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- Feb 2020
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miaaao.github.io miaaao.github.iomiao4
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opulence
w/c , perhaps economic gains, consumption, or wealth? opulence has a connotation of displaying wealth or exhibiting luxury
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maximizing
maximize
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dj-olson.github.io dj-olson.github.io
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this visually
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We need understand that the world is no longer black and white, and we must analyze each situation individually
excellent (edit, you need a preposition)
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and describing an entire region of the world as poor is never accurate
excellent, are you able to further elaborate on this idea?
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To do this it means that leadership within countries has to place a high priority on health education and making available different forms of public health reform.
excellent
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he was able to show that the most important thing for countries to do when developing, is pursuing public health.
good, but edit for clarity
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to show just how little most people know about the development and wealth distribution in different countries
good, more analysis -- w/c show, perhaps use demonstrate instead
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uch as; health - life expectancy at birth, education - expected years schooling for school-age children and average years of schooling in the adult population, and income - measured by Gross National Income (GNI) per capita
good but edit - I think a : would probably work here
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ns
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instead
repetitive
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looking at real world situations from the prospective of the individual.
excellent interpretation, you are already adding value through your response
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Just because a country is doing well, does not mean its citizens are prospering.
Good intro sentence
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of life of
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jpohara12.github.io jpohara12.github.io
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Roslin’s presentation helps back Jahan’s idea of the two sides of human development.
Good synthesis, but introduce this idea earlier in your response
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He
Jahan?
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Through defining human development with humans at the central of the problem, it allows for humans maximize growth compared to being just thought as capita.
Good analysis, but also edit this sentence for clarity
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milumo17.github.io milumo17.github.ioResponse5
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All around superb. You are presenting theme and concepts and then supporting your ideas with evidence from the sources. Perhaps work towards a hook at the outset that further engages the reader as well as a concluding take-away message. In your mind, what is the most important point you wish to impart upon the reader?
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Rosling supports this idea similarly with his data.
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would be incorrect and frankly ignorant.
excellent -- perhaps elaborate on the transformational, revolutionary nature of this idea?
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in
don't end a sentence with a prep
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For years people have attributed economic development under the same scope as economic development, a very one sided view of a very broad and changing topic.
Excellent introduction -- you are evidencing from the talks without specifically noting you are describing elements from each source. Furthermore you have already synthesized and integrated upon a delineated theme.
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6packofribs.github.io 6packofribs.github.io
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A well written response. Now work towards restructuring these two paragraphs into sections that integrate your descriptive elements and then subsequently focuses on analysis. Also, what is the most important message you wish the reader to receive? Are you able to conclude with a take-away message? Try adding an introductory - hook, first sentence to capture the readers attention and engage them from the onset.
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sarenaoberoi.github.io sarenaoberoi.github.io
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This was soon disproved, as a surprising discovery showed that in a variety of countries including China, Bangladesh, India, Indonesia, and some Arabic countries, putting more emphasis on health by providing more education and using other similar methods, these countries and many more foresaw wealth following their emphasis on health.
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Furthermore, research has shown that the informal sector and agriculture and rural sector are integral in providing jobs for a number of people.
could you provide further analysis here
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I believe that putting a greater emphasis on the well-being of society and people’s choices is extremely important when it comes to human development.
excellent
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jcone213.github.io jcone213.github.io
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We will be working to restructure these responses into a section (paragraph) that synthesizes and integrates your descriptive elements from the two talks. Then secondly, follows with a section that provides analysis evidenced from both Jahan and Rosling. Also, what is the most important message you wish the reader to receive? Are you able to conclude with a take-away message? Try adding an introductory - hook, first sentence to capture the readers attention and engage them from the onset.
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This is dangerous because some people may go unnoticed due to their data being thrown into the aggregate of higher income societies.
Good analysis
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dpuri-wm.github.io dpuri-wm.github.io
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Excellent response. Could you integrate and synthesize the descriptive elements you have identified from the two talks by concepts, ideas or themes. Then could you further integrate by following up with analysis that is evidenced from the two talks? Also, what is the main take-away message you wish the reader to receive? What is the most important point in your mind that is common to these two talks?
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brit
breadth
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really
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bmlamoureux.github.io bmlamoureux.github.ioNotes:3
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Notes Continued
you took a lot of notes, I suspect you could weave more of the information into your response. Also, move your notes, such that they follow your response, or perhaps place them in a separate file.
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You have captured some of the salient elements from the podcast and a bit from Rosling's TED talk that begin to describe what the author's presented. Are you able to further analyze the two talks? Are there any common themes? What is the most important point the author's made? Is there something in particular you would like the reader to take away in conclusion?
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what that might mean
could you further clarify this statement?
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katieanne95.github.io katieanne95.github.ioworkshop3
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When considering human development, it is often best to compare a country to itself many years ago rather than contrasting countries against each other.
very interesting observation
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can grow alongside it, rather than be inhibited by it
good analysis
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work
Excellent. You begin with a specific idea and then continue by weaving it into your subsequent supporting statements.
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anastasiamavrakis.github.io anastasiamavrakis.github.ioworkshop6
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Rosling advises against using averages when assessing human development by nation because in certain cases, such as in Sub-Saharan African, many countries have a huge disparity between the development of the richest 20% and poorest 20%
Good descriptive response, but could you have provided more analysis of the material? Perhaps additional supporting evidence? What did Rosling say about preconceived ideas?
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The Human Development Index incorporates the idea of defining achievement through the extent to which people are experiencing a long and healthy life, receiving knowledge, and having a decent overall standard of living
this sentence seems out of place -- perhaps earlier in the paragraph
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should extend beyond jobs to also include volunteer work, societal duties and post-crisis relief
what is the significance of this extension?
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he rightly emphasizes that the majority of the world is employed in rural/agricultural jobs
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Jahan focused specifically on a few issues when looking at what currently requires focus in terms of global human development.
Simplify this introductory sentence and try to fold it into the subsequent one(s).
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In his talk
Add a paragraph break here
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ceh-2000.github.io ceh-2000.github.ioReading4
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individuals
Good description of a main idea from Rosling. Were there others you could have added? Could you have added a concluding remark or paragraph that synthesized your analysis as a take home message?
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Yet, again, the data is only one measure of a country’s average achievement.
What are these other measures? Are you inferring that qualitative measures might have something to offer in addition to quantitative ones?
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In much the same way, Jahan defines human development as this balancing act of human capabilities and opportunities to use these capabilities, but at the heart of the equation are people.
Agreed, he is repurposing the fundamental idea of development, but is his definition a revision of the classic approach or is it something entirely new?
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As the definition of human development has become outdated so too has the understanding of macroeconomics.
Great first line and hook
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yunkichristian.github.io yunkichristian.github.io
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Rosling
Not a whole lot of content here. Could you try to provide a more full answer to the questions?
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zametzger.github.io zametzger.github.io
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Many underrepresented people would be left out if only the average was used.
Yes, again, good analysis, which is in fact the harder part in many ways. Could you have provided some concluding remarks that took into account both talks? What was the most significant idea that you want to leave with your audience?
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to
don't end your sentence with a preposition
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ect
good - etc..
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health coudl still rise because health was already high
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Selim Jahan
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human development and which countries are falling short
Very good analysis. Could you have further buttressed some of your ideas with additional evidence from the podcast? I think if you went back and added additional information from your notes, your response would have been lengthier and held more weight. Breaking down ideas, and seeking to join all of your notes will help to build content and extend your work.
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niranair.github.io niranair.github.io
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addressed in an appropriate fashion
Good. Could you have summarized your description of the two articles by following with some analysis, conclusions and a take home message?
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continued to modern day
has continued even until today
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Rosling showed the major growth within Asia overtime which was especially prevalent in China, one of the biggest economies in the world
edit, a bit confusing
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as there is a lot of variations within them
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preconceived
good
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breath
breadth
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are
don't end the sentence with are
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HDI
redundant
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He defines human development as the process of enlarging human choices in every aspect of life including economic, cultural, and political choices. He states that an increase in human capabilities must be matched by an increase in opportunities to use such capabilities or else there will be a loss of human potential.
Good. I suggest restructuring the paragraph in order to start with these ideas.
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human-based metrics
could you further elaborate on what this means as distinguished from economic metrics?
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What is Human Development
change font or use italics to indicate this is the title of the work -- check the https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/purdue_owl.html
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ohzhang7.github.io ohzhang7.github.io
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Overall, although countries may be in dire situation at the moment or be in a seemingly bad state of existence, it is always possible in the future for such countries to change the trajectories of growth and data.
Could you have added more information from Rosling's TED talk. What is the significance of social transformation as discussed in the talk?
Also, could you have summarized the two talks and offered a conclusion / take home message. What was the most significant idea you derived from the two talks?
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These two measures are crucial to gauging human development.
Good recount of the information presented in the podcast. Could you have further analyze the information and present some conclusions based on your own ideas?
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breath
breadth
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choices
redundant
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thorsproule.github.io thorsproule.github.io
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Rosling stated that each country should be looked at individually to ensure the proper status and humanitarian help
Very good answer to the question, but could you have added more information? What did Rosling say about preconceived ideas about development? Are you able to lend some of your ideas to Jahan in your response?
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He says that human development is that of enlarging human choices. Jahan gives two steps to enlarge human choices.
Could you synthesize these two sentences?
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be focused on
edit, don't end a sentence with a preposition
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bwilliams01.github.io bwilliams01.github.io
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generalizations
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although close geographically, can have completely different human development issues
good
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By giving people more freedom to live, they will live a life of true value
Beautifully said
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warranting that this capital will benefit human lives, and ensuring that everyone will actively benefit
excellent!
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augmenting
nice word choice!
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larryfeng01.github.io larryfeng01.github.ioworkshop3
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After clicking on a country and splitting it into counties, the smaller regions can be spread over a great range, where the richest are in the upper 20% and the poorest are in the lowest 20%.
Could you have added an additional idea? Rosling also talked about preconceived ideas, how did those relate to the main idea of his talk.
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Generally, Jahan believes that the people of the country are the center of action and should live as if they are.
I'm not sure if you have captured the main idea of Jahan's podcast. It is not simply an extension of the traditional idea of economic development, but instead his definition intends to radically re-envision how we measure development.
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First, we must make sure our country is stable, the average GDP per capita is stable, and the country is in an economically decent spot.
Do you think Jahan starts with this idea?
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suditishyamsunder.github.io suditishyamsunder.github.io
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development
Are you able to summarize your response with a take home message that encompasses your larger main idea?
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showed
presented
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shows
demonstrates ... perhaps
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This
redundant
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In Rosling’s TED Talk
new paragraph
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your lens
good, but edit a bit more -- through the lens of ...
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Unfortunately
word choice
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society
redundant, revise
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workshop
I think you need a README.md file in the root directory of your workshop repository
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- Jan 2020
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kennedycohanley.github.io kennedycohanley.github.io
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check Andrew's note
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wicked-problems.github.io wicked-problems.github.io
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intent
Would you please further elaborate on this idea
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transform
word choice
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Include a link to the article
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humbler data science
could you further describe what is meant by a "humbler data science?"
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- Jan 2019
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Local file Local file
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Alex
should be Jim
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