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  1. May 2019
    1. My parents being busy people most of the time with kids, work and personal work they always decided to hire extra help around the house.

      Psychology research has been proven that parental neglect in anyway can cause a child to become violent and release it's anger on a chosen target.

    2. As each kid grows up they can always say that they were taught valuable lessons from their parents. And yes this is true, as a teenager I know I did a lot of redundant things that my parents where there gladly to teach me a lesson with a very long verbal lecture.

      Records have been documented that many whites did not exactly know why they hate blacks aside from learning it from their parents and not questioning it due to it being a learned tradition of some sort.

    3. Hello my name is Jacob Miller. I am 16 years old and I live in Chicago. I was born on March 19, 1940. I was born to a mother who was a nurse that took great care of her patients and a father who was a restaurant owner. Growing up with three other siblings, I was the youngest out of four. With a mother as a nurse and a father as a business owner, you can say that my siblings and I grew up with sort of a wealthy lifestyle

      One of the most significant differences that separated blacks from whites was not only the skin color but the jobs and life they lived. During civil rights movement no blacks were seen living a life similar to whites.

    1. A few weeks later me and Trevon became good friends.

      As previously mentioned about reported cases from white people during civil rights many friendships of mixed color were reported but not admitted to at the time due to fear.

    2. My parents being busy people most of the time with kids, work and personal work

      According to the American Psychology Association neglect of parents due to simply being to busy and not paying attention to their kids causes them to be violent in the future in this case participation in violent racial activity as reported multiple times.

    3. As each kid grows up they can always say that they were taught valuable lessons from their parents.

      There have been cases reported that many white children have said that during discriminating times they were very unsure why they hate colored folk, but they were to scared to oppose their parents and due to the fact that they were brain washed into thinking what their parents think.

    4. I was born to a mother who was a nurse that took great care of her patients and a father who was a restaurant owner. Growing up with three other siblings I was the youngest out of four. With a mother as a nurse and a father as a business owner you can say that me and my siblings grew up with sort of a wealthy lifestyle.

      One of the first and major ways blacks were separated and debates or going on till today that "white privilege" still exists. Back in the day during the civil rights movement blacks were doing majority of the work for richer white society.

  2. Mar 2019
  3. Feb 2019
    1. Issa always likes to go fishing in the summer and i remember one day we went to lake michigan where we stayed for hours just try and catch a fish and the only thing we learned was “patience” and after all i am still learning new stuff about and so is he learning about me.

      Not strong enough to end the essay with only once sentence, I feel very thrown off.

    2. 3 years ago we crossed by each other randomly at the orland square mall and it took us a few seconds to realize that we actually met after a couple of years so he invited me to their house and we ate dinner together with his family and stayed for the whole day and after a few days we went for a road trip and even camped outside and therefore our friendship became stronger by time, and he stayed here in chicago and i went back and few months i came back here and saw him again and i was actually so happy to see that me and him are studying at the same school(moraine valley community college) so since i came here we do everything together and even studying together but at the same time he never changed since day one he still has some problems and bad habits and i always tell him to stop for example smoking or play less video games and that’s something i want him to rethink about it but it’s funny tho how we see each other and after a while our personal lives makes us busy and just move away for a while

      A lot of grammar issues re read and capitalize your words also seems like a story not profile.

    3. Issa is one of my childhood friends we met when i was about 12 years old,he was born in the same city that i was born in which is nablus,in general he is a guy who is an independent guy and the cool thing about him that he never misses a chance and i can say that he is just like me we never consider dreams as we consider our goals so dreams fade but goals stay, Issa is smart guy but he always think about getting married early and settle down with a nice looking women so that can be something that i hope he consider planning for it later.

      I do not think you should have started off with this much information.

    1. At this time Oday carried that huge responsibility of being the oldest man in the family, life put him in that situation of being responsible of taking care of his mom and his four siblings, he had a hard time with doing it, his family to forget what recently happened and keep going, he always wanted to see his mom smiling, he hated seeing her tears when she remembers his dad and the way he died far away from her. It was hard for him, but he could do it, he kept moving between the United States and Jordan, until the day that he convinced his mom to go back to America and live their with him , and they actually moved, and the life became way better. now he can see his mom and siblings easily, at least he doesn't feel alone anymore, but who knows maybe he still feel alone without his father with him after these years, maybe that seeing his family reminds him of everything happened, maybe he can’t describe the sadness that he feels or he doesn't want to show it to them that, and always the mask of being the strong man who can handle everything, and maybe he really forgot, maybe he’s doing okay and he’s happy with his life. Who knows what’s going on. His young brother said “ he has wisdom from the hard and different experiences that he went through, he always makes my think deeply, spending time with him is like spending time with a sixty years old man, because of the way he thinks about life, and the lessons he tries to give me”.

      Its hard for me to pick my favorite part of this paragraph so I just decided to highlight the whole thing because it was extremely well written and deep.

    2. we don’t want to meet those pessimist people, the ones who make you feel that it’s the end of the world, who always know how to put obstacles in your way and make you believe that you can't escape it anymore ,

      I agree 100% stay away from toxic and negative people

    1. . She loves being a preschool teacher but she feels like it would have been better if she went for her bachelors in teaching.

      Okay?? wheres the transition into the conclusion or the conclusion itself?

    2. . Sonia's greatest accomplishment in life was her three kids. Sonia's most memorable childhood memory was all of the vacations that she and her family went on every summer growing up because that was the only time her dad wasn't working, so he would use that time off to spend time with his family on vacation and they would have fun hanging out with each other.

      Great details and interesting information.

    3. This interview is going to be about my friend Sonia and her life.

      For starters this is not a good way to start your piece off, the reader should figure out this is a profile and not be told they were interviewed.

    1. The most common mask is the emotional one , it protects us from vulnerability, the one we wear to hide our fear, weakness, failure, grief, and pain.

      I agree 100% that the emotional mask is the most common because it seems like people manly communicate with emotions.

    2. I always feel them, I believe that each one of us has a stranger inside, when my mom yells at me I tell myself that this is not her this is the stranger in her, because the real one wouldn't yell , when my friends looks and act weird I tell myself that this is the stranger of them is the one who makes them do this , even the strangers around me also have strangers in themselves.

      I have actually never thought of the stranger in us the same way you are describing and it is making a great deal of sense.

    3. Have you ever tried to get out of yourself, to travel through the silence for a moment, that moment when you leave the whole world behind you, when you step outside of your zone, when your brain travels across a long imaginary distance with no specific destination, and landed on the place where there is nobody else there except for you and your complicated emotions, imaginations, pains, worries, thoughts and fears.when your brain is focusing on something indiscernible and unknown and not even allowing your pupil to move or your eyes to blink.

      Great introduction I love the specific imagery you are using my brain traveled to a whole new place.

    1. To say the least I think by far your essay has been the most enjoyable for me to read. It was short simple and straight onto the point. Also by reading your draft I also did find many ways that it turns out we are similar. To start off with I am the same way you are I am a very positive and happy person. I like to smile a lot and I do at the smallest and honestly stupidest things. When you said that you are very shy around new people, I found that relative to me as well. When entering new areas with new people I get nervous and shy. This very thing happened to me while in this class when we had to introduce ourselves to our classmates I was scared on what they would think of me. Also another thing I found similar between us is the silliness around our friends. It turns out that we both have that one best friend that we are close with and also very comfortable with being ourselves around them. Just as you said in your draft that you are shy but once you get to know me I can be very silly which is exactly how I am. Although one thing that kind of confused me was in the beginning of the draft you said you don’t care what people say about you but twords the end you said the opposite, but never the less great job and I enjoyed reading it. Nice work!

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    1. so if you look in what was the world used to be 20 years ago and what it is right now, you will see a huge difference but at same direction of a worse world,

      First and foremost I want to say that I am very sorry for your fathers passing away, I can imagine that its a sensitive topic for you. Also I liked on how you included your pictures into the background of your text, it gave your page a very creative looking image. I very much enjoyed how you started your draft by focusing on how who we once were and who we are now, I think that is a great way for people to start realizing the strangers in themselves. I found it interesting on finding out the cool facts about you and your accomplishments your dad would have been very proud of you. I know responsibility at a young age is not easy, so great job once again. Unfortunately I have found many errors in your draft. To start off with your sentences do not end, they are constant run-ons. Also I did not see a single annotation from Susan Sontags piece, and that was a critical part of the draft because you were supposed to relate to some of her writing by picking a quote. Lastly I felt as if I was reading a autobiography about you. Belive me it was very interesting learning new things, but your peice sounded like a biography. And you did not talk about any of your pictures or at least relate them somehow to your peice. Great information but refer back to the rubric and grading contract.