- Apr 2024
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vincentshungry.wordpress.com vincentshungry.wordpress.comAbout Me2
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to the best of my abilit
Why center this text?
Why confess that you're not a professional chef? What's the audience and purpose for this blog?
Are you writing to college aged young people?
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Abou
Maybe feature that photo of you here, on the about me page.
Tags
Annotators
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vincentshungry.wordpress.com vincentshungry.wordpress.com
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der to spr
This opening page reads like a student fulfilling an assignment rather than a writer/cook establishing a real blog. Who is your audience?
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s in Europe
Maybe start with this passage?
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Please click the ‘About Me’ section in the to learn more about me a this blog.
A blog is expected to have an "about me" page, so you don't need these instructions, right?
Also, food blogs usually feature the food and highlight the person on the side. Is there a specific food blog you're modeling?
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- Mar 2024
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sites.google.com sites.google.com
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Growing up surrounded by the rich tapestry of Nantucket's maritime culture, I
Do you need this phrase? "maritime" is a powerful word. If we hear it too much it becomes heavy.
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ed her N
"by her,,,"
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its role as the birthplace of the Star Spangled Banner
the ship has a role and is a place? This strains logic. What do you mean?
Maybe a touch more about the Minden? This blurb refers to "resilience" and "patriotism" without mentioning why.
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sites.google.com sites.google.com
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Our art isn't just for collectors' walls—it's also found in the interiors of local hotels and homes.
While technically correct writing, this sentence is hart do read.
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ity. Al
How to transition between the two sentences? Maybe a semicolon or combining them.
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provided
"...to providing"
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since
"in 1983"
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- Apr 2023
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sites.gatech.edu sites.gatech.edu
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she couldn’t find a single star.
Really nice writing, Anjali. The only thing missing is... hope, or propulsion. What moves this story forward?
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Today, in the year 2052,
40 years later...
This way of indicating the current year feels less explicit, more natural.
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summers in Toronto from 40 years ago,
The summer of 2012...
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ever
needed?
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her
Sister or Shannon?
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sister
Give sister a name?
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that would have been appropriate, given the situation.
Is this needed?
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outside her window
we know this already, can take out. What difference does it make?
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Fahrenheit
you can take this out if you want
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her disease
There is an meaningful difference here between "her" disease and "the" disease. What do you think about that difference?
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sites.gatech.edu sites.gatech.edu
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Stephen Flemmi.”
This is a bit fey, I think. Perhaps the name is too worn to make out. The tag itself, the handover is enough.
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was
"had been..." I think you need a different past tense here.
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hen he went to fight in Vietnam. He disappeared after arriving back in the States. I never got to meet him.”
this feels like too much information. Why would Wyatt tell Bulger this?
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hare, am I right
Good. It's unclear who the good guy/bad guy is...
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“May I ask why, though?”
If this is SF speaking, goes on the line above.
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“I stayed in contact,”
This isn't a reason. Has SF seen the kid drive?
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reminding himself to choose his words carefully
How can you show this instead of tell?
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escaping countless police chases
No need. Feels "telling."
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sites.gatech.edu sites.gatech.edu
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No need for this phrase.
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No need for this passage.
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- Jan 2023
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pdarrington.net pdarrington.net
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These results suggest that even control-ling for changes in counterarguing, changes in bolsteringalso play a role in the influence of stories on persuasion, sug-gesting that a reduction in message processing is importantto fully explain the influence of stories
We become consumers, less thoughtful, more emotional?
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that is, whentheir attention is divided, people have difficulty perceivinghow specious weak facts actually are and how compellingstrong facts actually are
I believe that one!
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f stories
All stories? Or just good, enjoyable stories?
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Although both strong and weak factsare arguments in favor of a product, they differ in their per-suasiveness; strong facts tend to elicit less counterarguingthan weak facts
Are these stories?
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We suggest that these mixed findings reveal a need tounderstand when incorporating facts into stories increasesthe persuasive power of a set of facts and when it does not
For whom is it important to do this?
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we suggest two distinct reasons that storiesmight reduce counterarguments: (a) stories bias processingaway from negative thoughts, or (b) stories draw attentionalresources away from the processing of facts.
What other conclusions could they have drawn?
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The preceding observations suggest that, although thepresentation of facts might be important, one should strate-gically surround facts with a story to increase persuasion.Indeed, persuaders might be actively encouraged to use sto-ries unless another factor, such as cost or one’s storytellingability, prohibits them from doing so. We acknowledge thatit is possible that the persuasive power of facts might beincreased by integrating them into stories.
But they don't do this... why?
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one need only look to the polit-ical sphere, and even one’s everyday life, to see that peopleoften attempt to influence one another by combining a per-suasive message with a compelling story.
Is this change necessarily tied to argument? Do we seek any change?
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stories are used for pur-poses beyond pure entertainment: They can also serve aspersuasive devices.
Aren't they always?
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ersuasion, stories, arguments, narrative transportatio
Note: "argument" Are short stories arguments...? Films? In a way maybe...
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coupling facts withstories can either enhance or undermine persuasion.
Interesting... How are they defining "fact"? Does "narrative" = "story"?
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educes resistance to a messag
Assumed goal. Any change it's not a goal?
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- Feb 2022
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pdarrington.net pdarrington.net
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Jane Bennett’s call, in Vibrant Matter, to ‘‘bear witness to the vital materialities that flow through and around us’’ by means of ‘‘a cultivated,patient, sensory attentiveness.’’
Ah Bennett! GREAT book, people. You can stop reading here.
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have begun toexperiment with what it might mean to describe, explain, and analyze ratherthan to theorize or critique.
goodness it's hard to believe grown scholars don't perceive the role of purpose and audience in valuing the level of detail necessary or called for in any specific writing act. I guess audience/purpose disappears from our attention if we're wrapped up in our subjects and ideas?
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Legal theorist Anne Orford has recently championed descrip-tion, citing Michel Foucault’s claim that the role of philosophy is not ‘‘toreveal what is hidden, but rather to make us see what is seen.’
Oh Foucault... In truth, people just like to say that name. I say Foucault Shmoocault. And also you can't write "critical" in the sentence after you quote Foucault and then define critical as anything but Marxist analysis. But ok. you go Tsing. And Latour knows it's not possible to write a true and complete report about the topic at hand. Sadly I haven't read Tsing, but I've read the others. I need to go back and investigate Latour's references to desccription.
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What, we wondered, would it mean toacknowledge the ways that our critical and pedagogical practices makedescription central—to prosody, plot summary, histories of the book, evento allegorical and symptomatic interpretations?
Okay. So here the authors are bringing broader questions about the value (and by default, the nature) of description to their own field, English Literature.
And then they broaden out... Nice.
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literary critics
Ah ha! English majors. That explains a lot.
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numbers.8
Curious. This "definition" doesn't seem to define at all. I'd argue there's a useful difference between "definition" and "description." Are we doing different things when we classify and when we describe? What do you think?
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We believe that description is a core, if unacknowledged, method in allscholarship and teaching. In order to proceed, interpretations, explana-tions, and prescriptions must give an account of—describe—what theyinterpret, explain, or evaluate. Description makes objects and phenomenaavailable for analysis and synthesis, and is rarely as simple as its critics imply
AMEN!
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Humanists often keep their engagement with description tacitand articulate their explicit discomfort with ‘‘mere description’’ by insisting(rightly) that description cannot be separated from interpretation.
Huh? Okay, so here we see the difference an understanding of meaning as triadic (Peircean) can make. These authors seem to understand "mere description" as "objective description," as not involving interpretation at all. And yet, the authors seem to agree ("rightly") that description cannot be separated from interpretation. Hmmm.
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could not produce historical narratives orfield notes.6
Field Notes = Data Data = creative Creative = interpreted & interpretable
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a highly interpretive kind,
Is there any other kind?
*I suppose there could be considered a "less interpretive" kind; one that tries to draw only on perception and the language of perception.
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But Sen and Gerring also contest this view by under-scoring the fundamental importance of descriptions in social science and byforegrounding the skills needed to produce them.
So the question is this: Is there value in "pure description"?
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h praise
okay, well, sure. But that doesn't mean the field doesn't value description as intellectually rigorous.
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description is everywhere, a ubiquitous and necessary condition ofscholarship, and in practice, if not in preaching, attitudes toward it varyacross and within disciplines
Of course it is. It better be. Describing is a way of transcribing experience. Accounting for it before we think about it. how can one assess the quality of an argument or interpretation or analysis without assessing the way the author accounts for experiencing the elements of their study?
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