Include the URL to any sites that you discuss, so that your reader can find the site easily.

So a TIFF may not be necessary for a website, but the master version should be that high quality.

This has become more common as other technology becomes more sophisticated, and digital tools that help to examine word use become more user-friendly.

How does this change the way we do research?

Responsible use.

Do the tools need to be so specialized? What tools might you want to use in a social science class, or a lit class, that we as historians don't use?

Good general summary and narrative, with a lot of effective images. In fact, you may have been able to eliminate some of the 20th-century images. Sticking with the period-specific images provides more eye appeal in digital projects. The image of the Barbary pirate in Turkish garb and the 1805 report were my favorite images. Although you discussed the Barbary pirates, and therefore established relevance for the ships and pirate images, you did not refer to the 1805 report in your narrative, so the reader is left wondering about its relevance and contents. You also included an image of Eaton's assistant, but you did not mention him anywhere in the essay.

You obviously did a lot of research for this project. Although you included a bibliography, you did not create endnote citations, as directed on the assignment. We discussed the process for endnote creation in class, so you should have had the tools to make this happen.

Good effort -- 105/125

Nice image, although you should explain its signficance in your narrative. I don't see any reference to the report in your text.

I see no mention of O'Bannon in your story so far. Explain relevance in your text and point the reader to the image.

Visuals are good, but more period-specific images, and a map or two, would help to illustrate your story more effectively.

Do not use semi-colons. This should be a comma.

Footnotes?

Begs for a little more detail.

Use captions to explain the contents of the image, when created, etc.

Do you mean Connecticut?

New point = new paragraph.

Vary word use -- more active verb than "became?"

Topic sentence needs clarification.

How? Finish this point.

The beginnings of the end came long before this -- but I get what you are saying.

I think you mean the 1804 death of Alexander Hamilton.

Eliminate comma

Eliminate parenthetical asides. Incorporate this clause into the sentence.

Reword this clause for clarity. "was to accompany the expedition during the first half of their journey."

Unclear -- who wasn't satisfied/who was spreading the wild rumors?

New point -- begin new paragraph here.

Map of the area he was to explore?

Was he really looking for an opportunity to suffer? Or was he just looking to serve?

Nice choice of point for emphasis.

western

Nice intro, although you get a little hero-worship-ish in your final sentences.

Wow, I didn't know about this case (or series of cases).

free, because Elisha Mitchell . . .

walked

Very good captions.

Map is blurry -- better image?

Meaning is unclear here -- who was maintaining the property? What do you mean by that?

into which

provoked

led

arguments

Artist? Year painted?

Use past tense, rather than conditional tense. Coles attended William and Mary

Nice introduction -- captures your reader's attention.

This sentence seems lonely -- or did you mean to give it emphasis/larger font?

Same with these citations -- combine them if they are in the same paragraph.

You can combine some of these notes, if they are in the same paragraph.

Might flow better if this was moved to the space above the paragraph in which this statement is located.

Republican, or supporter of republicanism?

Space between words

Stuart

Very well-organized and well-written narrative. I had never really read about this controversy in Illinois, so I learned a lot.

You chose effective images to illustrate your story, and you created very good captions that help the reader to make connections to your narrative.

I made some small edits to your prose, and there were a few places where word choice or order was a bit confusing. But when I pick on you about these small things, you know you have produced an excellent project.

Actually, the Ordinances were passed 1784-1787

Unclear -- whose local counterparts?

** not resolved. Do you mean that they paid dues similar to the full-time residents? Clarify.

of the Congregation

not resolved. Repetitious.

Needs a better word. Development, perhaps, or welfare. not resolved.

Use past tense -- "This was the lot where the Synagogue was first erected."

were Democrats

Still missing the "s" on Democrats

If you are going to say something like that, you need to provide an example.

Again, an example would be helpful to illustrate why they thought the rivalry was amusing.

Should be in July, 1925.

not resolved.

Eliminate the "Pre." from the title -- it doesn't make any sense (sorry, I should have noticed this before.)

Unitarian Universalist

Should be Unitarian Universalist

Should be Unitarian Universalist

Should be Unitarian Universalist

Not proper Chicago Manual format. Did Killoran give a speech? First sermon? Explain who she was/is.

This quote doesn't have any introduction -- what is the context, and who was this person who said it? Under what circumstances did he say it?

Again, no introduction.

Again, quote not introduced.

typo

Run-on sentence -- and again, the quote isn't introduced.

Unclear -- do you mean North Carolina Universalists? Joined the Universalist Historical Society? This is confusing. They had an historical society?

You have jumped back to Unitarianism here -- what is the relationship between this group and Universalists? Need to clarify.

Introduce quote -- who said this, and in what context?

whose followers'

Use past tense.

Why is this in a different font?

exile

Misspelled

This home page should not be an advertisement/portal to the UU church itself, but rather an introduction to the project that your team did -- so, tell the visitor about the class, about the project, the contents of the site, etc. As the splash page stands right now, it looks like an "Official" website for the UUCA organization. You need to clearlly spell out the purpose and contents of this site so that there is no confusion. You can certainly provide a link to the official UU website, but instead of directing the viewer to "click here," use the subtler method of creating a live link on the "Unitarian Universalist Church of Asheville" phrase. See the Black Mountain College Team's (http://bmc.uncadighist.org/) home page for a good example of a home page that clearly discusses the contents and purpose of their website.

The page is bare with just the UU logo on it -- and again, the prominence of this logo could mislead the visitor into thinking that this site is an "official" UU site. Are there photos relevant to your website project that could add some color and interest to this site?

Although the photo is different, the text is still the same. The first paragraph leads the visitor to believe that this site is for the congregation itself. You apparently did not visit the BMC website, as directed above, to get a good example of text that explains the project.

Again -- not fixed. Don't make him out to be a hillibilly.

Not fixed

These typos were not fixed. pro-bono and then there should be a space.

website (the addition of a link to the Committee's site is a nice gesture)

syntax

Unclear -- incidents can't have members -- not sure what your point is here.

Not clear what you mean by "opted for Saturday."

take out

take out

Take these repetitious references to the families' notability out -- you already make that point by including them on this page.

Relevance to the rivalry? And is it wise to dredge up these kinds of comments in this site? As we discussed, we need to tread carefully, while not candy-coating.

Confusing use of pronouns. And don't use the word "hate." Perhaps just say the two families did not hold grudges against one another?

This sentence is out of place. It would go better just before the previous sentence, before the sentence about the rivalry being amusing. Then, if you want to keep the sentence about the amusing rivalry and add an example, you could start another, separate paragraph.

The Lewis family also worked alongside [omit with] other notable families such as the Brenner,s Kantrowitzes, Lazaruses, and the Pattersons. [omit families].

"They were appointed to many notable positions, including . . . "

Confusing and wordy. "Members of the Lewis family contributed to many important decisions about the Synagogue."

his travels were stopped and delayed

Were they stopped or delayed? Why not just say "when he was delayed"

The Lewis family operated a family run

Repetitive. Take out "family run"

Grammar/word choice. Better to combine some of the information in this sentence and the next one to say something like: Among the many families who contributed to the congregation five played critical roles in the early years of the congregation.

This is the kind of information that should go on your home page (although the home page should also have more detail about the scope of your project and contents of the pages). You can leave this general information here as well.

typo.

sermon, sharing

led

typo

Needs a citation

Clarify -- I assume that they invited members of the LGBTQ community to marry free of charge at the UUCA?

performed

eliminate this word

typo

Provide a citation.

Again, Kristen and Keira are giving you good feedback. Make sure that you construct a narrative -- tell a story -- and proofread for typos. And, yes, cite sources.

This page needs a little rearranging to make it's purpose more clear. See my annotation of the "What Are Social Justice Projects" section.

The way this page is arranged now, it is more about Social Justice in general, rather than the UUCA and social justice. Just a few easy changes will make a difference. Move this section to the top, and change the heading to "The Unitarian Universalist Church of Asheville's Social Action Committee." Instead of starting with the question-oriented headings, just roll the definition of social justice and sj projects into an introductory paragraph. That will provide a clear picture of this page's purpose.

SAC, all

Spell it out -- and don't forget the Jr.

The word is utmost

Spell out, at least the first time you use it. If you want to abbreviate thereafter, then the first time you use it, do this: "Unitarian Universalist (UU)" and then after that you can just use UU.

I really like this page. In the Family Help and Relief Efforts boxes, some of the links are slow to load or blank. It's fun to have the interactive "hover" capability and the links to these organizations' websites, but some folks wouldn't know that these interactives existed. Perhaps you could add a couple of lines to explain how the interactives work -- provide directions.

Take more care with clause placement.

Still not resolved. Instead, put it this way. UU Church in Asheville. Originally from Canada, Rev. Killoran received her masters in Divinity . . .

Spell out.

Spell out in all instances.

typo

Spell out

Proofread this page in its entirety for these kinds of typos.

I like the way you have pulled in excerpts of sermons. Will you have photos of most of the ministers? Or some sort of illustration/images to break up the text?

The quote at the top of this page is very effective. Add a citation so that everyone knows where you got it.

Unclear -- better to say "Under her ministry," or similar.

Not proper Chicago Style footnotes. Revisit Turabian. And put the url for the pamphlet in this citation, rather than linking it from the footnote number. Make the urls in your footnotes "live" -- in other words, create the links with the urls.

Creating a link to the pamphlet in your citation number is misleading -- and it's not the proper digital citation method. Undo the link and put the url in your footnote. You should, however, make the links live in your footnotes.

Page number?

Again -- don't just lift big chunks of quotes -- paraphrase, then cite the source.

It is lazy simply to extract big quotes like this from someone else's work. Paraphrase into your own words, and only quote the central ideas/felicitous turns of phrase in your text. (See comment about quotes above)

Source?

This footnote link goes to the UUCA home page. Again, fix citations.

Who are you quoting, and why are you providing this quote? Introduce/contextualize all quotes.

Spell it out.

Syntax -- parallel clause construction.

What was the sermon about? Provide a summary and a quote or two to illustrate. Give us a little more about this moment.

Why quote?

Not yet resolved. You can paraphrase this and still cite it. You should reserve quotes for ideas unique to the author or particularly felicitous turns of phrase. Simple facts like this should not be placed in quotes.

Although you provided some explanation of the Unitarian beliefs, it's my impression that one of the central tenets of Unitarianism is that they don't believe in the Trinity. If that's the case, you need to say that directly, in this paragraph.

Timeline: on the Joseph Priestley slide, Joseph is misspelled in the caption.

Again, as I asked in the general page comments, the Boston Public Library image is potentially confusing. Did the church meet there? If so, then tell the viewer that in your caption. If not, then why use an image of the Boston Public Library in this slide?

Same kind of question for the Unitarian Fellowship of Asheville slide -- what is this building, and how is it relevant to the UUCA history?

I like this page too, although it could hold more text, to balance the rather large images (and the images could be smaller? Can you wrap the text around the images for a more appealing organization?

Content-wise in the static history, provide an explanation of Unitarianism -- what do they believe? What are the differences between Unitarianism and "mainstream," Protestant Christianity? That could go just above your historical narrative.

The timeline looks great. I think Kristen pointed out the one typo that I noticed. The 1825 post on the timeline -- you identify the building as the Boston Public Library. Is that where the AUA met? Explain the reason why you used this building.

The May 9, 1950 post -- again, identify this building -- is it the Amistad Research Center? If so, why are you using it? Or is it the First Congregational Church in Asheville, and the photo comes from the ARC? Clarify the building's identity in the caption.

And, do you intend to extend the deadline into the present?

Thanks for citing your sources. When I clicked on at least some of the footnote numbers, it took me to the UU church's home page -- is this what you mean to happen?

Provide a little more explanation about the origin of these games, the collaboration between the GP and DH classes, and the nature of the games themselves on this page.

See my Google Doc comments about citations. these have to be fixed.

What do you mean by Honor Roll? Lay out the purpose of this page for your audience. Provide an explanation of the general significance that these people hold. And what else do you intend to do with the names? Will there be links to bios? Photos?

There is still no explanation of what you mean by "Honor Roll." This text-heavy page needs illustrations. Surely there are photos of some of these people?

Again -- spelling and typos. I'm not going to point all of them out, proofread or have someone else proofread for typos.

Please proofread this entire page. Embarrassing typos.

Still typos on this page. Fix.

Watch typos

hasn't been fixed. This should be plural.

Again, very spare. Because you lead with images, the viewer has to scroll down to get to any text. Blend the text and the images, rather than presenting images first and then text. And give us MORE TEXT! Tell us about the dancers who have been involved in the festival -- are there quotes from dancers or festival attendees about the quality of the dance? All of these details should be included.

Lunsford deserves a longer bio. Provide more details about his life and his role in founding the festival. How did he begin meeting folklorists and celebrities? And where are your citations? Will there be photos?

Still needs more. See my additional comment.

space

Unclear -- did they come to him, or was he invited to them? Again, he deserves more detail than you are giving here. Give us a few paragraphs on his life and efforts to preserve Mountain culture. And surely there are sources that cover his life in greater depth than one Saturday Evening Post source. You aren't demonstrating depth of research here.

This word denotes a lack of seriousness -- comic behavior -- come up with a better descriptor.

This introduction is still spare. Tell the reader a little more about your site -- the time period and topics that you intend to cover, for example. Take a look at the BMC home page, for example. It doesn't have to be as long an introduction as theirs, but put more on the home page, in order to draw the reader in. Once you've eliminated the comment section, there will be plenty of space.

Is this a quote from their promotional material? If so, put it in quotes.

Best to remove the comment section. No one will be maintaining it, and it just clutters up the pages.

April 24: Remove the "Leave a Reply" section and meta tab, as directed above.

Slang -- use more proper English -- doesn't have to be formal, just not slang.

from

when

Split infinitive

Eliminate one period.

I agree with the comments on this page -- this information is best placed on the Home page, and then the about page can be a place for your information (See the Agudas Israel site for a good example), and perhaps information about the DH class and its general mission.

You should remove the comment section, for a cleaner, less blog-like site. This will be a static page anyway, and comments will not be monitored.

Aha! And there is our answer. So, rework this sentence so that Lindsley is the actor -- put him up front of the sentence, and that way you can (literally) eliminate the duplicated effort.

Unclear -- one doesn't usually think of economics as part of "the arts." Do you mean liberal arts?

Revisit Turabian for proper footnote formatting. This citation (and others) seem to be missing important information as to the nature of the documents.

This page lacks citations for your sources.

It's not clear how these two characteristics would be mutually exclusive.

Syntax is off, or something is missing.

Very well-written, and the citations are great. Yes, it needs images to break up/balance out the text.

April 24: The images (especially photos) are a little slow to load when clicked on to enlarge. Do they need to be that big/high resolution?

Confusing sentence. Remove the "to's" and just list the activities, or rework some other way for clarity.

I like the incorporation of documents on this page, and the images are artfully arranged in the page. Good visual appeal.

You will want to work each document into the narrative by referring to it in the text. So, for example, when you are discussing the visa, you should state "The document on the right is a letter to .... from... and state the purpose of the letter. Each document should also have a caption, with directions to click on the document twice to enlarge.

Cite your sources, both for the content of the text and for each image.

There are a lot of typos on this page.

April 24: This page is much improved. It is now the only one that doesn't have a quote at the top, which makes it look a bit neglected. Did he just not write anything worth quoting?

Strange turn of phrase. Denotes change in size, which I don't think is what you mean. Perhaps just became -- or recast in active voice rather than using a version of the verb "to be."

Unclear -- do you mean he was paroled and placed under the watch of Dreier?

You have three different time points in this sentence, which is confusing. You've already told your audience that he was in the U.S., so just put the date at the beginning of this sentence and leave the other two time points out.

Confusing, because it is in passive voice. Recast this in active voice.

Unclear citation -- was this a particularly letter? A dossier/cv? Specify the kind of document.

taught at . . .

Unclear. I think you want to say "relocate to Prague."

Space after period.

I like the use of a quote at the top of this page. Again, the page is visually appealing. It lacks source citations and captions/citations for the images.

Create links to their pages here as well.

Timeline and map?

Albert Einstein -- always use first and last names when referring to anyone for the first time.

Capitalize Art Institution? I presume that was part of the name of the institution.

All citations should be Chicago Manual/Turabian-style footnotes -- first name last name, etc. There is some information missing, like for example the interviewer. Revisit Turabian for proper formatting of NOTES, not bibliographies.

Eliminate this word

This page should be a static page, rather than a blog page.

Nice. You can offer links to the BMC Museum website and any other similar resources.

Generally well-written. Still needs citations and images.

I agree. Love the links, that's what I'm talking about for the other pages. Needs a little work on the narrative, as well as images and citations.

Proofread for typos

Recast all of this page in past tense. It isn't still happening.

One would hope that he was really a person -- better word? Maybe just faculty member?

Is this a sub-heading? Or is it part of an outline?

Hall or Building?

1942, war

I'm hoping for images? And, as with the Those Who Came section, a very brief introduction to the sub-pabes, with links, would be helpful on this page, so that the visitor doesn't have to go back to the drop-down menu.

I like these quotes -- two of the pages have them, and two do not. Can you add quotes to the other two pages?

This page shouldn't be set up as a blog page. Instead, it should look like the "Those Who Stayed" page. I see that you have the names of the men you are profiling in a drop-down menu, and that looks great. But you should also have links to each individual's page on this page as well. I suggest that you add a paragraph that provides a sentence about each man, with the years during which they were at the college, and then use their names to create links to each profile.