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No period after "May"

sub-500ms can be either really slow or really fast all depending on context. For example, league of legends ping versus downloading a video. I would probably choose a different metric here so it's less confusing and more "wow"y

no need for this - analysis is a close synonym already

I wonder if adding the soldier class (병장 = Sergeant) works out in your favour better

Would still prefer to add a declaring statement somewhere that you didn't actually finish the degree here to not confuse them

with what?

did you get 100% of the coverage? This is important!!

double "and"s in the same sentence - you should wait the "and" until the last item in the list

by how much?

use English-form numbers if you aren't talking about a big quantitative data you want them to focus on, e.g. "three"

no need for this

you can probably hyperlink this as well with mailto:

btw, you should tailor the bolded characters depending on what jobs you apply for. For example, right now you are really boasting a lot of frontend stuff. If you wanted more emphasis on AI, bold the ML related words. If you wanted more emphasis on cybersec related things, authNZ stuff

how?

such as

no need for this tilde

FYI, they may ask you about these numbers so prepare to explain how you got them!

resume without trailing 's'

employee

York University - AI & Data Society

Keep it in the same location format

on the

practice

There's a benefit of keeping this sentence this way (you show off A+ first), but you can also write it more like an action statement (so you can show off what you did).

Action statement here would just be walking this sentence the other way, so it should be a simple change if you decide to take it

missing period

missing period

adapting

should drop this comma

Not really sure if the team member amount is relevant here, especially so since you've now proven you can work in a team with your internships, so we could probably drop this here and in the QuickCash one as well

some of these kinds of fragments we can probably slash off and reword instead - similar to "which".

ThreeJS here but Three.js in the project stack list - we should probably keep it consistent

iOS with a lowercase i?

Not a nit but just surprised on the pure time length of the project lol

May be still relevant - may not be very soon - let's drop this bullet if we need to

by how much and with what metric?

like what exactly? what's the contribution? how does it help?

missing period

more of analyzing the overall strength of the bullet here - this is just saying you worked in Grant Thorton and not much after that. I wonder if you can describe what you did in your work rather than trying to prove you worked there?

=> Engineered

let's try to drop "which" in future bullets and see if we can just write stuff in a sexier way (I do like the contents in your bullet here, so it should be simple reorganization of words)

duplicate of 2nd bullet - probably unneeded

Usually having these kinds of words show that we can make this sentence better just by swapping the order of things in which they appear:

"Root caused bugs through analysis of system design documents and recorded the runbook to prevent similar issues from propagating in the future." (something along those lines)

Curious if this isn't breaking any severe NDA under national security

should this be hyphenated?

It's generally not advisable to use a first person language in your bullets

No need to capitalize these

Let's drop this in preference for the second action verb "Collaborated"

Is the hyphen intentional?

React is a library - I think you should make a new section called "libraries" and put a bunch of random libraries in there

You 10000% know more languages than this! (forgetting python at the very least)

Make sure this section is long enough to fill the resume

typo - space and comma should be swapped

up-to-date

"and"

"Squarespace". Also is "Dalhousie Student Union" a "company"?

the 1st bullet seems to cover this.

Also, if the work experience isn't related to your job, you can probably spend less bullet points in here, so let's aim for 2-3 bullets at most, and fill the rest up with projects.

action statements

is "tailor" the right verb? In any case, we should probably start off with the strongest verb instead of the current "collaborated". E.g. "Tailored newsletters using SimplyCast to promote initiatives from departments of the University and Student Union, amassing over 40,000+ impressions"

in the above example, we can even combine the bullet before this, making it a stronger bullet in general and saving space.

"and"

Regularly is a weak verb - we should probably start the statement with just "Designed and delivered newsletters"

missing comma, should be SimplyCast,

Probably should revise this - feels a bit empty even though it's following the action statement format.

How about: "Developed the dynamic display of student data in the admin dashboard using MongoDB (and if you used something else, add that here, ie Axios, Mongoose, etc), amplifying the admin experience for managing students." or something else if you know better

Action statement

how?

design principles*

What website? Can you hyperlink? Also, be as specific as possible -- what did YOU do? and what did YOUR actions create WHAT results?

You should probably pick one or the other, and not both. Generally, this project-based course experience would be under projects over experience though due to the lack of proper leadership (95% of 4th year students know nothing lol)

No need for this specifier

what graph? This is a good example of where action statements can help you.

how?

should generally avoid symbols and prefer English words, e.g. "and"

What software? And what did it result in?

This seems to be talking about the same thing as the bullet before this. We should probably drop this bullet and make room for something unique

and saved how much time with this?

all-in-one

missing comma, should be ClosedXML,

You should make this into an action statement: https://www.lakeheadu.ca/sites/default/files/uploads/104/ResumeWorkshopHandout2016.pdf.

Also generally, you should try to be as specific as possible to clearly draw out what you did and resulted in what

You should stick to abbreviated or full month name format (Experience seems to use full month name, so pick and stick with what you prefer)

You should drop this - after you get into University, then secondary school is no longer relevant

Should this be a separate bullet?

Another case of "you can definitely optimize this because you probably don't need this set of words". For example, "Created a user-friendly UI to provide precision control of the beamformer" is a more concise and optimized sentence

Can we just say UI?

Can we fit this inside a singular sentence?

You mentioned "all controls", but I don't understand what it controls. Does it control the proceeding digital communication and timing aspects of the circuit?

usually a good sign of "you can definitely make this sentence more optimized". For example, just "handling".

Can we drop this?

From what?

Should this be a separate bullet?

This doesn't quite read like a tangible result and it confuses the readers - can we keep this short and concise?

Should this be a separate bullet because this bullet looks pretty long?

What does this mean?

Can we fit this in a sentence or should this be a separate bullet?

Scikit-learn

you probably have more skills

used in where?

can be optimized to "providing a facade to simplify usage of ..."

I feel like this can be optimized down to "Used Pandas and Matplotlib to create data insights of raw data, "

"projects across teams" is good enough

Does anything stand out that we can use as a proper example with tangible data?

"enable to enable" lol we need to ban the word "enable" from your resume completely unless there's no other alternative methods to convey your message

Using what? Also, is writing the mathematical model and preparing an automated hardware test bench two different actions and therefore need two different bullets?

you like the word "enabling" too much

using what?

which was? and how much of an efficiency increase did you see from this?

should also say Halifax, NS, Canada for consistency across resume if you're applying outside of Canada

wasn't there also a parallel workflow related bullet???

doesn't make sense here -- you start off with "Remodeled" then follow up with another action of "overseeing" which doesn't sync up

and how does this help exactly?

and how does this help exactly?

real-time

What's ADC?

using what?

fullstop period

fullstop period

fullstop period

awkward sentence to read. Thinking it's better to write "Created a Python GUI to allow user-friendly system reconfiguration of the beamformer to support non-technical users." or something along those lines (probably that line doesn't suffice either, but it's less deciphering than the current line.

ㅡㅑㄴ냐ㅜㅎ fullstop period

and how did it go?

awkward comma

What does this mean exactly? Is this the switch that you've designed?

missing fullstop period

from what resolution? curious

adapt to what kind of channel conditions? How can it be used? What was the accuracy in testing?

You dont need to add your specific address (you dont need this info at all tbh)

There's no need to specify

You can make use of hyperlinks here

You definitely need to put more projects!

what specific scenarios?

No need to mention this

Weak bullet comparatively -- might request you to drop it

Action statement-fy this

by how much? Saving how much money with the freed up resources?

random space before comma

I almost refuse to believe that you've worked with 2,000 files -- even as a SWE at a FAANG I've never had to maintain 2000 files. I've maybe contributed to 80 files so far.

what does accessible way mean in communication? curious

Watch your grammar and spelling!

Some are missing periods

students'

Bullet is too long!

Action statement-fy this

If your GPA is > 3.5, you should probably put it in there as well

Probably better to omit "and Databases"

Any specific tools you've used for this?

Curiosity question - out of how many teams?

Action statement this one

what kind of attacks?

I feel like "showcasing attention to detail" is never the result here -- what are something tangible instead? For example, did you end up fixing some vulnerabilities using your own custom NIDS?

with your own NIDS? Or something else?

using what? Also, how was it tested? Accuracy?

No need for this

curiosity question - can you simulate AND analyze using nmap? or did you need two different tools?

like nmap or just nmap?

using what?

Bold that doesn't need bolding (I'll stop giving feedback for bolding from now on, I think you understand the point now lol)

Is this a single project? Or is it two projects?

Software Developer Intern or real Software Developer?

Also I think you need more technical bullets with proper results

I feel like Agile bullet can even be combined with this one as well

Can we combine the hypothetical Agile bullet this this one?

Another bold that doesn't need bolding

These two topics (Agile and MVVM) can probably be their own bullets

How did you make it scalable? "Using Java" doesn't prove anything here

Same feedback here about visually separating your employer and your role

There should be some sort of visual separation between your role and the employer instead of just a singular comma.

"Simplify complex programming and info security concepts" probably comes out inaccurately - you probably didn't simplify the concepts, but you just conveyed it in a simplified method. Probably needs a rewording here

You should drop the bold here

You should turn this into an action statement.

Generally confused about this bullet - How do you demonstrate attention to detail by "resolving diverse technical queries"? I feel like this bullet needs a general rewording to make it flow better.

Additionally, since this is a bit of a relevant experience, I might ask you to put in more technical-focused bullets as well rather than showing off your soft skills

I'd be very conservative about using bolds here.

Going back to being conservative with bullets - if you don't need to use bolds, don't use it

Probably better to remove this / reword this -- this is a better fit for your cover letter than your resume

Remove Summary entirely

Should say your start date for your university as well

e.g. September 2022 - August 2026

smth something

SHEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESH

ur project sucks

This is a really cool name