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  1. Nov 2024
    1. ta set, with categorizations beyond the binary removed, any face not categorized as a woman was categorized as a man

      not sure I get this. can you be concrete?

    2. man

      figure says woman?

    3. participant

      each participant

    4. articipant Proportions f

      sounds odd

      scale is negative?

    5. ticipants made fewer man categoriz

      I get what you mean but it is not very clear. "fewer" relative to what. Can you revise?

    6. An i

      I

    7. ade categorizations b

      made more?

    8. Free Text

      can you have the long labels in the figure?

    9. n figure Figure 6

      confusing to refer to it again. delete. It should be clear from context that everything is about this figure.

    10. of unsure and I don’t know counted as I don’t know

      unclear whether "other" and "I don't know" variables overlap. I do not think so, right? So, if one variable is 1, the other must be 0. Plz clarify

    11. other category

      I am confused. Do you mean they had to choose the "other" category? So why do you say "any other category"? This means that don't know is also included.

    12. For analysis purposes

      but this does not apply to binary control, right? clarify plz

    13. (y-axis)

      del

    14. Participants

      However, ...

    15. A simple v

      Visual inspection

    16. of

      del

    17. {style=“color:green”;}

      did not work :)

    18. After being allocated to one of the three conditions,

      feels out of place. either mention earlier or delete (you already said it is between Ss)

    19. only woman and man; 2) woman, man and other and 3) an open text box for participants to type in their resp

      why not introduce the labels here (instead of burying them in design?). Maybe have labels in parentheses, and in the design, you describe more

    20. 56 women, 47 men, and 2

      more than 100?

    21. as recommended by

      delete

    22. ontrol condition,

      confusing: reader has to figure out which of the three is the control.

    23. In Study 2 we compared

      Subjects were randomly assigned to one of three conditions:

    24. allow

      have allowed

    25. highly

      delete

    26. n both conditions

      clarify: we calculated mean diff for each condition and then compauted the difference of two-dim minus one-dim.

    27. Figure 3 shows that

      could be deleted

    28. We examined the relationship

      unclear. do you mean across all trials and subjects?

    29. the kinds of

      delete

    30. s, and the

      better but could be clearer.

      separate sentence: for each condition, the order of trials ...

    31. acial gender

      maybe too late to change now, but "female gender" would be more descriptive

    32. sek)

      capitalized?

    33. Participants included 33 women, 35 men, and 2 participants who did not indicate gender (self-identified gender was measured using an open-ended text box, fol

      reads awkward

    34. part in the Stockholm Unive

      what?

  2. Oct 2024
    1. the same

      similar?

    2. For testing,

      delete

    3. s the spread of proportions of responses

      this is already an interpretation. you should first say what is shown descriptively.

    4. an or man. This meant

      this sounds odd. You say you examine only this, but then you talk about what was removed ...

    5. We tested whether this was the case by

      wordy

    6. he multiple categories conditio

      fewer ... needs some comparison, ie fewer "than"

    7. Returning to

      Inspection of Figure 5 suggests

    8. categorization

      made more ...

    9. also

      delete

    10. Unsurprisingly given this pattern

      delete

    11. ito

      spell

    12. however, only illustrates the total number of categorizations across all participants

      I wonder whether this should be combined with the next paragraph because they belong together.

    13. made many categorizations beyond

      edit: stated as a fact instead of a possibility

    14. he multiple categories condition

      start sentence with this because it helps the reader

    15. by most participant

      sounds odd. delet?

    16. We fit the data to Bayesian mixed-effects models. In all models, facial gender (0 to 100 in seven steps) and response options (one-dimensional, two-dimensional) were included as fixed effects. Additionally, all models included varying intercepts for both participants and trials and varying slopes for facial gender. Exploratory plotting of the data suggested that the relationship between facial gender and rated gender was non was non-linear, suggesting that modelling which treated facial gender as a linear predictor would be misspecified

      see my comments above.

      maybe just say "same as in Study 1?)

    17. We used R

      same as study 1? Maybe just say that?

    18. counted

      I would not switch to "count" because it sounds as if you mean something else and not coded.

    19. dichotomizing the variables

      del. does not add anything

    20. so other = 1 and all other responses = 0.

      I do not think APA likes this style of mixing running text with symbols.

      other = 1

      vs

      other was coded as 1

    21. recorded

      recoded?

      how about: "two new variables were created" (avoids recoding word)

    22. ions in their condition

      trial order random?

    23. I don’t know

      in the above section, the use of italics helps here without making the reader seasick

    24. three response options

      "three conditions with different response options"

    25. into

      into/to? se above

    26. in a lab

      lab? The monkey lab :)

    27. across

      I interpret across to mean as some sort of average, but maybe "across" is like between here? My English is not good enough to know

    28. and some participants were more categorical than others in their ratings.

      I would get rid of this because it implies some test of an individual's categorical style.

    29. again

      again?

    30. First

      I find this first, second list distracting and would get rid of this.

    31. orphing steps

      yes, paragraph reads nice now!

    32. trials

      how do you mean trial? stimulus?

    33. nsite

      spell

    34. separate continua

      unclear what this refers to: The woman/man continua or the two conditions. If only continua, then does order of trials apply only to the two-dimensional condition?

    35. he woman continuum and once using the man continuum. In the woman continuum, the anchors were marked not woman and woman. In the man continuum the anchors were marked not man and man.

      more efficient in one sentence: once on a woman continuum (anchors were not woman and woman) and once on a man ...

      (you have to add italics, of course :)

    36. by the researchers

      I would just give the ref

    37. similar

      rated at?

    38. in

      into or to? in sounds better to me

    39. e Stockholm

      shouldn't there be some info about recruitment? online etc?

    40. the

      what is "the lab"? why bring up lab at all?

    41. ).

      delete

    42. other words

      sum

    43. he evidence indicated

      Results suggested (evidence indicate sounds very strong to me)

    44. )

      add comma

    45. igure 8 illustrates the median and interquartile range proportion of faces categorized as women (in this data set, with categorizations beyond the binary removed, any face not categorized as a woman was categorized as a man)

      this sentence first before you tell about actual content

    46. expense of man categorization

      can you dumb it down

    47. seems to

      del

    48. he difference is so stark, we do not feel that inferential statistics add any more information, but the curious reader may find these in the supplemental materi

      sounds odd. Can you at least have one analysis? And say rest is in supplementary?

    49. e Figure 6 ). Participants who only categorized faces as women or men are not represented in figure Figure 6.

      get rid of Figure 6 reps. If you start "As shown in Figure 6, ..." I would read this to mean that everything is from the figure until you tell me differently.

    50. illustrates how many categorizations (y-axis) beyond the binary participants made. Each bar represents how many participants (y-axis) made a certain number of categorizations (x-axis). The different colors denote the different categorizations

      swap previous and these sentences

    51. illustrates how many participants (x-axis) categorized how many faces (y-axis) according to the categories “other” and “don’t know” (different colors) across the two experimental conditio

      swap order of 1st and 2nd sentence. First, say what is shown. Second, what is the take home msg

    52. responses

      not italics

    53. variations

      so that

    54. “woman” a

      maybe get rid of "" altogether? You introduced these labels in Study 1

    55. odo: change order to be consistent

      yes, plz

    56. all participants were informed that participation was voluntary and gave written consent to participate in the study

      same as 2 sentences before

    57. N~free

      formating?

    58. and

      . All

    59. 2 pa

      and 2

    60. control

      remove

    61. baseline

      control

    62. “other”

      reads odd with "". I would remove

    63. suggests that categorical perception was not reduced by two-dimensional response options

      bake together with previous sentence? "Results suggested that cat perception [your text] was not reduced ... (numbers here)"

    64. R = NA)

      ???

    65. Results

      Well written! You tell the reader what to look at and what to conclude.

    66. were not meaningfully

      Results suggested no differences between conditions

    67. test this,

      spell out. Right now,it sounds as if you want to test why there are twice as many lines :)

    68. Thus there are

      sentence could look better

    69. “woman”

      APA wants italicize for labels (I think)

      also: once you italicized a label, you are not supposed to do it again

    70. The pattern of scores was non-linear

      unclear what "pattern of scores" refers to. I guess you mean something with morphing steps. plz clarify

      Unclear if this has to be true or whether it was something observed in the data

    71. We fit the data to Bayesian mixed-effects models to test the categorical effects. In a

      It would be nice if you first describe the different variables. Morph level (seven steps from 0 to 100%), response options (one-dimensional, two-dimensional). It makes it easier to follow.

    72. different trials, and the order of trials was completely rand

      not sure I get this. You mean that each face was rated twice? Once on woman continuum and once one man continuum, and order of all trials was random? If so, please clarify

    73. i

      I would use separate sentence

    74. one-dimensional

      italicize these labels

      do you need to say "one-dimensional control". How about "one-dimensional" and explain in a sentence that this is control.

    75. tilted

      WC (word choice) sounds odd to me, but maybe this is how to write it?

    76. The morphs were made in 7 steps, from completely feminine to completely masculine

      can you share these images? Would be concrete. Also, would save time for others instead of reinventing the wheel.

  3. May 2024
    1. In comparison to self-identification questions where open-ended responses are seen as the most inclusive alternative (Lindqvist et al., 2020), the categorization of others benefits from response options that explicitly remind participants that not all people identify as women or men.

      well put!

    2. Participants were

      shouldn't you include study 1 results here? or do we not learn much from them?

    3. experiments

      now it is experiments and not studies?

    4. carefully

      remove

    5. impacted

      affected

    6. A probable explanation

      remind that there was a difference (which study, which analysis)

    7. finding t

      which study?

    8. xternal stuff.

      word choice

    9. he results are co

      maybe help the reader by saying whether results are from Study 1 or 2 or both

    10. We found that only multiple categories elicited beyond-binary response

      there is no analysis to show that the rate increased, right?

    11. Experiment 2 indicated that participants categorize beyond the binary when response options include more options than women and men only. However, the free text option did not differ from the binary option. Thus, the multiple categories condition, with its explicitly stated non-binary options seems to act as reminders to participants. Furthermore, categorization within the binary was not skewed by the addition of multiple categories or the free text option, meaning that the ratio of women and men categorizations was still about 50/50. This did not systematically affect their overall pattern of responses in terms of woman and man categorizations.

      content is nice but writing could be clearer

    12. n facial gender and binary categorization (i.e. the slope of facial gender) across the conditions

      can you add the slopes for each condition and explain what they mean? Then, the comparison is easier to follow

    13. We treated the binary categories condition as a neu

      not sure how this was analyzed. How did you capture proportion of female vs male?

    14. (Difference = 0, CI =[-0.02, 0.03], BF01= 394.93). The effect of facial femininity on woman categorizations almost was the same in the free text and binary categories (Difference > 0.001, CI =[-0.02, 0.02], BF01= 394.93).

      almost identical results? Same BF?

    15. as often in the Multiple Categories and Binary Categori

      unclear what "as often" refers to

    16. corresponding to moderate evidence

      why this comment?

    17. women and e

      women and men?

    18. Overall rates of b

      Figure 8 shows .... The figure suggests that ...

      is it odd that the figure shows only woman categorizations?

      Intuitive question: what about man categorizations? Actually, doesn't figure 5 suggest that man categorizations decreased?

    19. Participant Flow

      ???

    20. outside the binary

      confusing because Fig 5 includes ALL responses

      maybe have Figure 5 as a general figure? Then the headings? But, I think the headings do not help much

    21. There was also a clear differenc

      sounds vague. Isn't this a close up of the effect in the first paragraph?

      "To examine effects in terms of other and don't know responses, Figure 6 ...."

    22. In the

      As shown in Figure 6, ...

    23. Grey dots represent participants who only categorized faces as women or men

      I find the gray dots confusing.

    24. to participate in the study.

      how many per group? That info would fit here

    25. Figure

      I learned that one should first introduce a figure in terms of a general description of what the figure depicts (ie what is on x and y axis). I think this would be useful to do for your figures, particularly the later ones.

      I just saw that you did this for Figure 6, nice! Plz add for the others

    26. summing variations

      summing?

    27. summing variations of “other” and “non-binary” and dichotomizing this new index

      unclear how you mean summing and then dichotomizing

    28. binary categories, free text, and multiple categorie

      personally, I would say "three options" and then italicize the terms when you explain each condition.

    29. The experiment used a between-participants design

      could move this to under participants. Mention that there were three groups and sample size for each.

    30. The experiment used a between-participants design. The two conditions were the one-dimensional (control condition), and two-dimension

      you could have this design info under participants. There, it would fit to say that you ended up with two groups

    31. In short, the stimuli comprised a multiracial set of faces morphed to vary in terms of facial gender. We defined facial gender as the degree of the female face present in the morph. In other words, a 33 face was slightly tilted toward the man, a 50 face was an even mixture and a 100 consisted only of the woman’s face. Because there were 18 pairs morphed in 7 steps, the total number of faces was 126.

      I would delete this.

    32. facial gender as the degree of the female face present in the morph

      facial gender sounds too generic for me. It threw me off when reading Figure 3

    33. 56 women, 47 men 2 participants did not indicate gender)

      remove parentheses. This is main info

    34. Study 2 compared a control condition consisting of standard binary response options to two alternatives: a third gender option (such as ‘non-binary’ or ‘other’) and an open text box for participants to type in their respons

      content great but difficult to parse. plz edit

    35. However,

      Fig 3: facial gender on X axis actually refers to % female morph level, right?

      does the right panel have twice the number of ratings (ie female and male for each subject)?

    36. 33 and 67.

      should it say % morph level?

    37. ost participants display a non-linear S-shape and this was also the pattern of the group means.

      unclear how you dealt with "man" rating in 2-dimensional scale

    38. arked “not woman” and “woman”; in the “man” continuum the anchors were marked “not man” and “man”. The separate continua were presented on different trials and the order of trials

      to be honest, I would not include the [man] in the right of figure 2. I find it better to read about it in the text.

    39. only to

      according to the morph level

    40. These were highly correlated (R = 0.86)

      unclear how you computed correlation. Why would it show a positive correlation?

    41. multiple

      what is this? you say you have one and two

    42. Design and procedur

      I would just call this procedure

    43. 28, N2d = 38)

      would fit under participants.

    44. The one-dimension condition included 33 participants

      above, you have 28

    45. N1d

      you should introduce the abbreviations in the sentence before

    46. “woman” and “man”.

      I think you can get rid of " ". Or use italics

    47. a

      delete

    48. pairs

      can you spell out what you mean by pair?

    49. useful outcome

      odd word choice

    50. binary gender

      why binary here?

      I liked that before, you refer to two processes: - categorization of others - categorical effect Can you use the same terms here?

    51. L. DeBruine, 2018).

      clean up refs: L M DeBruine and L Debruine refer to the same person, right?

    52. All participants were informed that participation was voluntary and gave written consent to participate in the study.

      do you need more on ethics? According to Helsinki declaration or sth?

    53. one-dimensional response options and two-dimensional response options. If one-dimensional scales influence participants to think of gender as binary and opposites and two-dimensional scales don’t do this, there should be a reduced categorical e

      if you want to be super clear, you could spell out what is meant by one-dimensional and two-dimensional.

      Eg one-dimensional response options (ranging from female to male) ...

    54. investigate the influencing effect of one and two-dimensional response options by investigating whether participa

      "investigate .... by investigating" makes it confusing. Plz edit

    55. faces

      maybe first say that this is about categorization of others. Then, you can hint at that we asked participants to categorize faces. I think it would also be nice to get 1-2 sentences on what the two studies are about. One gets curious because you say "we report two studies". Maybe you do not need to talk about the present research here? I would skip this here

    56. encountering a face

      sounds odd. why not keep it to "categorization of others"?

    57. Categorical effects for continuous stimuli in any domain suggests

      Such categorical effects ... suggest

    58. to 80% of participants

      does this 80% throw off readers? I wondered whether it has something to do with the 60%. How about saying "by most participants", maybe like this "although a 60% female morph contains only slightly more female than male features, most participants categorized this female morph as female."

    59. “woman” and “man”

      I think you can remove " "

    60. esearch on how people perceive and categorize the gender of others has used both dimensional scales as well as discrete categories, but in both cases almost exclusively treats gender as a binary catego

      run on: can you make 2 sentences of this.

    61. however,

      delete

    62. Both the initial and later challenges to the gender binary in

      Historically, research in psychology ...

    63. transsexual”

      italics

    64. for example,

      why this?

    65. “androgynous”,

      odd that you have "" but not for agender. I would delete ""

      I believe according to APA, you should italicize the first time you use this label. After that, write it without formatting.

    66. later group of challenges to t

      sounds odd that you talk about a group of challenges but then, you talk about researchers

    67. In treating gender as a psychological trait, for example,

      sorry, I do not understand this

    68. have been encouraged to includ

      I think you need to remind about gender identity, at least when you refer to examples

    69. see Carleton et al., 2022; Cronin et al., 2022; D’Agostino et al., 2022 for some recent example

      I would spell out at least one example

      As it is, it is unclear what context these practices refer to.

    70. Such measurement invisibilizes

      Thus, these limited response options ignore TGD identities

    71. assigned sex

      I find the "assigned" odd. Could this be removed? "Identify with their sex at birth" makes sense to me.

    72. Stefan Wiens

      I am honored. Will do my very best to be helpful

    73. accentuated

      not sure what is meant.

    74. In other words

      that is,

    75. 0000-0002-8393-5316

      0000-0003-4531-4313

    76. Impact

      I learned that impact is a very strong word that should be reserved for contexts of catastrophes (like the impact of a storm). I prefer "Effects of response options". If possible, even bake in the take-home msg

  4. Mar 2024
    1. explanation for the difference between free text and multiple categories

      where?

    2. We found that only multiple categories elicited beyond-binary responses. Compared to binary control, neither changed the pattern of categorizations of women and men

      is this in results?

    3. meaning that the ratio of women and men categorizations was still about 50/50

      where is this in results?

    4. categorize beyond the binary when response options include more options than women and me

      is this only descriptive?

    5. facial femininity and woman categorizations (i.e. the slope of facial femininity

      not sure I follow

    6. For example, does categorization of faces as non-binary systematically decrease “woman” categorization. We therefore investigated inclusive response options changed participants overall tendency to categorize women and men.

      figure suggests that effects are in the categorization of men, not women

    7. Categorizations by Participants

      what figure number is this?

    8. fit the data to Bayesian mixed-effects

      don't you fit models to data? Or did you massage the data to fit your own ideas :)

    9. were aggregated

      unclear

      For analysis purposes, two new variables were created:

    10. n the free text condition, this included various variations of “other” and “non-binary”.

      redundant with 2 sentences earlier?

    11. ummint

      ?

    12. only

      why only?

    13. stimuli were identical

      add reminder about 126 faces

    14. completed the study i

      can subjects complete the study? We wish, would be faster :)