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  1. Oct 2020
    1. The question shouldn't be why so many young American adults struggle with mental illness. The real question ought to be why colleges aren't doing a better job of helping them.

      In stories like this, I don't think information should be cut. People are already uneducated enough on MH.

      I don't have anything I would add to it. But I would like to see a follow up if anything changed at a university regarding this story.

    2. Leave

      This is a news feature. I didn't know where to place this answer so I just added it here.

    3. That, the bereaved father says, is how you "save somebody in the future."

      The tone is serious, yet informative. It's also emotional and personal, but not? It really makes you want to get out and do something. Or to me at least.

    4. In March 2014, Newsweek published a series of maps meant to illustrate relative health by county across the nation, using data from the County Health Rankings. One showed the stark difference in access to mental health providers in different regions of the U.S.:

      The graphic below this! This adds such visuality. I kind of want to try and find something like this for my story.

    5. The Daily Northwestern

      This is just one of the sources listen, though there are many within this piece. They are all linked, which is awesome!

    6. Of

      There are about 3-6 sentences within each paragraph.

    7. At

      Sentence structure. Most everything carries that long sentence structure. At least in the beginning parts. If it changes I will tag in the bottom when I get there!

    8. The question shouldn't be why so many young American adults struggle with mental illness. The real question ought to be why colleges aren't doing a better job of helping them.

      The nut graf. Also I'm seeing how kind of similar my beginning paragraphs are to this story, aside from the stories.

      Not really associating to the graf, but there are so many stories about college mental health and how it has so many issues. Am I allowed to reference other articles into my own?

    9. On May 20, Karen Arkin was standing in the common room of her son's dormitory at Northwestern University. The day before, in the early morning hours, Jason Arkin went into that room and took an overdose of pills that sent him into a seizure. He was taken to a local hospital, where he died that afternoon. Now, as Arkin stood in the same room where her son had taken his own life just hours earlier, she was being asked by a university administrator to hide what had happened. (Citing federal law and university policy, Northwestern declined to comment to The Week on Arkin's case.) The administrator, as Arkin recalls, said, "'As far as all the students know here, he just had a seizure. So they can just think he died of a medical condition.' I said, 'Absolutely not. The students are going to know, one way or another, that this was a suicide. They deserve to know.'"

      A feature lede. It's in three paragraphs and holy moly is it striking. It's describing a real story. Something emotional that has forever impacted someone.