are

step

recommend rephrasing

verify

While commendable to show that RSG has improvements planned, I wonder if we are setting ourselves up to deliver more work beyond project contract if we set this expectation?

be consistent in how platforms are referenced. See previous note

Review for tense. This is all past tense, while previous chapters were mostly present

note multiple errors listed in this chapter

add a descriptor

Is this supposed to be an error?

Is a key/definition of rMove data=app data explained?

three? There are only 3 categories listed

what are GLMs?

typo?

can these uniformly be referred to as "unlinked trips"?

applies

with

ditto

Perhaps add an interpretation example, and suggested next steps, based on the figure below?

"household- "

bold

matches

I think this explanation should be moved up in this manual, since PopSim is referenced multiple times before this chapter.

should there be an "and" added after the comma?

Suggest turning this into bulleted list

capitalize first letter

remove

remove. It's not necessary

is this a common phrase? If not can it be restated or eliminated?

assigns

assigns

remove

add a hyphen here, or remove the hyphen in the subheader for consistency

should the URL be inside the parentheses?

I have seen this referenced as 20% in other places. Let's get a consensus on the %

add a space

Remove italics in subheader for consistency

Is this in the script or manual? If the former, I suggest also referencing the part in Ch 8 (Survey Data Preparation) or simply that there's more detail to come in Ch 8. Without more context it leaves users asking why it's on longer used, or why there was legacy code in the first place

Is there guidance for this review?

I was expecting a PSRC specifics box to follow, given previous "Optional" paragraph treatments

Suggest changing to "labeled," as the other version is British English spelling

missing a comma

Is this is a variable or part of the script? If so, the font type should match how other variables or script are handled for consistency (and user recognition)

"household-"

This is minor but should this be step #5? Then the list of 9.1-9.5 nicely aligns with the numbered steps here

Consider reformatting this into a bulleted list

Remove italics to be consistent with other sub headers

Change to "are" for consistent present tense

"Residents of group quarters," since the examples cite group quarters, not residents

Should this have additional guidance?

I suggest rephrasing, something like: "data so that estimates align with the targets (i.e.,population)."

typo

This may be splitting hairs. Outside the study region is listed as "gray" here but in the figure & legend, it appears more purple. Maybe because it's the rainbow colors which make me assume the last color is purple (or violet), and also because there are other regions in the map that are gray, albeit a lighter shade of gray

Can this be displayed within the paragraph and not in this separate text box? It's odd to have to scroll horizontally to finish reading this paragraph

Recommend rewording

I appreciate these types of helpful tips!

I find having interspersed code like this in narrative descriptions sometimes hard to follow since I don't know what "largest_bg_to_client_zone" is meant to be. Would a reader/user of this manual be familiar with this code already?

some funky formatting going on here

Is this a commonly known term? I wasn't familiar with it so I looked it up

maybe "run validation here"? Otherwise it's unclear what "stop" this references

write out

Include a reference & description of the figure to give it context

recommend "non" over "un"

Add "Python" as well, since in 2.3 Python is listed, along with R and Quarto