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  1. Dec 2015
    1. A provocative example is when she writes about how her mother is being treated differently in multiple scenarios because of her “broken” English. As she puts it, just because the way she expresses herself is imperfect, it does not make her thoughts less worthy or imperfect.

      This is from an response paper. I wanted to use my own words to describe what Amy Tan, but it was a hard task in using evocative and descriptive language at the same time. I used free writes here while thinking about the scene Tan had created to get the best possible description using my own words because I believe it was an important point.

    2. This has made me insecure, but Amy Tans essay has opened up a new perspective for me, where it is okay to be different and it is okay to not have perfect English. My thoughts can still be valuable and perfect.

      This was an response paper. I felt really connected to this issue Amy Tan raised in her essay and I made me feel many different feelings, so it was kind of hard for me to get it down on paper. I had to free writer this last two sentences a lot to after a couple of times, see result I could work with to elaborated with and explain my thoughts and feelings.

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    1. I was hugging each one of them for what felt like an eternity, but there was still not enough of time. I looked up to the sky in the middle of one of the hugs and saw all the amazing stars shining as bright as only stars can do. I then realized that no matter how separated we would be in the world and how far apart we are, there would always be the same stars that shine so beautifully down on us during the night all around the world.

      A very emotional passage for me to write and I felt that it was hard to describe the scene in the right way and at the same time create a scene in the reader's mind so they really can picture how beautiful the scene was. I used free writing as what I did to change passage. I just started writing multiple as I remembered that specific scene and after a couple of times, I finally got it and was happy with it.

    2. It was one of the most beautiful summer nights Sweden had ever seen, with the sun starting to fall on the horizon and the sky switching to an orange color.

      This was probably the sentence I had the most revising and rewriting on. I remember this night so clearly but I had trouble with getting the scene down on paper, I could not find words that was worthy of describing the scene. I had to use revising and rewrite a lot to get this sentence in a way that I was happy with. Especially I wanted to describe the sky in a specific sense because I feel like it had a big part in why the night became so special.

    3. We raced around a lake that was one mile long at our summerhouse up in the northern parts of Sweden. It stood beautifully in the forest with the lake just a throw with a rock away.

      These chosen sentences was not something I was satisfied with as I read the whole paragraph so I used the method free writing to see if something useful came from that. I wanted the scene more specific with how the scene was where we were. Free writing helped me and I remembered how the house stood in the forest very close to the lake and I then remembered the whole scene. Free writing really helped me pick up specific words and then work on them.

    4. I could smell my mother’s fresh baked bread combined with her famous meatballs and macaroni. My favorite food. We drank my favorite type of soda for that meal. I could not have asked for a better last dinner at home, to be in that time and appreciate the people I love the most. We ate my last Swedish home cooked meal for several months. Food had never tasted that good.

      My methods used in this passage was especially revision and rewriting. This passage begun by being way too general and I felt like this was a moment I wanted to specify and create a scene in the reader's mind through evocative and descriptive language. So I rewrote it multiple times before I felt pleased with how specific and clear this passage was.

    5. The time shows 04:55, military time. I am sitting in the airplane totally exhausted and had not slept a single second during the night. I decide to check the notifications on my phone one last time right before take-off. The tears that had streamed down my face for the past few hours have given me a headache and made me feel ill. I see a message from my sister, which makes me break into tears once again. She tells me how much she loves me and reminds me what a wonderful time I will have living my dream. I try to hide my red eyes and tears from the woman beside me while reading the message. The one thing I do not want to do right now is start explaining why I am sad, although I feel like a shoulder to lean against is probably what I need right now. I had already cried enough these last few days. I send one last message on Swedish soil for now before I turn my phone to airplane mode while the captain speeds up the airplane for take-off. I realize as I look down at the beautiful white clouds from the sky how much my family means to me and how much I have taken them for granted during my time at home. This family culture is something I started to appreciate only when I was leaving them.

      My beginning of the essay was under a lot of revision and rewriting because I wanted to go away from the traditional way to write a story. I decided instead to start in the middle of the climax and then shift back to the beginning and take the writer through it in a chronological order up to where I started the essay. The was something that took a lot of time to think about, my revising and rewrite helped me significantly through really thinking about how I should structure this passage.

  3. Oct 2015
    1. Besides less food waste,healthier meal plan is also one of the reasons why students chose not to use tray.Lucy, a Boston College student says that: “With the trays,I can’t help myself filling the tray with whatever I see,including a lot of desserts and fast food .It will lead me to consume much more than I need for a healthy diet.” Not using tray clearly contributes to the control of the food intake because as Janet Olivieri, who frequently eats at the dining hall and has lost 10 pounds since the change says:“This way they can only get what they can carry on one plate.”

      Very good point in your study why people do not use trays in college, the social norms about how a girl/boy should look. These thoughts comes to mind when taking food and deciding wether taking a tray or not.

    1. Furthermore, doing Facebook is entertaining because I get to read what my friends have uploaded and can even build stronger relationship by putting comments and keeping the conversation flow.

      Very good point about facebook and the camaraderie it build through contact on the social medias and build a bond.

    1. October 14th, 2015. 3:20 in the afternoon, McGuinn Hall, Boston College.

      Very nice start of the essay that is very specific and creates a scen were I as a reader can relate. This creates a interesting start of the essay.

    1. “Did you check out Drake’s new music video? I retweeted it.”

      This beginning of the essay is good because it can relates to the real world and something I can relate to. This also starts the discussion about celebrity culture right away.

    1. I found two articles that take an opposite stance at this issue of whether social media enhance/thwart students’ learning process.

      This is really efficient in the sense that two different perspectives comes in to consideration and the reader is allow two see them both and then the author can decide which perspective that is his point and state it.

    1. Is spending money becoming symbol of having fun?

      This is the guiding question of the whole essay and I find this question very good because it relates to the rest of the essay that is trying to answer the guiding question.