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  1. Sep 2019
    1. "The damage is done. No one can undo it," Miller told Turner in court. "And now we both have a choice. We can let this destroy us, I can remain angry and hurt and you can be in denial, or we can face it head on - I accept the pain, you accept the punishment, and we move on."

      The sources appear to me to be the original court hearing. This is a very strong source. This is also a very strong quote and each quote is very well placed.

      I don't see any web links. The article provided complete information and is a strong article. I wouldn't have done anything differently the writer did an excellent job. It is indicated that Marisa Lati is a writer from The Washington Post.

    2. Critics decried what they viewed as Persky's leniency, while the judge said he was obligated to consider rehabilitation and probation for first-time offenders such as Turner. Many people criticized the sentence as too small a price to pay given the magnitude of the crime. Voters ousted Persky, a judge in Santa Clara County, after a recall campaign last year.

      With this paragraph I imagine my Prof. would say something like, "Did all the critics decry Persky's leniency."

    3. Turner, who at the time of the assault was a freshman at Stanford and a member of the varsity swimming team, was found guilty on three counts of felony sexual assault for the Jan. 18, 2015, incident outside a fraternity party. California judge Aaron Persky sentenced Turner to six months in jail, but because of good behavior he served only three.

      This is a good example of fact to observe against small opinions in the article. I would note that when giving facts the writer appears to keep opinion out of it.

    4. She never would have found herself addressing that man

      Possible opinion. "Miller's searing victim impact statement"

    5. Initially, Chanel Miller did not want the world to know her name. If the world didn't know her name, it would mean that she had never been found half-naked behind a Stanford University dumpster "with her underwear six inches away from her bare stomach." It would mean that she had never been sexually assaulted by a stranger.

      Strong delayed lead. The writer chose to tell the story before she jumped into the news. This method grabs the reader and is very affective.

    6. Strong use of the inverted pyramid. All the most important information is at the top. If you did not know the original Brock Turner case you could still follow the story.