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  1. Jun 2022
    1. due to long-term use of substances over food and fluid intake.

      Awkward. Suggested rewrite:Clients with substance use disorders may exhibit a poor nutritional status due to long-term use of substances taking precedence over adequate food and fluid intake.

    1. Providing recognition by parents, teachers, peers, and community members for effort and

      This is awkwardly phrased, because you are trying to keep the initial verb form in the list consistent. The recognition is being provided BY parents and teachers TO individuals. How about "Providing community and family recognition of individuals' effort and accomplishments to encourage future positive behaviors."

    2. trend in overdose deaths in urban and rural populations has significantly increased over the past 20 years.

      a trend can escalate and a number or percentage can increase, but a trend cannot increase.

    1. Recovery-Based Education

      The paragraph is not about recovery based education, it's about recovery support programs which take place in high schools or colleges or focus on that age group.

    2. Like AA, Al-Anon is based on a 12-step philosophy and provides support whether or not their loved one

      "Like AA, Al-Anon is based on a 12-step philosophy and provides support whether or not their loved one"

      The "thier" there seems to be referring back to Al-Anon, which isn't the intent. Easy fix: "Like AA, Al-Anon is based on a 12-step philosophy and provides support whether or not members' loved ones"

    3. It has been adapted to other drugs (e.g., Cocaine Anonymous, Marijuana Anonymous, Crystal Meth Anonymous).

      Awkward. Suggested rewrite: "Its philosophy, approach, and format have been adopted by groups focusing on recovery from other substances, such as..."

    4. one or two years, it can take 4 to 5 more years

      I don't know what style sheet you're using, but typically it's numbers in text up to ten and numerals for amounts over 10. So, this would be "four to five more years"

    5. s long-term, outpatient care; recovery housing; and recovery coaching and management checkups.

      Again, semicolons are not needed here. Commas work just fine with a simple series of nouns and noun phrases.

    6. interpersonal relationships that they later regret

      " interpersonal relationships that they later regret" means that they regret those relationships as it is currently written, which is not what you mean. Suggested rewrite: This is perhaps because during periods of heavy substance misuse, individuals may damage interpersonal relationships, which they regret and attempt to resolve during recovery..

    7. The remainder either did not think abstinence was important for their recovery

      the word "either" there implies there's another part of this sentence. Otherwise, don't need it!

    8. The treatment of severe substance use disorder is typically delivered in freestanding programs in various settings (e.g., hospital, residential, or outpatient settings) that vary in the frequency of care delivery (e.g., daily sessions to monthly visits); range of treatment components offered; and in the planned duration of care.

      See my previous annotation re semicolons in a series. They are almost never necessary.

    9. It uses a conversational approach to help their client

      It is the noun "their" is referring to, and in this sentence that makes no sense! How about "MI uses a conversational approach to help clients..."

    10. adequate periods of time

      This is the sentence in the cited document: "Remission of substance use and even full recovery can now be achieved if evidence based care is provided for adequate periods of time, by properly trained health care professionals, and augmented by supportive monitoring, RSS, and social services." This is a quote. It needs quotation marks around it, not just the citation.

    1. The combined presence of SUDs and mental disorders results in greater functional impairment; worse treatment outcomes; higher morbidity and mortality; increased treatment costs; and higher risk for homelessness, incarceration, and suicide.

      Semicol9ons are not n4ecessary here. Commas will do. "vWhen a list within a sentence contains three or more items, use a serial comma before the final item. We gathered information about participants' age, gender, and socioeconomic status. However, if any item in a list of three or more items already contains commas, use semicolons instead of commas between the items." https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/punctuation/serial-comma

    2. AMI

      This technically is shorthand for "any mental illness." Should we use the phrase mental illness rather than mental disorder in the sentence? Or offer a definition of AMI? It will just seem weird to the reader that the acronym and the phrase don't "match."

    1. .

      Do we want to use a broader definition? This is a definition of an addiction to substances, but one can be addicted to activities (gambling, sex, shopping) depending on how you parse it.

    1. Rapid or unmanaged withdrawal from these substances can be protracted

      "Rapid or unmanaged withdrawal from these substances can be protracted" Nothing rapid is protracted! I think what you mean is "Rapid or unmanaged cessation of use can result in protracted withdrawal"

    2. Some substances, such as alcohol, opioids, sedatives, and tranquilizers, produce significant physical withdrawal effects, especially if combined with heavy alcohol use

      "Some substances, such as alcohol... produce significant physical withdrawal effects, especially if combined with heavy alcohol use." That doesn't make sense, so maybe a rewrite would be "Some substances, such as opioids, sedatives, and tranquilizers, produce significant physical withdrawal effects, especially if they have been used in combination with alcohol?" Spitballing here.

    1. users to feel out of control or disconnected from their body and environment.

      multiple users, multiple bodies and environments. "users to feel out of control or disconnected from their bodies and environments."

    2. Benzodiazepines are commonly involved in drug overdose causing CNS depression

      suggested rewrite: Benzodiazepines, which cause CNS depression, are commonly involved in drug overdoses.

    3. .

      It's uncommon that marijuana may be found to contain fentanyl. The first possible report of this in the US was just late last year in Connecticut, and though popular literature talks about its being possible, it's way, way more likely to find fentanyl deaths related to opioids. Rather than talk about something nurses are unlikely to ever see, let's hit hard on fentanyl analogs. https://www.ama-assn.org/system/files/issue-brief-increases-in-opioid-related-overdose.pdf and https://portal.ct.gov/DPH/Press-Room/Press-Releases---2021/Officials-From-The-Connecticut-Overdose-Response-Strategy-And-The-DPH-Issue-Warning

    4. search

      I don't know what your style guide says, but not every user/students?college which adopts this book will have access to UptoDate, which is a subscription licensed resource. Are you trying to cite public and open access resources?

    5. .

      No. I mean, yes, changes in behavior obviously happen, but the literal definition of intoxication has to do with the signs and symptoms, which in turn result in behaviors.

    6. Note that regional poisoning centers are available at all times by calling 1-800-222-1222 for consultation regarding toxic ingestion of substances and overdoses

      Suggested rewrite: Anyone can call a regional poison control center 24/7 at 1-800-222-1222 for consultation regarding toxic ingestion of substances and overdoses.

    7. HIV/AIDS; and unintended pregnancies

      I would tread lightly here: sexually transmitted diseases and pregnancy may occur because of an increase in risk taking behaviors, but it's not a direct result of drug ingestion, as is liver disease. There's a fine line here, and unless we discuss the complexity it can read to sharper students as paternalistic or patronizing or victim shaming. Maybe rather than lumping those in the same sentence, you could have second sentence which indicates what I said; the drug use increases risk behavior and/or lowers inhibitions, which can increase the likelihood of HIV/AIDS or unintended pregnancies.

    1. Substance use issues significantly impact individuals, families, communities, and our society. According to the 2020 National Survey on Drug Use and Health (NSDUH), 40.3 million people in the United States aged 12 or older (14.5 percent) have a substance use disorder (SUD).[1] The costs related to SUD are staggering. Misuse of alcohol, drugs, and prescribed medications are estimated to cost the United States more than $400 billion in health care expenses, law enforcement and criminal justice costs (due to drug-related crimes), lost workplace productivity, and losses from motor vehicle crashes. Tens of thousands of lives are lost every year as a result of substance misuse and overdose.[2]

      Far more than 10s of thousands. Suggest linking to https://www.cdc.gov/nchs/pressroom/nchs_press_releases/2022/202205.htm or https://www.cdc.gov/nchs/nvss/vsrr/drug-overdose-data.htm

    1. when providing a reason to stand before the court

      weird and wordy phrase. Don't we just mean "Clients bringing a malpractice lawsuit must be able to demonstrate to the court that their interests were harmed."

    2. Nurses must take care to communicate data in their oral and written communications without defamation of clients or coworkers

      clearer suggested rewrite: Nurses must take care in their oral and written communications to avoid defaming clients or coworkers.

    3. confidentiality

      That's not an illustration of confidentiality: I get it, with the big lock, but it's just a vector graphic tat may not be very obvious to new students. How about posing for some photos?

    4. HIPAA does not allow the nurse to respond to a phone call inquiry if a client has been admitted to the unit.

      Well, they can respond by saying "I cannot give out that information," so that is not entirely accurate. How about "Under HIPAA, nurses may not answer in the affirmative if someone calls and asks if a patient was admitted to the unit."

    5. the application of physical restraints and the monitoring of clients who are restrained

      simplified rewrite: the use of physical restraints and monitoring restrained clients

    6. with visible consequences of action or inaction

      this makes it sound like the consequences for the nurse are either visible or invisible, which is silly. The consequences are pretty darn visible. Is it just a misplaced modifying phrase?

    7. reasonable explanation other than guilty

      Awkward phrase. How about The prosecution must convince the jury that, based on the evidence presented at trial., there is no doubt as to the defendant's guilt..

    1. In addition to following professional nursing standards and the state Nurse Practice Act where they work, nurses and nursing students must also practice according to agency policies, procedures, and protocols. For example, each agency has specific policies regarding the use of restraints. If a nurse did not follow this policy and a patient was injured or died, the nurse could be held liable in a court of law. Agencies also have their own sets of procedures and protocols. For example, each agency has specific procedural steps for performing nursing skills, such as inserting urinary catheters. Agencies also have protocols that are precisely written plans for a regimen of therapy. For example, agencies typically have a hypoglycemia protocol that nurses automatically implement when a patient’s blood sugar falls below a specific number and includes actions such as providing orange juice and rechecking the blood sugar. These agency-specific policies, procedures, and protocols supersede the information taught in nursing school, and nurses and nursing students can be held legally liable if they don’t follow them. Therefore, it is vital for nurses and nursing students to review and follow current agency-specific procedures, policies, and protocols when providing patient care.

      Picky, but this section is super wordy, and students start to glaze over. Suggested rewrite:

      In addition to the professional standards of practice, nurses must follow regulations set by the Nurse Practice Act and enforced by the state Board of Nursing. The Board of Nursing is the state-specific licensing and regulatory body that sets standards for safe nursing care and issues nursing licenses to qualified candidates, based on the state's Nurse Practice Act. The Nurse Practice Act establishes regulations for nursing practice\and defines the scope of nursing practice. If nurses do not follow the standards and scope of practice set forth by the Nurse Practice Act, they can have their nursing license revoked by the Board of Nursing.

      Nursing students are legally accountable for the quality of care they provide to patients, just as nurses are accountable. Students are expected to recognize the limits of their knowledge and experience and appropriately alert individuals in authority when they encounter situations that are beyond their competency. A violation of the standards of practice constitutes unprofessional conduct and can result in the Board of Nursing denying a license to a nursing graduate.

      Employer Policies, Procedures, and Protocols In addition to following professional nursing standards and the state Nurse Practice Act , nurses and nursing students must also practice according to agency policies, procedures, and protocols. For example, each agency has specific policies regarding the use of restraints. If a nurse did not follow policy and a patient was injured or died, the nurse could be held liable.

      Agencies also have their own sets of procedures and protocols. For example, each agency has specific nursing skills procedures, such as inserting urinary catheters. Agencies also have protocols, precisely written plans for a regimen of therapy. For example, agencies typically have a hypoglycemia protocol that nurses automatically implement when a patient’s blood sugar falls below a specific number. It typically includes actions such as providing orange juice and rechecking the blood sugar. These agency-specific policies, procedures, and protocols supersede the information taught in nursing school, and nurses and nursing students can be held legally liable if they don’t follow them. Therefore, nurses and nursing students must follow current agency-specific procedures, policies, and protocols.

    2. atient care.

      Theya re held to those standards at all times they are operating in a professional capacity. What you means is that these standards of care are invoked in patient care lawsuits.

    3. Standards of care refer to what nurses must do to practice competently

      Vague. there are better definitions extant. How about they are guidelines that define the optimal behavior of professional nurses?

    1. od
      • a list should always use the same verb form and/or noun number to start each bullet point. Yo could go with Has poor hygiene and Is inappropriately dressed for example.
    1. The basic goals of TIC are to avoid retraumatization; emphasize survivor strengths and resilience; aid empowerment, healing, and recovery; and promote the development of survivorship skills.[7]

      semicolons are not necessary here. If we're sort of following APA format, you only use them when the items in the series are complete sentences.

    2. o boundaries with regard to age, gender, socioeconomic status, race, ethnicity, or sexual orientation

      A more succinct rewrite: Trauma has no age, gender, socioeconomic status, race, ethnicity, or sexual orientation boundaries.

    1. The Centers for Disease Control and Prevention (CDC) created a resource titled Preventing Adverse Childhood Experiences (ACEs): Leveraging the Best Available Evidence. This resource contains these six strategies: Strengthen economic supports to families Promote social norms that protect against violence and adversity Ensure a strong start for children Teach skills Connect youth to caring adults and activities Intervene to lessen immediate and long-term harms

      As this resource was already introduced previously, maybe move this section up?

    2. neglect; abuse; witnessing violence;

      these semicolons aren't necessary: they would only be needed if the items int he series were sentences, not just individual words.

    1. If travelling to a home setting as a home health nurse,

      kind of obvious that home health nurses travel to homes! Suggested rewrite: Additional safety strategies for home health nurses are as follows:

    2. to violence

      tiny formatting thing: the next two sections (Verbal Cues and Nonverbal and Behavioral Clues) are subsections of this bullet point, so they should be tabbed in, rather than appearing on the page as being "equal" bullet points.

    3. illustration of safety first

      aside from a weird sentence, this image isn't particularly helpful for students. Even a chart of stats would better support student learning in this section.

    4. t is vital for all health care team members caring for the client to be aware of their level of risk and plans to reduce that risk as they provide care

      There are two "theys" in the sentence, s you need ti distinguish between them. Suggested rewrite: It is vital for all health care team members caring for the client to be aware of the client's level of risk and plans to reduce that risk as they provide care.

    1. Nurses have a type of authority, as well as access to sensitive information, due to their professional position that makes clients vulnerable.

      have some weirdly placed phrases here. Suggested rewrite: Due to their professional role, nurses have authority and as access to sensitive information that makes clients vulnerable.

    2. what we want and don’t want.

      This is a little vague. Boundaries have to do with behavior and information sharing, not "what we want," such as where we want to live or eat.

    1. 2 to 3 times

      Don't know what style guide you're using, but if APA, in the text, APA style recommends using words to express numbers below 10, and using numerals when expressing numbers 10 and above.

    2. with difficult topics

      Suggested: "when discussing difficult topics." As written, it sounds like when you speak with difficult topics, you're extra sensitive.

    3. minorities

      Suggested rewrite maybe "members of minority groups?" This is that never ending debate: "the handicapped" or "handicapped people?" Minority is an aggregate noun, a group of people, but in this sentence we're talking about people singular who belong to a group.

    4. ccurrence, and it is estimated that approximately one in five Americans will personally experience a mental illness in their lifetime.[18]

      I do not see this idea in the cited article. It's not to say that it may not be true, but the cited reference doesn't seem to support it.

    5. vast majority

      just "majority" is fine, unless you plan to give an extraordinarily high percentage directly after the statement to prove it is a "vast majority."

    6. typically experience long-term impairments that can range from moderate to disabling in nature.

      Rewrite: "have moderate to disabling long-term impairments."

    7. Suicide is a symptom of mental illness

      it can be, but there are those who participate in assisted suicide who would not fall into this category as defined. Suicide isn't always caused by diagnosed mental illness, and conversely, all those who are mentally ill have suicidal ideation.

  2. Jan 2022
    1. .

      for those students who may go above and beyond, it might be helpful to link to example articles in open access journals or in PMC.

      https://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/full/10.1002/nop2.604

      https://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/pdf/10.1002/nop2.652

      https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC8181851/. Dietary Patterns and Gestational Weight Gain and Postpartum Weight Loss: A NESR Systematic Review. Current Developments in Nutrition, 5(Suppl 2), 803. https://doi.org/10.1093/cdn/nzab046_100)

    2. because a systematic review is a research article type, I'd use another adjective here, just because there will be students who will find articles called systematic reviews and be confused because the articles aren't "review(s) of patient outcomes resulting from current practices."

    1. Change Theories

      Some theories sort of capture students' interest or are are obviously important, such as those discussed in the Ethics chapter. Change theories in my experience are a much harder sell. Students see what we mean when we provide examples, but in my opinion, most similar textbooks do a bad job of capturing the "so what?" Ok, those are examples of how the theory describes change. But so what? How can I use them in my day to day? I have no good ideas, but student are so immersed in learning bedside skills that habits of thought or theories often are not obviously important to them.

    1. new graduate nurse

      So, so picky, but I've seen in the text that the person in the application has both been referred to as "new graduate nurse" and "new nurse graduate." Which one do you prefer?

    1. in

      the way this is written currently, it sounds like the team decides what barriers and weaknesses are needed. Break up the sentences: they identify X, then decide what Y is needed,

    2. process that plans

      the process itself doesn't plan or implement. How about "QI is a process in which a project is planned, interventions implemented,' etc?

    3. .

      argh, I've given up on commenting on all the poor choices of images, but this is not an illustration of informatics! What if you could get permission to show a tool or a screenshot of a web based tool that actually is an example of informatics?

    1. ?

      and a related question that further promotes reflection: where could you find answers to those questions, ie, instructors, preceptors, guidelines, codes, team members?

    2. .

      it's not a goal for quality care. Quality care is a goal, and the alignment is a way to achieve that goal. So you could say "is a key driver" "is a key component"

    3. in a variety of ways in health care that all impact nursing practice.

      Should read "in a variety of ways which impact nursing practice" Otherwise, the sentence has one too many noun phrases making it unclear.