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  1. Dec 2023
    1. Groove

      Neutral Observations

      • The poem is organized in rhymed quatrains of iambic trimeters, following an AABA, CDDD rhyme scheme.

      • groove - a long, narrow cut or depression especially one made to guide motion or receive a corresponding ridge.

      • Commas and dashes create caesuras in the first two lines. All dashes thereon are placed at the end of each line.

      • There's interplay between the registers of the natural and industrial realms. "Brain" is described as a "current" that's "flood" burrows new pathways in the hills. Those pathways are then characterized as "turnpikes" that frees it from the machinery of the "mills".

      Evocative Occurrences

      • Punctuation in the first two lines seem to enact the barrier of the groove through which thought is made structured and coherent. Afterward, dashes are mark only the end of lines, pointing the activity of thought and language, it appears, beyond, toward the unbounded white space. The behavior of syntax as a system of rules deteriorates as the poem proceeds. As thought becomes torrential, syntax caves to the natural force of language, repurposing punctuation as an channel through which thought, materialized in language, can escape the rigidity of syntax, or convention, and to discover possibilities beyond mere function and utility.
  2. Sep 2023
    1. Link-in campaigns drive traffic to an Amazon destination, directing customers to a brand's product detail page, Store, or campaign landing page.

      Link-in Campaigns - a campaign type that drives traffic to an Amazon destination, directing customers to a brand's product detail page, Store, or campaign landing page.

    2. benefits to using Amazon DSP

      Benefits of Amazon DSP

      Amazon Audience Solutions

      • DSP enables advertisers to leverage Amazon's first-party insights based on billions of observed shopping patterns across the customer decision journey.
      • Advertisers can leverage both Amazon's audiences and their own audiences, by using pixels, a DMP, hashed audiences, or third-party audiences to reach the most relevant audiences.
      • DSP provides audience insights and robust performance analytics before, during, and after campaigns
      • Amazon Ads' deep reporting analysis includes key metrics such as add-to-cart rate, total purchases, and product units sold for brands that sell in Amazon's store, as well as pixel conversion rate, and video completion rate for brands that do not sell on Amazon.

      Comprehensive and Unique Supply

      • Exclusive access to inventory that cannot be accessed through other DSPs
      • Advertisers can leverage inventory from Amazon O&O, third-party exchanges, Amazon Publisher Services, and PMPs to boost targeted reach of Amazon shoppers whenever and wherever they shop or consume content
      • Amazon DSP enables advertisers to build cross-device campaigns
      • Advertisers can achieve marketing goals at scale by reaching Amazon customers at scale, whether they are on or off Amazon

      Brand Safe Guards

      • Amazon DSP uses both Amazon's own and third-party solutions to uphold quality standards and brand safety
      • Amazon DSP monitors for brand safety, traffic quality, viewability and third-party supply quality.

      Campaign Creation & Optimization

      • Offers manual and automatic optimizations
      • Automatic Optimizations - the system will adjust bids to serve through the best formats and the best supply sources and sites. Additionally, the built-in AI analyzes each impression against targeted goal in real-time. There's also an optimization feature which dynamically updates budgets according to a campaign goal.

      • Manual Optimizations - advertisers can optimize various levers of a campaign, including budgets, audiences, bids, frequency caps, and supply. Advertisers can leverage display, video and mobile ad types, as well as creative types such as: display ads with e-commerce creative, image ads, video ads, video creative builder ad units, and third-party served ads

    3. A dCPM allows advertisers to set a price range for any single impression. The rate paid for an impression may differ depending on it's value and campaign optimizations.

      Dynamic CPM (dCPM) - a flexible CPM model that's founded on a price range per impression and relies on the value of a given impression and campaign optimizations. This model is used in RTB public auctions.

    4. A fixed CPM is a static rate to pay for every 1,000 impressions.

      Fixed CPM - a static rate to for every 1,000 impressions and is used to purchase PMP or direct deals.

  3. Jan 2023
    1. Tell all the truth but tell it slant— (#1263)

      Neutral Observations

      -The poem is organized in common meter, following an ABCB rhyme scheme

      • There is no punctuation except the opening and closing dashes

      -The isolation of the clause "Success in Circuit lies" to its own line allows for "lies" to consist of multiple meanings; the first meaning refers to the quality and positioning of the light, as indicated in the subsequent line. "Lie" might also suggest betrayal or omission; the concept of truth as preconceived and sustained, as opposed to that for which is mined and discovered, betrays the nature of truth and how the mind achieves recognition of it.

      • The delayed repetition of sounds through rhyme enacts Dickinson's description of the nature of truth. Through the rhythmic regularity of rhyme, the contrasting concepts implicit in words and phrases -- such as "lies," suggesting omission or, in its other context, burial, and "surprise," revelation or discovery -- can strike the reader unexpectedly with currents of new meanings and associations to be formed across rhymes.

      -"Success in circuit lies / Too bright for our infirm Delight,"

      -The implication here might also be that linearity risks mere rigid bi-polarity; it risks flattening to possibilities into a false dichotomy of "truth" and "falsehood." Circularity proffers radiance and the expansion of meaning into a field of networks.

  4. Mar 2021
    1. Hamlet is just one example of a work of art embedded with a work of art—specifically characters observing fictional characters—that shows us explicitly and deliberately what, in Wilshire’s words, is “already going on undeliberately in the development of the self… the incorporation mimetically into a conscious body of others’ ways of being and of others’ views of itself.”

      Interesting. So the participation of supporting characters act, in a work of art, as an art-action enveloped within the primary art-action of the work.

  5. Dec 2020
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    1. According to the NFPT (National Federation of Professional Trainers) and the infographic they made, 80 percent of people eat junk food on a daily basis and 360,000 people die from diseases related to obesity.

      excellent

    2. While this seems like an obvious thing to do, not as many people end up working out on a daily basis. In fact, according to The United States Department of Health & Human Services, "28% of Americans aged six and older are physically inactive" (HHS 1). If you are reading this post, chances are you've got time to spare or you're procrastinating on your final English project, so either finish that project or WORK OUT!

      What are the health consequences of working out? What makes committing to an exercise regimen a healthier thing to do than committing to a vegan diet?

    3. THE ULTIMATE Vegan Post

      Hm, your title and subtitle for the blog is a bit misleading. They both give the impression that your blog will be in service of vegans who are seeking activities that'll aid them in optimizing their vegan lifestyle. Since that is not the case, maybe the primary headline should be something that communicates your intentions such as "The Ultimate Anti-Vegan Post," and the subtitle could say "Steps You Can Take Toward Health That Doesn't Involve Eating a Vegan Diet."

    1. Madeline, this infogrpahic looks great! You do a great job at identifying the most urgent challenges which gender bias in the media imposes on female politicians.

      My primary critique is that the information which you provide onto the infographic does not meet the purpose of the genre. Infograhpics are typically used to provide data, usually scientific or mathematical data to substantiate and establish exigence the claim which the creator is making. You succeed at doing that once here. If you decide to return to this project in the future, I encourage you to replace your quotes with corresponding stats or to pair them with graphs of stats or another form of data.

    2. Remediation

      Hm, considering that this would be address a public audience, it might've been a good idea to name the navigation button after the title of your infographic.

  7. Nov 2020
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    1. All students felt online learning would be great until they actually got into doing it and found out its not better then physically being in the classroom.

      To substantiate your claim, you could create a poll for your peers that'd provide you self-produced evidence of their online learning experience.

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    1. Sources

      Khristopher, I'm at the end of your forum and it has a lot of potential! You start off really strong in your about page by using our current condition of remote working during the pandemic to establish exigence for an inquiry into the nature of online learning.

      With that said, the specific question which you seek to explore is not clear. You have one page in which you proffer potential stakeholders in the discourse regarding online learning. Is your question, then, related to the stasis point of jurisdiction? For your position paper, will you be making a claim related to the ideas about who ought to have authority in the conversation about learning online during the pandemic? If so, why is this line of inquiry important? What have the experts within your research suggested about who should or shouldn't have a say in whether students learn in person or online?

      Also, Khristopher, I encourage you to make an appointment with a peer tutor at the writing center who can help you clarify the question which you'll seek to explore and for which you will stake a position.

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    1. ​Why is Online learning important? Online learning has many different reasons on why it's important but the main reason it's important now is because most teachers and students are virtually learning and teaching now due to the global pandemic Covid 19.

      Excellent use of our current condition as a means to establish exigence and as a frame work for your inquiry into the nature of online learning.

    1. Let's Read

      Sean, I'm at the end of your digital forum and it's pretty good. You do a great job at providing an extensive, thorough analysis of ways in which the crisis will impact each area of human life presented in your positions.

      On criteria:

      Though you've provided 3 distinct positions rooted in the stasis points of cause/effect and action, you haven't explicitly stated the specific question which you are engaging and the importance of engaging in that particular line of inquiry. The result of this is that the specific issue which you aim to explore is unclear and, consequently, the exigence of your inquiry is unclear. I'd mentioned this earlier in an annotation on your "about" page, but for your position paper, it'll be pertinent for you to identify the specific question which you are exploring. It seems that you are interested in investigating the consequences of the pandemic and brainstorming possible courses of action to address those consequences. In the interest of narrowing your focus, consider following only one of those lines of inquiry. Because we are still in the early stages of discovering solutions for the issues that the pandemic caused, it might be difficult to find credible information on methods of addressing them.

      In your position paper, you could use your call to action to establish exigence and as a framework for your investigation of ways which the pandemic has devastated the economy, the environment, and the health care system.

      I encourage you to make an appointment with a peer tutor at the university's writing center for help on applying my suggestions to your position paper.

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    1. But with the search for a vaccine comes with a big toll. It is seen in hopes that the vaccine for Covid-19 will have use of squalene in the vaccine. This squalene comes from the oils of shark livers and have proven very effective in the past as it is used in flu vaccines which have proven to keep the virus out of Americans. With the need for all the squalene comes with an estimated 500,000 sharks that will have to be slaughtered in hopes of being able to provide everyone with a Covid vaccine (Duong).

      Hm, this seems like new information, distinct from what you note earlier about land-grabbing and, perhaps, should be more thoroughly explored in its own paragraph.

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    1. The society is also being impacted by Americans not being able to follow guidelines and regulations to help prevent the spread of this pandemic. The disregard to staying home and keeping your distance in America has completely gone out the window as America has reopened colleges and students are on campus which only brings more cases around as college students have large get togethers which increases the spread of the corona virus. As well as college sports teams playing which causes traveling and the spread of the corona virus from state to state.

      How is this information related to what you note about the overwhelming stress health care workers are experiencing?

    2. Now if this health care worker would take off cause of an illness it just piles on the work load of another worker and down the line the workers go having to deal with an immense amount of anxiety and stress (Cheng).

      Staying in the line of thinking related to resolving the crisis, you might consider how an issue like this could result in the increase of COVID-19 cases.

    3. (Cheng)

      From which study have you gathered this information? Who is Cheng? Also, while citing your source in parenthesis conforms to MLA format conventions, citing in this way is most appropriate for formal essays, like your position paper. In the interest of making your research accessible to general readers interested in learning more, it'd be most helpful to include a hyperlink to the studies which you reference.

    4. no more large gatherings.

      What are the social implications of restricting gatherings. You describe it as a "hit." Why? What impact will gathering restrictions and capacity limits have on our social condition?

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    1. This proves the point of how reformations and precessions being made by the government are not being executed to plan and the spread is not being stopped.

      What is the relationship between the rise in COVID cases and the country's falling GDP? The connection between the two are not yet clear. It's be a good idea to reflect on similar questions related to what you note afterward about the subsequent mass acquisition of unemployment checks. How do these things directly impact the economy? Why is it a cause for concern? What are economists and other related experts predicting will be the long-term consequences of these conditions? All of these questions regarding risks are related to the social urgency and answering them will help you identify the exigence of this issue.

    2. Lucia

      From which study are you pulling this data? Who is Lucia? From which academic or professional discipline does the author obtain the authority to weigh in on this topic?

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    1. Society

      Does you inquiry explore questions related to what can be done to mitigate the impact of the pandemic on these three categories of life or are you present the ways in which the pandemic has already negatively impacted these categories in an attempt to urge people to take efforts to resolve the crisis? Right now, the specific question in which your positions engage is not clear.

    2. The Covid-19 pandemic will have an everlasting impact on the United States economy, society, and environment. In this website the information of how the economy, society, and environment have been effected is presented and ways tp rebuild and ideas to keep in consideration for the rebuild process of the country is presented and given to make the reader leave with a different perspective on this Covid-19 pandemic that the reader had or to strengthen that opinion in order to be apart of the group of Americans that will help rebuild America.

      Stasis points: Cause/Effect, Action

    1. Asian Americans Share Experiences of Racism During COVID-19

      Alex, I'm at the end of your digital forum. You do a great job at conveying the social urgency of addressing anti-Asian-American racism and detailing the impacts that it has on academic performance, mental health, and physical health.

      My primary critique of your forum relates to the organization of your inquiry. Your positions all address different lines of inquiry which, it seems, is a result of not constructing one question embedded in a particular stasis point.

      Looking toward your position paper, consider doing one of two things:

      -Choose one of your positions related to the academic performance, mental health, and physical health risks resulting form anti-Asian-American with which to construct your argument.

      -Use the stasis point of cause/effect to ground your inquiry and argument. If choosing this option, be sure to restructure your argument, grounding it in the causes and effects of anti-Asian-American racism.

      Also, all the claims which you' proffered were unsubstantiated by data linked to specific research and experts. Continuing to look toward the position paper, be sure to acknowledge the studies and researchers which you use to substantiate your data.

      I encourage you to make an appointment with a peer tutor to get advice on how to apply my suggestions to your position paper before submitting it on Monday.

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    1. Stereotypes and the ​Model Minority Myth

      Hm, it seems here you're engaging questions related to how racism promotes unrealistic expectations for Asian'American's academic performance and creates consequent mental health concerns as result of overwhelming Asian-American students with unrealistic expectations to perform well in school.

    2. Asian Americans had the highest percent of Bachelor's (30.7%), Master's (17.9%), Professional (2.1%), and Doctoral (4.7%) degrees of any other race in the U.S.Asian Americans have the highest median household income at $87,194 in the year of 2018 according to the United States Census Bureau.

      Which study are you pulling these stats from?

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    1. Effects on Health Discrimination has the following effects on Health:Increased risk for:​Diabetes and breathing issuesGlycemic controlCholesterolObesityMental Health ProblemsIncreased use of:​AlcoholTobaccoMarijuanaCrack/CocaineIllicit DrugsPrescription DrugsOther Drugs

      From which study did you gather this information?

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    1. Primary Positions

      While these are general positions against anti-Asian-American racism, they don't engage in a singular question related to the issue of Anti-Asian-American racism.

      If you intend to pursue this line of inquiry for your position paper, it might be a good idea to explore one particular way in which anti-Asian-American racism has impacted the Asian-American community. In your section, "The Present, Past, and Future," you seem to use the ways in which people have acted violently against Asian-Americans in response to the COVID-19 pandemic. Perhaps, it would be a good idea in exploring ways in which anti-Asian-American racism promotes crime or impacts the degree to which anti-Asian-Americans receive adequate health care.

    1. 1.

      Henri, I'm at the end of your digital forum. You do a great job at using a summary of veganism and reasons people adopt the diet. You also do a pretty great job at analyzing the credibility of the sources which you offer in your position pages.

      Here are global comments that I have about your project:

      -Your 3rd position is missing.

      -The claims which you make for your first position is unsubstantiated by research.

      -Your line of inquiry regarding the health risks and benefits of a vegan diet is binary, inviting only 2 possible responses: yes, vegan diets are healthy or no they are not. It seems, too, that you've already oriented yourself into the position that a vegan diet is not, in fact, healthy. One of the core qualities of academic writing and thinking is that it invites complexity. One way you might consider opening your research up to more perspectives is to slightly restructure your question. In your about page, you've mentioned that one of the primary reasons people consider veganism is related to a desire to preserve the lives of animals. You might delve deeper into the ethical and environmental concerns people have regarding agricultural farming, adapting these considerations into the structure of your inquiry. Instead of the binary question -- is a vegan diet healthy (yes or no)? Consider, instead, something akin to -- "When considering the pros and cons of veganism, does the necessity to address the ethical implications regarding animal life and to resolve the environmental impact of industrial farming outweigh the health risks of a vegan diet?"

      This question would allow you to better grapple with the complexity of your topic and would allow to integrate more credible perspective that'd aid you in grappling with refutations to your overarching argument.

      I also encourage you to take advantage of the tutoring appointments offered at the university's writing center. It might be a good idea to talk to someone who can help you brainstorm ways to apply my suggestions to your position paper.

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    1. with the lack of the previously stated components, that person is bound to not only get sick from the lack of proper calories that a child needs, but it's also going to end up physically underdeveloped compared to the average child. Altogether, veganism isn't nearly as healthy as people suggest it to be, especially towards younger audiences who can be easily persuaded due to their ever changing bodies. 

      Where is this evidenced in research?

    2. Calcium is the main component that makes a person's bones as strong as they are. However, thanks to a vegan diet, if someone is lacking muscle mass due to the lack of protein and is also lacking calcium, then that person can easily injure themselves to a great extent due to how potentially weak that person can get.

      Certainly, it might be difficult for vegans to obtain daily recommended amounts of protein and calcium from vegan-friendly food sources, but, what about supplements?

      If you pursue this line of inquiry in your position paper, how will you grapple with the refutation that these nutrients can be provided through supplements, making a vegan diet both efficient for sustaining optimal human health and an excellent tool in contributing to the problem of mass animal-slaughter?

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    1. Today's 30 Year Mortgage Rate Edit this text and tell your site visitors who you are. To edit, simply click directly on the text and add your own words. Use this text to go into more detail about your company. Make sure to include information about how your company came to be. 3.002% APR 2.876% APY

      Unrelated to forum.

    2. the picture states that its 161 compared to 210, but no sources have been shown to prove that information as correct).  

      Also, providing information that can't be supported or substantiated by scholarly research makes this position unfounded.

      Looking toward the position paper, fi you are going to continue to pursue this line of inquiry, it would be a good idea to identify research -- perhaps within the academic disciplines of nutrition, exercise physiology, or biology -- that present potential health benefits of a vegan or primary plant-based diet.

    3. (the picture states that its 161 compared to 210, but no sources have been shown to prove that information as correct).  

      If this position page is to proffer potential health benefits of a vegan diet, why negate the claim? Perhaps, counterargument would be more productive for establishing positions on the issue if it were integrated into the content on your second position page.

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    1. In the following pages, each page will provide different perspectives upon stigmatization towards autism. ​

      Is your inquiry about autism or veganism?

    2. he main reason to why veganism has become so popular in the recent years is because of the population becoming aware of how animals are being continuously slaughtered for our own consumption.

      Interesting. I will return to this in my end-note paragraph.

    3. However, veganism might not seem as healthy as people suggest it is.

      This sentence seems inflected by bias. The point of the forum is to present experts' positions on this line of inquiry.

    4. The main focus of this forum will be about the effects of veganism towards someone's health, and the different positions involving that topic. 

      Stasis: Value/Quality

    1. Recommend Reading 

      Zach, I'm at the end of your forum and it's really good! On a technical level, the use of vlogs and documentaries is deeply engaging and makes the information in your textual content more palpable. Also, you do a great job at pointing to narratives depicting the intense labor in which student-athletes engage to make a pathos appeal to for the monetary compensation of student-athletes. You do a great job, too, at making concrete distinctions between each position, offering information from various popular sources to afford your positions as much credibility and integrity as possible.

      My primary feedback relates mostly to your stasis point. Though you're mostly dealing with the stasis point of value/quality, it might benefit your to explore questions related to jurisdiction too. It seems, in part, what you're arguing is that student-athletes should have a voice in this argument. Perhaps, for your position paper, you can posit arguments relating to the necessity of input from student athletes in this conversation as a potential framework for your primary inquiry rooted in value/quality questions related to ethical concerns of not compensating student athletes for the revenue that they contribute to maintenance of university's and coach's salaries.

      I think, too, that if you're inquiry revolves largely around ethical concerns, you might integrate more examples of financially struggling student-athletes who don't receive any of the millions of dollars of dollars which they rake in for their universities.

      Also, a note on source integration -- while the popular sources that you have here works for the context of the digital forum, you'll need to find data produced by researchers within an academic or professional field rooted in scholarship that confirms and adds credibility to the claims that you're making. It might be worth scanning literature by economists who right about revenue that college athletes bring in to institutions or looking into social science that explores the socio-economic realities of student-athletes.

    1. thus tarnishing the greatnesses of college sports

      I don't understand your argument here. How would corporatizing college sports tarnish the best qualities of it?

    1. Another

      Excellent popular source placement and use of pathos as a rhetorical strategy. I love, too, that this acts as a student-athlete conducted study on the disparities in leisure student-athletes are afforded in comparison to other college students. By further illustrating the relentlessness of the work in which student-athletes engage, how it robs them, not only of compensation, but of much needed rest and a robust social life, you reveal how predatory the college sports industry. I'm thinking, too, about how this illustrates that free education is not, in fact, compensation; course load compounds the stress athletes already endure, proving them to be deserving, at least, of monetary compensation.

    2. academic performances he can receive up to $150,000

      Interesting. So, not only are coaches compensated for the intense labor of their players, they're also compensated for their success in maintaining the academic performance for which their status as athletes are contingent upon.

    1. question of what is morally and ethically right

      Right. It could prove to be a human right's issue. Great job at cementing your topic in the stasis point of value/quality.

    2. Every year millions of people tune in and fill massive stadiums and arenas in to watch college sports in the fall. . However, the fans only see the end result on Saturday's, They don't see the brutal practices every day, they don't see all of the hard lifts and hours of meetings during the week, and they don't see the job-like atmosphere in the facility or "workplace".

      Excellent. Description of work-environment makes the experience of student-athletes visible to otherwise uninformed readers; the adjectives used makes the suffering of student-athletes not only visible, but palpable, and serves, quite effectively, rhetorical strategy of pathos.

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    1. Required Readings

      Andy, I'm at the end of your forum. You do a great job at communicating the specific concerns that you have regarding racism in sports and the commodification of athletes as a remnant of slavery. It was a good idea, too, to use our current social unrest as an opportunity to reintroduce the urgency of this inquiry.

      Here are my concerns:

      Though you have a substantial amount of credible sources listed in your required readings page that directly engage with your inquiry, none of the research findings were used in your position pages to substantiate your claims. Moving toward your position paper, it'll be critical for you to identify findings in your research that support and challenge your argument, to summarize those studies, and then to use them to add strength to your claims.

      For your position paper, you'll also need to have a clear idea of the stasis point in which your inquiry and argument is embedded. Here, it isn't clear. Though, it seems your most preoccupied with questions related to the stasis point of conjecture -- seeking answers to questions about the existence, or lack thereof, of racism in sports. Gaining a clearer understanding of your stasis point will anchor your argument, aid you in finding experts who are engaging in the same line of questioning, and, in doing so, will help gain a better understanding to significance of the questions you're asking.

      Before turning in your final position paper, I encourage you to work with a peer tutor at the university's writing center on further orienting your inquiry and argument into conjecture or another stasis point compatible with your inquiry. I'd ask them, too, to help you identify research that challenges the notion that the commodification of Black athletes reflects racism in sports.

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    1. The commodification of black athletes is one of the last remnants of racism in sports that need to be addressed.

      This position, even the wording of the topic sentence, is identical to your previous position.

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    1. Position 2

      What of you textual content do you intend to demonstrate with this graph? How does it serve as a visual aid or representation of data in your text?

    2. More specifically, winning reaffirms dominant beliefs of the Black male as beastly and fuels White profit, whereas losing seemingly justifies the need for increased White control.

      This is compelling, but, again, where has this been evidenced?

    3. blacks

      "Blacks" are going to read this as a pejorative racial aggression. In the interest of gaining the trust of your African-American audience, consider substituting this wit a more formal term (i.e. African-Americans).

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    1. et’s say, for example, an athlete was commodified against their will and they were made into an action figure without being told/signing a contract/being paid.

      This is hypothetical. Again, what has your research indicated? Are there examples from research data that you can use to add credibility to this example.

    2. For example with the integration of schools, the permissibility of interracial marriage, and an overall decrease in casual racism,

      This doesn't evidence reform in sports. Are there examples detailed in research by experts that you can point to to give authority to your position?

    1. The commodification of black athletes is one of the last remnants of racism in sports that needs to be addressed.

      This position is engaging with the same line of argumentation as your second position.

    2. How is the commodification of black athletes an outlet for racism that often goes unnoticed in the world of sports?

      In which stasis point is this question rooted? Also, what is the social importance or exigence this particular issue? What is at stake for the public if we do not engage in this inquiry?

    3. it is important to pay more attention to how sports could perhaps be used as a means to rectify and heal these social injustices.

      Why athletes/celebrities and not politicians? Athletes aren't sworn into office and are not contracted by policies or the constitution to protect the best interests of the people in this country.

    4. which in itself is a showcase of how important this issue is.

      The rise of activism in this crisis demonstrates the tenacity of disenfranchised communities, even in the face of compounding adversity tangential to their most pressing concerns. How, though, does it demonstrate the necessity of your inquiry? How does the current protests and riots surface questions about racism in sports? The connection isn't yet clear.

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    1. Stasis This forum examines the action stasis point. Earlier research used the cause and effect stasis point to determine key questions, but going forward, the three position pages will relate to action and what can be done to mitigate the issue. 

      While I am certainly one of the audience for this forum, the language should attend to more general readers who might not be familiar with academic writing and composition terms. If you had to translate these sentences, pointing more directly as the specific questions related to cause/effect in which experts have engaged and the questions that you'll go on to explore, what would you say?

    2. This forum examines the action stasis point. Earlier research used the cause and effect stasis point to determine key questions, but going forward, the three position pages will relate to action and what can be done to mitigate the issue. 

      Excellent. What you note implies that inquiry related to the stasis point of cause/effect has already been exhausted by experts and that, by moving the inquiry into action, you will be transforming it into a mode of argumentation that is actionable and in service of resolving this particular social issue.

    3. especially in the age of Covid, when people have limited access to in person information.

      Great job at using our current social condition and political moment to heighten the urgency of examining the portrayal of female politicians in the media.

    4. Media is a major part of everyday life, from providing breaking news, to keeping people updated on current issues. Ever since 1960, the media has become increasingly involved in government and elections, with the first televised presidential debate between Kennedy and Nixon. As women began to become more involved in politics, there was a noticeable difference in the way the media portrayed female and male politicians in their words and actions. The issue of this forum is identifying the difference and effects of the media’s different portrayal of men and women in government, leading to a possible gender bias in the media.

      Excellent historical overview of this issue.

    1. Required Readings

      Madi, I'm at the end of your forum and it's pretty good! You do a great job at supplying your reader a comprehensive summary of the history of media bias against female politicians and at pointing to experts who'd engaged in what you'd perceived o be exhausted points of stasis as a signal to move into more actionable arguments and inquiries.

      With that said, the urge to move this line of inquiry into action is admirable. However, I think you're dealing with a stasis point in which experts have not actually engaged. This is evidenced by the lack of sources included in your forum that directly engage in your central question. This, too, might reflect that experts haven't exhausted other the prerequisite points of stasis that would allow them to engage in questions about what can be done about the issue of media bias.

      A stasis point in which you might find pre-existing arguments related to your topic is conjecture. It seems that much of your work, anyway, deals with questions related to the existence of bias against women in the media and the impact that media bias has on polling outcomes.

      I'm thinking about what you say on your second position page about polling outcomes being largely related to the policies which women politicians promote and it seems, to me, that that serves as almost a direct counter argument for what you'd said earlier about women's poll outcomes being largely a result of the media's portrayal of them. I'm thinking that there might be more credible sources that you can point to such as the source included on your second position page, that give other, alternative reasons for why women politicians fair poorly at the polls .

      And, of course, the counterargument that you'd have for a refutation of that nature is already embedded in your argument has much to do with the language with the media uses to describe policies which women endorse, falsely gendering them.

      Madi, I really encourage you to work with a peer-tutor at the university's writing center for help with reorienting yourself into conjecture or another stasis point in your position paper. All of the research that you'd need to make the shift is there, but it might be useful to receive guidance on how to do so.

    1. A peer reviewed source

      What are the details of this study? Also, though this is a scholarly source, the information in it does not directly support this position.

    2. Relating to the action stasis point, examining female politicians who have made positive impacts on the country and politics is a solution to solving the media’s biased portrayal.

      I don't quite understand the argument that you're making, here. Are you suggesting that a possible solution to this issue could be to distribute more information, through media and other educational outlets, about positive impacts that female politicians have made? If so, where, in your research has other experts produced data that had confirmed this to be a viable option for working against media bias?

    1. Redefining "Female Issues"

      So the primary position that you're taking is that, in order to avoid bias, we need to make linguistic changes to how we describe women politicians and women issues more generally in media. This seems, to me, not like two distinct positions, but two potential responses to one position.

    1. The stasis point of action deals with solutions to an issue, asking what can be done to fix this issue.

      Can you point to sources from experts engaging in this stasis point? The line of inquiry which you follow should be rooted in a preexisting conversation.

      In your previous paragraph, you provide a source that examines the media bias against women. Are there others which you can point that examine, specifically, the use of adjectives and how it had shaped the image of female politicians during and after their campaigns?

    2. A source called Women Political Leaders and the Media examines the extent of the subtle stereotypical portrayals of female politicians in elections and everyday government work. 

      Great job at providing a hyperlink for readers who might be interested in learning more about subtle stereotyping of female politicians in the media. Though, I do have questions about this source. What makes it credible? Who are the experts that produce this data and which field of study grants them expertise? What is the nature of the research? What are the constituents of it? How was the study conducted and who was involved?

      If you included this source in your position paper, briefly paraphrase the data and summarize the study, being sure to acknowledge the researchers and that which makes them credible. If you'll be integrating visual aids into your paper, you might also consider finding or creating a graph that represents this source's data to serve as a visual aid for your reader.

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    1. Required Readings:

      Amir, I'm at the end of your forum. While you do a great job at using references to music theory and your own backstory to make a case for music's role in social justice, you haven't substantiated your claims with credible research.

      The idea that protests void of music will lack meaning and momentum seems a gesture toward exigence. Though, I'm not convinced, yet, of this claim. Where has it been evidenced that protests without music fail? There have been multiple silent vigils and kneeling in response to George Floyd's death and they've all been effective in raising awareness and acting as a social disturbance. How will you grapple with this counter-fact in your position paper?

      If protests can exist and function without music, if social justice efforts can be accomplished without it, why should anyone care if there's music or not? What does it contribute? What are the specific risks of musicians disengaging in social justice efforts?

      I think the anecdotes that you rely on are useful, but, thinking toward the position paper, consider integrating information from credible stories that validates and gives some authority to your anecdote as substantiation for the claims you're making.

      Also, moving toward your position paper, it will be necessary to bed your line of inquiry into a stasis point that promotes exigence regarding this topic. Right now, you're working in the stasis point of value/quality -- largely making a case for the value of music. I sense, though, that you intend to work in action. Instead of exploring questions about what might be done to urge artists to act -- as there hasn't yet been a convincing argument established for the necessity of that particular line of inquiry -- you, might, instead, simply argue for the value of music in social justice efforts. These efforts do not have to relate to the plight of Black and Queer communities. They can certainly relate to other social concerns, such as to our national mental health crisis. Earlier, in your research, you'd archived in your annotated bibliography sources about how music had served as therapy. Return them. Maybe, in research surrounding that topic, there is an argument to be made about the necessity of music therapy or art therapy in treating certain kinds of mood or behavioral disorders. You could use the data about the steady climb of mental illness over the years and the exponential rise of mental illness onset by the COVID-19 crisis as a framework for your inquiry and to establish exigence.

      Before turning in your final position paper, I encourage you to meet with a peer tutor at the university's writing center for tips on how to integrate my suggestions into your paper.

    2. “Blowin’ in the wind” and how they create a song which inspires and brings awareness of important subjects to a large audience through the use of a song. We can also analyze the ways in which songs can serve situations of social justice without being just “inspiring

      While song lyrics might prove to be supplemental material pointing toward ways in which music, in the past, has been politically engaged, it does not present demonstrable evidence of how music effectively aids in social justice efforts.

    3. A study preformed by the International Journal of Education and Arts shows that the major topics people want addressed are global warming, wars in Iraq, homelessness, smoking, pollution, drugs, rape, poverty, and health.

      What were the constituents of this study? To directly connect the significance of the study with your claim, be sure to provide a paraphrase of the data and a brief research of the study, explaining the academic field which affords the researcher(s) authority in your topic and a precise description of their experiment.

    4. Without the participation of musicians within social justice, movements and rallies are doomed to lack meaning and will fail in spreading awareness across many people. ​

      This seems like a gesture toward exigence, but are there studies that you can point to that confirm this?

    1. 1.

      Eitan, I'm at the end of your website and it's fantastic! The information that your provide is informative and substantiated by credible statistical data and other relevant research material. You do a great job at isolating distinct perspectives on questions related to the effectiveness of online learning for college students.

      The visual that you've provided were directly connected to your textual content and served as visual representation of the research that you'd referenced.

      Global Comments:

      -Looking toward the position paper, be sure to not only reference but also provide brief summaries of the studies which you reference. Be sure, too, to note the academic or professional experience which affords them expertise on the topic or line of inquiry in which they are engaging. There were instances, which I'd highlighted and annotated, when you'd mention studies without providing necessary, grounding contextual information. As it had been for your digital forum, it'll be equally important for you to convey the most relevant information to substantiate and afford credibility to your claims.

      -When providing visual data, be sure to summarize the findings demonstrated within in it. All visual material, both in digital and standard academic writing, should illustrate or develop upon information already precisely explained in your textual content. Visual material should be an aid to textual material.

      -There were several sections which you express what seem to be opinions about elements of online learning that go unbacked by any research. If you intend to include them in your position paper, be sure to substantiate them with scientific or anecdotal information. Remember, you are free to use your own backstory as rhetorical strategy to appeal to the emotions of your reader and to affirm the validity of scholarly sources that you point to. For example, you mention that online learning does not compromise the social quality of learning because students, especially those taking large lecture courses, do not engage with each other in person. Instead of presenting that as verified fact, perhaps you could manipulate the language to be akin to creative non-fiction, relaying an experience in which you, yourself, and your peers had not engaged with each other socially. You might also consider using self-conducted research such as Google forms, polls, and surveys of your peers' online learning experiences to provide your anecdote more credibility.

    1. it can also lead to student success as a result of a course tailored more to the student.

      Are there testimonials that you can access from online university website's or a self-conducted survey of your peers online learning experience to support this?

    2. a course was given. The course was given both online and face to face and the results showed that the courses yielded the same level of retention. 

      In your last position, you'd mentioned that the efficiency of online learning depended largely on the type of learning in which students engaged. Because of this, it'd been useful to name the types of courses in which students were reported to retain information to a degree comparable to that which they retain information during face-to-face learning interactions.

      Providing a brief summary of the study would have aided your reader in better understanding the constituents of it, the relevance of the study's granular details to your topic, and would have more tightly linked this position to the line of inquiry in which your other positions engage.

    1. lectures can contain hundreds of students so many students never actually interact with their professors.

      Are there any credible surveys that confirms this claim?

    1. reasons. 

      In the interest of establishing the relevance of students' input, it would have been a good idea to briefly summarize the reasons students preferred the discussion portion of class to be face-to-face.

      I'm thinking, too, about your graph; providing a brief summary might've helped make the information more legible to a reader not fluent in graphic data .

    2. Part of any type of school, but specifically university, is learning with and from other classmates. Everyone has something different to bring to the table, so in addition to learning from the teacher, students also learn from each other. When learning online, students do not experience this aspect of learning. First of all, meeting people over video call is extremely difficult, so finding people to work with can be hard. Second of all, communicating on a video call and trying to collaborate on work is also difficult, so the actual learning is less effective.  Academic Assistance Another crucial part of learning that is lost when learning online is communication with the professor. Generally, when a student is struggling with something, they can go to the professor and ask for assistance. When learning online this is much more difficult. Students must either wait for specific office hours, which do not always work for their schedules, or communicate via email. 

      While these arguments seem sound, if you're going to use them for your position paper, be sure to substantiate them with data or other forms of research material produced by experts on this topic.

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    1. The key question being addressed is how does the effectiveness of online learning compare to the effectiveness of face to face learning in universities?

      Stasis: Value?

    2. Today, with the Covid-19 Pandemic, online learning is more prevalent than ever. Many universities that normally learn face to face have transitioned into partly or fully online institutions. The pandemic has lasted almost 10 months already, with no clear end in sight, so online learning could be the primary form of learning for an extended period of time. Additionally, the technology being developed in today’s world opens up the possibilities for more effective online learning. Online learning is becoming more and more important in our society and must be addressed.

      Great job at using our current social dilemma as a framework and an opportunity to convey the exigence of your inquiry!

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    1. 1. 

      Robert, I'm at the end of your website, and it's pretty good. A few global comments that I have are largely about your inquiry and stasis points. Though, on the about page, you write that your question is abut the causes and effects of protesting on the BLM, I think you get closer to the center of your concerns when you posit questions about the effectiveness of BLM's social justice.

      Looking toward the position paper, it might be worth slightly shifting your stasis from cause/effect to value/quality, dealing exclusively with concerns about the efficiency of social justice efforts taken by the movement.

      This will allow you to keep engage in a singular line of inquiry, keeping the information you have about the achievements made by the group, and expanding your exploration to consequences of BLM protests and rioting.

      I encourage you to work with a peer-tutor at the university's writing center for help on integrating my suggestions into your position paper drafts and final.

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    1. Position #3: The negative perceptions created of the BLM movement through protesting         Although the Black Lives Matter movement advocates a positive ideology that fights the social injustices that exist in our society, some of the violent actions taken by people who represent the BLM movement and some of the extreme ideologies people have formed a negative perception of the BLM movement for the general public. Although these perceptions are not completely accurate and can be created through singular events and stories, they can have devastating effects for the reputation and public perception for this movement.     There are many different causes behind the negative opinions people formed of this movement. One of which is the portrayal of this movement by the media. Through the single stories narrated by the news outlets, people of color, especially black people, are often portrayed in two specific ways: the “good” and the “bad”. The news outlets often cover the major issues that are happening, so when a small number of the protests became violent and destructive, the news outlets broadcasted them. This led to many people associating the BLM movement with the violent behaviors that they see being broadcasted on the news. 

      Have you seen this evidenced in studies done by political scientists, journalists, or sociologists?

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    1. On the other hand, through the eyes of someone who has lived in a community that has been a target of the looting, protests can often be viewed in a negative light. Although the protests let the government hear about the opinions of the people, the victims of the violence that happens because of protests will see the protests as creating more destruction rather than seeking social justice, which would render these protests ineffective and bothersome.

      This seems to be a separate position and, perhaps, deserves its own page and supporting sources.

    2. The information that you provide about Gillion is useful for grounding your proffered position in research done by an expert in the field. While referencing his research provides the reader context and offers this position credibility, a summary of and hyperlink to the study would have made the research more accessible to readers interested in learning more about how politicians manipulate protests for the benefit of themselves and for the protesting communities.

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    1. The main reason why people protested was that protesting has always been a way to challenge social injustice in America. Since the birth of America, there have been protests fighting for rights and advocating American ideas. From the Boston Tea Party to the Civil Rights Movement, protesting has always been prevalent in American history, and it has shown its effectiveness many times. Since the BLM movement is an American movement, street protests are inevitable to challenge the injustices in society.

      An analysis of the causes of protesting does not convey a distinct position taken on questions related to the effectiveness of protests for achieving BLM's social justice efforts.

    1. Is protesting actually the best way to push the agendas of the movement? As the idea of “solving racism” in our country has been around since the start of our country, how can we continue to make progress towards solving these social injustices? 

      This actually seems closer to the central question that you have which, perhaps, is rooted in the stasis point of cause/effect.

    2. In our society, the agenda to cleanse the country of racism and other inequalities is a priority, and people protesting during a once-in-a-lifetime pandemic shows this importance and how urgent people are treating this topic

      This illustrates how, despite being under particularly stringent shutdown conditions, recent protests has proven social justice to be a priority to people. This doesn't, however, directly address the significance of the line of inquiry you're taking up. What makes this particular question regarding the impact of protesting on the BLM movement important? Why should general readers care? What, specifically, are the risks of not engaging in this particular line of inquiry?

    3. Why is this topic important?

      Great job at using the interrogative register to surface questions of exigence and to directly address potential readers who are unfamiliar with BLM and the social urgency of settling the dispute regarding the necessity of BLM social justice efforts.

    4. that is seemingly morally correct

      What does it mean for this movement to be morally correct? What are the global morals and ethics upheld by all chapters within the BLM organization?

      The digital forum is meant to address readers of varying degrees of background knowledge on your topic. Someone who knows hardly anything about BLM or someone who knows only information which they've come across on social media platforms about the movement will not know, concretely, the concerns of this particular group.

    1. there is still a reason to manage or human rights over economic rights as these problems can be solved without the reopening of schools.

      Is this your opinion or one of an author whose source you've used in your forum?

      Also, I'm thinking that what you note about the negative impacts of online learning on the economy might be worth integrating into your other position page that stakes an argument for in-person learning.

    2. ttps://educationdata.org/online-education-statistics

      While this data is definitely related to the information in your text, it does not illustrate or develop upon the data which you provide.

      Thinking, now, toward your position paper, consider only integrating graphs that illustrate data or other kind of information that you provide in your text.

    3. Government officials and other important figures have pushed the reopening of schools to handle the economic downfall, but it is necessary to prioritize the well-being of all citizens during this time, specifically students.

      New information.

    4. Along with this, it is important to look at how the economy will be affected by school closures. With the closure of schools, there has been a decrease in the need for different products that would have been needed to be a student in normal school conditions, so many businesses are deteriorating because of this.

      New information. This should be more thoroughly explored in its own independent paragraph.

    5. on a scholarly book

      What makes this book particular "scholarly"? Who is Viner? In which academic field or professional discipline does he engage that affords him authority to weigh in on this issue? What, specifically, does his research involve?

    1. Required Reading Page

      Shamil, I've reached the end of your forum and it's pretty good! You do a greta job at distinguishing the positions that you offer and sharing information worth considering for readers to weigh as they gage whether or not it is feasible to learn in-person, online, or in a hybrid setting during the crisis.

      The recurring question that I had while reading your forum related to exigence. I'd asked this in my marginal notes on another page and I'll ask it again here: Other than the general fact that students, in this moment, are required to take classes online, what is the significance of this particular line of inquiry? What are the risks of not engaging in this line of inquiry? Right now, the positions are proffered as idle interests in questions relating to various modes of learning during the pandemic. Moving toward your position paper, it might be worth centering your focus on the mental health or economic risks of learning online. This would require a slight shift in stasis; you'd have to move from action -- questions about what can or should be done -- to value/quality -- questions about the pros and cons of the online learning environment. Though, using the stasis of value/quality would more tightly link your concerns about the impact that online learning has on the economy with what you note about the shutdown's impact on mental and physical health while making your research more socially urgent.

      On the digital quality of your forum -- your website is easily navigable/ Though, your images would be more interactive if they'd been illustrations or developments upon information which you provide in your text. Refer to other pages for examples of images which I highlight that could afford to be more directly linked to your textual content.

      With a slight adjustments of stasis, your research will be very strong. I strongly encourage you to schedule an appointment with the university's writing center fr help on how to translate, for, and then, integrate my suggestions into your position paper. Feel free to reach out if you need help finding the link to their appointment sign-up form.

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    1. Furthermore, another article goes over how resources can be distributed out virtually and physically to create a hybrid learning environment; this includes books, articles, textbooks, etc. through the usage of a digital library.

      This information seems separate to what you'd just noted about the significance of maintaining awareness of students' difficulty to adapt to new learning environments. Perhaps this could benefit from a transitional phrase or sentence that connects the two chunks of information. This might also be more thoroughly addressed if placed in a separate paragraph.

    2. The article also takes the students’ well-being into account as it is difficult for students to be able to suddenly adapt to a new learning environment while staying at home for most of the day.

      What were the findings?

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    1. The line of stasis exists within the question of what can colleges do to make sure that students are receiving a proper education under these current conditions?

      Would, then, your inquiry and subsequent positions be rooted in action or value/quality? In other words, are you exploring the possibilities of college education given the condition of this current moment or are you invested in exploring the prose and cons of various learning styles under our particular crisis conditions?

    1. areas.

      Is this graph updated? Schools made last-minute decisions in August to learn remotely, making this information somewhat dated and irrelevant.

    2. Along with this, the author of the article, Shao-Yi Cheng, mentioned the strong need for health resources during such a difficult time, as students have to manage their academic life during a worldwide pandemic which can be very stressful. Another resource about COVID-19 indicates that students are facing more psychological impact than ever before due to the overwhelming nature the virus has forced upon students. There have been over 23% of students that felt at least mild anxiety solely from COVID-19 when taking a survey of college students in China.

      This portion of the paragraph introduces new information about the impact of the shutdown on student's mental health and, perhaps, should be in its own paragraph. Which brings me to a lingering I've had up to this point -- which stasis point is your positions rooted in and what is the urgency of engaging in this particular line of inquiry? It seems that the positions are proffered in a way that suggests you merely take up an idle interest in questions regarding the pros and cons of learning in-person, online, or in a hybrid setting during the shut down. Other than the general fact that all of us are learning during a pandemic, what makes the efficiency of these three separate modes of learning worth inquiring about? Here, you mention the necessity of maintaining an awareness of the shutdown's impact on mental health. What is the correspondence between your interest in exploring the impact of the shutdown on mental health and in the impact of in-person learning? The connection between the two is not yet clear.

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    1. More Information 

      Francisco, the concerns that you address about the impact of social media on mental health are important and, as you'd mentioned in your last past, necessary to explore now that we are in shutdown and likely to engage with social media more frequently.

      Thinking just about the digital aspects of your forum, the buttons do not indicate the information described on your pages and your positions are not given their own individual pages. More, while the TedTalk included on the homepage serves as an effective multimedia source to aid your reader in understanding the information which you provide in text, the other images are merely decorative and do not illustrate or develop upon your textual content.

      Thinking, now, about content, I had a hard time connecting your positions to each other and to the stasis which you'd suggested you'd bed them in on your home page. This is largely a result of not referencing the specific question which your positions engaged. For example, in your first section about social media creators, you'd stated that the argument, itself, was about creators despite stating, much earlier, that you'd be focusing, specifically, on the impacts of social media use on mental health.

      Looking forward, toward the position paper, I encourage you to use transitional phrases to better connect your claims, the positions which your sources take, and to keep present the stasis which the two are embedded in.

      I think it'd also be a great idea to consider signing up for an appointment with the university's writing center for help from a peer tutor on your position paper. A few transitional phrases and references to sources would really strengthen your inquiry and research.

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    1. Creators of Social Media Platforms

      How does this information answer the line of inquiry presented on your homepage regarding the impact of social media on metal health?

    2. The more time we spend on our phones seems to affect our mental state. T

      The connection between algorithms working to sustain user attention and the impact of sustained social media use on mental health is not clear here.

    3. advertisements

      What is the relationship between social media advertisement and anti-social behavior created by social media use? I think I understand the general question being explored regarding the impact that social media use has on mental health and social behavior, but the language is not grounded in your inquiry, making the connection between your positions difficult to follow.

    4. Even though we’re focusing on one particular age group, social media still takes a toll on anyone.

      Which sources have you read that's led you to this conclusion? What have they said about the spread of anti-social behavior created by social media use between people between the ages of 12-28?

    5. The argument here is that social media platforms attract a particular age group most of the time

      How does this particular argument relate your line of inquiry regarding the effects of social media on mental health and the inquiry's corresponding stasis point(s)?

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    1. he second position is about advertising. Most of these social media apps focus on a particular audience most of the time

      Consider checking out the documentary "The Social Dilemma." The directors interview social media program experts on the intended effects of image placement as a algorithmic marketing strategy.

    2. still learning and not self-aware. 

      And therefore cannot engage in surveys. Looking forward, toward your position paper, I'd look into studies that explore how technology use impacts young children's social development. It'd help you in examining the of long-term, sustained social media or social-media-like use and predict potential outcomes that it'll have on human socialization in the future.

    3. his can be measured through online surveys.

      Good job, too, at introducing the kind of data which you'll be examining to substantiate your positions.

    4. The key question being addressed here is whether social media is good or bad for our mental health.

      Excellent job at rooting your positions in the stasis point of value/quality.

    5. lose face-to-face interactions

      what you're suggesting is a little unclear here. Are you saying that people are engaging in F-to-F interactions less frequently as a result of social media or are you saying that social mediate disables its users from being able to engage efficiently in f-to-f dialogue?

    6. Why is this important?

      Great use of the interrogative register to keep questions of exigence afloat and to engage an audience of wide-ranging background knowledge of your topic.

    1. Required readings

      Bryce, I've just finished reading your forum, and its pretty good! You do a great job at providing distinct positions which experts have taken on ethical questions regarding the impacts that marijuana use has on crime, behavior, and health.

      Thinking forward, toward the position paper, it might be a good idea to narrow your focus one or two particular concerns related to this issue. It seems that the two stases you've chosen to bed your positions are that of action -- what can be done to mitigate potential risks of marijuana use -- and cause/effect -- what are the possible outcomes of marijuana use. Though the information on your website is thorough and comprehensive, the result of taking on multiple stases is that the exigence or global risks surrounding the issue isn't precisely stated or explicit. Also -- and this is connected to the issue of exigence -- there often aren't clear connections between the concerns which you explore. For example, in the first position page, you suggest that studies have shown few, if any, relevant health concerns related to marijuana use without reconciling that claim with information you've included in later pages about risks of impaired motor-skills reflected in an increase of car crashes, cognitive functioning represented in lower GPAs of college students, and disturbance of sleep patterns in teenage users. I think this is largely a result of each page alternating between stases -- the first and second dealing almost wholly with cause/effect and the third straddling cause/effect and action.

      Perhaps, in your position paper, you could use ethical questions related to the legalization of marijuana as a framework to discuss, exclusively, the behavioral and mental health risks and benefits described here.

      Also, referencing sources in MLA format is useful for formal papers like the position paper as your audience will likely be other academics, especially those by whom you are taught. In this context, providing hyperlinks would have made your research more credible and immediately accessible for general readers of varying research background.

      I'm thinking, too, about your graphics. Though there were clear connections between the ideas expressed in the text and your images, most of them were decorative. in the future, use images that not only complement but that also work in concert with the text to illustrate the data or other forms of information described.

    1. vivid

      "Vivid" describes the intensity which an image is recalled or conjured in the mind -- such as a dream or memory. Do you mean something akin to "passionate" here?

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    1. Students who reported having never used marijuana before showed GPA's on average 0.429 points higher than students who reported use of once a week or more but not daily.

      I'd be interested in seeing the comparison of GPA's between students who'd never used marijuana and those who use it daily.

      Also, while the graphic provided is visually pleasing, it does not aid your reader in better understanding the data which you'd just described in your text.

      Thinking, now, about your position paper, it would be a good idea to only use images that aid the reader in better understanding the ideas and data which you present.

    2. She then goes on to explain that the long-term effects and the capability of marijuana to act as a "gateway" drug into more illicit substances are currently unclear

      This information seems irrelevant to what you explore regarding the ways in which marijuana impairs cognitive motor functioning and, consequently, increases the likelihood of car accidents. Though, it does seem related to what you mention later about health and safety and could be better used as a transitional sentence at the beginning of the following paragraph on its health risks.

    3. David Frum

      Who is David Frum and from which academic or professional field has he obtained the authority to weigh in on this particular issue?

    4. credible organizations

      It would be useful to name them here and to clarify the specific issues which each expert and organization has examined.

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    1. antiemetics, antispasmodics, and analgesics

      If you had to translate these pharmaceutical terms for readers who were unfamiliar with them, what might you say?

    2. criminal sentencing

      It seems, now, that what you were addressing in your previous paragraph is not necessarily the impact that legalization has on reducing overpopulation of prisons and sentencing, but, instead, the effect that marijuana use has on the reduction of crime.

    3. A study by Davide Dragone, published in the Journal of Economic Behavior and Organization, stated that the legalization of marijuana use in Colorado and Washington has actually induced a drop in crime rates. The study shows that the number of rapes and property crimes have been reduced since the change in policy within the two states.

      Excellent. Though, a hyperlink to the study would afford this information credibility and would have been useful for readers interested in learning more.

    4. There have been many studies that have connected marijuana use with possible health complications but there has also been a decent amount of research that has claimed to debunk these theories

      I'd be interested in seeing the sources that you'd read that confirms this. The majority of DSM (Diagnostic and Statistical Manual of Mental Disorders) volumes, including the most recent edition, draw direct correlation between depression - a mental health complication -- and marijuana use.

    5. Studies have shown that there is no concrete conclusion tying marijuana use to these health problems due to inconsistency of consumption. One of the main arguments for the legalization of marijuana has been that decriminalizing the drug will cut down immensely on prison populations. Over-confinement has been a growing issue in the US over the last decade. 

      Hm, it seems that your grappling with two related, but separate, issues here -- the first being the inconsistencies of findings in research related to the health risks of marijuana use, and the second, the potential that legalization has of resolving the issue of general mass incarceration. I'm not yet seeing a direct correlation, yet, between these concerns.

      Looking toward your position, it might be a good idea, in the future, to add a transitional phrase or sentence that bridges the relationship between the two or to deal with them separately in their own paragraphs.

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    1. A survey by the American College Health Association conducted in 2015 shows the national average of college students that report having used marijuana. Jones, Jacob. Addictive Behaviors, 2018, www-sciencedirect-com.proxy-um.researchport.umd.edu/science/article/pii/S030646031730312X#f0005

      I'd be interested in seeing. graph that depicts that parallels marijuana use amongst college students and reports of college students who use marijuana and suffer from mental illness or another form of compromised well-being.

    2. How will legalizing this substance effect the country? What are the potential benefits and risks of taking this legal action?

      Excellent. Great job at rooting your positions in the stasis points of value and cause/effect.

    3. As other issues such as obesity and lack of physical activity grow in the United States, public health has become a growing concern.

      I'm not understanding the connection between dietary health, weight management, and the effects of marijuana on health. Are you suggesting that marijuana poses similar health risks? If so, what are they and how are they comparable?

    1. LegalizeOrNaw can help you make your decision through reliable, unbiased information from credible sources. We want YOU to decide for yourself. 

      Great job at manipulating language to address a wide-ranging audience of various knowledge on the legalization of marijuana and to invoke an intimate dialogue between you and them.

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    1. 1.

      Gayoung, I've just reached the end of your forum, and I love it! You do a great job at selecting graphics that aid your reader in understanding the research that you reference in your sections. Also, the information that you provide here is deeply informational. My instinct is that it'll prove to be both central to and foundational for your position paper.

      With that said, as you continue to explore these ideas in your position paper, be sure to summarize the research that you find, emphasizing elements of the research that is most relevant to your argument. The studies that you'd pointed to in your first two positions were integral to the claims that you'd staked. However, I found myself craving more concrete information on how the research was done, by whom, and the ways in which the expert's findings manifested in real-life student experiences. Also, your last position seemed focused on general racism opposed to in-class racism. You very briefly point concerns about the relationship between school discipline practices, racial minorities confidence in the justice system, crime, and representation of minority youth in correctional facilities. It might be worth it, in your position paper, to delve deeper into specific studies that explore the relationships between these subjects. Refer to the notes that I'd left on your last position page for more suggestions on how you might begin to think more about and more tightly link those concerns.

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    1. ystem

      It seems like two related, but separate, ideas are being discussed here -- the role that racism has in inciting crime and the role it has in forging troubled relationships between racial minority groups and the justice system.

      I'm wondering if there's another chart available that shows, too, data relating to students in communities most effected by harsh in-school punishment regimes, the crime rates of student-aged people within those communities, and the degree to which they represent their local prison populations.

      Looking toward the position paper, it might be a good idea to grapple with both of these findings, separately. I'm thinking that the information that you provide here about racial minorities' lack of confidence in the justice system could lead smoothly into a subsequent paragraph about how this lack of confidence translates into high crime.

      Looking toward

    2. Harvard University sociologist Orlando Patterson has estimated that 1 in 3 black adults resides in such high-crime

      Is there a hyperlink that you can provide for this study? Also, again, it might be a great idea to delve deeper into the relationship between underfunding and, as you add here, in-school conduct regulation, and crime.

    3. Racial discrimination from an early age will lead to distorted views about the individual’s identity.

      While this certainly seems related to questions about how racial discrimination, in general, alters an individual's world-perspective, it isn't explicit how racial discrimination in the particular context of a classroom does so.

      In your second paragraph, you mention how childhood racial discrimination impacts minority groups perception of and relationship with the U.S. justice system. This makes me think of related studies about the connection between the underfunding of majority Black and Brown urban high schools and the overrepresentation of Black and Brown teens in neighboring correctional facilities. Some experts consider underfunding a kind of racial aggression, especially given what seems the correlative result of Black and Brown children being overrepresented in prisons. Perhaps, these studies might be something worth looking into. I would directly connect to both your first position on how racial discrimination impacts student outcomes and to this position regarding how it effects ways in which students perceive themselves, society, and their role in it.

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    1. micro-aggressions.

      This chart that translates the implicit messages in micro-aggressions is extremely helpful for helping your general audience gage if and how they'd participated in this kind of offense. This encourages them to dart inward, making your chart an example of pathos and making pathos a very effective rhetorical strategy here.

      I'm wondering, though, if there are opportunities to add more information that illustrate this in action. Are there specific examples that you can pull from your research of students choosing between fitting in and defending themselves?

    2. Having the preconceived notion that other students view him or her differently, causes inferiority and feelings of alienation. This largely disturbs processes of making relationships with peers and even teachers.

      Was this a finding in the aforementioned study? Which research led you to this conclusion?

    3. .

      I'm not yet understanding why the following paragraphs are bullet-pointed and indented beneath this one. Do you mean to put a colon here?

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    1. worse on the exam compared to Whites

      How, exactly, had telling Black students that the exam would measure intellect proven to be a targeted racial aggression? Were white students and other students of color in this particular study not informed that the test would measure intellectual capacity and performance? Also, there might be an opportunity here to provide a graph comparing the test outcomes of students of various racial and ethnic groups who were and were not made aware of the nature of the exam in this study.

    2. it was found that the majority of individuals in a stigmatized race group were largely aware of the discrimination and racial pr

      In which academic discipline were the researchers? How was this study conducted? Also, which academic learning group did they study and in what school, city, and state? What are one or two concrete examples which they'd found of racial discrimination impacting students learning outcomes? You do a great job at providing the hyperlink for your readers to access more information about the study. However, in the interest of making the research findings immediately accessible for your general audience and clarifying the relationship between the research and your forum, it would have been a good idea to summarize the most important elements of this study.

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    1. These factors contribute to the controversy and exigence of this issue as they are associated with how detrimental discrimination can be, and put to perspective how even subtle events of racism can be significant

      Excellent. Great job at pointing directly at the social urgency of your inquiry into the causes and effects of racial and ethnic classroom discrimination. This background section is perfectly concise, leaving me hungry for more information on your topic.

      I'm wondering, especially, about how classroom discrimination impacts the trajectory of minority students' academic and professional careers or social assimilation. I'm excited to see what your other pages note about that.

    1. Sowell, Thomas. Basic Economics. 5th ed, Basic Books, Dec. 2015.

      Zaheen, this is a really cool website! I love the analogies that you make and the rhetorical questions that you pose to aid your readers through the content and to make what could otherwise be dense theoretical economist jargon accessible.

      The only concern that I had about your positions was that it hasn't explicitly stated the exigence or social significance of this particular issue. What, specifically, are the direct impacts of minimum wage increases and decreases on employees examined in the studies that you've referenced? What does those finding suggest about the urgency of your inquiry? There's a lot of theory here that is useful for grounding the reader in the history of your question, but there aren't enough concrete details that illustrate the implications of your findings.

      Earlier, I'd noted that it seems the stasis point is one of value but it seems that the positions engage the stasis point of conjecture -- dealing with defining the issue -- while the information about risks of increases in crime and food prices is rooted in value or action. Looking toward your position paper, it might be worth slightly redirecting your focus to value or action, placing an emphasis on your expressed concerns about the social and ethical concerns of wage laws and, perhaps, preemptive measures that can taken to avoid the consequences of unemployment. After scanning your sources, I'm sure you'd be able to find information related to those concerns and redirecting your focus in that direction would better aid you in establishing exigence for your topic.

    1. factors

      If you are going to pursue this topic in your position paper, be sure to directly reference how other factors impact the impact of wage laws on unemployment. On the topic of your position paper -- I'm concerned about your stasis point. Perhaps we should meet sometime this week to talk about how you'll ground your inquiry in stasis. What, specifically, will you be arguing? Is it, abstractly, the cause of unemployment? What is the social urgency underlying your inquiry? What's at stake if this issue is unresolved?

    1. As a result, unemployed people join the workforce. Unemployment as a whole decreases.

      Yes, but what about the issue of employers simply choosing to cut their number of employees down to cut costs? I understand this, theoretically, but if, in the past, the increase of wage and driven employers to fire employees, then what stops the employer, in this scenario from doing the same? What stops him from simply firing people and rejecting incoming applications?

      I think this argument, too, would benefit from concrete examples of the increase of minimum wage having this particular effect on employment.

    2. many cases,

      I'd be interested in learning more about the variables that effect whether minimum wage laws cause employment rates to rise or fall. What you've offered are two polemic positions on the very same question which must suggest that minimum wage laws, independently, do not impact unemployment. They might, when coupled with other factors such as location of businesses, job availability within a particular location, demographic of employees, local cost of living, general local economy, and/or category of work (i.e. white collar, blue collar, etc.), impact the rate of employment in various ways.

      Considering, too, that employment rates increased as a result of wage increases in fast food franchises in New Jersey and Pennsylvania, presumably in larger cities as that is where most fast food are located I'd be curious about the relationship between employment and crime in areas such as those, where urban violent crime rats are high.

    1. The curve of supply and demand that applies to employment.

      I'm not seeing what you describe in the content reflected in the graph. There are clear units labeled on the axis. For example, is this unemployment rate? Is this the number of people unemployed in a particular place? Is it percentage? What, precisely, are we looking at here? I'm not sure if this is actual data, a schematic/representational diagram.

    2. According to the Bureau of Labour, it is 7.9% now

      This extrapolation is great because it helps you grapple with questions related to the macroscopic effects of increasing minimum while moving you toward the larger question of its potential future impacts on unemployment on a national scale. Though, I have questions about how this classical economist theory materializes concretely. Can you point to real-life instances in which the increase of minimum wage had resulted in unemployment?

    3. For employers, employees are like ice cream. If the government artificially sets a higher price on them, the employers will simply "buy" fewer employees.

      Excellent analogy.

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    1. This is why, throughout the website, three perspectives will be explored:Minimum wage laws increase unemploymentMinimum wage laws decrease unemploymentMinimum wage laws have uncertain effects when it comes to unemployment

      Though, it seems to me, that the stasis point which your positions will engage is one of value/quality, exploring the pros, cons, and ethical concerns of minimum wage laws, much of my claim is rooted in inference. The specific line of inquiry and stasis point(s) you're engaging isn't yet made explicit, and the two and the connection between the social concerns that you point to -- the increased food prices and crime rates -- and the three perspectives that you proffer isn't clear.

    2. After all, isn't it better to leave such precise mathematics to the wise ones and focus on other important things?

      I don't think I understand the implications of this question. Isn't it the job of the economist to deal with mathematical data that relates to the economy, especially to measure how particular elements of it impact others -- in this case, wage and employment?

      Or, are you aiming to convince the average reader, who is not an economist, to care about the relationship between minimum wage laws and unemployment?

    3. ECON101 model

      What, specifically, is the model detailed in Economics 101 handbooks? Is there a hyperlink that you can share to a website that explains the model or a graphic that you could provide to illustrate the model?

    4. Where does unemployment come here?

      Great job at using questions as a strategy to address and make your content accessible to a wide-ranging audience of various levels of knowledge on the subject of economics.

    1. Required Reading

      Benjamin, this is a fantastic website. You do a great job at isolating and giving integrity to the various positions which experts take on the issue of greenhouse gas emissions. Your language is largely accessible to readers of various levels of expertise on the subject and your many of your graphics aid in illustrating the positions which you explain. I think, too, that using the shutdown as a framework for this conversation really establishes the relevance and exigence of this particular issue.

      In the future, I encourage you to bridge the gap between the position you proffer in your first position page that suggests reducing business and transportation will not impact the progression of our environmental crisis and that which you proffer in your third position page which suggests that similar measures -- reducing the gas emissions from businesses and transportation vehicles -- are the most feasible and most effective measures to take.

      My instinct is that after more time passes, the scientists which conducted the study during the shutdown will have updates or scientists who study elsewhere will have different or more complicated information that you'll be able to use to better gage the impact of reducing emissions from businesses and transportation vehicles in New York city. You might also consider investigating research by experts in other academic or professional disciplines that might provide comparisons of New York's populations adherence to shutdown protocols to the adherence to protocols by other state's populations. You might also consider what scientists note about geography and how different environments respond differently to different measures.

      The climate clocks in New York, Berlin, and Paris suggest we have about 7 years to take profound action before our environmental crisis is totally irreversible. For this reason, I truly hope that you continue to work on this project and, when the site is ready, that you consider sharing it on public platform. More expansive distribution of information like this can be the difference between an earth with human beings and other species dependent on the maintenance of our environment in its future or an earth soon void of life, especially life as we know it.

      This is important work, Benjamin. Thanks for doing it.

    1. Considering the fact that in NYC, almost half of its carbon dioxide emissions are due to business and industry, this proves to be a very effective option and while it can be very expensive to perform these upgrades, government cooperation can make it affordable for businesses

      But what about what you'd said in your first position page about the ineffectiveness of reducing business and transportation for improving gas emissions?

    2. effective

      Effective at what? I think I understand what you're saying, but it might be necessary to add a transitional phrase here to bridge the effectiveness of the implementation of a government-supported energy reduction plan with the more socially overwhelming and economically devastating method of sustaining shutdown protocols after the shutdown.

    3. source on the right demonstrates economic impact of lockdown on GDP)

      I don't understand how this graphic illustrates what's being described/explained in this section.

    4. gross domestic product

      What do you mean by the phase "gross domestic product." Are you referring to the market production? If you had to explain this to a less economically fluent reader, what might you say?

    1. probably end up saving businesses some money in the long run

      Do you have an sources that weighs in on the economic advantages of making office jobs remote?

    2. They found that ozone, carbon dioxide, nitrous oxide, and particulate matter all dropped to abnormally low levels in March when the pandemic started and gradually increased back to normal levels as the lockdown was lifted as shown on the right.

      Interesting. I'm wondering why shutdown measures have proven to be effective as improving air quality in California but not in New York. Now, I have questions about the differences between states regarding their populations' adherence to COVID-19 shut down protocol and, considering that the two landscapes are vastly different, about the difference that physical geography makes as it relates to how an environment responds to these specific measures.

    1. This makes it clear that letting nature run its course will be the best option since we know what the outcome will be and it will not hurt our county financially, it just may take a bit longer than other solutions.

      Very interesting. I'm wondering if this study has taken into account the extent to which time is a factor in gaging the efficiency of reducing gas emissions by way of cutting down transportation and business. Though the shut-down feels long to us, we've only stopped businesses and transportation for less than a fraction of the time the transportation and businesses has caused the issue of gas emissions and even less than the time that the earth has existed. In other words, I wonder if it is too soon to conclude that reducing business and transportation doesn't work.

      Very excited to read what other experts might say about this or similar considerations on your other pages.

    2. If drastically reducing transportation and business,

      There might be a missing phrase here. Do you mean something along the lines of "if drastically reducing transportation and business....has no effect on gas emissions.."?

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    1. -What are the possible solutions to this problem of high emissions?-How do the solutions differ and are these differences a good or bad thing?

      Excellent job at rooting your inquiry in stasis points of action and value/quality.

    2. Why Is This Important?

      Great job at using questions to address all potential readers who have various levels of understanding in regard to the issue of greenhouse gasses.

    3. COVID-19 has presented some new solutions worth considering

      Great use of the current moment as a framework for your exploration and a way to convey the exigence of the issue.

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    1. Greenhouse gas emissions are at a dangerously high level.

      Excellent. Concise, gripping, and sparing just enough information to make the reader want more information.

    1. Required Reading

      Chris, I'm at the end of your website and it is absolutely stunning. Your visuals are effective at aiding the reader in better understanding your material. You engages in a thorough, comprehensive exploration of different, well-founded arguments on the issue of gerrymandering. Through precise explanation of those arguments and of their credibility and relevance, you give each position its due integrity, and, consequently, you give your readers the space and information that they need to reach their own conclusions on the issue. Excellent.

      Though we have a new president-elect, there will still be ample opportunities to vote locally, making this a topic that we all need to continue talking about. Voting information is scarce and often poorly distributed. I strongly encourage you to release this website to a public audience. It's certainly socially urgent, of immense value, and a project to be greatly proud of.

      Thanks for doing this, Chris.

    1. FIX THE REGULATIONS

      After reading the first two position pages, it seems what you're exploring is not necessarily what can or should be done about the corrupt voting system, but, instead, you're exploring the prose and cons of the system, more generally. This seems sound given your stasis point. Though, it seems that you've already taken a position that aligns with the information shared in your first position page. This is fine, but the goal of this assignment was to neutrally proffer three potential responses to your line of inquiry.

      The good news is that you've done the majority of the work of weighing rebuttals that you'll need to do in your position paper. While writing your position paper, be sure to keep this information handy and to elaborate on potential conditions, contexts, and frameworks in which your other positions on appropriate measure to take for fixing our voting system might be reasonable.

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    1. Fix the system

      Hm, your question seems rooted in the stasis point of value, but your positions seem to answer questions about action. How does concerns about actions that can be taken to mitigate negative impacts of gerrymandering directly address issues of ethics?

    2. So is allowing states to draw their own district lines ethical?

      Excellent job at grounding your inquiry in the stasis point of Value/Quality.

      I'm think about ethical concerns of manipulating district lines in a way, too, that isolates and suppresses the votes of political minorities in certain areas. in one of our meetings, earlier in the semester, we'd talked about democrats engaging just as fervently as republicans in gerrymandering, and I'm wondering about the ethical implications of district lines created by democratic politicians to suppress votes of republican and non-partisan voters, despite ethnic or racial representation.

    3. If this term sounds familiar, it is because it has been an ongoing problem in the United States for over 200 years, and it is more urgent for this issue to be solved now, more than ever. If you haven’t

      Excellent job at manipulating language to address readers of various levels of political fluency and knowledge of gerrymandering.