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  1. Apr 2017
    1. Considering all of the division in the city we call Atlanta, the guiding question is if the National Center for Civil and Human Rights ameliorates racial division?

      You mean the DESIGN of the museum?

    2. Travel time and distance play a role in the type of treatment received.

      How does this impact visitors of the NCfCHR? Who can get there? Who can't? why? HOw does this support your argument that this museum is really a museum for white people, not for all people?

    3. Despite segregation ending in

      Without citing your sources and quoting sources when the words/ideas aren't yours, this falls into pits of plagiarism.

      Essentially your entire argument seems to be here, in this page somewhere. But without clear claims, evidence explanation, and considerations of other pov's, this isn't convincing yet.

    1. The city of Atlanta is a place that welcomes everyone.

      Maybe answer the question: Does Atlanta's design meet its mission goals? Always? sometimes?

    1. This is a taste of what some parts of the building sound like. People talking and recordings of previous events educating us of the past.

      AWESOME sound embed!!! This really works to create an ambiance.

      The problem is I have no idea why you're talking about layout and design. There's no thesis yet and layout and design of the museum doesn't seem to have anything to do with why people should go to the museum.

    2. The trip to the Center for Civil and Human Rights is a trip that people need to take to be re-inspired to make a difference in the world today. Many people fought and died for the rights we now have today and the center reminds us all of the struggles we went through to get there as brothers and sisters of the human race. The trip to the museum is something everyone should do.

      Okay.... Perhaps the conclusion of this work might call for people to go to the museum, but not here. This can't be an advertisement for the museum. Instead, the focus should be about the design of the museum.

    3. The center reflects on the past to ignite a spark to change or inspire the future to make the world a better place.

      Hmmmm... This sounds a bit cliche. What is the museum's mission? Seems like this is a good place for that info.

    4. the visitors

      Who goes there? Whare are its visitors, mainly? (source?)

    5. civil rights

      Only in Atlanta? Why is this museum here and not in D.C.?

    6. s it took t

      It's over? Why the past tense here?