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  1. Oct 2017
    1. other seen in the video above

      I think you need to keep your investigation broad. This video has nothing to do with autism. But you open with a definition of autism. How do these two things relate?

    1. mination and ultimately how to resolve these issues.

      And why is that useful to you?

    2. House RM, Thompson TL. Psychiatric As

      Right now this citation doesn't clearly convey the author.

    3. he sensitive topic of rejecting server transplant patients grasped my interest especially because the reason for their rejection is their mental disorders and disabilities. Most mental disorders like; Autism, puts patients in positions to not be able to speak up for themselves but they are surrounded by people who can. The mental disorder; Autism, is personal for me so I engaged in extensive research to attempt to answer the tough question: Is the reject of organ transplantation to autistic/ mentally disabled patients considered medical discrimination or is it medically ethical?

      This introduction begins to describe the controversy. It could use to go into greater detail, however. Autism is a spectrum, for instance. Some autistic people can very well speak for themselves...

    1. His recent article , ” Entrepreneurship:Productive, Unproductive, and Destructive” elaborate and evolve the  hypothesis of the varies entrepreneur differences.

      What does this mean?

    1. The thought about this time people that comes to mind is that is was most likely during the women’s movement.

      What does this mean?

    1. “Margaret L. Bauman, MD.”

      This is the title?

    2. I never honestly realized the scarcity of organs and the fight to just get on a list yet alone actually getting the actual organ

      How scarce are they?

    3. The Autism Research Foundation teamed up with the Harvard Brain Tissue Resource Center at McLean Hospital in B

      So how many points of view exist on the issue? How could you make this very clear?

    4. Recently in today’s news the question surfaced who gets to make the call to grant someone a second chance at life and what qualities must you posses to be chosen or not to be.

      What do you mean? Say it plainly, directly. Be clear.

    5. Did you gain some insight?

      No.

      What if that's your reader's answer? Then you've lost them. What can you do to keep them reading about your important topic? We still don't know what the issue is.

    6. discrimination is raging

      What might make for an interesting and compelling beginning? Maybe an anecdote? A story? One that illustrates the problem?

    7. Mentally Disabled and the Approval of Organ Transplant

      If your focus is on autism, why not specify in the title?

    8. I’ll specifically be discussing autism so down below I provided a video to virtually step in the shoes of an autistic child and gain a better perception of the disability.

      Why not embed the video here? Why not begin with the video?