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  1. Oct 2017
    1. seems so silly, obviously no one wants mass shootings to happen, but this is where the demagoguery comes in. In today’s society, it seems as though each political party views the other as a group of terrible, evil people with bad ideas. Although I don’t know much about politics, I do read many twitter arguments and shake my head at how these parties go against each other so aggressively.

      OK, these are examples of weak arguments, but you need to show how they fit the definition of demagoguery.

    2. things. For example, Hitler was a demagogue who got away with killing so many people because he taught his followers that his way was the only one that mattered. One could even argue that Donald Trump is a demagogue in power now. His insensitive way of speaking about the opposite party is demagoguery. He places adjectives in front of everything, like “crooked” Hillary. This could be seen as a tactic to make her seem less credible just by being associated with that word.

      Good, but you need to unpack RM's main claims in more detail before going to analysis of a target text.

    1. critical digital literacy” in her writing. I think by this she means she believes young people should be able to understand computers and other digital medias we use daily.

      That is rather general - I believe her definition goes beyond this. Try to provide more precision and specificity when giving an account of claims.

    1. because each day we use our computers and our smartphones and most of us have no clue what goes into that.

      Interesting response to Boyd. Could capture her claims more fully and precisely.

    2. In my opinion, the most important claim is “teens will not become critical contributors to this ecosystem simply because they were born in an age when these technologies were pervasive.” Throughout the entire reading, Boyd is trying to explain that just because teens and young adults were born in the digital age does not mean they know anything about how a computer works. She explains that the youth must learn how to become media literate, it does not come naturally.

      This is indeed a key claim. Try to capture some of the other main claims when discussing texts.

    3. The most provocative point in the chapter was made by John Perry Barrow,

      OK, but frame in terms of he primary author - Boyd draws on the words of John Perry Barlow to argue...

  2. Sep 2017
    1. Ong’s chapter was so interesting to me because he is emphasizing the importance of oral language and speaking, but my generation is built on writing. I write everyday, whether it be emails at work, texts to my friends, or essays for homework. His most relevant line to me was “think important thoughts.” I think he basically means, if what you are going to say, write, or do is not important, it is not worth doing.

      This contains a good grasp of Ong and does some solid analysis. My main suggestion in future homework assignments is to explain the authors' claims a little more before responding, and try to ground your analysis in more discussion of passages from the target text. I look forward to reading more.

    2. Each time they repeated a cry of his mother, it reminded the audience what a disappointment he came across as.

      nicely put - the repetition has a mnemonic and an aesthetic dimension.

    3. “King of Nyani, King of Nyani, will you never rise,” is an example of repetition in the speech.

      Good - but in homework assignments try to use more quotations to support your analysis and give it more depth.

    4. Another way the performance relates back to Ong is because it is extremely repetitive

      Yes, a key element of oral composition and delivery.

    1. reading the actual text she writes. I wonder how many people looked at her blog before it got big, and what kept her going if there wasn’t much attention at first. I thought the small excerpts about her story were so awesome and inspiring.

      This is a solid response. In future responses try to move a little more deeply into the text. Keep bringing in connections to your experience, but linger on the author's claims a little longer before doing that.

    2. hildren that clearly backs up his claim. I think he does a very good job in his rebuttals

      OK, but rebuttals are sections where the author describes objections to her claims (people who disagree), so you need to spell out what these are.

    3. Many years ago, when reading and writing were first introduced, writing was not used as much. Reading was taught to everyone, was told that it was important to human’s success, and taken very seriously.

      Yes, one of his central points. This is surprising to most.

    4. Thompson brought up was the audience effect. I resonated and agreed with this because I have done it myself. If I am writing a text to a friend, I definitely will not be as formal as if I am writing a Facebook post that many people will see. If you know people are watching and critiquing you, your desire to perform better will be much greater.

      Good point, and nice connection to your experience. Try to cover more claims in your reading responses and "unpack" them a bit more.

  3. kellyschwabblog.wordpress.com kellyschwabblog.wordpress.com
    1. During this class I hope to feel more comfortable in my writing, especially in a blog like setting. I am excited to get the semester going and be able to look back on how my writing changes in the next few months.

      I really enjoyed reading this - thanks for sharing Kelly.

    2. It is crazy to me how much I find on Twitter that I probably wouldn’t know if I did not have the app

      Sounds like you are a twitter maestro. Perhaps you can share how you use it in class?