He plucks the quill from her fingers and throws it down. He lifts her out of the chair and pins her on her back on the Bed.
设置成窗外乌云被风吹散,满月显露,男主发情期彻底到来,面色潮红,拉着女主手蹭,啄吻女主,表露爱意,女主回想起封印记忆,虽然没想起来爱但是感觉愧疚想推开,男主强势压过来。makelove写细节一些
He plucks the quill from her fingers and throws it down. He lifts her out of the chair and pins her on her back on the Bed.
设置成窗外乌云被风吹散,满月显露,男主发情期彻底到来,面色潮红,拉着女主手蹭,啄吻女主,表露爱意,女主回想起封印记忆,虽然没想起来爱但是感觉愧疚想推开,男主强势压过来。makelove写细节一些
AZRIEL's scar flickers as its glow drains into her.
光芒闪烁,别一个给一个了
and wraps her legs around his waist. 她没有回答。她把银链缠在手腕上,拽着链子把他拉下来,然后双腿缠住他的腰。He sinks into her. He drives into her again and again. Her nails dig into his back, and his tail cinches around her waist.
稍微详细一些
I'm his one.
说我不知道为什么但是感觉......
He lowers his forehead to hers.
两个人喘息着,泪水从女主眼中滑落
You remember sealing me. Not loving me.
这里加上女主疑惑,但男主吻上去堵住了她的话
I sealed you. That's all I remember.
加上一句 我们之前见过
AZRIEL stands behind her chair with his horns out, breathing hard. His tail lashes the stone.
加上面色潮红
Five hundred years of illusions. Every one of them had his eyes.
好熟悉的金色眼睛
Let go of my ankle.
扑在男主怀里,一手扶着腹肌
Five hundred years, and no one has held me. From tonight, his nest is my bed.
改一下,“奇异的感受”好像之前也有过,五百年......
He pulls her down into the Nest and wraps himself around her from behind.
男主龙角显露,呼吸急促,说话黏糊,发情期真的到了在筑巢
Will you kill me today?
回应一下男主那句
...And you're the only one who can hurt me.
和上面承接上,你不好奇为什么只有我能伤害你吗
In the only one who can hurt me.
在一个背叛了我的人身上
Then stop watching me breathe.
脸和耳朵红了
No one enters this room without my word. You're stuck with me.
调侃一下你身材还挺好的
If I take her, our two half hearts become one. My life becomes hers. I can never hurt her again.
不用说这个,就说该死我为什么还在对一个封印过我的女人心动
his hand hovering above her throat. His face twists.
最后叹了口气
She doesn't even remember. Killing her now would be mercy.
写成又爱又恨的感觉
You're the size of a hill. How do I get you down this mountain?
有点突兀,怎么突然就要带走了,要加一句说明比如封印破了怎么办、或者选择不杀我就把你带走研究什么的
I didn't seal it. I kissed it open.
表情震惊
Nine lines in ten are nonsense. And it's all I have.
加一句说出来的“希望你乖乖被封印”
Take every memory I have of him. Seal him.
要有一种魔法交换的感觉,献祭记忆来封印
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Last night… it really happened.
确保是内心声音
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)I said I'd spoil them. I did not say all at once.
确保是内心声音,加点语气。chloe脸红,感觉呼吸也有些粗重
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Because you were bleeding, you idiot.
确保是内心声音,轻声的
Her fingers curl against the frantic pounding under his ribs
感受着心跳,别紧扣着了
KAEL(rough) (粗略)You never cared before.
kale仍握着Chloe的手,紧了紧
KAELWhy did you ask if I was in pain?
疑惑地深情地问,kale的耳朵微红动了动
Marin's tail coils around her ankle and slides slowly up her calf.
marin坐在靠近chloe的床边,双腿变成鱼尾向她的小腿缠绕
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Okay. Okay. This is fine. This is so not fine.
加上一些语气,确保是内心声音。chloe脸红了,目光也在几个人身上看
CHLOE 克洛伊How did you get in here?
疑惑地、有点惊讶的
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)That mark again. Why is it so hot this time?
确保是内心声音
CELIA (V.O.) 塞莉亚(原声)It's risky. But the odds are mine.
确保是内心声音。celia唇边勾起一抹微笑
ON SCREEN: 屏幕显示:Item [Bond Blood Boil] 物品 [羁绊·热血沸腾]Contract holder's bloodline forcibly summons all beast husbands. 契约持有者的血脉强行召唤了所有的兽夫。Beast husbands' instinctual desires amplified until dawn. 野兽丈夫们本能的欲望一直持续到黎明。
系统有声音那种,表现出来
ON SCREEN: 屏幕显示:Item [Heart-Eroding Draught] · Administered for 1,095 days Target's mind: Fully eroded. 物品 [心蚀药剂] · 持续施用 1,095 天 目标的意识:已被彻底侵蚀。
系统有声音那种,表现出来
ON SCREEN: 屏幕显示:Marin Emotional Status: [Devoted] — Target: Vivienne 马林的情感状态:[专一] — 目标:薇薇安
系统有声音那种,表现出来
ON SCREEN: 屏幕显示:[Merman Crisis] Mission Failed [人鱼危机] 任务失败Celia swipes the private interface. 西莉亚滑动了私人界面。ON SCREEN: 屏幕显示:Marin Affection gained: 0 获得的玛琳好感度:0
系统有声音那种,表现出来
CYRUS (V.O.) 赛勒斯(原声)A merman shares breath with one person in his entire life. What does that fish think he's doing?
确保是内心声音
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)He's so… beautiful.
确保是内心声音。chloe看呆了
MARINBreath-sharing. All merfolk can do it.
他害羞地说,脸也微红
The tips of Marin's fins flush bright red.
是脸红的那种感觉
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Wait. Am I… breathing underwater?
确保是内心声音
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)I'm going to die ahead of schedule.
确保是内心声音
Marin lies curled at the bottom, his scales fading from silver-blue to grayish white, cracking one after another.
这里无法维持变成了双腿
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)No no no— 不不不——
倒吸一口凉气说出来
CHLOE 克洛伊Marin! Wake up!
chloe焦急地喊
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Kael, handled. Riven, handled. Cyrus, handled. And then that gorgeous merman…
思索着说出来。Cylus还没搞定
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Transmigrate into a villainess, and I still don't get a day off?
确保是内心声音
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)That water was disgusting.
加上语气
ON SCREEN: 屏幕显示:Remedial Mission [Merman Crisis] 补救任务 [人鱼危机]Target: Marin near death → Host steps in to save him 目标:马林濒临死亡 → 主持人出手相救Expected reward: Marin Affection +30 预期奖励:玛琳好感度 +30
系统有声音那种,表现出来
CELIA (V.O.) 塞莉亚(原声)How could Vivienne have known? Coincidence, or…
这里是咬牙切齿地说
ON SCREEN: 屏幕显示:[Night of the Poisoned Tea] Mission Failed [毒茶之夜] 任务失败ON SCREEN: 屏幕显示:Original storyline: Vivienne drinks the poisoned tea → Riven is gravely punished → Host steps in to save him 原剧情:薇薇安喝下了掺毒的茶 → 里文遭到严厉惩罚 → 主持人出手相救ON SCREEN: 屏幕显示:Expected reward: Riven Affection +30 预期奖励:瑞文之爱 +30ON SCREEN: 屏幕显示:Actual gain: 0 当前增益:0
系统有声音那种,表现出来
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Don't remember this one from the show. Probably fine to skip.
确保是内心声音。
RIVEN (V.O.) 《RIVEN》(画外音)That's it? 就这些?
确保是内心声音
CHLOE 克洛伊Good night, Riven.
chloe心不在焉地说
Why the sudden soft spot for Kael today?
改成Riven吧
CHLOE 克洛伊Just spicing things up a little.
加点表情
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Celia. The original female lead. Vivienne's half-sister. She looks so…
确保是内心声音。
RIVEN (V.O.) 《RIVEN》(画外音)Why hasn't she thrown me in the dungeon? She always does. 她为什么还没把我扔进地牢?她平时总是这么做的。
确保是内心声音。
CHLOE 克洛伊I wanted to see if you'd dare.
加一点表情
RIVEN (V.O.) 《RIVEN》(画外音)Why does she smell so good?
确保是内心声音。
Chloe looks at him. She takes the cup in one hand. With the other, she grabs Riven by the collar and pushes the cup to his lips.
加点表情
Chloe slaps the cup away. Tea splashes onto a potted flower.
chloe被riven的举动吓到了
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)(horrified) (惊恐地)This tea. Vivienne drank it and threw up blood for three days.
chloe紧紧盯着杯子,闭着嘴,确保是内心声音
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)The wolf, spoils of war. The dragon, tricked into the contract.
加一点表情
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)The contract's still active. If one of them attacks me alone, most of the damage bounces back on him. That's why they took it. Until the full moon in episode thirty, when all four hit at once.
表情思考
An iron cage at an auction house.
拍卖行里的水缸
On land he grows legs,
改成:在岸上他可以变化双腿
Every hair on Chloe's body stands on end.
加上她屏住呼吸
Chloe all but runs for the exit.
她深呼吸了一下
CHLOE 克洛伊(stammering) (结结巴巴地)N-no more… beatings today. Everybody go… rest.
加一点表情
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Did I just transmigrate? Into the show I wouldn't even pay nineteen ninety for? What is happening?
确保是内心声音。加一些动作:cjloe看到大殿镜子里的自己,是自己的脸,确认是穿越了
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Spoil them rotten, I said. Easy, I said.
确保是内心声音。
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Did that dragon just sniff me? What is that supposed to mean?
确保是内心声音。
KAEL (V.O.) 《凯尔》(原声版)What scheme is she running now? And why is my heart pounding?
确保是内心声音。
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)I'm touching them. I'm actually… Not the point!
确保是内心声音。
The whip never comes.
这里鞭子已经放下了
KAEL (V.O.) 《凯尔》(原声版)What did she just say?
确保是内心声音。
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)Even better up close. That body… No. Wait. He's bleeding. My life is on the line and I'm thinking about this?
确保是内心声音。
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)(panicking) (惊慌失措)Is this a dream? If it's real, where's my system? My cheat powers? Where did that pop-up go?
确保是内心声音。海外是否熟悉系统?不熟悉可以换一个词
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)The four husbands who kill her in episode thirty.
确保是内心声音
CHLOE (V.O.) 克洛伊(画外音)This framing. This wolf guy. These abs… Isn't this episode one?
chloe紧闭着嘴,确保这里是内心声音
ON SCREEN (BULLET COMMENTS): 屏幕显示(简短评论):the 4 husbands got abused until she died 😭 heartbreaking 她的 4 位丈夫一直遭受虐待,直到她去世 😭 令人心碎villainess finally gone after 30 eps 💀 30 集后,反派女主角终于退场了 💀STRAIGHT. UP. REVENGE. 直截了当。一鼓作气。复仇。waited 30 episodes for THIS 等了 30 集就为了这一幕
弹幕做出声音效果
Brooke picks up Tessa's cup and takes a sip, smiling. Brooke leans down, her lips at Tessa's ear, whispering.
Paige的内心闪回,镜头在闪回前给到Paige
TESSA (V.O.) 特莎(原声)This isn't a game. Not to me.
确保是内心声音
Paige's face is flushed.
微红、淡淡的红
Most of Paige's weight leans into Tessa, pressing Tessa's back against the wood side panel between thick winter coats.
细化一点,两个人并排地在衣柜里面,Tessa背后抵着衣柜侧板
Paige leans against the wall, a red plastic cup in hand, laughing too loud at a cluster of guys,
Paige喝得脸微红
The room erupts.
静寂几秒后房间沸腾了
toward the dark hallway.
衣柜里的天堂七分钟,哪儿来的昏暗走廊,就把她拉起来往衣柜走
Paige pushes herself up on shaking legs, swaying before his palm.
不要双腿颤抖,就是有点不稳地站起来。加一句Maggie担忧地低声问你还好吗,你喝醉了
Paige tips her head back, laughing, flirting with whoever's closest.
不要仰起头、抛媚眼,就是笑和聊天
TEXT FROM TESSA: "Where are you?"
先说“好”
PAIGE (V.O.) 《佩吉》(原声版)She's here for Brooke.
确保是内心声音
PAIGE 佩吉Ryan. He asked me out.
平静地说
and crosses the narrow room.
走了过去。狭窄的房间有点不妥
PAIGE 佩吉Fine.
有点不爽地说
TESSA (V.O.) 特莎(原声)Date.
确保是内心声音
PAIGE (V.O.) 《佩吉》(原声版)She already has Brooke. Might as well be a good straight girl.
确保是内心声音
PAIGE 佩吉But you want to be.
有点生气的吃醋的
PAIGE 佩吉Were you two close? 你
Paige看着在书桌前的Tessa
Brooke laughs and sets the cup down.
Paige僵硬地看着两人,笑不出来
PAIGE (V.O.) 《佩吉》(原声版)"B"... Brooke? “B”……布鲁克?
确保是内心声音
BROOKE 布鲁克Practice at six, Paige. Don't be late.
笑着看Paige说
Paige's gaze darts from Brooke to the phone.
就笑着打招呼、看着Brooke吧
PAIGE 佩吉Who is it?
看向门、问
Paige curls on the couch in the oversized hoodie,
就是刚才的那个卫衣
PAIGE (V.O.) 《佩吉》(原声版)God, it smells so good.
确保是内心声音
Tessa's knuckles turn white around her pen.
而且耳朵有点红
PAIGE 佩吉We're both girls. You shouldn't mind.
笑着、语气轻快
, and presses her hands flat over her formulas.
有点抽象,就继续看书吧
PAIGE 佩吉Okay. Bye.
语气轻快但还有些心不在焉
MADDIE (on phone) 麦迪(在打电话)You're so distracted. We'll talk tomorrow.
无奈的语气
PAIGE (V.O.) 《佩吉》(原声版)Who's "B"? “B”是谁?
确保是内心声音
Paige paces by the desks,
宿舍的书桌前,宿舍没那么多桌子走来走去
Paige and Maddie walk along the concrete path.
也有学生从身边路过
MADDIESeriously?
震惊疑惑反问
MADDIEOkay. For someone you supposedly hate, you bring her up a lot.
有点无语地看着Paige,用无奈的语气说话
close enough to catch every word.
也别太近,确保有一定距离
the rule sheet hangs in plain view.
突出slience is yes
PAIGE (V.O.) 《佩吉》(原声版)I'm actually living with Tessa Reed.
加上类似:我做了什么,不敢相信我和Tessa住在一起。确保是内心声音
Let’s see which rule breaks first.
确保是内心声音
PAIGE 佩吉Just in case.
加一句她说自己是万人迷这种,俏皮一点
Paige smiles and takes Tessa's hand.
Paige笑着主动直接拉过Tessa的手握手
What if I don't want to answer something?
I 改成 someone
PAIGE 佩吉System glitch. I'm your new roommate.
笑着、很快地说
Paige is literally the nicest person in the world. She—
前面加上一点“wow you know I‘m so 开心...”
MADDIEHey. You must be Lily. 嗨。你一定是莉莉吧。LILYHi. 你好。
友善地打招呼,说很高兴我们是舍友了
On the bed behind them, Paige's phone lights up. 在他们身后的床上,佩奇的手机亮了起来。PHONE SCREEN: 手机屏幕:Lily P.: Done. She's all yours 🙂 莉莉·P:搞定。她全归你了 🙂
这里Lily不要知道Paige是想和Tessa住一起,可以删掉也可以换成“你简直是天使学姐!我会保守秘密的”
Sorry, Maddie. I'll make it up to you. Somehow.
确保是内心声音,Paige抿着嘴
Absolutely not. I'm going to the housing office.
Maddie坚定地说
The girl who called you mediocre in front of the whole party?
Maddie抬高了声音、震惊说道
Lily P.: Got assigned to Tessa Reed's room. I don't want to live with a human calculator.
加个哭脸表情
flops back,
靠回床上的枕头
They hug.
拥抱还是击掌?
She winces.
刚想起来有事的样子
Wait, seriously?
Paige也是开心的惊讶
Housing results are out. Roommates again next semester.
Maddie是开心的语气,又能和好朋友住在一起了
Maddie throws herself onto the mattress, waving her phone.
Maddie是开心的神情
Paige scrolls on her bed, bored.
靠在枕头上
She keeps walking.
两个人继续挽着手走着
MADDIEOoh. So how was that bar the other night?
八卦一点的神情
It was just okay.
说这话的时候表情有点心虚和磕磕巴巴那种感觉
The bar door swings open behind her.
Tessa这时候应该已经出门了,这句可能要换在前面或者改一下
Paige stares at the words on her screen. Turn around. Her heel skids and she stumbles. The black-framed glasses fly off and hit the pavement. No time.
这是屏幕上的字,这里没有表述,会产生Paige转身的误解。而且不是高跟鞋,这里的衣服是卫衣、牛仔短裤、白色低帮板鞋。
AVATake good care of it for me. In thirty days, I'll take it all back—with interest.
这句是低语
Ava stays motionless in the middle of the one-dollar bills.
艾娃站在成堆的一美元纸币中间
AVA (V.O.) AVA(原声版)She knows the family rule. How does she know what Henry said to me?
确保是内心独白
Chloe turns, still smiling, and leans down as if to hug kneeling Ava. Ava's fingers slip from the necklace.
这里不是跪着的了
Ava reaches up and grabs the gold chain at Chloe's throat. Her knuckles turn stark white beneath the heart-shaped sapphire.
这里Ava站起来去抓
AVA (V.O.) AVA(原声版)Those were Mom's words. To me. I'm the Sterling daughter.
确保是内心独白
AVA (V.O.) AVA(原声版)Mom's sapphire. It's supposed to be locked in the family vault. So how is it on her?
确保是内心独白
AVA (V.O.) AVA(原声版)Sterling? That's my name. Dad has one daughter. Me. So who is she?
确保是内心独白
Ava spreads the empty mouth wide, first toward herself, then toward Mason's livestream.
这里需要写明是信封的口
AVA (V.O.) AVA(原声版)He dropped them on purpose. That's why it was always cash
确保是内心独白
AVA (V.O.) AVA(原声版)That's... the day we met.
确保是内心独白
AVA (V.O.) AVA(原声版)I will never cry in front of this scumbag.
确保是内心独白
On graduation day, I tell him who I really am.
毕业那天,将要告诉他真实身份
Blake stands up.
布莱克面带笑容地站起来
Blake opens his eyes, flushed and breathing hard.
在此之前布莱克已经睁开眼睛了,这里应该是想解释、眨了眨眼睛,被拆穿的尴尬和害羞使他脸红着喘气解释
smile still on his face.
这里是布莱克的脸上有微笑,格兰特表情冷冷的
BLAKE (V.O.) 布莱克(画外音)Is he... avoiding me? 他……是在躲着我吗?
确保这里是内心声音
And for that ridiculously hot Alpha. I can do this.
这个形容词会不会略微中二
Down the corridor, the locker-room door opens. Grant walks out, dressed in his uniform and tie, backpack over one shoulder, and turns into the restroom. 走廊尽头,更衣室的门开了。格兰特走了出来,身穿制服,系着领带,背包斜挎在肩上,随即走进了洗手间。A slow smile spreads across Blake's face.
这时候两人是有距离的,一个在走廊这头,一个在走廊那头
What is wrong with me? I don't run. I never run.
run是想表示落荒而逃,会不会有歧义
A few paces back, three watching bullies fix their eyes on Grant's furious reaction.
恶霸盯着格兰特和那个对他表白的omega
Mason takes the bottle and towel in one hand. With Blake's back to Grant, Mason meets Grant's eyes and gives him a slow, provocative smile. He drapes his free arm over Blake's shoulders. 梅森用一只手拿着瓶子和毛巾。此时布莱克正背对着格兰特,梅森与格兰特四目相对,对他露出了一个慢悠悠且挑逗的微笑。他将另一只手臂搭在布莱克的肩上。MASON 梅森Don't mind if I do. 那我就不客气了。He walks off with Blake.
这里想的是布莱克背对格兰特,布莱克面对梅森,梅森越过布莱克肩头能和格兰特对视的站位,需要描述吗?同时梅森这里是接过水和毛巾后,揽过布莱克的肩膀和他一起走。
GRANTSaturday.
格兰特点头说Saturday或者“可以”
Paige tilts her head back
不要向后仰头了,就是正常派对动作,笑着什么的。加一句描述表明佩奇长得很好看身材很好
brow knitting.
表情疑惑
Paige loses her footing and pitches forward, slamming full-body into Tessa's leather frame. The impact jars Paige's grip. The phone clatters face-down onto the floorboards between their boots.佩奇脚下一滑,身体向前倾倒,整个人重重撞上了泰莎的皮质车架。这一撞让佩奇的手一松,手机“哐当”一声屏幕朝下摔在了她们靴子之间的木地板上。Paige drops instantly into a low crouch between the pointed tips of Tessa's black boots
主要动作改为:佩奇被撞地身子一歪,后背重重撞上泰莎的正侧方,手机掉落,佩奇蹲下但是看到那双鞋愣住了——后接原本的动作和剧情。
Tessa lifts her chin with effortless authority.
让泰莎笑一点说
Paige wrenches the phone back, fingers trembling as she hunts for unsend.
加一句说“撤回、撤回”
The kiss deepens. Paige's eyelids flutter shut, and Tessa's eyes close with hers, their breath colliding as Tessa leans in, pressing Paige deeper into the coats.
这里是把佩奇压在外套和衣柜侧壁上
PAIGE (V.O.) 《佩吉》(原声版)What the hell… 这到底是怎么回事……
在亲吻所以确保是心声
The closet door slams shut into total darkness, but no lock turns. Clothes hang all around. Driven backward into dense hanging coats and the drywall, Paige faces Tessa, pressed almost flush against her, breath shallow. Their noses hover centimeters apart. Tessa's hands hang free at her sides, while Paige's hands tremble between their bodies. Brooke stands immediately outside the shut door with the crowd.
这里注意画面是两人面对面、衣柜门和一堆衣服分别在两人侧面,这样一来后面录像时才能拍到两人接吻。同时门有门缝,这样后面泰莎才能看见布鲁克的高跟鞋
Paige curves her lips into her signature smirk.
是调戏那种性质的笑容
FRIEND 2 朋友 2Come on. Land Grant Hale. Prove him wrong.来吧,兰德·格兰特·黑尔。证明他错了。
这里想说的是拿下Grant Hale
A long, polished table. Blake sits at the end, a practiced smile on his face. His father doesn't look up from his plate.一张长长的、打磨得光洁如新的桌子。布莱克坐在桌尾,脸上挂着一抹习以为常的微笑。他的父亲低头看着盘子,没有抬头。FATHER 父亲Useless. An Alpha, an Omega, either one would've been worth something. We got a Beta.没用。无论是阿尔法还是欧米茄,任何一个都有点价值。结果我们却得到一个贝塔。MOTHER 母亲And now everyone's talking about him. Do you know what people say about you? I can't even show my face anymore.现在大家都都在议论他。你知道别人怎么说你吗?我现在连出门都不好意思了。FATHER 父亲A useless Beta with a bad reputation. Perfect.一个毫无用处、声名狼藉的 Beta 版。太棒了。
这一段,男beta的哥哥是alpha,弟弟是omega,所以继承家业有哥哥、家族联姻有弟弟,家族对他不重视,而不是只有他一个beta,需要更改谈话内容。
The current keeps running. Cole forces his locked body to turn around and face her. Evelyn crosses to him, grips the front of his collar, and pulls his face down to her masked one while sustaining the current.
不抓领子,男主上半身是裸露的。改为将牵引绳一圈圈缠在手上勒紧,拽着男主拉向自己的脸
In the mirror, Evelyn catches Grant staring at Cole’s features.在镜子里,伊芙琳发现格兰特正盯着科尔的脸庞看。EVELYN (V.O.) 伊芙琳(画外音)Does he recognize him? 他认出他了吗?EVELYN 伊芙琳Cole. Get my handbag from storage, please.科尔,请从储物间把我的手提包拿出来。COLEYes, ma'am. 是的,女士。Scene 2 场景 2location_2: Luxury Bridal Boutique Showroomlocation_2:奢华婚纱精品店展厅time: Day 2, continuous 时间:第 2 天,持续中Cole steps past Grant and walks across the open showroom toward the storage room door at the far end. Evelyn remains at the fitting-room threshold, watching.科尔从格兰特身旁走过,穿过宽敞的展厅,朝尽头的储藏室门走去。伊芙琳仍站在试衣间门口,静静地看着。Grant turns his entire body, tracking Cole’s loose, rolling fighter's gait.格兰特转过整个身子,紧盯着科尔那松散、摇摆的拳击手步态。Quick insert: the octagon. Cole chained to the posts, blood at the corner of his mouth, glaring at the crowd.快速插入:八角笼。科尔被锁在柱子上,嘴角带血,怒视着观众。Grant’s eyes widen in sudden realization. His breath catches.格兰特猛然醒悟,眼睛睁得大大的。他屏住了呼吸。Grant turns sharply toward Cole. Evelyn grips the open fitting-room doorway as Grant’s command freezes Cole mid-stride without turning, several steps short of the storage room door, his clean hands still empty.格兰特猛地转向科尔。伊芙琳紧抓着试衣间敞开的门框,格兰特的一声命令让科尔在离储藏室门还有几步之遥的地方停下了脚步——他正迈步前行,却没来得及转身,那双干净的手依然空空如也。GRANTStop. I know you. You're—住手。我认识你。你就是——
这一段闪回改为女主视角,在女主发现未婚夫盯着男主看时,镜头透过女主瞳孔闪回拍卖会的记忆,她想起未婚夫可能会认出男主的脸,于是让男主去拿她的包。此时未婚夫喊住男主说:等等,我在哪里见过你——
GRANTWell. If Richard wants it that way.
称呼改为我们的父亲
Cole slips inside without permission and eases the door shut behind him. It rests closed but unlocked, with no latch engaged. He stays just inside, between Evelyn and the exit, without approaching or touching her. Evelyn turns sharply toward him in her silk slip, the gown still hanging untouched on its hook.
加上:在男主关门时,女主刚脱下衣服,露出内衣。此处不应当是睡裙,应当是内衣。
Cole’s shoe scrapes the polished floor as his weight surges forward, breaking rank by half a step before he forces his boots to lock and clenches his fists behind his spine.
没有队列,是偏离他原先站的位置半步
He lifts a trembling hand to the locked leather at his throat.
前面是金属项圈,这里也应当为金属。
Cole lifts the collar with his own scarred hands, wraps the thick leather around his throat, and pulls the front buckle tight against his skin. His breath catches against her skirts as he seals the band.
前面是金属项圈,这里也应当是金属
Her gloved fingers trace the collar along his throat.
科尔裸露上身,没有领口,改为摩挲脖颈和喉咙
Evelyn stands in the center of the private room, holding the leash slack in her left hand and the remote primed in her right. Cole towers before her, the thick collar tight against his bronze throat. Behind him, the heavy playroom exit door sits closed and unlocked.
加一个科尔此时的着装:裸露着上身、穿着一条短裤。
He's only there for security, Vivian. With the wedding this close, I don't want anything to go wrong.
对薇薇安称呼改为母亲
GRANT WHITMORE 格兰特·惠特莫尔Completely. Her guardianship passes from Richard to me.
不要直呼其名,称呼改为父亲
EVELYN 伊芙琳(meekly) (温顺地)I'm sorry, Vivian. Good morning, Father. Adrian. Grant.
薇薇安应当是女主母亲,称呼改为母亲
Miss Evelyn. Your father, Mrs. Sterling, Mr. Adrian, and Mr. Whitmore are already waiting in the main dining room. Please hurry.
加上“你的未婚夫”这个称谓
Grant turns in his seat and narrows his eyes at the masked girl in the back row. No flicker of recognition. He gives a dismissive snort and lowers his paddle. Victor Kane slams his iron gavel against the steel railing.
加他说一句“疯女人配疯狗”,显示确实没认出来
VICTOR 维克多(ecstatic) (欣喜若狂)Sold! Ten million, to the lady in the back row!
和前文对应,改为三百万
EVELYN 伊芙琳(soft, courteous) (温和、有礼貌的)Ten million dollars, if you please.
改成三百万
VICTOR 维克多Five hundred, going once… going twice—
和前面一样,改成十万
GRANTFive hundred. For the stray.
价格太低了,改成十万
masked Grant Whitmore lounges among his friends and lazily lifts his wooden paddle.
加一个举止亲昵的女伴