always make sense. We have to figure out how to style it. We're like, ‘It’s going to make sense one day.’”
Adding up to previous context, which claims that these "Dencity" people are the extraordinary one, and could not be defined by any old value that has already been existed. This gives me a vibe of young/energetic group of people. Who fills with excitement and thrill in life.
Founded by 26-year-old Blessing Ewona in 2020 in response to the dearth of spaces for young queer people and female skaters in Nigeria, Dencity skate, dream and thrift together.
Introducing creators, purposes and goals. Solid introduction about her identity.
If you’re lucky, you might find a vintage jacket you’ve been searching for, or a pair of long-lasting Levi’s jeans. But you’re never going to be as lucky as Dencity: the coolest of the cool kids of Lagos.
I think that this type of connection is really interesting. Opening up with some background info around the market, and the items that reader might found. Then it transfers and define its own term, "Dencity". This transparency is really smooth, and it provides readers some early insight/prediction about this community.
At the bustling Yaba Market in Lagos, Nigeria, there is something for everyone.
This is a really strong hook statement (at least for me), it raises curiosity, as I am not convinced that everyone will be able to get a piece, there will always be someone who got left out.