Last Name4break, the water was calm. We floated there soaking in the view and enjoying the cool water on a hot summer day.Facing the cove, I was able to get a broader view of our set up than I had been able to before. There were large blackrocks piled to the top, making the cove look likea game ofJenga. Each one jetted out in an awkward position, making it seem that if one rock moved they would all fall down. On the bed of bright white sand, my mom and dad looked like tiny ants laying on their beach chairs. The view was absolutely breathtaking. It was overwhelming to think about just how small I was,floating in a body of water that encompasses the whole world. The feeling of bliss spread over me as I floated on my back feeling the warm sun kiss my face.This is the best summer vacation ever.*It was time to swim back ashore. Anastasia and I discussed how we would leave the water. Just like when we camein, we had to time it just right. As I looked ahead of me, I came to the conclusion that the waves had gotten significantly choppier.
i think this is weak based on how it words itself in the story and uses this bad writing for the rest of the story. i give it a 2 out of 4 for language and 2 out of 4 for idea and development